Copyediting Assault Vest Alomomloa [GP 0/1]

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[SET]
Assault Vest (Alomomola) @ Assault Vest
Ability: Regenerator
EVs: 8 HP / 248 Def / 252 SpD
IVs: 0 Spe
Sassy Nature
- Knock Off
- Mirror Coat
- Flip Turn
- Scald / Liquidation

[SET COMMENTS]
With an Assault Vest, Alomomola's Special Defense is bolstered , which allows it to act as a powerful defensive pivot. Alomomola’s defensive capabilities are improved by Regenerator, allowing it to pivot reliably. Alomomola provides valuable utility for its team in Knock Off, as it can remove the Leftovers or Heavy-Duty Boots from Pokemon like Toxapex, Ferrothorn, and Zapdos, allowing for Alomomola’s teammates to break easier. Alomomola can use Mirror Coat to deal huge damage and even OHKO unsuspecting special attackers such as Mega Charizard Y, Tapu Koko, and Tapu Lele that switch in because they can break past non-Assault Vest Alomomola. Alomomola also uses Flip Turn to safely bring in powerful attackers like Mega Diancie, Tapu Lele, and Urshifu-R. Alomomola can also use Scald to status opposing Pokemon with burn or Liquidation for a STAB move that can avoid letting foes such as Volcarona turn it into setup fodder.

Assault Vest Alomomola is very valuable on offense and balance teams due to its ability to check a wide variety of Pokemon and bring in your team's attackers via Flip Turn. Alomomola can switch into powerful physical attackers such as Urshifu-R, non-Choice Band Zamazenta, and Hisuian Samurott. Alomomola can also take powerful Water-type attacks from Urshifu-R, Hisuian Samurott, and Tapu Fini. It is also able to check and use Mirror Coat to OHKO powerful special attackers like Gholdengo, Tapu Lele, and Mega Diancie. This becomes more difficult to pull off once you reveal Alomomola's Assault Vest set, as Mirror Coat is easy to predict;this makes hiding Alomomola's set important for picking up OHKOs on unsuspecting special attackers. Despite all of this, Assault Vest Alomomola cannot wall some strong physical attackers like Ogerpon-W and Choice Banded Band Zamazenta. This causes Pokemon that can deal with these aforementioned foes like Pecharunt and Landorus-Therian Landorus-T to be valuable partners. In return, Alomomola can easily take on Pokemon they can’t handle like Tapu Lele. Alomomola can also struggle with special attacking Electric-types such as Raging Bolt and Tapu Koko. Because of this, Alomomola appreciates Ground-types like Ting-Lu and specially defensive Gliscor . Alomomola, in return, can wall Water-types like Urshifu-R, which they dread. Due to Assault Vest Alomomola’s reliance on its item to check special attackers, it greatly dislikes having it removed. This makes Knock Off absorbers like Gliscor, Mega Scizor, and Mega Venusaur great partners, while Alomomola can take the Fire-type attacks the latter two dislike and the Water-type attacks Gliscor hates. Alomomola’s defensive capabilities can also be crippled by entry hazards, which leads to hazard removers like Great Tusk, Terapagos, and Landorus-T being valuable. Pokemon with Magic Bounce like Mega Diancie and Hatterene can also help keep hazards off your side of the field. Powerful attackers like Zamazenta, Mega Diancie, and Ogerpon-W greatly enjoy Alomomola on their team, as it can safely bring them in on offensive threats like Tapu Lele, Terapagos, and Hisuian Samurott.

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Alomomola @ Assault Vest
Ability: Regenerator
EVs: 8 HP / 248 Def / 252 SpD
IVs: 0 Spe
Sassy Nature
- Knock Off
- Mirror Coat
- Flip Turn
- Scald/Liquidation

Assault Vest Alomomola uses the item Assault Vest to bolster its Special Defense, which allows it to act as a powerful mixed wall defensive pivot. You aren't really a wall in the traditional sense as you aren't just sitting there and taking hits, mola's main goal is to facilitate teammates via pivoting while sponging big hits. Alomomola’s walling defensive capabilities are improved by the healing provided by its ability Regenerator. Alomomola provides valuable utility for its team in Knock Off. List some targets of Knock Off here. Thanks to its Assault Vest, Alomomola can use Mirror Coat to deal huge damage and even OHKO unsuspecting special attackers, such as Mega Charizard Y, Tapu Koko, and Tapu Lele, that switch in because they can break past non Assault Vest Alomomola. Alomomola also uses Flip Turn to safely bring in powerful attackers like, Mega Diancie, Tapu Lele, and Urshifu. Alomomola can also use Scald to status opposing Pokemon with burn or Liquidation for a good STAB move. Mention that Liquidation pressures Volcarona.

Assault Vest Alomomola is very valuable on offense and balance teams due to its ability to check a wide variety of Pokemon and bring in your teams attackers. Alomomola can wall switch into power physical attacks such as, Urshifu, non Choice Band Zamazenta, and Hisuian Samurott. It can also check and often OHKO powerful special attackers like Gholdengo, Tapu Lele, and Mega Diancie. Briefly mention that Mirror Coat becomes easy to predict around if the AV set is revealed, and how players can consider hiding which Alomomola set it is until they reveal Mirror Coat. Despite all of this this Assault Vest Alomomola cannot wall some strong physical attackers, like Ogerpon-W and Choice Banded Zamazenta. This causes Pokemon that can deal with these aforementioned foes, like Pecharunt and Toxapex, idk about recommending a double water core, lets find another example valuable partners. In return Alomomola can easily take on Pokemon they can’t handle, like Tapu Lele. Alomomola can also struggle with special attackers that can do powerful super effective damage to it such as Raging Bolt, and Tapu Koko. Alomomola appreciates Ground Types like Ting Lu and Specially Defensive Gliscor, and Alomomola in return can wall the Water Types they dread. Due to Assault Vest Alomomola’s reliance on its item to check special attackers, it greatly dislikes having it removed. This makes knock absorbers, like Gliscor, Mega Scizor, and Mega Venusaur, great partners. Alomomola’s walling capabilities can also be crippled by hazards, which leads to hazard removers, like Great Tusk, Terapagos, and Landorus-T, being valuable. Pokemon that can prevent hazards from being set up with Magic Bounce, like Mega Diancie or Hatterene, can also effectively help keep hazards off your side of the field. Powerful Attackers, like Zamazenta, Mega Diancie, and Ogerpon-W, greatly enjoy Alomomola on their team as it can safely bring them in to make progress against the opposing team. In addition to this, against revenge killers, such as Scarf Tapu Lele, and Booster Energy Iron Valiant, these powerful attackers can let Alomomola switch into and easily take an attack while prevent themselves from being KO’d. Filler, you imply this multiple times earlier.

Good start but I'd like to have another look.
 
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Alomomola @ Assault Vest
Ability: Regenerator
EVs: 8 HP / 248 Def / 252 SpD
IVs: 0 Spe
Sassy Nature
- Knock Off
- Mirror Coat
- Flip Turn
- Scald/Liquidation

Assault Vest Alomomola uses the item Assault Vest to bolster its Special Defense, which allows it to act as a powerful mixed defensive pivot. Alomomola’s defensive capabilities are improved by the healing provided by its ability Regenerator. Alomomola provides valuable utility for its team in Knock Off, like Gliscor switching in for the first time, and Choice Scarf users like Tapu Lele and Urshifu-R. I don't understand what the previous sentence is saying. Are these Knock Off targets? Because most of them won't be directly switching into Alomomola. Try things like Ferrothorn or Toxapex instead that are much more likely to come in. Alomomola can use Mirror Coat to deal huge damage and even OHKO unsuspecting special attackers, such as Mega Charizard Y, Tapu Koko, and Tapu Lele, that switch in because they can break past non Assault Vest Alomomola. Alomomola also uses Flip Turn to safely bring in powerful attackers like, Mega Diancie, Tapu Lele, and Urshifu. Alomomola can also use Scald to status opposing Pokemon with burn or Liquidation for a good STAB move that can damage Pokemon the boost their Special Defense stat, like Volcarona. Honestly it's mostly just so you aren't setup fodder for Volcarona, you can specify that.

Assault Vest Alomomola is very valuable on offense and balance teams due to its ability to check a wide variety of Pokemon and bring in your teams attackers. Alomomola can switch into power physical attacks such as, Urshifu, non Choice Band Zamazenta, and Hisuian Samurott. It can also check and often OHKO powerful special attackers like Gholdengo, Tapu Lele, and Mega Diancie with Mirror Coat. This becomes more difficult to pull off once you reveal that you are an Assault Vest set, as Mirror Coat is easy to predict, causing hiding your set to be a good strategy. Despite all of this Assault Vest Alomomola cannot wall some strong physical attackers, like Ogerpon-W and Choice Banded Zamazenta. This causes Pokemon that can deal with these aforementioned foes, like Pecharunt and Landorus-Therian, are valuable partners. In return Alomomola can easily take on Pokemon they can’t handle, like Tapu Lele. Alomomola can also struggle with special attackers that can do powerful super effective damage to it such as Raging Bolt, and Tapu Koko. Alomomola appreciates Ground Types like Ting Lu and Specially Defensive Gliscor, and Alomomola in return can wall the Water Types they dread. Which water-types? Be specific since Alo doesn't beat all of them. Due to Assault Vest Alomomola’s reliance on its item to check special attackers, it greatly dislikes having it removed. This makes knock absorbers, like Gliscor, Mega Scizor, and Mega Venusaur, great partners. Alomomola’s walling capabilities can also be crippled by hazards, which leads to hazard removers, like Great Tusk, Terapagos, and Landorus-T, being valuable. Pokemon that can prevent hazards from being set up with Magic Bounce, like Mega Diancie or Hatterene, can also effectively help keep hazards off your side of the field. Powerful Attackers, like Zamazenta, Mega Diancie, and Ogerpon-W, greatly enjoy Alomomola on their team as it can safely bring them in to make progress against the opposing team.

Good stuff, QC 1/2
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you need a set name Alomomola @ Assault Vest
Ability: Regenerator
EVs: 8 HP / 248 Def / 252 SpD
IVs: 0 Spe
Sassy Nature
- Knock Off
- Mirror Coat
- Flip Turn
- Scald/Liquidation

Assault Vest Alomomola uses the item Assault Vest to bolster its Special Defense, which allows it to act as a powerful mixed defensive pivot. Alomomola’s defensive capabilities are improved by the healing provided by its ability Regenerator. Alomomola provides valuable utility for its team in Knock Off, like this doesnt really make sense right now, mention it being able to remove lefties / boots Toxapex, Ferrothorn, and Zapdos. Alomomola can use Mirror Coat to deal huge damage and even OHKO unsuspecting special attackers, such as Mega Charizard Y, Tapu Koko, and Tapu Lele, that switch in because they can break past non Assault Vest Alomomola. Alomomola also uses Flip Turn to safely bring in powerful attackers like, Mega Diancie, Tapu Lele, and Urshifu. Alomomola can also use Scald to status opposing Pokemon with burn or Liquidation for a STAB move that can consistently damage Volcarona while it’s boosting it’s Special Defense stat avoid letting foes such as Volcarona turning it into setup fodder. think this makes it more explicit i feel

Assault Vest Alomomola is very valuable on offense and balance teams due to its ability to check a wide variety of Pokemon and bring in your teams attackers via flip turn. Alomomola can switch into power physical attacks such as, Urshifu, non Choice Band Zamazenta, and Hisuian Samurott. what appreciates this? maybe mention fire / ground types It can also check and often OHKO powerful special attackers like Gholdengo, Tapu Lele, and Mega Diancie with Mirror Coat. This becomes more difficult to pull off once you reveal that you are an Assault Vest set, as Mirror Coat is easy to predict, causing hiding your set to be a good strategy. Despite all of this Assault Vest Alomomola cannot wall some strong physical attackers, like Ogerpon-W and Choice Banded Zamazenta. This causes Pokemon that can deal with these aforementioned foes, like Pecharunt and Landorus-Therian, are valuable partners. In return Alomomola can easily take on Pokemon they can’t handle, like Tapu Lele. Alomomola can also struggle with special attackers that can do powerful super effective damage to it such as Raging Bolt, and Tapu Koko. Alomomola appreciates Ground Types like Ting Lu and Specially Defensive Gliscor, and Alomomola in return can wall Water Types, like Urshifu and Tapu Fini Urshifu-R more relevant, which they dread. Due to Assault Vest Alomomola’s reliance on its item to check special attackers, it greatly dislikes having it removed. This makes knock absorbers, like Gliscor, Mega Scizor, and Mega Venusaur, great partners. can alo do anything back for them? Alomomola’s walling defensive capabilities can also be crippled by hazards, which leads to hazard removers, like Great Tusk, Terapagos, and Landorus-T, being valuable. Pokemon that can prevent hazards from being set up with Magic Bounce, like Mega Diancie or Hatterene, can also effectively help keep hazards off your side of the field. Powerful Attackers, like Zamazenta, Mega Diancie, and Ogerpon-W, greatly enjoy Alomomola on their team as it can safely bring them in on who? to make progress against the opposing team.

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Content wise this is good work, but some of the phrasing and such is a little hard to understand, GP will largely iron it out but I would advise proof reading it again to make sure everything makes sense / is in line with smogon grammar standards! 2/2 when implemented

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[SET] <- make sure to add these things in brackets
Assault Vest (Alomomola) @ Assault Vest <- parantheses
Ability: Regenerator
EVs: 8 HP / 248 Def / 252 SpD
IVs: 0 Spe
Sassy Nature
- Knock Off
- Mirror Coat
- Flip Turn
- Scald / Liquidation <- added spaces

[SET COMMENTS]
Assault Vest Alomomola uses the item With an Assault Vest, (AC) Alomomola's Special Defense is bolstered to bolster its Special Defense, which allows it to act as a powerful defensive pivot. Alomomola’s defensive capabilities are improved by the dex info Regenerator, allowing it to pivot reliably healing provided by its ability Regenerator. Alomomola provides valuable utility for its team in Knock Off, as it can remove the Leftovers or Heavy Duty Heavy-Duty Boots from Pokemon like Toxapex, Ferrothorn, and Zapdos, (AC) allowing for Alomomola’s teammates to break easier. Alomomola can use Mirror Coat to deal huge damage and even OHKO unsuspecting special attackers (RC) such as Mega Charizard Y, Tapu Koko, and Tapu Lele (RC) that switch in because they can break past non Assault non-Assault Vest Alomomola. Alomomola also uses Flip Turn to safely bring in powerful attackers like (RC) Mega Diancie, Tapu Lele, and Urshifu Urshifu-R. Alomomola can also use Scald to status opposing Pokemon with burn or Liquidation for a STAB move that can avoid letting foes such as Volcarona turning turn it into setup fodder. Scald part is dex info, would check with QC for Scald targets/qualities, like making mola hard to switch into? Could go "Alomomola's preferred STAB move is Scald due to x, but Liquidation can be run to prevent foes such as Volcarona from using Alomomola as setup fodder."

Assault Vest Alomomola is very valuable on offense and balance teams due to its ability to check a wide variety of Pokemon and bring in your teams team's attackers via Flip Turn. Alomomola can switch into power powerful physical attacks attackers such as (RC) Urshifu Urshifu-R, non Choice non-Choice Band Zamazenta, and Hisuian Samurott. Assualt Vest Alomomola can also take powerful potent Water-type attacks from Urshifu-R, Hisuian Samurott, and Tapu Fini. Despite all of this, Alomomola cannot wall some strong physical attackers like Ogerpon-W and Choice Band Zamazenta. This causes Pokemon that can deal with these foes like Pecharunt and Landorus-T to be valuable partners. In return, Alomomola can easily take on Pokemon they can’t handle like Tapu Lele. Moved this entire section up so the "Despite all of this, these physical attackers..." remains in focus with the rest of the physical attacking section. It can is also able to check and often use Mirror Coat to OHKO powerful special attackers (RC) like Gholdengo, Tapu Lele, and Mega Diancie (RC) using Mirror Coat. This becomes more difficult to pull off once you reveal that you are an Alomomola's Assault Vest set, as Mirror Coat is easy to predict (RC); (ASC) this makes hiding your Alomomola's set to be important for picking up OHKOs on unsuspecting special attackers. Despite all of this, (AC) Assault Vest Alomomola cannot wall some strong physical attackers (RC) like Ogerpon-W and Choice Banded Band Zamazenta. This causes Pokemon that can deal with these aforementioned foes (RC) like Pecharunt and Landorus-Therian (RC) Landorus-T to be valuable partners. In return, (AC) Alomomola can easily take on Pokemon they can’t handle (RC) like Tapu Lele. <- Section that was moved above Alomomola can also struggle with special attackers that can do powerful super effective damage to it attacking Electric-types such as Raging Bolt (RC) and Tapu Koko. Because of this, (AC) Alomomola appreciates Ground Types Ground-types like Ting Lu Ting-Lu and specially defensive Gliscor (RC). (AP) and Alomomola, (AC) in return, (AC) can wall Water Types (RC) Water-types like Urshifu-R, which they dread. Due to Assault Vest Alomomola’s reliance on its item to check special attackers, it greatly dislikes having it removed. This makes Knock Off absorbers (RC) like Gliscor, Mega Scizor, and Mega Venusaur (RC) great partners (RP), (AC) while Alomomola can take the Fire-type attacks the latter two dislike and the Water-type attacks Gliscor hates. Is MVenu vulnerable to the tier's Fire-type attackers? Maybe check with QC Alomomola’s defensive capabilities can also be crippled by entry hazards, which leads to hazard removers (RC) like Great Tusk, Terapagos, and Landorus-T (RC) being valuable. Pokemon that can prevent hazards from being set up with Magic Bounce (RC) like Mega Diancie or and Hatterene (RC) can also effectively help keep hazards off your side of the field. Powerful attackers (RC) like Zamazenta, Mega Diancie, and Ogerpon-W (RC) greatly enjoy Alomomola on their team, (AC) as it can safely bring them in on offensive threats (RC) like Tapu Lele, Terapagos, and Hisuian Samurott (RC) to make progress against the opposing team.

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