Down To the Last: OU Warstory

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This is my first war story. I have been wanting to do one for a while, but I wanted to have a decent battle first. I believe this one qualifes, but if it doesn't just let me know.

I run a purely offensive team, with a few that stand alone and some interlocking. Its worked well for me, as the only two that were not on the original team were Electivire and Salamence (They replaced a Magnezone and Ttar)

My Team: Infernape, Gengar, Gyarados, Electivire, Salamence, Scizor.

Leftovers: Gyarados, Salamence
Life Orb: Gengar, Scizor
These will be omitted.

My comments are in red.
My Percentage will be in Red. Theirs will be in Blue.

Rules: Ladder Match, Sleep Clause, Freeze Clause, OHKO Clause, Evasion Clause, Species Clause, Strict Damage Clause, Soul Dew Clause
Opponent sent out Azelf (lvl 100 Azelf).
Archking sent out Dante (lvl 100 Infernape ?).
Archking: I guess Explosion?

100%-100%

I use a Leadape, with a little difference. I gave it some more speed EV's, and all Attack, and switched Fireblast with U-turn. It helps switch to my Taunter, Gyarados, who can set up on most things that Ape can’t handle. Anyways, I went with a safe Fake-out.
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Infernape used Fake Out.
Azelf lost 19% of its health.
Azelf flinched!

100%-81%

IT went well. I hit it for a ton, so I am just going to kill it here and now, before it can get its rocks up.
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Opponent: bad guess
Azelf used Trick.
Azelf obtained Focus Sash!
Infernape obtained Choice Scarf!
Infernape used Close Combat.
It's not very effective...
A critical hit!
Azelf lost 81% of its health.
guesswhoo's Azelf fainted.
Infernape's defence was lowered.
Infernape's special defence was lowered.

100%-0%

Gah, I got tricked. No explosion then. Too bad, I like Fireworks. Anyways, his Rocker is dead, and my Rocker is faster. :P Now I just will get Infernape out, seeing as I doubt he will be nice enough to put something weak to fighting.
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Opponent switched in Suicune (lvl 100 Suicune).
Suicune is exerting its pressure!
Archking switched in Ares (lvl 100 Gyarados ?).
Gyarados's Intimidate cut Suicune's attack!
Suicune used Surf.
It's not very effective...
Gyarados lost 15% of its health.
Gyarados's leftovers restored its health a little!
Gyarados restored 6% of its health.

91%-100%

So I went to my bulky water, which is what Gyarados is. He is the bulky variant, with the only difference being that it carries Ice Fang instead of Bounce. Hopefully I can set up against Suicune, who shouldn't be able to do more than 40%. I will DD up.

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Suicune used Hidden Power.
It's super effective!
A critical hit!
Gyarados lost 91% of its health.
Archking's Gyarados fainted.

0%-100%

>_<
I hate Hidden power. Why can’t it be known power or something? I wish I had seen that coming, despite being bulky, Gyarados is usually my 2nd best sweeper. Ah well, I might as well get my rocks up now.

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Archking switched in Dante (lvl 100 Infernape ?).
Infernape used Stealth Rock.
Pointed stones float in the air around the foe's team!
Suicune used Surf.
It's super effective!
Infernape lost 100% of its health.
Archking's Dante fainted.

0%-100%

Finally something worked, rocks up and a (almost)free switch, I can get my best sweeper in to do his thing!
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Archking switched in King Boo (lvl 100 Gengar ?).
Gengar used Thunder.
It's super effective!
Suicune lost 80% of its health.
Suicune used Surf.
Gengar lost 54% of its health.
Suicune's leftovers restored its health a little!
Suicune restored 6% of its health.

46%-26%

(>_<) … (>_<)
My Gengar has Thunder, Focus Blast, and Shadow Ball, which with Life Orb and his speed makes it not need any boosting to clear through a team. I fired off a Thunder to kill the dog, unfortunatly, I was shocked (No Pun, hehe) to find that it didn't die. I haven't come across many Suicunes. That threw me for a loop. It can switch or stay in and die. I figure the safest move is to Shadow ball and hope it dies.
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Gengar used Shadow Ball.
Suicune lost 27% of its health.
Opponent's Suicune fainted.

26%-0%

And it dies with nice splendor. I love Gengar, although I wish it had killed it right off the bat.
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Opponent switched in Scizor (lvl 100 Scizor ?).
Pointed stones dug into Scizor.
Scizor lost 12% of its health.

26%-88%

Ah crap, I hate Scizor. Nothing else but to let Gengar take the hit. I need everything else.

Scizor used Bullet Punch.
Gengar lost 26% of its health.
Archking's Gengar fainted.

0%-88%

Saw that coming. Time to switch in a little surprise…

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Archking switched in Thorn (lvl 100 Salamence ?).
Thorn's Intimidate cut Scizor's attack!

100%-88%

Yup, I just put in a Salamence to fight a Scizor. Isn’t that just great? Too bad Salamence is a bulky with Fire Fang. :P

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Scizor used Bullet Punch.
Salamence lost 34% of its health.
Salamence used Fire Fang.
It's super effective!
Scizor lost 79% of its health.

72%-9%



It went okay, with Salamence shrugging off the hit, and severely damaging the . Bug-Be-Gone has worked.
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Opponent switched in Flygon (lvl 100 Flygon ?).
Pointed stones dug into Flygon.
Flygon lost 6% of its health.
Salamence used Dragon Dance.
Salamence 's attack was raised.
Salamence 's speed was raised.

78%-94%

Hmmm, Flygon. Only thing I know about this is that it is faster than a Salamence. I had decided to be risky, and go for a sweep, seeing as it was the only shot I have left at winning. My plan was to roost/DDance for a couple turns, and then sweep, but I am not sure if I am faster than his flygon. Hopefully…

I am just going to go for the kill here. It’s make or break time.

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Opponent switched in Lucario (lvl 100 Lucario ?).
Pointed stones dug into Lucario.
Lucario lost 3% of its health.
Salamence used Dragon Claw.
It's not very effective...
Lucario lost 47% of its health.

84%-50%

Well that didn’t work out, as he probably didn’t want to test the speed. Or its not a CS Flygon. Either way, I believe that ExtremeSpeed won’t do to much, and I go for another set up, hopefully to keep my last plan.
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Lucario used Extremespeed.
Salamence lost 32% of its health.
Lucario lost 10% of its health.
Salamence used Dragon Dance.
Salamence 's attack was raised.
Salamence 's speed was raised.

58%-40%

By now my HP is low, so I will Roost up…
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Lucario used Extremespeed.
Salamence lost 34% of its health.
Lucario lost 10% of its health.
Salamence used Roost.
Salamence restored 50% of its health.

80%-30%

Time to DD again. (Sorry for the boringness of these few turns. It gets better, I promise.)
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Lucario used Extremespeed.
A critical hit!
Salamence lost 73% of its health.
Lucario lost 10% of its health.
Salamence used Dragon Dance.
Salamence 's attack was raised.
Salamence 's speed was raised.

13%-20%



Crap, a crit. This puts me right back at KOing range for an extreme speed, which means those last few turns were wasted. I hate that… However in the concern of sportsmanship, I didn’t blame the opponent.
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Opponent: sorry
Archking: Its okay.
Archking switched in Scizor (lvl 100 Scizor ?).
Lucario used Extremespeed.
It's not very effective...
Scizor lost 19% of its health.
Lucario lost 10% of its health.

81%-10%

I switched in Scizor so that way I could get rid of his Priority user, and open up the slot for Salamence, even though he is nearly dead.
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Scizor used Bullet Punch.
It's not very effective...
A critical hit!
Lucario lost 10% of its health.
Opponent's Lucario fainted.

71%-0%

Lucario is gone. I doubt I needed that crit. Good. Maybe his team has something weak to steel? Please?
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Opponent switched in Infernape (lvl 100 Infernape ?).
Pointed stones dug into Infernape.
Infernape lost 12% of its health.
Archking switched in Thor (lvl 100 Electivire ?).
Infernape used Overheat.
Electivire lost 100% of its health.
Infernape's special attack was harshly lowered.
Infernape lost 10% of its health.

.1%-78%

Nope he switched to an Infernape, Life Orbed. This spells bad news for my team, as I don’t think that anything can take it. I switiched in Electivire as I had no use for it, as his last two pokes were Infernape and Flygon, both which can destroy him. My only hope is to wear down his Infernape enough for me to KO it with Bullet punch. Unfortunatly, I don’t think I can.
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Infernape used Mach Punch.
Electivire lost 0% of its health.
Archking's Thor fainted.
Infernape lost 10% of its health.

0%-68%

That was a given. 10% off though…
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Archking switched in Thorn (lvl 100 Salamence ?).
Salamence 's Intimidate cut Infernape's attack!
Infernape used Mach Punch.
It's not very effective...
Salamence lost 7% of its health.
Infernape lost 10% of its health.
Salamence used Dragon Claw.
Infernape lost 58% of its health.
Opponent's Infernape fainted.

6%-0%



I switched in Salamence, to wear it down a bit more, and he survived the Mach Punch! I was Shocked! That’s crazy. Insane. Loco. Either way, that was the turning point, as now my scizor can hopefully wall Flygon, and Ppunch it to death.
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Opponent switched in Flygon (lvl 100 Flygon ?).
Pointed stones dug into Flygon.
Flygon lost 6% of its health.
Archking switched in Scizor (lvl 100 Scizor ?).
Flygon used Outrage.
Flygon went on a rampage!
It's not very effective...
Scizor lost 31% of its health.

40%-88%

Good, nice to see his typing finally work for me.
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Scizor used Bullet Punch.
Flygon lost 61% of its health.
Flygon used Outrage.
It's not very effective...
Scizor lost 30% of its health.

1%-27%

Cool, Scizor can win this, although barely. LO damage will cause a dual death.
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Scizor used Bullet Punch.
Flygon lost 27% of its health.
Opponent's Flygon fainted.
Scizor lost 1% of its health.
Archking's Scizor fainted.

0%-0%

Cool, I won, right? Then I remembered that he had a Scizor, and I literally felt my jaw drop. Bullet Punch=Game over. Then, I finally realized that I had indeed won. I sacrificed Infernape to get Stealth Rocks in, and Scizor was at 12%.
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Opponent switched in Scizor (lvl 100 Scizor ?).
Archking switched in Thorn (lvl 100 Salamence ?).
Salamence 's Intimidate cut Scizor's attack!
Pointed stones dug into Scizor.
Scizor lost 9% of its health.
Opponent's Scizor fainted.
Archking wins!

6%-0%

I won! Yay!

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Opponent: gg
Archking: GG
Opponent has left the room.


Opponents Team: Azelf, Suicune, Scizor, Flygon, Lucario, Infernape


Props:
-Salamence for sticking through a Mach Punch, and putting Scizor in Rocks Kill Zone.
-Scizor for taking care of that Flygon, and taking outrages like a man.
-His Lucario for Hacking the game and getting a crit. (And for being really good at Extreme speeds.)
-Infernape for having set up the rocks in a Kamikazi Run.
-His Suicune for killing my two best sweepers.

Slops:
-The only one I can think of are Gyarados and Gengar for dying before their time. Its back to boot camp for them.


It’s been a blast writing this, and I hope you guys enjoyed reading it. I would like some constructive criticism, and don’t hold back.
 
Hmm... not bad. Don't get why you run Fire Fang over Fire Blast, as the accuracy isn't a huge difference but the base power IS. If you had run Fire Blast, you could have killed that Scizor right off (although your opponent then misplayed by not simply sacrificing it for another Bullet Punch into Extremespeed revenge). Aside from a couple misplays and a crit that nearly cost you the game, it was a pretty decent match, with decent commentary. 6/10.
 
I liked it, but it's not really the greatest battle in the first place. The only things I would suggest for you are: spellcheck and pictures, or pizzazz of some sort.
 
Well.....normal match. Not much prediction was needed and hax had interference. Fire fang on salamence won't help with skarmory btw
 
Well.....normal match. Not much prediction was needed and hax had interference. Fire fang on salamence won't help with skarmory btw
^^^'

very little prediction, from either player, and while it was a close battle, it ciould have been won by either player with smarter play.
 
I didn't really like it.
Decent battle but both player had pretty bad move slot choices. (Fire Fang Salamence? Thunder Gengar?)

It wasn't interesting, there wasn't the greatest amount of prediction either. It's not warstory worthy.
Comments were lacking too.

5/10
 
This was a rather bad attempt imo. Battle was bland and full of misplays (trusting gyara to take on cune when you don't know anything about its moveset, for example), your commentary was lackluster, and the overall presentation could use some work. Don't be discouraged though, since you can't really expect to come up with a 5 star effort on your first warstory attempt. I suggest taking a look at the warstory archive and see what makes a really good warstory, before you make another attempt. gl.
 
The match was kind of bad but you put out a decent effort with the commentary. Overall I didn't like it but the lack of warstories recently made it a decent read.
 
Okay, thanks for commenting at least. I will work harder at it, to say the least. I will also take the advice about Fire Fang Salamence. THanks guys. Should I delete this, or let it runs its course?
 
5/10 Your battle was a bit weak. Dragon Dancing for several turns like that is not the smartest move you could have made. If you had nailed a fire fang you could have swept his whole team or at least done some bad damage. Anyways try again in the future. You have to start somewhere.
 
Average battle, lacking commentary. Good first try. Enough has been said on this warstory, better luck next time.
 
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