LC Drilbur

[churine]

[SET]
name: Offensive Rapid Spin
move 1: Rapid Spin
move 2: Earthquake
move 3: Rock Slide
move 4: Swords Dance / Stealth Rock
item: Berry Juice / Eviolite
ability: Mold Breaker
nature: Jolly
evs: 76 Atk / 116 Def / 76 SpD / 212 Spe

[SET COMMENTS]
Drilbur is one of the premier spinners in the metagame, clearing entry hazards without compromising the user's own while giving a Speed boost and turning into a threatening sweeper in tandem with Swords Dance. Stealth Rock can be run instead of Swords Dance for more utility and residual damage on the opposing team if your team is unable to fit Stealth Rock elsewhere. Berry Juice provides longevity to keep Drilbur healthy, while Eviolite can be used to tank hits better. The EV spread and Jolly nature maximize Speed and allow Drilbur to outspeed 16 Speed Choice Scarf users like Rufflet after a Rapid Spin while providing even number defenses for optimized Eviolite-boosted bulk.

Flying-types such as Vullaby, Rufflet, and Wingull benefit from Drilbur's ability to remove Stealth Rock and check Electric-, Steel-, and Rock-types, making it easier for them to switch in and clean; in turn, they can threaten Grass-types, which Drilbur struggles against. Other Pokemon that are weak to Stealth Rock such as Cutiefly and Vulpix also appreciate Stealth Rock removal; these two also threaten Grass-types, with the former being able to set Sticky Web up to help Drilbur sweep later in the game. Water-types, particularly Corphish, trouble Drilbur, as it has trouble getting past these Pokemon, so Pokemon like Ferroseed and Chinchou that can switch in and threaten Water-types aid Drilbur well.

[CREDITS]
- Written by: [[crusty, 264307]]
- Quality checked by: [[Nineage, 195129], [Berks, 255030]]
- Grammar checked by: [[deetah, 297659]]

 

[Nineage]

• Kind of nitpicky, but I'm not a fan of referring to 'role compression' here, especially given how important SD was. I would phrase it more as 'if Drilbur's team cannot fit a Stealth Rock user elsewhere' or something
• The sentence that starts with "Pokemon that threaten Water-types" is a little bit confusing, and I'm not sure if it'll be interpreted correctly by GP. See if you can make it a little bit clearer (maybe start with "Water-types, particularly Corphish, threaten Drilbur...")
• I don't think the last sentence belongs in a pre-analysis. I would only mention a possible alternative set if its really necessary.

Overall, good work as usual, 1/2

 

[Berks]

it’s good!

2/2

 

[deetah]

Add Remove Comments (AC) = Add Comma (RC) = Remove Comma (SC) = Semicolon

GP 1/1

Drilbur

[SET]
name: Offensive Rapid Spin
move 1: Rapid Spin
move 2: Earthquake
move 3: Rock Slide
move 4: Swords Dance / Stealth Rock
item: Berry Juice / Eviolite
ability: Mold Breaker
nature: Jolly
evs: 76 Atk / 116 Def / 76 SpD / 212 Spe

[SET COMMENTS]
Drilbur is one of the premier spinners in the metagame, clearing entry hazards without compromising the user's own while giving a Speed boost, (RC) and able to turn turning into a threatening sweeper in tandem with Swords Dance. Stealth Rock can be run instead of Swords Dance for more utility and residual damage on the opposing team if the your team is unable to fit Stealth Rock elsewhere, for more utility and residual damage on the opposing team. Berry Juice provides longevity to keep Drilbur healthy, (AC) for another assault meanwhile while Eviolite can be used to tank hits better. The EV spread and Jolly nature maximize Speed and allows allow Drilbur to outspeed 16 Speed Choice Scarf users like Rufflet after a Rapid Spin, (RC) while providing even number defenses for optimized Eviolite-boosted bulk.

Flying-types such as Vullaby, Rufflet, and Wingull benefit from Drilbur's ability to remove Stealth Rock and check Electric-, Steel-, and Rock-types, making it easier for them to switch in and clean; (SC) and in turn, (AC) they can threaten Grass-types, (AC) which Drilbur struggles against. Other Pokemon that are weak to Stealth Rock such as Cutiefly and Vulpix also appreciate Stealth Rock removal; (SC) and these two also threaten Grass-types, with the former being able to set Sticky Web up to help Drilbur sweep later in the game. Water-types, particularly Corphish, trouble Drilbur, (AC) as it has trouble getting past these Pokemon, so Pokemon like Ferroseed and Chinchou who that can switch-in switch in and threaten Water-types aid Drilbur well.

[CREDITS]
- Written by: [[crusty, 264307]]
- Quality checked by: [[Nineage, 195129], [Berks, 255030]]
- Grammar checked by: [[<username1>, <userid1>]]

 

[deetah]

The EV spread and Jolly nature maximize Speed and allow Drilbur to outspeed 16 Speed Choice Scarf users like Rufflet after a Rapid Spinwhile providing even number defenses for optimized Eviolite-boosted bulk.

When removing the comma before "while" and after "Spin" you accidentally removed the whole space as well. Add the space back and this is good