ZU [GP 1/1] Swords Dance Qwilfish

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[SET]
Swords Dance
Qwilfish @ Leftovers
Ability: Intimidate
Tera Type: Water
EVs: 252 Atk / 4 SpD / 252 Spe
Jolly Nature
- Swords Dance
- Liquidation
- Gunk Shot
- Aqua Jet

[SET COMMENTS]
Despite competition from other Swords Dance users in the tier, Qwilfish can still consistently set up to sweep thanks to its defensive typing and access to Intimidate. Qwilfish can turn the tables on would-be checks like Orthworm and Regirock by setting up Swords Dance in front of them. Liquidation and Gunk Shot are two powerful STAB moves that take out walls like Sandaconda, Snorlax, and Dipplin. Aqua Jet allows it to get the jump on faster foes like Sneasel, Jolteon, and Charizard, typically grabbing a KO after a boost and enough chip damage. This also makes Qwilfish an apt revenge killer, with Tera Water making Aqua Jet even stronger after a Swords Dance boost. Leftovers supports Qwilfish on top of its already great ability and typing, granting it significantly more staying power than other setup sweepers.

Swords Dance Qwilfish provides a bulky dynamic to offensive teams looking to overwhelm foes with a variety of strong attacks. Pivots like Hisuian Electrode, Mesprit, and Rotom can effectively bring in Qwilfish while also chipping walls like Regirock and Dudunsparce. Other wallbreakers like Toxicroak, Grafaiai, and Whimsicott can chip down the opposing team. to make its sweep easier. A more aggressive team with several sweepers like Virizion, Sneasel, and Frosmoth can let Qwilfish help overwhelm opposing teams. More balanced teams can also effectively use Swords Dance Qwilfish as a way to surprise opponents expecting a more defensive set. Since Qwilfish is purely invested in its offense, it's still important to support Qwilfish with a strong defensive backbone including walls such as Snorlax, Hisuian Decidueye, and Sandslash. Entry hazard setters like Sandaconda, Palossand, and Orthworm also chip down foes over the course of a longer game, possibly giving Qwilfish the chance to OHKO Snorlax after a boost.

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good job on this
[SET]
Swords Dance
Qwilfish @ Leftovers
Ability: Intimidate
Tera Type: Water
EVs: 252 Atk / 4 SpD / 252 Spe
Jolly Nature
- Swords Dance
- Liquidation
- Gunk Shot
- Aqua Jet

[SET COMMENTS]
Thanks to its defensive typing and access to Intimidate, Qwilfish has a much easier time setting up Swords Dance compared to more frail attackers that typically use the move. Qwilfish can turn the tables on supposed checks like Orthworm and Weezing (uh not Weezing since it gets wisped or hazed, use another mon) by setting up Swords Dance in front of them. Liquidation and Gunk Shot are two powerful STAB moves that take out walls like Sandaconda, Snorlax, Articuno (dipplin is an important mention here, change articuno for it. also remove the "and more") and more. Aqua Jet allows it to get the jump on faster opponents like Sneasel, Jolteon, and Oricorio, typically grabbing a KO after a boost and enough chip damage. This also makes Qwilfish an apt revenge killer, with Water-type Terastallization making Aqua Jet even stronger after a Swords Dance boost. Leftovers supports Qwilfish on top of its already great Ability and typing, letting it have significantly more staying power than other frail setup sweepers.

Swords Dance Qwilfish provides a bulky dynamic to offensive teams looking to overwhelm opponents with a variety of strong attacks. Pivots like Electrode-Hisui, Mesprit, and Rotom can effectively bring in Qwilfish while also dealing chunks of damage. Other wallbreakers like Toxicroak, Grafaiai, and Whimsicott can chip down the opponent to make a Qwilfish sweep easier. In addition to that, Qwilfish's Intimidate can make sweeping for other Pokémon like Virizion, Sneasel, and Frosmoth more reliable (how? it cant really pivot into them? maybe just remove this sentence, Intimidate mostly just helps Qwilfish only). More balanced teams can also effectively use Swords Danve Qwilfish as a way to surprise opponents expecting a more defensive set. Since Qwilfish is purely invested in its offense, it's still important to have a strong defensive backbone alongside Qwilfish. This includes supportive walls like Snorlax, Decidueye-Hisui, and Sandslash that make a sweep easier in the long game (combine these two sentences into one, just add "such as" then list the mons. the last part of the sentence after sandslash is fluff). Hazard setters like Sandaconda, Palossand, and Orthworm also chip down opponents throughout the course of a longer game, making a Qwilfish sweep all the more possible.

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[SET]
Swords Dance
Qwilfish @ Leftovers
Ability: Intimidate
Tera Type: Water
EVs: 252 Atk / 4 SpD / 252 Spe
Jolly Nature
- Swords Dance
- Liquidation
- Gunk Shot
- Aqua Jet

[SET COMMENTS]
Thanks to its defensive typing and access to Intimidate, Qwilfish has a much easier time setting up Swords Dance compared to more frail attackers that typically use the move I would disagree - many SD users like Qwilfish-H, Toxicroak, and Decidueye-H have just as easy of a time if not moreso thanks to their bulk/defensive typings respectively. If anything, the first thing you should mention is that Qwilfish faces competition with other Swords Dance users. Qwilfish can turn the tables on supposed checks like Orthworm and Regirock by setting up Swords Dance in front of them. Liquidation and Gunk Shot are two powerful STAB moves that take out walls like Sandaconda, Snorlax, and Dipplin. Aqua Jet allows it to get the jump on faster opponents like Sneasel, Jolteon, and Oricorio, typically grabbing a KO after a boost and enough chip damage Oricorio is harder to fit on a team, I'd replace it with another fire like Typhlosion or Charizard. This also makes Qwilfish an apt revenge killer, with Water-type Terastallization making Aqua Jet even stronger after a Swords Dance boost. Leftovers supports Qwilfish on top of its already great Ability and typing, letting it have significantly more staying power than other frail setup sweepers.

Swords Dance Qwilfish provides a bulky dynamic to offensive teams looking to overwhelm opponents with a variety of strong attacks. Pivots like Electrode-Hisui, Mesprit, and Rotom can effectively bring in Qwilfish while also dealing chunks of damage against what Pokemon? list examples. Other wallbreakers like Toxicroak, Grafaiai, and Whimsicott can chip down the opponent to make a Qwilfish sweep easier. In addition, an all-out barrage of offense with sweepers like Virizion, Sneasel, and Frosmoth can let Qwilfish overwhelm opponents in tandem with them. More balanced teams can also effectively use Swords Danve Dance Qwilfish as a way to surprise opponents expecting a more defensive set. Since Qwilfish is purely invested in its offense, it's still important to have a strong defensive backbone alongside Qwilfish with walls such as Snorlax, Decidueye-Hisui, and Sandslash. Hazard setters like Sandaconda, Palossand, and Orthworm also chip down opponents throughout the course of a longer game, making a Qwilfish sweep all the more possible. Does Stealth Rock/Spikes allow Qwilfish to hit any offensive breakpoints after a boost? Ideally list examples

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Despite competition from competing with (Active voice) other Swords Dance users in the tier, Qwilfish can still consistently set up to sweep thanks to its defensive typing and access to Intimidate. Qwilfish can turn the tables on supposed checks reverse otherwise-poor matchups (Word choice, 'supposed' may be the wrong connotation for the sentence if the Pokemon in question would otherwise check Qwilfish) like Orthworm and Regirock by setting up Swords Dance in front of them. Liquidation and Gunk Shot are two powerful STAB moves that take out walls like Sandaconda, Snorlax, and Dipplin. Aqua Jet allows it to get the jump on faster opponents foes like Sneasel, Jolteon, and Charizard, typically grabbing a KO after a boost and enough chip damage (Possibly change to '...after a Swords Dance on something already weakened.' No outright grammar error, but could be more effective.). This also makes Qwilfish an apt revenge killer, with Water-type Terastallization Tera Water making Aqua Jet even stronger after a Swords Dance boost. Leftovers supports Qwilfish on top of its already great Ability ability and typing, letting it have granting it (Active voice) significantly more staying power than other frail setup sweepers (Might want to look at 'other frail' here - is it trying to refer to options frailer than Qwilfish, or are you listing Qwilfish as one of multiple options for frail setup sweepers yet slightly bulkier than alternatives in this category? The exact wording is slightly unclear, given the sentence's focus on Qwilfish's bulk, so it may need a bit of revisiting).

Swords Dance Qwilfish provides a bulky dynamic to offensive teams looking to overwhelm opponents with a variety of strong attacks. Pivots like Electrode-Hisui Hisuian Electrode, Mesprit, and Rotom can effectively bring in Qwilfish while also dealing chunks of damage against walls like Regirock and Dudunsparce chipping walls like Regirock and Dudunsparce (For brevity's sake. Optionally, the use case for the chip on Regirock and Dudunsparce may be tied into this, i.e. the chip providing a necessary safety barrier for Qwilfish to Swords Dance). Other wallbreakers like Toxicroak, Grafaiai, and Whimsicott can chip down the opponent opposing team ('Opponent' refers to the opposing player, this can either focus on the opponent's team or use 'foe' to refer to specific Pokemon used by the opponent.) to make a Qwilfish sweep easier and assist Qwilfish in its attempt to sweep (Active voice). In addition, an all-out barrage of offense with sweepers A more aggressive team with several sweepers (Brevity/Clarity) like Virizion, Sneasel, and Frosmoth can let Qwilfish overwhelm opponents in tandem with them help overwhelm opposing teams (Brevity, use of 'opponent', sentence clarity). More balanced teams can also effectively use Swords Dance Qwilfish as a way to surprise opponents expecting a more defensive set. Since Swords Dance Qwilfish is purely invested in its offense, it's still important to have a strong defensive backbone alongside Qwilfish with support Qwilfish with a strong defensive backbone including (Active voice) walls such as Snorlax, Decidueye-Hisui Hisuian Decidueye, and Sandslash. Hazard setters like Sandaconda, Palossand, and Orthworm also chip down opponents throughout over the course of a longer game, such as possibly (Clarity/Word choice) giving Qwilfish the chance to OHKO Snorlax after a boost.
Also, disclaimer that I am not on the GP team, and that this amcheck is not on same level as work of an active GPer, but may be used to assist in GP work. Overall, a great read, was a pleasure to help edit.
 
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Despite competition from other Swords Dance users in the tier, Qwilfish can still consistently set up to sweep thanks to its defensive typing and access to Intimidate. Qwilfish can turn the tables on supposed would-be checks like Orthworm and Regirock by setting up Swords Dance in front of them. Liquidation and Gunk Shot are two powerful STAB moves that take out walls like Sandaconda, Snorlax, and Dipplin. Aqua Jet allows it to get the jump on faster opponents foes like Sneasel, Jolteon, and Charizard, typically grabbing a KO after a boost and enough chip damage. This also makes Qwilfish an apt revenge killer, with Water-type Terastallization Tera Water making Aqua Jet even stronger after a Swords Dance boost. Leftovers supports Qwilfish on top of its already great Ability ability and typing, letting it have granting it (Active voice) significantly more staying power than other frail setup sweepers (Might want to look at 'other frail' here - is it trying to refer to options frailer than Qwilfish, or are you listing Qwilfish as one of multiple options for frail setup sweepers yet slightly bulkier than alternatives in this category? The exact wording is slightly unclear, given the sentence's focus on Qwilfish's bulk, so it may need a bit of revisiting).

Swords Dance Qwilfish provides a bulky dynamic to offensive teams looking to overwhelm opponents foes with a variety of strong attacks. Pivots like Electrode-Hisui Hisuian Electrode, Mesprit, and Rotom can effectively bring in Qwilfish while also dealing chunks of damage against walls like Regirock and Dudunsparce chipping walls like Regirock and Dudunsparce. Other wallbreakers like Toxicroak, Grafaiai, and Whimsicott can chip down the opponent opposing team ('Opponent' refers to the opposing player, this can either focus on the opponent's team or use 'foe' to refer to specific Pokemon used by the opponent.) to make a Qwilfish its sweep easier. In addition, an all-out barrage of offense with sweepers A more aggressive team with several sweepers (Brevity/Clarity) (I would use the term 'hyper offense' if it's accurate here because it's a known playstyle and clearer than all-out offense / barrage of sweepers) like Virizion, Sneasel, and Frosmoth can let Qwilfish overwhelm opponents in tandem with them help overwhelm opposing teams (Brevity, use of 'opponent', sentence clarity). More balanced teams can also effectively use Swords Dance Qwilfish as a way to surprise opponents expecting a more defensive set. Since Qwilfish is purely invested in its offense, it's still important to have a strong defensive backbone alongside Qwilfish with support Qwilfish with a strong defensive backbone including (Active voice) walls such as Snorlax, Decidueye-Hisui Hisuian Decidueye, and Sandslash. Entry hazard Hazard setters like Sandaconda, Palossand, and Orthworm also chip down opponents foes throughout over the course of a longer game, such as possibly (Clarity/Word choice) giving Qwilfish the chance to OHKO Snorlax after a boost.
 
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