My first warstory with a pretty weird themed team!

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*will be editted slowly due to my limited time allowed on the comp.
Hi all. This i s my first warstory ever. So plz comment.

The battle is a battle i had on the standard ladder. I was using a natural cure team that contains Crobat leads, Celebi, Blissy, Corsola (hustle max attack) ,Roserade, Starmie.
His team contains a Crobat lead, Gyrados, Gengar, Garchomp, Weavile and Magnezone, a pretty husky team.

So the battle begins!

shivercube708's moves will look like this.

1234gjy's moves will look like this.
other text will look like this.
Leftovers will be removed.
Nicknames will be removed.
Sandstorm/hail damage will be removed.
Scores will be shown after each KO.

Rules: Ladder Match, Sleep Clause, Freeze Clause, OHKO Clause, Evasion Clause, Species Clause, Strict Damage Clause
shivercube708 sent out Sir Swoops (lvl 100 Crobat ��).
1234gjy sent out Crobat (lvl 100 Crobat ��).
This really sucks, a possible speed tie, I know Crobat lead hypnosis things, so i decide to taunt so he cannot hypnosis things for the next few turns.
Crobat used Taunt.
Crobat fell for the taunt!
Crobat used Hypnosis.
Crobat can't use Hypnosis after the taunt!
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1234gjy: yes!
Now I have the upper hand as his crobat can't do my crobat by making my crobat sleep. He has to switch to avoid being slept.
shivercube708 switched in Stagnet (lvl 100 Magnezone).
Crobat used Hypnosis.
Crobat's attack missed!
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Useless miss, It F***ING wasted ONE of my 32 precious Hypnosis PP! I will sleep you!!
Crobat used Hypnosis.
Magnezone fell asleep!
Magnezone is fast asleep!
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Hurray! Now i worry that it might sleep talk, so i switch to my earthquaker to possibly kill it.
shivercube708 switched in Sir Swoops (lvl 100 Crobat ��).
1234gjy switched in Corsola (lvl 100 Corsola ��).
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Double switch, so he has no sleep talk on magnezone, now I fear my natural cure-less corsola get slept as it's the only thing that can bring down magnezone in one hit.
1234gjy switched in Blissey (lvl 100 Blissey ��).
Crobat used Hypnosis.
Crobat's attack missed!
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That makes up for my F***ING hypnosis miss.
Crobat used Hypnosis.
Blissey fell asleep!
Blissey is fast asleep!
---
Natural cure switch!
1234gjy switched in Celebi (lvl 100 Celebi).
Crobat used U-turn.
It's super effective!
Celebi lost 48% of its health.
1234gjy: aw damn
That U-turn did way more then i expected since i am running maximum defense and hp. I am suspecting that crobat to be adamant.
shivercube708 switched in seasnakesRus (lvl 100 Gyarados ��).
Gyarados's intimidate cut Celebi's attack!
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I predict that he predicts that I predicts a taunt so i try to T-wave it as it DDs!
Gyarados used Dragon Dance.
Gyarados's attack was raised.
Gyarados's speed was raised.
Celebi used Thunder Wave.
Gyarados is paralysed! It may be unable to move!
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Sweet! Let the stall begin!
Celebi used Leech Seed.
Gyarados was seeded!
Gyarados used Ice Fang.
It's super effective!
Celebi lost 44% of its health.
Gyarados's health was sapped by leech seed!
Gyarados lost 12% of its health.
Celebi regained health!
Celebi restored 11% of its health.
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OMG! his gyrados must have max attack or some thing! But I land my leech seed and starts to stall him with my recover! The Stall was me grass knotting him for 40% damage and him getting paralized and if I grass knot again, I kill it, so i predict a switch and go for the T-wave!

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shivercube708 switched in Hazespooks (lvl 100 Gengar ��).
Celebi used Thunder Wave.
Gengar is paralysed! It may be unable to move!
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Jack pot! A paralized gengar is a useless gengar, but i only have grass knot as an attack so i have to switch to the most hated pokemon in the metagame!
1234gjy switched in Blissey (lvl 100 Blissey ��).
Gengar used Focus Blast.
It's super effective!
Blissey lost 43% of its health.
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He made a nice prediction of blissy coming in it did surprising ly a lot.
shivercube708 switched in Ta Beast (lvl 100 Garchomp ��).
Blissey used Flamethrower.
It's not very effective...
A critical hit!
Garchomp lost 24% of its health.
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And here he switches in the suspect dragon:Garchomp! Preparing to SD up upon my little blissy!
Garchomp used Swords Dance.
Garchomp's attack was sharply raised.
Blissey used Ice Beam.
It's super effective!
Garchomp lost 48% of its health.
The Yache Berry weakened Ice Beam's power!
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There i am not switching and knocks of it's yache berry, now to sacrefice the most useless member on my team: Corsola!
1234gjy switched in Corsola (lvl 100 Corsola ��).
Garchomp used Outrage.
Garchomp went on a rampage!
Corsola lost 100% of its health.
1234gjy's Corsola fainted.
(6-5) Shivercube708
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Now for the revenge kill from starmie with it's ice beam!
1234gjy switched in Starmie (lvl 100 Starmie).
Starmie used Ice Beam.
It's super effective!
Garchomp lost 28% of its health.
shivercube708's Ta Beast fainted.
(5-5) Tie!
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Darn, I predict a SD again so i switch to my blissy to flame throw it.
shivercube708 switched in Brrr! (lvl 100 Weavile ��).
Weavile is exerting its pressure!
1234gjy switched in Blissey (lvl 100 Blissey ��).
Weavile used Swords Dance.
Weavile's attack was sharply raised.
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My prediction is right, now it's up to my blissy to stop the weasle from raping my team!
Weavile used Brick Break.
It's super effective!
Blissey lost 73% of its health.
Blissey used Flamethrower.
It's super effective!
Weavile lost 62% of its health.
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I kill the sash though, now to my fighting resitance! *drum rolls
1234gjy switched in Crobat (lvl 100 Crobat ��).
Weavile used Brick Break.
It's not very effective...
Crobat lost 11% of its health.
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Crobat used Air Slash.
Crobat's attack missed!
Weavile used Ice Punch.
It's super effective!
Crobat lost 95% of its health.
1234gjy's Crobat fainted.
(5-4)
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1234gjy: omfg
1234gjy: ...............
shivercube708: lol im lucky
1234gjy switched in Roserade (lvl 100 Roserade ��).
shivercube708: and crobat has crappy sp atk any way
Roserade used Sludge Bomb.
Weavile lost 38% of its health.
shivercube708's Brrr! fainted.
(4-4)
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shivercube708 switched in Sir Swoops (lvl 100 Crobat ��).
1234gjy: i gave it some sp atk
1234gjy: so it could've killed
shivercube708: might have
1234gjy: by the way, just so you know, crobat can nasty plot
1234gjy switched in Blissey (lvl 100 Blissey ��).
Crobat used Aerial Ace.
Blissey lost 15% of its health.
1234gjy's Blissey fainted.
(4-3)
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shivercube708: ya i know
1234gjy switched in Celebi (lvl 100 Celebi).
Crobat used U-turn.
It's super effective!
Celebi lost 47% of its health.
shivercube708 switched in Stagnet (lvl 100 Magnezone).
Celebi used Recover.
Celebi restored 50% of its health.
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Celebi used Leech Seed.
Magnezone was seeded!
Magnezone is fast asleep!
Magnezone's health was sapped by leech seed!
Magnezone lost 12% of its health.
Celebi regained health!
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1234gjy: lol, your team is freaking filled with status
1234gjy switched in Roserade (lvl 100 Roserade ��).
Magnezone is fast asleep!
Magnezone's health was sapped by leech seed!
Magnezone lost 12% of its health.
Roserade regained health!
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Roserade used Hidden Power.
It's super effective!
Magnezone lost 67% of its health.
Magnezone woke up!
Magnezone used Hidden Power.
It's super effective!
Roserade lost 92% of its health.
Magnezone lost 8% of its health.
shivercube708's Stagnet fainted.
(3-3)
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shivercube708 switched in Sir Swoops (lvl 100 Crobat ��).
1234gjy switched in Celebi (lvl 100 Celebi).
Crobat used Aerial Ace.
It's super effective!
Celebi lost 31% of its health.
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Crobat used Hypnosis.
Celebi fell asleep!
Celebi is fast asleep!
---
1234gjy switched in Starmie (lvl 100 Starmie).
Crobat used Aerial Ace.
Starmie lost 38% of its health.
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Crobat used U-turn.
It's super effective!
Starmie lost 57% of its health.
shivercube708 switched in seasnakesRus (lvl 100 Gyarados ��).
Gyarados's intimidate cut Starmie's attack!
Starmie used Ice Beam.
Gyarados lost 27% of its health.
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Starmie used Ice Beam.
Gyarados lost 14% of its health.
shivercube708's seasnakesRus fainted.
(2-3)
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shivercube708 switched in Sir Swoops (lvl 100 Crobat ��).
Crobat used U-turn.
It's super effective!
Starmie lost 24% of its health.
1234gjy's Starmie fainted.
(2-2)
shivercube708 switched in Hazespooks (lvl 100 Gengar ��).
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1234gjy switched in Roserade (lvl 100 Roserade ��).
Roserade used Hidden Power.
Gengar lost 44% of its health.
Gengar is paralysed! It can't move!
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1234gjy: lol what?
Roserade used Hidden Power.
Gengar lost 39% of its health.
Gengar used Shadow Ball.
Roserade lost 8% of its health.
1234gjy's Roserade fainted.
(2-1)
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1234gjy switched in Celebi (lvl 100 Celebi).
Celebi used Grass Knot.
It's not very effective...
A critical hit!
Gengar lost 16% of its health.
shivercube708's Hazespooks fainted.
(1-1)
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shivercube708 switched in Sir Swoops (lvl 100 Crobat ��).
1234gjy: yes!
Crobat used Hypnosis.
Celebi fell asleep!
Celebi is fast asleep!
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1234gjy: aw damn it
Crobat used U-turn.
It's super effective!
Celebi lost 44% of its health.
Celebi is fast asleep!
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Crobat used U-turn.
It's super effective!
Celebi lost 50% of its health.
Celebi woke up!
Celebi used Thunder Wave.
Crobat is paralysed! It may be unable to move!
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Celebi used Recover.
Celebi restored 50% of its health.
Crobat used U-turn.
It's super effective!
Celebi lost 50% of its health.
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shivercube708: gg
1234gjy: gg
Celebi used Recover.
Celebi restored 50% of its health.
Crobat is paralysed! It can't move!
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shivercube708: oh dam
Celebi used Leech Seed.
Crobat was seeded!
Crobat used Hypnosis.
Crobat's attack missed!
Crobat's health was sapped by leech seed!
Crobat lost 12% of its health.
Celebi regained health!
Celebi restored 9% of its health.
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1234gjy: crobat makes good wall
1234gjy: good typing too
shivercube708: ya he should be ou
1234gjy: resists fighting even after roost
1234gjy: so awsome
Celebi used Grass Knot.
It's not very effective...
Crobat lost 10% of its health.
Crobat is paralysed! It can't move!
Crobat's health was sapped by leech seed!
Crobat lost 12% of its health.
Celebi regained health!
Celebi restored 3% of its health.
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1234gjy: lol
Celebi used Grass Knot.
It's not very effective...
Crobat lost 9% of its health.
Crobat used Hypnosis.
Celebi fell asleep!
Crobat's health was sapped by leech seed!
Crobat lost 12% of its health.
Celebi regained health!
---
Celebi is fast asleep!
Crobat used U-turn.
It's super effective!
Celebi lost 47% of its health.
Crobat's health was sapped by leech seed!
Crobat lost 12% of its health.
Celebi regained health!
Celebi restored 9% of its health.
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1234gjy: aw damn
Celebi is fast asleep!
Crobat used U-turn.
It's super effective!
Celebi lost 50% of its health.
Crobat's health was sapped by leech seed!
Crobat lost 12% of its health.
Celebi regained health!
Celebi restored 9% of its health.
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1234gjy: wake up!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
shivercube708: plz stay asleep
1234gjy: lol
Celebi woke up!
Celebi used Recover.
Celebi restored 50% of its health.
Crobat used U-turn.
It's super effective!
Celebi lost 50% of its health.
Crobat's health was sapped by leech seed!
Crobat lost 12% of its health.
Celebi regained health!
Celebi restored 9% of its health.
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1234gjy: sweet
Celebi used Recover.
Celebi restored 50% of its health.
Crobat used U-turn.
It's super effective!
Celebi lost 51% of its health.
Crobat's health was sapped by leech seed!
Crobat lost 12% of its health.
Celebi regained health!
Celebi restored 9% of its health.
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Celebi used Recover.
Celebi restored 36% of its health.
Crobat used Hypnosis.
Celebi fell asleep!
Crobat's health was sapped by leech seed!
Crobat lost 12% of its health.
Celebi regained health!
---
1234gjy: aw damn
Celebi is fast asleep!
Crobat used U-turn.
It's super effective!
Celebi lost 48% of its health.
Crobat's health was sapped by leech seed!
Crobat lost 12% of its health.
Celebi regained health!
Celebi restored 9% of its health.
---
Celebi is fast asleep!
Crobat is paralysed! It can't move!
Crobat's health was sapped by leech seed!
Crobat lost 12% of its health.
Celebi regained health!
Celebi restored 9% of its health.
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1234gjy: wake up you freaking fairy!
shivercube708: i hate paralazation
Celebi is fast asleep!
Crobat used U-turn.
It's super effective!
Celebi lost 47% of its health.
Crobat's health was sapped by leech seed!
Crobat lost 12% of its health.
Celebi regained health!
Celebi restored 9% of its health.
---
Celebi woke up!
Celebi used Grass Knot.
It's not very effective...
Crobat lost 8% of its health.
shivercube708's Sir Swoops fainted.
(0-1)
1234gjy wins!
1234gjy: yes
shivercube708: that was close gg
1234gjy: warstory!

This log was formatted using Warmachine Version 1.0

*will be editted slowly due to my limited time allowed on the comp.
 
This is just a log..... it isn't a warstory at all. I strongly suggest looking in the archive for ideas on how to do it.
 
I am editting comments slowlly!

Didn't you read the very top and bottom sentence!!!!!

Plz edit your comments after i finish.
 
Yeah, usually the comments from the match itself don't count. Readers don't want this:

Celebi used Leech Seed.
Gyarados was seeded!
Gyarados used Ice Fang.
It's super effective!
Celebi lost 44% of its health.
Gyarados's health was sapped by leech seed!
Gyarados lost 12% of its health.
Celebi regained health!
Celebi restored 11% of its health.

1234gjy: yeah lol


They want this:

Celebi used Leech Seed.
Gyarados was seeded!
Gyarados used Ice Fang.
It's super effective!
Celebi lost 44% of its health.
Gyarados's health was sapped by leech seed!
Gyarados lost 12% of its health.
Celebi regained health!
Celebi restored 11% of its health.

"His Gyarados is at very low health now, thanks to the Leech Seed damage. I decided to try Thunderwave again just in case he switches out. He'll die from Leech Seed this turn anyways, and I'm at pretty good health myself, so it seemed to be a safe idea."

shivercube708 switched in Hazespooks (lvl 100 Gengar).
Celebi used Thunder Wave.
Gengar is paralysed! It may be unable to move!

Now comment about THIS turn, and so on.
 
Damn, anything I could have possibly said, Skiddle beat me to.

Of course guys, he may have hit the submit button too early and ended up like a warstory version of "Metang @", so idk, maybe give him a chance to add stuff back in
 
The red and blue is painful to try and read, aren't there better options for formatting it other than those colors!?

Also the current comments aren't good at all, try to go more in depth and really let us know the situation and what you are thinking. I know you say you are editing the rest in, but the ones you have aren't good anyway.
 
This is not a warstory. Please read some of those warstories we have in our warstory archive sub-forum, to get an idea of what we are after in a real warstory.
 
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