National Dex Offensive Zapdos QC(2/2) GP(0/1)

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(Offensive) Zapdos @ Flyinium Z
Ability: Static
EVs: 252 SpA / 4 SpD / 252 Spe
Timid Nature
IVs: 0 Atk
- Hurricane
- Thunderbolt / Thunder
- Volt Switch / Weather Ball
- Roost

[SET COMMENTS]
Zapdos serves as a great wallbreaker, boasting natural bulk that allows it to take hits from physical attackers like Rillaboom and Urshifu-R and threaten them with paralysis through Static. If rain is active, Weather Ball lets Zapdos nuke defensive Ground-types such as Iron Treads, Gliscor, and Landorus-T, while Supersonic Skystrike can be used to finish off weakened defensive Pokemon like Ferrothorn and Galarian Slowking or in important turns when the risk of missing a Hurricane would prove way too costly.

Zapdos can be a great addition to offense teams where its ability to inflict foes with paralysis is greatly appreciated. Zapdos has the ability to loosely check Fighting-types like Zamazenta, Great Tusk, and Mega Medicham, which can go a long way for teammates like Kingambit and Ferrothorn. The aforementioned Fighting-types can also be great teammates to Zapdos, as they help in dealing with Pokemon like Ting-Lu and Mega Tyranitar. Additionally, Great Tusk can remove Stealth Rock Rocks. When used on rain, staples like Barraskewda and Mega Swampert appreciate Zapdos's help in dealing with bulky Water-types such as Alomomola and Slowbro as well as Grass-types like Ogerpon-W and Ferrothorn. Galarian Slowking and Raging Bolt are both frustrating for Zapdos to break, so teammates such as Pursuit Kingambit or bulky Ground-types like Iron Treads and Ting-Lu are good to deal with them.


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(Offensive) Zapdos @ Flyinium Z / Heavy Duty Boots
Ability: Static
Tera Type: Electric
EVs: 252 SpA / 4 SpD / 252 Spe
Timid Nature
IVs: 0 Atk
- Hurricane
- Volt Switch/ Thunder Thunderbolt / Thunder
- Weather Ball/ Hidden Power Ice / Heat Wave / Thunderbolt / Discharge Volt Switch / Weather Ball matching the set on the Dex, we also talked about Thunder and Wball and agreed cause zap rain
- Roost



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Zapdos can serve as a great wallbreaker, while also being able to have natural bulk without needing to invest into its defensive stats to be able to take important hits from what?. Its Static ability allows it to cripple strong physical attackers like Urshifu-R, Mega Lopunny and Rillaboom mention how Zapdos and it’s teammates benefit from paralysis. Depending on the team it used on, Zapdos can pick and choose its attacks, moves like Weather Ball are great on rain teams, as they allow Zapdos to hit Gliscor, Landorus-T and Iron Treads with a powerful super effective move, Heat Wave is a great tool in facing very weak fire Pokemon like Ferrothorn and Scizor-Mega and Hidden Power Ice lets it chunk Dragonite and Garchomp. Flynium Z can be utilised to give Zapdos the opportunity to nuke a defensive target that needs to be rid of urgently filler, also explain what defensive targets?.


what archetypes does offzap fit on, you already mention rain but it’s not necessarily a rain mon can work on offensive stuff fineRain staples like Mega Swampert and Barraskewda appreciate Zapdos' pressence as it is able to shut down the bulky Water-Types like Alomomola and Slowbro that give them trouble. It is also able to demolish common grass types that pose a problem to rain teams, such as Ogerpon-Wellspring, Kartana and Ferrothorn. Zapdos' ability to check most fighting types in the tier like Zamazenta, Great Tusk and Mega Medicham goes a long way for teammates like Kingambit and Ferrothorn mention what these fighting types do for Zapdos, like threaten Pokémon like Ting-Lu and various steel types. Zapdos' typing lives it weak to a plethora of Pokemon, most commonly Tyranitar Mega Mega Tyranitar, who is able to take both of its STAB moves with ease while threathening massive damage with Stone Edge. It can also set up Stealth Rocks, which greatly chunk away at Zapdos' hitpoints. Great Tusk is able to help Zapdos in this regard, while also being a great user of Rapid Spin and removing hazzards, keeping the field clear for Zapdos to come in more often throughout the course of a game. Slowking Galar has enough bulk to take any hit from Zapdos, taking the opportunity to set up a Future Sight, damage it with Sludge Bomb or pivoting out via Chilly Reception. Raging Bolt is able to take any hit from Zapdos and boost its stat with Calm Mind use it as setup fodder. A great solution to resolving Zapdos' matchup against these Pokemon is Iron Treads, as it is able to take any hits while threathening big damage with Earthquake against both of them. Kingambit can also act as a great Slowking Galar counter, being able to Pursuit trap it. Ting Lu's combination of typing and ability make it very hard for Zapdos to prosper against it. As such, common Pokemon used on rain teams like Mega Swampert or Barraskewda can help against this, as well as other Pokemon like Great Tusk, Rillabom and Ogerpon-Wellspring. The latter three also struggle against Mega Scizor, and so Zapdos can help by overwhelming it with its STAB moves or removing it with Heat Wave if it's running it.

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(Offensive) Zapdos @ Flyinium Z
Ability: Static
Tera Type: Electric
EVs: 252 SpA / 4 SpD / 252 Spe
Timid Nature
IVs: 0 Atk
- Hurricane
- Thunderbolt / Thunder
- Volt Switch / Weather Ball
- Roost

[SET COMMENTS]
Zapdos can serve as a great wallbreaker, while also being able to have natural bulk without needing to invest into its defensive stats to be able to take important hits from strong physical attackers like Urshifu-R, Mega Lopunny and Rillaboom. not only is this a run-on sentence but it is also mostly unnecessary and clunky to read, rewrite Its Static ability is a crucial tool, as it allows Zapdos to dampen the speed of physical breakers attackers this isn’t limited to breakers, making it easier for both it and its teammates to deal with. Depending on the team it used on, moves like Weather Ball are great on rain teams, as they allow Zapdos to hit Gliscor, Landorus-T and Iron Treads with a powerful super effective move, Flynium Z can be utilised to give Zapdos the opportunity to nuke a defensive target, like a Ferrothorn, a Slowking-Galar or can be used in clutch situations where the risk of missing Hurricane would be too costly. rewrite, meta-wise there isn’t anything wrong with this sentence but again it’s a run-on and very awkwardly written

Zapdos can be a great addition to offense teams, where its ability to cause a paralysis is greatly appreciated, helping with slowing down opposing offensive threats. redundant as you explained how static slows down attackers earlier Rain staples like Mega Swampert and Barraskewda appreciate Zapdos' pressence as it is able to shut down the bulky Water-Types like Alomomola and Slowbro that give them trouble. It is also able to demolish common grass types that pose a problem to rain teams, such as Ogerpon-Wellspring, Kartana and Ferrothorn. suggest combining the previous two sentences as they both talk about what types zapdos threaten Zapdos' ability to loosely keep in mind this is an offensive set check most fighting types in the tier like Zamazenta, Great Tusk and Mega Medicham goes can go with above edit a long way for teammates like Kingambit and Ferrothorn. The aforementioned Fighting-types can also prove as great help for Zapdos, as they can help in dealing with its common answers like Ting Lu and bulky Steel-types like Iron Treads and Ferrothorn you mention that zapdos beats ferro earlier?. Zapdos' typing lives it weak to a plethora of Pokemon, most commonly Mega Tyranitar, who is able to take both of its STAB moves with ease while threathening massive damage with Stone Edge. It can also set up Stealth Rocks, which greatly chunk away at Zapdos' hitpoints. Great Tusk is able to help Zapdos in this regard, while also being a great user of Rapid Spin and removing hazzards, keeping the field clear for Zapdos to come in more often throughout the course of a game. you can legitimately combine all three sentences here into one which will really help with readability Slowking Galar has enough bulk to take any hit from Zapdos, taking the opportunity to set up a Future Sight, damage it with Sludge Bomb or pivoting out via Chilly Reception. Raging Bolt is able to take any hit from Zapdos and use it as setup fodder. A great solution to resolving Zapdos' matchup against these Pokemon is Iron Treads, as it is able to take any hits while threathening big damage with Earthquake against both of them. Kingambit can also act as a great Slowking Galar counter, being able to Pursuit trap it. same here Ting Lu's combination of typing and ability make it very hard for Zapdos to prosper against it. As such, common Pokemon used on rain teams like Mega Swampert or Barraskewda can help against this, as well as other Pokemon like Great Tusk, Rillabom and Ogerpon-Wellspring. The latter three also struggle against Mega Scizor, and so Zapdos can help by overwhelming it with its STAB moves. same here, usually when you include an example of a check and partner(which of these are mtar gking rbolt ting lu, tusk treads gambit mpert barra rilla waterpon, you have too many btw) you want to keep that within one sentence, this paragraph is way waaay too long
essentially i’m telling you to rewrite this entire lower half, i’d recommend comparing with other finished analyses and their teammates section to see how it’s written

please make sure to proofread your work, bluntly this is riddled with grammar and spelling mistakes that are easily caught if you read over what you write. this also helps with clarifying sentence structure as a lot of your work is clunky and hard to read
 
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make sure to always change your title accordingly when you finish implementing, although for this one id like to look again before 2/2
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(Offensive) Zapdos @ Flyinium Z
Ability: Static
Tera Type: Electric
EVs: 252 SpA / 4 SpD / 252 Spe
Timid Nature
IVs: 0 Atk
- Hurricane
- Thunderbolt / Thunder
- Volt Switch / Weather Ball
- Roost

[SET COMMENTS]
Zapdos can serve as a great wallbreaker, while also being able to have natural bulk without needing to invest into its defensive stats to be able to take important hits from strong physical attackers like Urshifu-R, Mega Lopunny and Rillaboom. not only is this a run-on sentence but it is also mostly unnecessary and clunky to read, rewrite Its Static ability is a crucial tool, as it allows Zapdos to dampen the speed of physical breakers attackers this isn’t limited to breakers, making it easier for both it and its teammates to deal with. Depending on the team it used on, moves like Weather Ball are great on rain teams, as they allow Zapdos to hit Gliscor, Landorus-T and Iron Treads with a powerful super effective move, Flynium Z can be utilised to give Zapdos the opportunity to nuke a defensive target, like a Ferrothorn, a Slowking-Galar or can be used in clutch situations where the risk of missing Hurricane would be too costly. rewrite, meta-wise there isn’t anything wrong with this sentence but again it’s a run-on and very awkwardly written

Zapdos can be a great addition to offense teams, where its ability to cause a paralysis is greatly appreciated, helping with slowing down opposing offensive threats. redundant as you explained how static slows down attackers earlier Rain staples like Mega Swampert and Barraskewda appreciate Zapdos' pressence as it is able to shut down the bulky Water-Types like Alomomola and Slowbro that give them trouble. It is also able to demolish common grass types that pose a problem to rain teams, such as Ogerpon-Wellspring, Kartana and Ferrothorn. suggest combining the previous two sentences as they both talk about what types zapdos threaten Zapdos' ability to loosely keep in mind this is an offensive set check most fighting types in the tier like Zamazenta, Great Tusk and Mega Medicham goes can go with above edit a long way for teammates like Kingambit and Ferrothorn. The aforementioned Fighting-types can also prove as great help for Zapdos, as they can help in dealing with its common answers like Ting Lu and bulky Steel-types like Iron Treads and Ferrothorn you mention that zapdos beats ferro earlier?. Zapdos' typing lives it weak to a plethora of Pokemon, most commonly Mega Tyranitar, who is able to take both of its STAB moves with ease while threathening massive damage with Stone Edge. It can also set up Stealth Rocks, which greatly chunk away at Zapdos' hitpoints. Great Tusk is able to help Zapdos in this regard, while also being a great user of Rapid Spin and removing hazzards, keeping the field clear for Zapdos to come in more often throughout the course of a game. you can legitimately combine all three sentences here into one which will really help with readability Slowking Galar has enough bulk to take any hit from Zapdos, taking the opportunity to set up a Future Sight, damage it with Sludge Bomb or pivoting out via Chilly Reception. Raging Bolt is able to take any hit from Zapdos and use it as setup fodder. A great solution to resolving Zapdos' matchup against these Pokemon is Iron Treads, as it is able to take any hits while threathening big damage with Earthquake against both of them. Kingambit can also act as a great Slowking Galar counter, being able to Pursuit trap it. same here Ting Lu's combination of typing and ability make it very hard for Zapdos to prosper against it. As such, common Pokemon used on rain teams like Mega Swampert or Barraskewda can help against this, as well as other Pokemon like Great Tusk, Rillabom and Ogerpon-Wellspring. The latter three also struggle against Mega Scizor, and so Zapdos can help by overwhelming it with its STAB moves. same here, usually when you include an example of a check and partner(which of these are mtar gking rbolt ting lu, tusk treads gambit mpert barra rilla waterpon, you have too many btw) you want to keep that within one sentence, this paragraph is way waaay too long
essentially i’m telling you to rewrite this entire lower half, i’d recommend comparing with other finished analyses and their teammates section to see how it’s written

please make sure to proofread your work, bluntly this is riddled with grammar and spelling mistakes that are easily caught if you read over what you write. this also helps with clarifying sentence structure as a lot of your work is clunky and hard to read
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implemented, thanks for the help boppy as always and im also very sorry about these 3rd grade grammar mistakes
 
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(Offensive) Zapdos @ Flyinium Z
Ability: Static
EVs: 252 SpA / 4 SpD / 252 Spe
Timid Nature
IVs: 0 Atk
- Hurricane
- Thunderbolt / Thunder
- Volt Switch / Weather Ball
- Roost

[SET COMMENTS]
Zapdos can serve as a great wallbreaker, having natural bulk that allows it to take hits from physical attackers like Urshifu-R and Rillaboom, while also threatening to paralyze them with Static, making its team have an easier time in dealing with them.
If rain is active, Zapdos can use Weather Ball to nuke defensive Ground-types such as Iron Treads, Gliscor and Landorus. Flynium Z can be used to finish off a weakened defensive Pokemon like Ferrothorn or Slowking Galar. It can also be used in clutch turns, when the risk of missing a Hurricane would prove way too costly.

Zapdos can be a great addition to offense teams, where its ability to cause a paralysis is greatly appreciated. Rain staples like Barraskewda and Mega Swampert appreciate Zapdos' help in dealing with bulky Water-types such as Alomomola and Slowbro as well as Grass-types like Ogerpon-Wellspring and Ferrothorn. Zapdos has the ability to loosely check most fighting types in the tier like Zamazenta, Great Tusk and Mega Medicham which can go a long way for teammates like Kingambit and Ferrothorn. The aforementioned Fighting-types can also be great teammates to Zapdos, as they help in dealing with Pokemon like Ting-Lu, Mega Tyranitar, with Great Tusk also haiving the ability to remove Stealth Rocks.
Slowking Galar can be a frustrating Pokemon for Zapdos, as it natural allows it to take any hit from it. Raging Bolt is also a problem in this regard, as its typing leaves it able to take any hit from Zapdos while using it as setup fodder. There are several Pokemon who can help with this, especially bulky ground types like Iron Treads and Ting-Lu with Kingambit proving itself a great Pursuit trapper against Slowking Galar.

great improvement from last time, in terms of metagame knowledge i don't actually have a lot to change here. it's just that your wording and sentence structure is confusing to follow, but there's not much i can change without writing half this analysis myself. i'm gonna give this 2/2 for content but please do read other finished analyses and how they compare to see how an analysis should be written(if you need help writing this don't be scared to send a dm).
 
regarding the qc 2/2, i have talked with boppy about this on discord to get a better grasp on how i can improve my writing style and he gave me the suggested changes over there.

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(Offensive) Zapdos @ Flyinium Z
Ability: Static
EVs: 252 SpA / 4 SpD / 252 Spe
Timid Nature
IVs: 0 Atk
- Hurricane
- Thunderbolt / Thunder
- Volt Switch / Weather Ball
- Roost

[SET COMMENTS]
Zapdos serves as a great wallbreaker, that boasts boasting natural bulk that allows it to take hits from physical attackers like Rillaboom and Urshifu-R and threaten paralasys paralysis through Static. (AP) to the benefit of its team. If rain is active, Zapdos can use Weather Ball to nuke defensive Ground-types such as Iron Treads, Gliscor, (AC) and Landorus Landorus-T while Flynium Flyinium Z can be used to finish off a weakened defensive Pokemon like Ferrothorn or Galarian Slowking Galar — or in clutch important turns, when the risk of missing a Hurricane would prove way too costly.

Zapdos can be a great addition to offense teams, where its ability to cause a paralysis is greatly appreciated. Zapdos It has the ability to loosely check most Fighting-types in the tier like Zamazenta, Great Tusk, (AC) and Mega Medicham which can go a long way for teammates like Kingambit and Ferrothorn. The aforementioned Fighting-types can also be great teammates to Zapdos, as they help in dealing with Pokemon like Ting Lu Ting-Lu, Mega Tyranitar, with Great Tusk also haiving having the ability to remove Stealth Rocks. When used on rain, staples like Barraskewda and Mega Swampert appreciate Zapdos' Zapdos's help in dealing with bulky Water-types such as Alomomola and Slowbro as well as Grass-types like Ogerpon-Wellspring Ogerpon-W and Ferrothorn. Galarian Slowking Galar and Raging Bolt are both frustrating for Zapdos to break, so teammates Pursuit trappers such as Pursuit Kingambit maybe mention mtar too if this is a valid change? or bulky Ground-types like Iron Treads and Ting Lu Ting-Lu can help deal with them.
 
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[SET]
(Offensive) Zapdos @ Flyinium Z
Ability: Static
EVs: 252 SpA / 4 SpD / 252 Spe
Timid Nature
IVs: 0 Atk
- Hurricane
- Thunderbolt / Thunder
- Volt Switch / Weather Ball
- Roost

[SET COMMENTS]
Zapdos serves as a great wallbreaker, that boasts boasting natural bulk that allows it to take hits from physical attackers like Rillaboom and Urshifu-R and threaten paralasys them with paralysis through Static. (AP) to the benefit of its team. If rain is active, Zapdos can use Weather Ball to lets Zapdos (“can use” is repeated in this sentence and the next one, so i changed this instance of it, as it requires the least drastic change) nuke defensive Ground-types such as Iron Treads, Gliscor, (AC) and Landorus Landorus-T, (AC) while Flynium Z Supersonic Skystrike can be used to finish off a weakened defensive Pokemon like Ferrothorn or and Galarian Slowking Galar or in clutch important turns (RC) when the risk of missing a Hurricane would prove way too costly.

Zapdos can be a great addition to offense teams (RC) where its ability to cause a inflict foes with paralysis is greatly appreciated. Zapdos has the ability to loosely check most Fighting-types in the tier like Zamazenta, Great Tusk, (AC) and Mega Medicham, (AC) which can go a long way for teammates like Kingambit and Ferrothorn. The aforementioned Fighting-types can also be great teammates to Zapdos, as they help in dealing with Pokemon like Ting-Lu and Ting Lu (RC) Mega Tyranitar. (RC; Add period) Additionally, (AC) with Great Tusk also haiving the ability to can remove Stealth Rock Rocks. When used on rain, staples like Barraskewda and Mega Swampert appreciate Zapdos' Zapdos's help in dealing with bulky Water-types such as Alomomola and Slowbro as well as Grass-types like Ogerpon-Wellspring Ogerpon-W and Ferrothorn. Galarian Slowking Galar and Raging Bolt are both frustrating for Zapdos to break, so teammates such as Pursuit Kingambit or bulky Ground-types like Iron Treads and Ting Lu can help Ting-Lu are good to deal with them.
 
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