(ou) rmt first time for everything

duke3528

I have worked on this teams for almost two weeks. My brain is fried and need a break and criticism. This is my first time here on any site doin this. with out further adue
Team at a Glance​
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Jirachi @ Expert Belt
Ability: Serene Grace
EVs: 80HP/252 Atk/176 Spe
Naive
- Stealth Rock
- Ice Punh
- Fire Punch
- Iron Head
Jirachi, my favorite one of all. He puts up stealth rock right away unless there is a threat to him then depending on that situation I will fight or stay. Not too many people expect this jirachi on my team as it seems not too many people use hime any more.
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Vaporeon (F) @ Left Overs
Ability: Water Absorb
EVs: 128 HP/252 D/128 Spe
Calm
- Wish
- HP Electric
- Protect
- Surf
This guy has saved me somany times I had to put her on my team. She is bulky and has 101 substitues wich help to pass on Substitues or just give her that needed wish. ​

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Dragonite (M) @ Life Orb
Ability: Inner Focus
EVs: 112 Atk/196 Spd/200 SAtk
Rash nature (+SAtk, -SDef)
- Draco Meteor
- Flamethrower
- Superpower
- Roost
Dragonite, so many people think he is a waste of time ever since salamence came out but everytime he has come up against a salamence dragonite has come out on top. He stops blissey and heatran right in there tracks.​

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Scizor(F) @ Life orb
Ability: Technition
EVs: 200 HP/56 Atk/200 SpD/52 Spe
Adamant
- U-Turn
- Pursuit
- Bullet Punch
- Roost
Scizor is the only pokemon on this team that I am very unsure about. She has helped me in the past a few times but not enough to impress me.​

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Blissey (F) @ Left Overs
Ability: Natural Cure
EVs: 252 D/216 Spd/40 SpA
Calm
- Aromatherapy
- Soft Boiled
- Thunder wave
- Flame Thrower
I mainly have blissey here because I have no means to get rid of any secondary damage. So she is my wall and healer when need be.​

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Rotom-c @ Left overs
Ability: Levitate
EVs: 252 HP/168 D/88 Spe
Bold
- Leaf Storm
- Shadow Ball
- Will O Wisp
- Thunderbolt
Rotom cut is here as a back up to gyarados and rock types if vaporeon goes down and if think anyone is going to use explode I wont lose anyone​


This team works well togeather . Scizor is the only one that I want to change but then again I am new to this. I am willing to make changes for the better. I wont change Jirachi or Dragonite though. I appreciate the help​
 
Hey, I like your team, you clearly put a good amount of effort. I have two things i'd like to suggest though.

1. Life orb on scizor, he lacks swords dance, and has roost the extra damage wont hinder him too much, try it the 30% increase makes a huge difference

2. Thunderwave > body slam on Jirachi. Ice punch and fire punch hit a lot of leads for super effective damage, I know you are tring to abuse serene grace here but thunderwave is going to help you a lot more. Body slam isnt a bad option, but with no STAB and expert belt not helping it out, thunderwave is my reccomendation.
 
just a personal nitpick, but it'd be great if all the team was all in the same format (including font size)

Achi has no Spec. Attacks. go with Jolly (+Spe, -SpA) and put those last 4 EVs into one of his defs.

same with Nite, no Phy. Moves, so just go with Modest (+SpA, -Atk) and move some EVs around (maybe simply 112 HP? she's naturally Bulky anyway)

Scizor wants LO as Porky said, and IMO T-Wave and Body Slam come down to personal choice

hope i helped :)
 
I would suggest Choice Band over Expert Belt on Scizor. That extra damage boost will make him stand out as powerful a lot more. Also drop roost (useless with CB) for Superpower, which will OHKO Heatran and Magnezone switch-ins.
 
About Jirachi: First of all, fix the nature, jolly is the way to go since you're not using special attacks. Then, add iron head over ice punch or body slam: it's a powerful stab move and comes with a 60% flinch rate. About the EVs: 80 HP / 252 Atk / 176 Spe is a nice spread: it still allows you to outspeed positive natured base 90 Spe while adding some bulk to your lead. Also, give it leftovers.

About Scizor: trapping Scizor is ok, though I would give it life orb over expert belt. Probably the only pokemons that you're going to hit for super effective damage are psychics and ghosts with pursuit, and maybe some TTar. Life orb gives a 30% boost to all of your attacks and the recoil can be roosted off. The life orb boost will help in revenge-killing DD Salamence\Dragonite which, otherwise, may be a problem for your team.

About Rotom: with that spread you risk being OHKO'd by a +1 waterfall, so, you may give it a scarf to at least revenge kill Gyara or use a more bulky spread: bold with 252 HP / 168 Def / 88 Spe. Also consider that Rotom is your best switch into CB Scizor. Also, I'd give it W-o-W over thunder wave: TTar loves to switch into Rotom to pursuit it, and W-o-W will make it think twice before switching in.

About Vaporeon: At the moment Vaporeon is your best counter to Gyarados (unless you fix Rotom- see above), but with that set you can't even touch Gyara. I believe you should use the standard wish support Vaporeon: bold, 188 HP / 252 Def / 68 Spe, replacing baton pass and substitute with protect and hp electric. Protect also helps countering things like Infernape and scarf-Flygon more effectively.

Oh, and just as a side note: your descriptions are kinda lacking, try to explain how your team works... strategy and so on.

Hope this helps.

Good luck!
 
I can see what you mean about rotom. I do need to make him more bulky, but i think my jirachi would have no problem taking out gyarados.
 
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