VGC 21 Palkia [QC 1/1] [GP 1/1]

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[SET]
name: Offensive Trick Room
move 1: Hydro Pump
move 2: Spacial Rend
move 3: Trick Room
move 4: Protect
item: Lustrous Orb
ability: Pressure
nature: Modest / Quiet
evs: 252 HP/ 252 SpA / 4 SpD

[SET COMMENTS]

Palkia has made a name for itself thanks to its ability to reliably set Trick Room with its good bulk and provide a fierce offensive threat with its near-unresisted offensive typing. Hydro Pump is Palkia's strongest Water-type STAB move, OHKOing the likes of Incineroar, Stakataka, and Entei. Spacial Rend does decent damage against Grass-types like Rillaboom and Tsareena and OHKOes offensive Eternatus. Lustrous Orb gives Palkia a much-appreciated power boost that allows Hydro Pump to 2HKO Calyrex-I and enables Spacial Rend to 2HKO Amoonguss and Kyogre. Trick Room helps against the mostly fast-paced meta and can turn the battle into Palkia's favor quickly. Telepathy can be used over Pressure if you have spread moves that would hit Palkia on your team.

Palkia appreciates Fake Out support from the likes of Incineroar and Rillaboom to help it set up Trick Room. Incineroar can check Zacian-C and Rillaboom, as can Entei, while Rillaboom can check Tapu Fini for Palkia; in return, Palkia can take care of Fire-types such as Entei and Incineroar. Amoonguss and Indeedee-F can provide redirection to help Palkia set up Trick Room. Pollen Puff from the latter also provides healing, while Psychic Terrain from the former lets Palkia use its strong attacks unimpeded by Fake Out. Stakataka is a great teammate for Palkia, as it helps check Fairy-types such as Tapu Lele and Xerneas. Landorus-T can assist Palkia by checking Rillaboom and Zacian-C.

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Hello Pixxels I hope your doing well, a few things I noticed checking this improper grammar throughout the analysis such as refering Regieleki as Eleki, not capitalizing Trick Room, using etc, just be more careful when writing in the future.
[SET] (I just fixed the formating)
name: Offensive Trick Room
move 1: Hydro Pump
move 2: Spacial Rend
move 3: Trick Room
move 4: Protect
item: Lustrous Orb
ability: Pressure / Telepathy
nature: Modest / Quiet
evs: 212 HP / 20 Def / 236 SpA / 36 SpD / 4 Spe 252 HP / 252 SpA / 4SpD (Read my comments at the end of the first paragraph)

[SET COMMENTS]

Palkia has made a name for itself thanks to its amazing great(Amazing is overselling it imo) bulk and allowing it to being able to set up trick room reliably reliably set Trick Room, while also filling a offensive role, and having a great typing.(filling an offensive role and having a great typing could be combined to it having a great offensive typing, I would also like you to point out its good Kyogre matchup.) Hydro Pump is a usually a strong STAB move that hits most Pokemon in the format for super effective against Incineroar, Stakataka, Entei, etc.("Hydro Pump is a usually a strong STAB" This is very fluffy you can say its strong just do so more concisely and don't say usually. "move that hits most Pokemon in the format for super effective " this isn't true there are plenty of Pokemon at least neutral to water, instead of saying "hits" OHKOs makes more sense. this sentence needs a rework.) Spacial Rend is the main STAB move for Palkia which hits against opposing Dragon Types.("The main STAB move" is pretty fluffy, you don't need to say "the main STAB move" and give examples of what Dragon-type Pokemon that Spacial Rend would crush.) Lustrous orb helps Palkia's Hydro Pump and Spacial Rend hit harder.( give examples of what lustrous orb helps Palkia achieve it 2HKOs Kyogre and Amoonguss with the orb and lustrous Orb Hydro 2HKOs Calyrex-Ice.) Trick Room helps against the mostly fast-paced meta, and can turn the battles in to into Palkia's favor quickly. Protect helps avoid Fake Outs and other unnecessary hits.(Protect does not need to be explained) The given spread allows Palkia to live Adamant AV Rillaboom Wood hammer and Moonblast from Timid Lele.
252 SpA Tapu Lele Moonblast vs. 212 HP / 36 SpD Palkia: 258-306 (68.9 - 81.8%) -- guaranteed 2HKO
252+ Atk Rillaboom Wood Hammer vs. 212 HP / 0 Def Palkia in Grassy Terrain: 271-321 (72.4 - 85.8%) -- guaranteed 2HKO after Grassy Terrain recovery
(even without the specific investment Palkia would live anyways.)

Common teammates include Amoonguss, Incineroar, Rillaboom, Stakataka and Celesteela.(It is unnecessary to list common partners just get on with explaining why?) Rillaboom and Incineroar can provide Fake Out to help Palkia set-up Trick room.(There is more to these Pokemon and their synergy with Palkia then Fake Out. Incineroar is able to help check Rillaboom and Zacian-C which have been running Play Rough You'd probably mention Entei to. Rillaboom is able to check Tapu Fini and relieves palkia of pressure to check Kyogre.) Amoonguss helps redirect attacks while also providing Spore and Pollen Puff.(Amoonguss can redirect attacks to help Palkia do what? You don't need to mention that Amoonguss has Spore.) Stakataka and Celesteela help against the fairy types that Palkia is weak against.( What Fairy-types Is Stakataka able to check for Palkia? Unless you can convince me otherwise remove mention of Celesteela, Idt I have seen it be good on Palkia teams.) Landorus-T and Zapdos get rid of Rillaboom and Eleki which threaten Palkia.("get rid of" getting rid of a Pokemon is not at all guaranteed, threatens or checks makes more sense. Regieleki isn't particularly threatening to Palkia, both of the Pokemon you mentioned can check Zacian-c which sounds more worth mentioning. Pressure helps PP stall and Telepathy allows you to freely use Spread moves without worrying about hitting Palkia.(The second paragraph is generally reserved for teammates move this to the end of the first paragraph. Is Pressure realistically PP stalling moves in a match? not usually it can just be optimal if you don't have a Pokemon using a spread move.)



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Hello, I am going to be straight with this no hard feelings. Many parts of this analysis are written like a notepad for example "Incineroar and Entei check Zacian-C" or "Amoonguss helps redirect attacks while also providing Clear smog and Pollen Puff." Write the analysis like your explaining to another person not like a notepad, looking at some of the on site completed analyses should help you. I am repeating myself in these checks because it seems your ignoring content within the check itself and stuff I told you directly on Discord. I am asking questions here to help you develop as a writer. use this method to implement checks if you haven't already been doing so and Please please focus.
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[SET]
name: Offensive Trick Room
move 1: Hydro Pump
move 2: Spacial Rend
move 3: Trick Room
move 4: Protect
item: Lustrous Orb
ability: Pressure / Telepathy (this should be unslashed. Telepathy would only function on very specific teams and you do give up the ability to self Pollen Puff.)
nature: Modest / Quiet
evs: 252 HP/ 252 SpA / 4 SpD
(Removed spacing)
[SET COMMENTS]

Palkia has made a name for itself thanks to its good bulk allowing to reliably set Trick Room, while also being a fierce offensive threat with its having a great near unresisted offensive typing. Hydro Pump is a strong STAB move(Yes its a STAB move no need to say that. Just saying that Hydro Pump is a strong move is a poor way of describing it. Is it the best single target water option that Palkia has that also happens to be powerful? There are probably other better ways to describe it to.) that OHKOs Pokemon like the likes of Incineroar, Stakataka, Enteti Entei etc.(This is an Analysis use proper grammar) Spacial Rend does decent damage into the Grass-types(What Grass-types? Tsareena and Rillaboom would be appropriate examples) and OHKOs offensive Etetnatus Eternatus. Lustrous oOrb helps(Instead of saying that it helps Palkia say how it helps Palkia?) Palkia's Hydro Pump 2HKOs Calyrex-I while Spacial Rend 2HKOs Amoonguss and Kyogre. Trick Room helps against the mostly fast-paced meta, and can turn the battles into Palkia's favor quickly. Pressure helps PP stall while also being optimal if your Pokemon doesn't have a spread move and Telepathy can be used over pressure if you have spread moves that would hit Palkia on your team. allows you to freely use Spread moves without hitting Palkia.

Palkia appreciates the likes of Fake Out Fake Out support from the likes of Incineroar and Rillaboom to help it set-up Trick room. Incineroar and Entei check Zacian-C (Read what I said at the start of the check)and Rillaboom while Rillaboom can check Tapu Fini and act as a second Kyogre check.(Drop mention of Rillaboom being a second Kyogre check and don't write it like a notepad.) Amoonguss helps redirect(It doesn't help redirect, it provides redirection and What does Amoonguss's redirection help Palkia setup? You can keep the Pollen Puff mention and further explain what Pollen Puff provides palkia, remove clear smog though.)attacks while also providing Clear smog and Pollen Puff. Stakataka helps against the fairy types such as Tapu lele that Palkia is weak against.(The fact that Palkia is weak to Fairy-types is obvious and does not need to be mentioned you could instead say that it checks the Fairy-types... for Palkia. Add mention of Xerneas as something that Stakataka checks.) Landorus-T and Zapdos get rid of Rillaboom, Regieleki and Zacian-C which threaten Palkia.(You generally should not say "get rid of" this is a doubles format its not so one dimensional and people can just switch check is a far more appropriate term. and phrase it as helping or assisting Palkia by dealing with those Pokemon don't phrase it as those Pokemon threaten Palkia yes they obviously do. Last check you were supposed to remove mention of Regieleki as Palkia isn't particularly weak to it.)

(This entire section is pretty barren of content)



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This is actually looking not too far off. There are grammar issues here, some that I did not bother to try and fix as Im not GP please proofread this. I removed spaces in some areas where you had 2 which is where you may see (RS)
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[SET]
name: Offensive Trick Room
move 1: Hydro Pump
move 2: Spacial Rend
move 3: Trick Room
move 4: Protect
item: Lustrous Orb
ability: Pressure
nature: Modest / Quiet
evs: 252 HP/ 252 SpA / 4 SpD

[SET COMMENTS]

Palkia has made a name for itself thanks to its good bulk allowing to reliably set Trick Room, while also being a fierce offensive threat with its near unresisted offensive typing. Hydro Pump is Palkia's strongest Water-Type STAB move that OHKOs the likes of Incineroar, Stakataka, and Entei. Spacial Rend does decent damage into Grass-types like Rillaboom and Tsareena (RS)and OHKOs offensive (RS)Eternatus. Lustrous Orb gives Palkia a crucial much appreciated(The word crucial could imply that the power boost is specifically crucial versus the listed Pokemon when its far more then that.) power boost to which allows Hydro Pump to 2HKOs Calyrex-I while Spacial Rend 2HKOes Amoonguss and Kyogre. Trick Room helps against the mostly fast-paced meta, and can turn the battle into Palkia's favor quickly. Telepathy can be used over pressure if you have spread moves that would hit Palkia on your team.

Palkia appreciates (RS)Fake Out support from the likes of Incineroar and Rillaboom to help it set-up Trick room. Incineroar and Entei are good partners for Palkia as they can check Zacian-C and Rillaboom.(AP) while Rillaboom can check Tapu Fini for Palkia(add on that in return Palkia destroys Fire-types.) and Kyogre. Amoonguss and Indeedee-F can provides redirection via Rage Powder to help Palkia set up Trick Room.(AP) while Pollen Puff from the latter acts as passive provides healing.(RP) (Add on that the former's Psychic terrain lets Palkia use its strong attacks unimpeded by Fake Out) Stakataka is a great teammate for Palkia as it helps against the check fFairy (AH) types such as Tapu lLele and Xerneas.(Just want to sell Stakataka better as almost every Palkia team has it, if not every good Palkia team.) Landorus-T and Zapdos can assist Palkia by dealing with (RS)checking Rillaboom and Zacian-C. (Zapdos isn't really good into Zacian-C on its own many have started to run Play Rough if not SD Play Rough and that is not good for Zapdos. You can make a separate point about how Zapdos is able to threaten Tapu Fini and Rillaboom for Palkia though I honestly don't see it as necessary to mention Zapdos at all.)



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Content wise this looks generally fine. QC 1/1
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[SET]
name: Offensive Trick Room
move 1: Hydro Pump
move 2: Spacial Rend
move 3: Trick Room
move 4: Protect
item: Lustrous Orb
ability: Pressure
nature: Modest / Quiet
evs: 252 HP/ 252 SpA / 4 SpD

[SET COMMENTS]

Palkia has made a name for itself thanks to its good bulk allowing to reliably set Trick Room, while also being a fierce offensive threat with its near unresisted offensive typing. Hydro Pump is Palkia's strongest Water-Type STAB move that OHKOs the likes of Incineroar, Stakataka, and Entei. Spacial Rend does decent damage into Grass-types like Rillaboom and Tsareena and OHKOs offensive Eternatus. Lustrous Orb gives Palkia a much appreciated power boost which allows Hydro Pump to 2HKO Calyrex-I while Spacial Rend 2HKOes Amoonguss and Kyogre. Trick Room helps against the mostly fast-paced meta, and can turn the battle into Palkia's favor quickly. Telepathy can be used over pressure if you have spread moves that would hit Palkia on your team.

Palkia appreciates Fake Out support from the likes of Incineroar and Rillaboom to help it set-up Trick room. Incineroar and Entei are good partners for Palkia as they can check Zacian-C and Rillaboom. Rillaboom can check Tapu Fini for Palkia while in return Palkia can takes (Again dealing with something isn't guaranteed, just something to note for future analyses if you do more.)care of the Fire-types such as Entei and Incineroar. Amoonguss and Indeedee-F can provide redirection to help Palkia set up Trick Room. Pollen Puff from the latter provides healing.(RP) and Psychic terrain from Indeedee-F the former lets Palkia use its strong attacks unimpeded by Fake Out. Stakataka is a great teammate for Palkia as it helps check Fairy-types such as Tapu Lele and Xerneas. Landorus-T can assist Palkia by checking Rillaboom and Zacian-C.



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remove add / fix (comments); (AC=add comma; RC=remove comma; SC=semicolon)
GP 1/1
[SET]
name: Offensive Trick Room
move 1: Hydro Pump
move 2: Spacial Rend
move 3: Trick Room
move 4: Protect
item: Lustrous Orb
ability: Pressure
nature: Modest / Quiet
evs: 252 HP/ 252 SpA / 4 SpD

[SET COMMENTS]

Palkia has made a name for itself thanks to its good bulk allowing ability to reliably set Trick Room (RC) with its good bulk while also being and provide a fierce offensive threat with its near-unresisted (AH) offensive typing. Hydro Pump is Palkia's strongest Water-type STAB move, (AC) that OHKOs OHKOing the likes of Incineroar, Stakataka, and Entei. Spacial Rend does decent damage into against Grass-types like Rillaboom and Tsareena and OHKOs OHKOes offensive Eternatus. Lustrous Orb gives Palkia a much-appreciated (AH) power boost which that allows Hydro Pump to 2HKO Calyrex-I while and enables Spacial Rend 2HKOes to 2HKO Amoonguss and Kyogre. Trick Room helps against the mostly fast-paced meta (RC) and can turn the battle into Palkia's favor quickly. Telepathy can be used over Pressure if you have spread moves that would hit Palkia on your team.

Palkia appreciates Fake Out support from the likes of Incineroar and Rillaboom to help it set up (RH) Trick Room. Incineroar and Entei are good partners for Palkia as they can also check Zacian-C and Rillaboom, as can Entei, while Rillaboom can check Tapu Fini for Palkia; (SC) in return, (AC) Palkia can take care of Fire-types such as Entei and Incineroar. Amoonguss and Indeedee-F can provide redirection to help Palkia set up Trick Room. Pollen Puff from the latter also provides healing, (comma) and while Psychic Terrain from the former lets Palkia use its strong attacks unimpeded by Fake Out. Stakataka is a great teammate for Palkia, (AC) as it helps check Fairy-types such as Tapu Lele and Xerneas. Landorus-T can assist Palkia by checking Rillaboom and Zacian-C.

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- Grammar checked by: [[username1, userid1]]
 
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