Shieldon (LC Analysis)

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[OVERVIEW]

<p>When one first takes a glance at the Pokemon we know as Shieldon, it seems to be great factoring in its enormous base defense stats When we first take a glance at the Pokemon known as Shieldon, we will find those enormous defenses hard to ignore; but often, its mediocre Speed and offensive stats offenses prevent it from taking an offensive role taking on a truly threatening role in a team. But whoever said this was an entirely bad thing? Shieldon’s defensive stats prowess and access to supporting moves such as Stealth Rock and Rain Dance make the little Shield Pokemon an excellent supporting player on most Little Cup teams.</p>

[SET]
name: Utility
move 1: Stealth Rock/ Stone Edge
move 2: Earthquake
move 3: Ice Beam
move 4: Thunderbolt/ Magnet Rise
item: Oran Berry/ Shed Shell
ability: Sturdy
nature: Sassy
evs: 196 HP / 20 Atk / 52 Def / 20 SpA / 212 SpD

[SET COMMENTS]

<p>Shieldon’s sturdy defenses base defensive stats and access to a great supporting move, Stealth Rock, allow it to effectively play the role of a supporter on most Little Cup teams. Being able to check strong and common threats such as Dragon Dance Dratini can also be a plus if deciding whether to choose Shieldon or not as threats such as the aforementioned DD Dratini have essentially revolutionized the entire LC metagame around them. Shieldon can also check many strong and common threats of the Little Cup metagame, such as Dragon Dance Dratini, and this should definitely be taken into account when deciding whether or not to reserve a spot for Shieldon on your team.</p>

[ADDITIONAL COMMENTS]

<p>Although Stealth Rock is usually found as a staple on supporting variants of Shieldon as the move centralizes Shieldon’s effectiveness, it should be noted that Stone Edge can be used over Stealth Rock if one wishes to be able to do decent damage to Snover who would otherwise wall the entire set; Flamethrower can be used for the same reason, and possesses better accuracy, but isn't boosted by STAB. as it resists all of Shieldon’s mentioned moves. Likewise, if you want, flamethrower can be used to combat Snover as it hits it for 4X damage and has better accuracy but isn’t boosted by STAB. Earthquake is used to easily KO even the bulkiest of Houndour, as and the EVs guarantee that Shieldon will survive a combination of Crunch and Fire Blast from the standard MixDour set. while also being able to take down Magnemite Earthquake also takes down Magnemite, who will often switch into Shieldon expecting an easy kill. Ice Beam allows Shieldon to take down variants of Dratini and Thunderbolt is used to super effectively hit Water-types while also as well as forming the deadly BoltBeam combination with Ice Beam. It should ne be noted though that Magnet Rise can be used over is a viable option over Thunderbolt as it will make dealing with Diglett much easier. An Oran Berry is the recommended item as it will keep Shieldon in decent health help extend Shieldon's longevity, but a Shed Shell can be used if you fear being trapped by Diglett and Wynaut; likewise, a Shed Shell it can also help you evade Magnemite although the Magnet Pokemon is easy to deal with easily dealt with even without the use of a Shed Shell. </p>

[TEAM OPTIONS]

<p>If you are using a Shieldon variant, it is almost necessary that you include Hippopotas as a teammate to the Shield Pokemon as the Special Defense boost gained through Sandstorm greatly increases Shieldon’s durability in a battle. Also, any Pokemon who benefits from Stealth Rock support and the possible removal or weakening of Dragon Dance Dratini, Diglett and Magnemite are generally good Pokemon to use alongside Shieldon. Mantyke would be a great example as it has decent synergy with Shieldon, resisting all of its weaknesses while greatly befitting benefitting from Stealth Rock support as it breaks Focus Sashes which Mantyke hates when it’s attempting to pull of a sweep. </p>

[OTHER OPTIONS]

<p>Due to Shieldon’s mediocre offenses and Speed offensive and base speed stats, it doesn’t have many options when it comes to its offensive capabilities in the tier, although it does have access to a couple of decent offensive stat-up moves. One of these aforementioned moves would be Rock Polish as it would cure Shieldon of its mediocre speed but this set is not recommended due to the Shield Pokemon’s lacking base offensive stats staying the exact same. Rock Polish can help cure Shieldon of its mediocre speed, but this is not recommended for use as Shieldon would still possess lacking offenses. Similarly, a Metal Sound or Metal Burst set can be utilized, but again, after factoring in Shieldon’s effectiveness in the offensive side of the competitive spectrum, these sets are not recommended. when you factor in Shieldon's ineffectual offenses, these options are just not that helpful. If one wishes to include other forms of STAB in Shieldon’s moveset, moves such as Iron Head and Flash Cannon can be used as reliable forms of STAB. Other than providing Stealth Rock support, Shieldon can also provide Rain Dance support which can be a valuable asset to teams revolving around sweepers including such as Horsea, Mantyke and Omanyte. </p>

[COUNTERS]

<p>Diglett, Magnemite and even Wynaut are all effective counters to Shieldon as they can easily KO or 2HKO Shieldon with their STAB or super effective attacks, provided that they don’t switch into a super effective attack themselves; in the case of Wynaut, prediction is especially necessary to win. Chinchou also boasts being a great counter as not only is it immune to Thunderbolt, it is also resistant to Ice Beam and Flamethrower so it can annihilate any Shieldon set foolish enough not to carry Earthquake. Similarly to Chinchou, Munchlax is also a great Shieldon counter as it can easily wall the little Shield Pokemon courtesy of its gargantuan base HP stat and over-average base defensive stats above-average defenses.</p>
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Unfortunately I had to rewrite a lot of awkwardly phrased sections and trim a lot of repetitive and unnecessary information. Gimme a PM or VM after you've made the changes and I'll be happy to stamp this.

EDIT: stamped

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[Overview]

(i lowercased specific titles to stay similar to the other analyses. plus, if these specific ones are capitalized, they will be seen as capitalized in the analyses, which is like the analysis are screaming at you. we don't want that. =( )

<p>(backspaced)When we first take a glance at the Pokemon known as Shieldon, we will find those enormous defenses hard to ignore; but often, its mediocre Speed and offenses prevent it from taking on a truly threatening role on a team. But whoever said this was an entirely bad thing? Shieldon’s defensive prowess and access to supporting moves such as Stealth Rock and Rain Dance make it an excellent supporting player on most Little Cup teams.</p>

(i think i would rather be reading "it" when knowing that it's referring to shieldon then reading "the little shield pokemon".)

[SET]
name: Utility
move 1: Stealth Rock(space this)/ Stone Edge
move 2: Earthquake
move 3: Ice Beam
move 4: Thunderbolt(space this)/ Magnet Rise
item: Oran Berry(space this)/ Shed Shell
ability: Sturdy (if one ability, don't list)
nature: Sassy
evs: 196 HP / 20 Atk / 52 Def / 20 SpA / 212 SpD

[SET COMMENTS]

<p>Shieldon’s sturdy defenses and access to a great supporting move, Stealth Rock, allow it to effectively play the role of a supporter on most Little Cup teams. It can also check many strong and common threats of the Little Cup metagame, such as Dragon Dance Dratini, and this should definitely be taken into account when deciding whether or not to reserve a spot for Shieldon on your team.</p>

(avoiding repetition)

[ADDITIONAL COMMENTS]

<p>Although Stealth Rock is usually found as a staple on supporting variants of Shieldon(backspaced), it should be noted that Stone Edge can be used over Stealth Rock if you want Shieldon to be able to do decent damage to Snover who would otherwise wall the entire set; Flamethrower can be used for the same reason (removed comma) and possesses better accuracy, but it isn't boosted by STAB. Earthquake can easily KO even the bulkiest of Houndour, and the EVs guarantee that Shieldon will survive a combination of Crunch and Fire Blast from the standard MixDour set. Earthquake also takes down Magnemite (removed comma) who will often switch into Shieldon, (comma) expecting an easy kill. Ice Beam allows Shieldon to take down offensive variants (trying to get more specific here) of Dratini and Thunderbolt is used to super effectively hit Water-types as well as forming the deadly BoltBeam combination with Ice Beam. It should be noted though that Magnet Rise is a viable option over Thunderbolt as it will allow dealing with Diglett much easier. An Oran Berry is the recommended item as it will help extend Shieldon's longevity, but a Shed Shell can be used if Shieldon fears being trapped by Diglett and Wynaut; Shed Shell can also help Shieldon evade Magnemite although it is easily dealt with even without the use of Shed Shell.(backspaced)</p>

(you > one. this is mostly because "you" is more specific than "one". we don't know who "one" is, but we know who "you" is, the reader. this is an exception for "hook" sentences aka starting sentences.)

and in other cases, "you" are not being trapped or attacking/whatever, shieldon is so i fixed those.)

[Team Options]

<p>If you are using Shieldon, it is almost necessary to include Hippopotas as a teammate as the Special Defense boost gained through sandstorm greatly increases Shieldon’s durability in a battle. Also, any Pokemon who benefits from Stealth Rock support and the possible removal or weakening of Dragon Dance Dratini, Diglett, (comma) and Magnemite are generally good Pokemon to use alongside Shieldon. Mantyke is a great example as it has decent synergy with Shieldon, resisting all of its weaknesses while greatly benefiting from Stealth Rock support as it breaks Focus Sashes which Mantyke hates when it’s attempting to pull off a sweep.(backspaced)</p>

(not sure why "benefiting" wasn't changed from the last GP check. it was obviously wrong before, and Fate even checked it. do double check next time.)

[Optional Changes]

<p>Due to Shieldon’s mediocre offenses and Speed(backspaced), it doesn’t have many options when it comes to its offensive capabilities in the tier, although it does have access to a couple of decent offensive stat-up moves.(space this)Rock Polish can help cure Shieldon of its mediocre Speed, but this is not recommended for use as Shieldon would still possess lacking offenses. Similarly, a Metal Sound or Metal Burst set can be utilized, but again, when you factor in Shieldon's ineffectual poor offenses, these options are lackluster. If you wish to include other forms of STAB in Shieldon’s moveset, moves such as Iron Head and Flash Cannon can be used but they offer redundant coverage. (period) Other than providing Stealth Rock support, Shieldon can also provide Rain Dance support which can be a valuable asset to teams revolving around sweepers(space this)such as Horsea, Mantyke, (comma) and Omanyte.(backspaced)</p>

[Counters]

<p>Diglett, Magnemite, (comma) and even Wynaut are all effective counters to Shieldon as they can easily KO or 2HKO it with their STAB or super effective attacks, provided that they don’t switch into a super effective attack themselves; in Wynaut's case of Wynaut, prediction is especially necessary to win. Chinchou is also boasts being a great counter as not only is it immune to Thunderbolt, but it is also resistant to Ice Beam and Flamethrower so it can annihilate any Shieldon set foolish enough to not carry Earthquake. Similar to Chinchou, Munchlax can also wall Shieldon courtesy of its gargantuan HP and above-average defenses.</p>

(overall, there were some sentences that i removed words from but failed to indicate the red. if the words are gone from the OP to my proofread, that means i think they shouldn't exist in the line they're in.)

If you copy paste peer edits over to your OP, don't do it. Spacing problems may occur. It's better to look over the proofread and take what you think you need from it.

In advanced...
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Implemented all but your change involving changing "the Little Shield Pokemon" to "it" in the first paragraph as I felt the former way of phrasing sounded better. Anyways, I guess this is ready for upload!
 
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