Monotype Shiftry (Grass) [QC: 2/2] {GP: 1/1}

[roxie]

[SET]
name: Swords Dance (Grass)
move 1: Swords Dance
move 2: Substitute
move 3: Knock Off
move 4: Sucker Punch
item: Black Glasses
ability: Chlorophyll
nature: Adamant
evs: 252 Atk / 4 Def / 252 Spe


[SET COMMENTS]
Shiftry has decent Attack and fairly decent Speed with incredible wallbreaking potential thanks to Swords Dance, Black Glasses, and Dark-type STAB moves and is strictly seen on Sunny Day variant Grass teams. Shiftry is great for Psychic- and Ghost-type matchups and beats common threats such as Dragapult and Indeedee. Substitute is useful for avoiding moves like Will-O-Wisp, Toxic, and Strength Sap from Pokemon such as Galarian Corsola, Mew, and Toxapex; with Substitute up, Shiftry can get a free Swords Dance and wall break. The combination of Sucker Punch and Substitute makes it difficult for revenge kills from Pokemon like Trace Gardevoir or Gengar to happen. Chlorophyll doubles its Speed, making Shiftry a fiercer wallbreaker to eliminate. Knock Off is useful for inflicting massive damage and removing the item of anything that tries to switch in against it, while Sucker Punch is useful for KOing faster sweepers such as Dragapult and Gengar. Maximum Speed investment allows Shiftry to outspeed Choice Scarf Charizard and Salazzle in sun, and maximum Attack investment with an Adamant nature permits Shiftry to reach its full wallbreaking potential.

Whimsicott and Virizion are viable options to set up Sunny Day, allowing Shiftry to outspeed Pokemon such as Mew and Jirachi because of Chlorophyll. Whimsicott is a better Sunny Day setter that helps with Dragon-, Dark-, and Fighting-types thanks to Moonblast; Choice Scarf Virizion is useful for outspeeding threats like Alolan Ninetales, Choice Scarf Galarian Darmanitan, and Choice Scarf Charizard and has access to Smart Strike, Stone Edge, and Close Combat, which is useful for the Ice-type matchup. Appletun is one of the only Grass-types that can properly tank Fire-type attacks from Pokemon such as Hydreigon and Dragapult. Venusaur is another Pokemon that takes advantage of sun and can use Life Orb and Growth or Choice Specs and helps in the Fairy- and Steel-type matchup because of Weather Ball and Sludge Bomb. Ferrothorn is one of the best defensive utilities that has access to entry hazards such as Stealth Rock and Spikes; it is useful for tanking attacks from offensive Pokemon like Weavile and Cloyster and is very crucial for the Ice-type matchup. Rotom-C cripples Pokemon with Choice Scarf and Trick, which is incredibly useful for against Pokemon such as Corviknight, Mew, and Toxapex. Finally, Celebi gets Stealth Rock, which allows Ferrothorn to run Spikes, and has a number of coverage moves such as Psychic and Earth Power which helps fend off Poison- and Fighting-type Pokemon better.


[CREDITS]
- Written by: [[roxiee, 481576]]
- Grass analysis by: [[roxiee, 481576]]
- Quality checked by: [[Havens, 391540] , [Harpp, 320110]]
- Grammar checked by: [[<deetah>, <297659>]]

 

[roxie]

ready for qc, I tried my absolute best to make better results based off my last analysis

 

[Havens]

- In the first sentence, say "its Dark-type STAB moves" instead of "STAB attacks"
- "Swords Dance", not "Sword Dance"
- Strength Sap isn't a status move in the natural sense; it doesn't induce a status condition such as Burn/Poison/Paralysis.
- Let's fix the last sentence of the first paragraph; I understand what you mean but it's a little cluttered. Say "Maximum Attack and Speed investment when coupled with an Adamant nature permits Shiftry to reach its full, wall-breaking potential.
- Specify Choice Scarf Virizion; Alolan Ninetales outspeeds Virizion naturally.
- Let's also put the part about it having Smart Strike and "Fighting-stab" (rephrase to Close Combat) before the Appletun line; you'd be keeping Pokemon specific information together.

QC 1/2; sorry for the long wait, Grass is just really obscure

 

[roxie]

done

 

[Harpp]

[Set Comments]
* 'Shiftry has decent Attack and fairly decent Speed with incredible wall-breaking capability because of Black Glasses and STAB attacks.' Shiftry is strictly seen on sun grass teams and I want you to mention that in the first line, I also want you to add the fact that swords dance is what makes shiftry a wallbreaker and a sweeper in conjunction with its ability so reword your first line.

* After the first line, mention Shiftry being great vs Psychic and Ghost type teams, beating common annoying Pokemon for grass like Indeedee and Dragapult.

* 'Substitute is useful for avoiding-damaging moves like Will-O-Wisp, Toxic, or Strength Sap from Pokemon such as ? [Give examples here of common walls against which shiftry can set up sub like Gcorsola and toxapex. allowing Shiftry to get a free Swords Dance and wallbreak. to set up and do massive damage to walls like Galarian Corsola and Ferrothorn. ' Also talk about how Substitute makes it hard for opposing team to revenge KO shiftry.

* 'Knock Off is useful for inflicting massive damage as a STAB attack, while Sucker Punch is useful for KOing faster sweepers such as Dragapult or Gengar. ' Elaborate more about Knock Off having the added utility of removing items of anything that tries to switch in against it.

* 'Maximum Attack and Speed investment when coupled with an Adamant nature permits Shiftry to reach its full, wall-breaking potential.' Mention max speed allowing it to outspeed Pokemon like Choice Scarf Charizard and Salazzle in sun.

* 'Whimsicott is a better Sunny Day setter that helps with Dragon-, Dark-, and Fighting-types with Moonblast; while Choice Scarf Virizion is useful for out-speeding threats like Alolan Ninetales, Choice Scarf Galarian Darmanitan, and Kyurem-Black at +1 Speed. Virizion has access to Smart Strike and Fighting-stab and out-speeds Choice Scarf Darmanitan and Kyurem-Black at +1 Speed. ' You have mentioned Virizion twice for its ability to beat ice-type Pokemon for the team, reword it properly, please.

* 'Appletun is the only Pokemon that can properly tank Fire-type attacks from Pokemon such as Hydreigon or Dragapult. Venusaur is another sun-abuser that is effectively useful with Growth. ' Elaborate more on Venusaur and how they compliment each other as Shiftry beats Psychic and Ghost types while Venusaur beats Fairy and Steel-type Pokemon with Sludge Bomb and Weather ball respectively. When you talk about ferrothorn also add that it can threaten fairy type pokemon for shiftry.

* Add Rotom-Mow then mention it beating flying type pokes like Togekiss and Corviknight for the team.

I think you missed to implement some of the qc check by havens as your current analysis doesnt include the following points which he suggested:

* - In the first sentence, say "its Dark-type STAB moves" instead of "STAB attacks"

*- Let's also put the part about it having Smart Strike and "Fighting-stab" (rephrase to Close Combat) before the Appletun line; you'd be keeping Pokemon specific information together.

Implement all this and then it is QC 2/2

 

[ForgottenOnes]

amcheck! Implement what you think is correct.
Add; (AH) = Add Hyphen; (AC) = Add Comma Remove; (RH) = Remove Hyphen (Comments)
Make sure to read over your analysis before sending it to GP! There were a lot of simple mistakes that could've been caught beforehand. Otherwise good job!

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[SET]
name: Offensive Shiftry (Grass)
move 1: Substitute
move 2: Knock Off
move 3: Swords Dance
move 4: Sucker Punch
item: Black Glasses
ability: Chlorophyll
nature: Adamant
EVs: 252 Atk / 4 Def / 252 Spe

[SET COMMENTS]
Shiftry has decent Attack and fairly decent Speed and with incredible wallbreaking wall-breaking skills because of Swords Dance, Black Glasses,(AC) and Dark-type STAB moves which is strictly only seen on Sunny Day variant Grass teams (this sentence is a bit confusing. Are you saying this set is only seen on Sunny Day teams? If so, I would recommend making a new sentence explaining that). Shiftry is great for the Psychic Psychic- and Ghost-type Ghost matchups and beatsing common threats such as Dragapult or Indeedee. Substitute is useful for avoiding-(RH)damaging status moves like Will-O-Wisp, Toxic, or Strength Sap from Pokemon such as Galarian Corsola, Mew, and Toxapex; this free turn which allows Shiftry to get a free Swords Dance and wall break. Sucker Punch and Substitute makes it difficult for revenge kills to happen from Pokemon like Trace Gardevoir or Gengar. Chlorophyll doubles its Speed, making it an even more fierce fiercer wall-(RH)breaker to kill. Knock Off is useful for inflicting massive damage as a STAB attack and having the utility of removing items of anything that tries to switch in against it, while Sucker Punch is useful for KOing faster sweepers such as Dragapult or Gengar. Maximum Speed investment allows Shiftry to outspeed Choice Scarf Charizard and Salazzle in sun and maximum Maximum Attack with an Adamant nature permits Shiftry to reach its full, wall-(RH)breaking potential.

Whimsicott and Virizion are viable options to set up Sunny Day, allowing Shiftry to outspeed Pokemon such as Mew and Jirachi because of Chlorophyll. Whimsicott is a better Sunny Day setter that helps with Dragon-, Dark-, and Fighting-types with Moonblast; while Choice Scarf Virizion is useful for out-(RH)speeding threats like Alolan Ninetales, Choice Scarf Galarian Darmanitan, and Kyurem-Black at +1 Speed and has access along with the accessibility to Smart Strike and Close Combat which is useful for the Ice-type matchup. Appletun is the only Pokemon that can properly tank Fire-type attacks from Pokemon such as Hydreigon or Dragapult. Venusaur is another sun-abuser that uses Life Orb and Growth or Choice Specs and that helps beat the Fairy-(AH) and Steel-(AH)type matchups because of Weather Ball and Sludge Bomb. Ferrothorn is one of the best defensive utilities that has access to entry hazards such as Stealth Rock and Spikes; it is useful for tanking attacks from offensive Pokemon like Weavile or Cloyster and is very crucial for the Ice-type matchup. Rotom-Mow cripples Pokemon with Choice Scarf and Trick, which is incrediblye useful against for tricking Corviknight, Mew, andor Toxapex. Finally, Celebi gets Stealth Rocks,(AC) which allows Ferrothorn to run Spikes,(AC) and has a number of coverage moves such as Psychic or Earth Power which helps fend off the Poison-(AH) and Fighting-(AH)type matchups better.

[CREDITS]
- Written by: [[roxiee, 481576]]
- Grass analysis by: [[roxiee, 481576]]
- Quality checked by: [[Havens, 391540] , [Harpp, 320110]]
- Grammar checked by: [[<username1>, <userid1>]]

 

[roxie]

amcheck! Implement what you think is correct.
Add; (AH) = Add Hyphen; (AC) = Add Comma Remove; (RH) = Remove Hyphen (Comments)
Make sure to read over your analysis before sending it to GP! There were a lot of simple mistakes that could've been caught beforehand. Otherwise good job!

Hide

[SET]
name: Offensive Shiftry (Grass)
move 1: Substitute
move 2: Knock Off
move 3: Swords Dance
move 4: Sucker Punch
item: Black Glasses
ability: Chlorophyll
nature: Adamant
EVs: 252 Atk / 4 Def / 252 Spe

[SET COMMENTS]
Shiftry has decent Attack and fairly decent Speed and with incredible wallbreaking wall-breaking skills because of Swords Dance, Black Glasses,(AC) and Dark-type STAB moves which is strictly only seen on Sunny Day variant Grass teams (this sentence is a bit confusing. Are you saying this set is only seen on Sunny Day teams? If so, I would recommend making a new sentence explaining that). Shiftry is great for the Psychic Psychic- and Ghost-type Ghost matchups and beatsing common threats such as Dragapult or Indeedee. Substitute is useful for avoiding-(RH)damaging status moves like Will-O-Wisp, Toxic, or Strength Sap from Pokemon such as Galarian Corsola, Mew, and Toxapex; this free turn which allows Shiftry to get a free Swords Dance and wall break. Sucker Punch and Substitute makes it difficult for revenge kills to happen from Pokemon like Trace Gardevoir or Gengar. Chlorophyll doubles its Speed, making it an even more fierce fiercer wall-(RH)breaker to kill. Knock Off is useful for inflicting massive damage as a STAB attack and having the utility of removing items of anything that tries to switch in against it, while Sucker Punch is useful for KOing faster sweepers such as Dragapult or Gengar. Maximum Speed investment allows Shiftry to outspeed Choice Scarf Charizard and Salazzle in sun and maximum Maximum Attack with an Adamant nature permits Shiftry to reach its full, wall-(RH)breaking potential.

Whimsicott and Virizion are viable options to set up Sunny Day, allowing Shiftry to outspeed Pokemon such as Mew and Jirachi because of Chlorophyll. Whimsicott is a better Sunny Day setter that helps with Dragon-, Dark-, and Fighting-types with Moonblast; while Choice Scarf Virizion is useful for out-(RH)speeding threats like Alolan Ninetales, Choice Scarf Galarian Darmanitan, and Kyurem-Black at +1 Speed and has access along with the accessibility to Smart Strike and Close Combat which is useful for the Ice-type matchup. Appletun is the only Pokemon that can properly tank Fire-type attacks from Pokemon such as Hydreigon or Dragapult. Venusaur is another sun-abuser that uses Life Orb and Growth or Choice Specs and that helps beat the Fairy-(AH) and Steel-(AH)type matchups because of Weather Ball and Sludge Bomb. Ferrothorn is one of the best defensive utilities that has access to entry hazards such as Stealth Rock and Spikes; it is useful for tanking attacks from offensive Pokemon like Weavile or Cloyster and is very crucial for the Ice-type matchup. Rotom-Mow cripples Pokemon with Choice Scarf and Trick, which is incrediblye useful against for tricking Corviknight, Mew, andor Toxapex. Finally, Celebi gets Stealth Rocks,(AC) which allows Ferrothorn to run Spikes,(AC) and has a number of coverage moves such as Psychic or Earth Power which helps fend off the Poison-(AH) and Fighting-(AH)type matchups better.

[CREDITS]
- Written by: [[roxiee, 481576]]
- Grass analysis by: [[roxiee, 481576]]
- Quality checked by: [[Havens, 391540] , [Harpp, 320110]]
- Grammar checked by: [[<username1>, <userid1>]]

I think Rotom-Mow is Rotom-C > Rotom-M so ill implement that, and other useful stuff you noticed..and are you apart of GP because I appreciate you checking over and noticing some stuff but its only one slot for the Grammar check and if its limited to one I would rather just have a GP check stuff >:(

 

[ForgottenOnes]

I think Rotom-Mow is Rotom-C > Rotom-M so ill implement that, and other useful stuff you noticed..and are you apart of GP because I appreciate you checking over and noticing some stuff but its only one slot for the Grammar check and if its limited to one I would rather just have a GP check stuff >:(

You're right it is Rotom-C > Rotom-M. I'm not apart of GP, but non-GPers can give our amchecks (amateur checks). Basically just another pair of eyes reading through it which is why I said to implement what you think is correct. When an official GPer comes, they'll say 1/1 and those changes are mandatory.

 

[roxie]

You're right it is Rotom-C > Rotom-M. I'm not apart of GP, but non-GPers can give our amchecks (amateur checks). Basically just another pair of eyes reading through it which is why I said to implement what you think is correct. When an official GPer comes, they'll say 1/1 and those changes are mandatory.

well thanks a lot :D, i hope you make it into gp in the near future

 

[deetah]

First GP in a heck of a while...
Add Remove Comments (AC) = Add Comma (RC) = Remove Comma (AH) = Add Hyphen

GP 1/1

Shiftry

[SET]
name: Offensive Shiftry (Grass)
move 1: Substitute
move 2: Knock Off
move 3: Swords Dance
move 4: Sucker Punch
item: Black Glasses
ability: Chlorophyll
nature: Adamant
EVs: evs: 252 Atk / 4 Def / 252 Spe


[SET COMMENTS]
Shiftry has decent Attack and fairly decent Speed with incredible wall-breaking skills because of wallbreaking potential thanks to Swords Dance, Black Glasses, (AC) and Dark-type STAB moves which and is strictly seen on Sunny Day variant Grass teams. Shiftry is great for Psychic- and Ghost-type matchups and beats common threats such as Dragapult or and Indeedee. Substitute is useful for avoiding moves like Will-O-Wisp, Toxic, or and Strength Sap from Pokemon such as Galarian Corsola, Mew, and Toxapex; with Substitute up, it allows Shiftry to can get a free Swords Dance and wall break. The combination of Sucker Punch and Substitute makes it difficult for revenge kills to happen from Pokemon like Trace Gardevoir or Gengar to happen. Chlorophyll doubles its Speed, making it Shiftry a fiercer wall-breaker wallbreaker to kill eliminate. Knock Off is useful for inflicting massive damage and removing items the item of anything that tries to switch in against it, while Sucker Punch is useful for KOing faster sweepers such as Dragapult or and Gengar. Maximum Speed investment allows Shiftry to outspeed Choice Scarf Charizard and Salazzle in sun, (AC) and while maximum Attack investment with an Adamant nature permits Shiftry to reach its full, (RC) wall breaking wallbreaking potential.

Whimsicott and Virizion are viable options to set up Sunny Day, allowing Shiftry to outspeed Pokemon such as Mew and Jirachi because of Chlorophyll. Whimsicott is a better Sunny Day setter that helps with Dragon-, Dark-, and Fighting-types with thanks to Moonblast; Choice Scarf Virizion is useful for out-speeding outspeeding threats like Alolan Ninetales, Choice Scarf Galarian Darmanitan, and Choice Scarf Charizard(Space)and has access to Smart Strike, (AC) Stone Edge, and Close Combat, (AC) which is useful for the Ice-type matchup. Appletun is the only Pokemon one of the only Grass-types that can properly tank Fire-type attacks from Pokemon such as Hydreigon or and Dragapult. Venusaur is another sun-abuser that uses Pokemon that takes advantage of sun and can use Life Orb and Growth or Choice Specs and helps beat in the Fairy-(AH) and Steel-type matchup because of Weather Ball and Sludge Bomb. Ferrothorn is one of the best defensive utilities that has access to entry hazards such as Stealth Rock and Spikes; it is useful for tanking attacks from offensive Pokemon like Weavile or and Cloyster and is very crucial for the Ice-type matchup. Rotom-C cripples Pokemon with Choice Scarf and Trick, which is incredible incredibly useful for against Pokemon such as Corviknight, Mew, or and Toxapex. Finally, Celebi gets Stealth Rock, which allows Ferrothorn to run Spikes, and has a number of coverage moves such as Psychic or and Earth Power, (AC) which helps fend off Poison- and Fighting-type matchups Pokemon better.


[CREDITS]
- Written by: [[roxiee, 481576]]
- Grass analysis by: [[roxiee, 481576]]
- Quality checked by: [[Havens, 391540] , [Harpp, 320110]]
- Grammar checked by: [[<username1>, <userid1>]]

 

[roxie]

done, bump

 

[mushamu]

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