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Swellow [GP 2/2]

Guts needs to be capitalized, Base Power needs to be capitalized, Attack (as well as Speed, Special Attack, Special Defense, and Defense) all need to be capitalized, early-game and late-game need hyphens, and your sentence structure has to be not so informal.

Idk, by the looks of things just from glancing at it I may have to reassign this to an experienced writer, but whoever GPs this will be the judge of that
 
Okay, I'm revamping this for MoltenKyurem. At the discretion of the Mods/GPs, this will also be an unofficial GP check, and hopefully stampworthy.

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[OVERVIEW]

<p>Swellow is a very an extremely underrated threat in the RU metagame. Clocking in at At a blazingly fast base 125 speed, it nearly outspeeds the entire tier. it is one of the fastest Pokemon in the tier. Despite a relatively low base 85 Attack, Swellow is no joke offensively, . (< Period) It has the Swellow's ability, (< Comma) Guts, which raises its damage output to incredible levels. (< Period) alongside Facade. Coupled with it's powerful STAB moves, Facade and Brave Bird, Swellow packs frightening power. Not all is good for Swellow, though,as it lacks attacks to hit Rock- and Steel-type Pokemon neutrally or super effectively, relying on its teammates to take these down. This speedy birdy does have one glaring weakness; it lacks a usable Ground or Fighting-type move, and is therefore walled by the many Steel-type Pokemon in the RU tier. Swellow is also incredibly frail and will die to nearly every attack after Stealth Rock damage. Swellow must also be mindful of residual damage; On top of it's weakness to Stealth Rock, the use of Brave Bird and a status orb can quickly drain its health. Do not let this fool you into thinking Swellow is useless though. It can be a great asset to several teams, just needing a little team support to work. your team if given proper support. this blazing fast swallow can still amaze you both early game and late game if you give it the chance.</p>

[SET]
name: Guts
move 1: Facade
move 2: Brave Bird
move 3: U-turn / Pursuit
move 4: Quick Attack / Protect
item: Toxic Orb / Flame Orb
ability: Guts
nature: Jolly
evs: 252 Atk / 4 Def / 252 Spe

[SET COMMENTS]

<p>This set is what makes Swellow viable, This set is Swellow's bread and butter. After a guts Guts boost it reaches the equivalent of a base 134 attack, it's Attack stat shoots up to a wing-breaking 403. Swellow's main attack, Facade also gets a boost Additionally, the base power of Swellow's main STAB move, Facade, is ruffled up to base 140 140 base power. Yeah, thats pretty scary coming off of the equivilant of base 134 attack. Brave Bird is Swellow's second best secondary STAB, and allows you to hit Sableye on the switch in. provides coverage against opponents who either resist, or are immune to Facade, such as Magneton and Sableye. Protect is a great move on Swellow, allowing for scouting and also allows you to get a free guts boost. as it ensures a free turn to activate the chosen status orb, and can scout for dangerous moves. U-turn is the second scouting move in Swellow's aresenal, when using Swellow early game, its best to start out with Protect, and if Swellow cannot KO the opposing pokemon, U-turn out to a counter. Quick Attack and Pursuit are more viable on a Swellow that is going to be used late game, By sending in Swellow against an opponent that has been considerably weakened, you can use Quick attack or Pursuit depending on if you think they will switch out or stay in, Quick Attack also allows Swellow to hit +1 Sharpedo and opposing priority users before being hit itself. The choice of the item depends on how you want to use Swellow, if you use Swellow as more of a hit and run pokemon, then Toxic Orb is the preferred item, otherwise use Flame Orb as it deals less damage over time.

Protect is often the best opening play for Swellow. The free turn allows you to scout your opponent's response, and act accordingly. U-turn provides further scouting, and can get Swellow out of unsafe matchups. Quick Attack is a fairly powerful STAB priority move, preying on weakened Choice Scarfers, priority users and notably, +1 Speed Sharpedo. Pursuit can rid your opponent of their Ghost or Psychic-type, and pairs fairly well with Swellow's Ghost immunity. Your choice of status orb should be based on how you intend to use Swellow; A Toxic Orb will deal less damage than a Flame orb over the first three turns, but any longer and the Flame Orb will be the less damaging choice. </p>


[ADDITIONAL COMMENTS]

<p> Swellow enjoys entry hazards on the opposing side support from Pokemon such as Ferroseed and Steelix, . (< Period) Swellow needs the extra breathing room when up against physically bulky Pokemon such as Tangrowth. Swellow also enjoys Pokemon such as Wynaut, Dugtrio, and Magneton as are all excellent teammates, as they can trap and KO the Rock and Steel-type Pokemon that plague Swellow. (< Period) hates and KO them so they no longer threaten Swellow. As a Flying type, Swellow is Stealth Rock weak, Swellow and needs Rapid Spin support to function at its best, . (< Period) this This can be provided by Pokemon such as Hitmonlee, Hitmonchan, Sandslash, and Claydol. These Pokemon also threaten Swellow's counters and can help keep your opponent on their toes when switching in a attempting to counter to Swellow. General Fighting-type pokemon such as Sawk, Primeape, and Hariyama are also good at threateningSwellow's counters and should also be considered for team support. provide decent offensive synergy for Swellow, and can score a super effective hit on the Rock and Steel-types that wall our blue bird. As you most likely wont be using the moves in the last slot as often, Work Up and Roost can be considered over Quick Attack and Pursuit. Work Up can be used when you think you can force a switch Swellow and can boost your attack further, Roost allows you heal off residual damage, but with Swellow's Fraility it may be hard to find a chance to use it. </p>


[OTHER OPTIONS]
<p>Swellow can run a Choice Band set to get some extra immediate power, but with Coverage issues Swellow already has, this is not the best idea, Swellow can also use Endeavor to get a last ditch hit in on the opposing pokemon, but with Swellow's fraility, it may not survive long enough to get to that crucial point, as mentioned before,

A Choice Band set can be used for immediate power, sacrificing the ability to switch moves for longevity. Rapid Spin support is required for this set, which will often be forced out due to Swellow's easily walled STABs. Endeavor can be used to get in a last-ditch hit when Swellow's health is low, but is unreliable, and usually inferior to it's other moves. Work Up and Roost can be used in the third and fourth slots if you feel one of the mentioned above moves is uneeded, but thanks to Swellows fraility, they have limited use.</p>

[CHECKS AND COUNTERS]

<p>Most Steel and Rock-Types Rock and Steel-types (Nyah) can easily counter Swellow, . (< Period) Aggron gets a special mention, (< Comma) as a counter as he 4x resists both of Swellow's main attacks STABs and can strike back with a powerful STAB, Recoiless Head Smash. Steelix and Ferroseed also give Swellow issues, ; (< Semicolon) Ferroseed may take neutral damage from Brave bird, but the residual damage will really rape Swellow while Ferroseed strikes back with a Gyro Ball, Steelix can set up all over Swellow, and can also strike back with a Gyro Ball. Regirock goes into a similar vein to Steelix, setting up on Swellow and striking back with a STAB Stone Edge, Although Ferroseed takes neutral damage from Swellow's Brave Bird, the painful recoil is worsened by Ferroseed's Iron Thorns. Steelix and Regirock are both excellent counters, as they take little damage from any of Swellow's attacks, and can strike back with Gyro Ball or Stone Edge, respectively. Scarfers Choice Scarf users and Sharpedo also have an easy time revenging Swellow, outspeeding and KOing it.</p>



[DREAM WORLD]

<p> Swellow's Dream World ability is Scrappy, . (< Period) despite Though normally being a great ability, it has little use on Swellow, . (< Period) it It can run a gimmicky, unblockable F.E.A.R set, But but aside from that, in most cases, you should stick to Guts.</p>
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I noticed that you use commas in place of periods quite frequently. The tone of the analysis was informal, and at times, conversational. Your sentences don't flow smoothly, but other than that, this was a good read! Well done.

Proofreading, stand by...

EDIT: Proofread and finalized. This is done!
 
i'll go ahead and stamp that check
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ill make changes when i have energy to do it, i just woke up and im tired right now.

edit, doing it now. man im a bad writer.

edit2: i am done with the first edits, if i missed anything mention it in the next gp check and ill fix it.
 
this was actually pretty good! keep working at it :D

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[OVERVIEW Overview]

<p>Swellow is an extremely underrated threat in the RU metagame. Clocking in at a blazingly fast base 125 Speed, it is one of the fastest Pokemon in the tier. Despite a relatively low base 85 Attack, Swellow is no joke I'd prefer "pushover" or something a little more formal, but this is definitely up to you offensively. Swellow's ability, Guts, is fantastic for a physical sweeper which as Guts raises its damage output to incredible levels when Swellow is afflicted with a status condition. Coupled with its powerful STAB moves, in Facade and Brave Bird, all the above characteristics enable Swellow to packs frightening power. This speedy birdy does have one glaring weakness, however; it lacks a usable Ground- or Fighting-type move and is therefore walled by the many Steel- and Rock-type Pokemon in the RU tier. Swellow must also be mindful of residual damage; on top of its weakness to Stealth Rock, the use of recoil from Brave Bird and a status orb status damage from a Flame or Toxic Orb can quickly drain its health. Do not let this fool you into thinking Swellow is useless though. If given proper support, it this majestic bird can be a great asset to your team if given proper support.</p>

[SET]
name: Guts
move 1: Facade
move 2: Brave Bird
move 3: U-turn / Pursuit
move 4: Quick Attack / Protect
item: Toxic Orb / Flame Orb
ability: Guts
nature: Jolly
evs: 252 Atk / 4 Def / 252 Spe

[SET COMMENTS]

<p>This set is Swellow's bread and butter. After a Guts boost, it's Attack stat shoots up skyrockets ;) to a wing breaking i like what you tried to do here, but that's unfortunately not a word and i personally can't think of any bird-related adjectives, so i'd replace it with impressive / spectacular or something along those lines 403. Additionally, the base power of Swellow's main STAB move, Facade, is ruffeld ramped up to a solid 140 Base Power. Brave Bird is Swellow's secondary STAB move, and provides coverage against Pokemon that either resist, or are immune to Facade, such as Sableye (Cofagrigus / Dusknoir). Protect is a great move on Swellow, As it ensures a free turn to activate the chosen status orb, and can scout for dangerous moves. Protect is often the best opening play for Swellow. The free turn allows you to scout your opponent's response, and act accordingly. U-turn provides further scouting allows you to scout for Swellow's counters, and can get Swellow out of unsafe matchups. Quick Attack is a fairly powerful STAB priority move, preying on weakened Choice Scarfers foes, priority users, and notably, +1 Speed Sharpedo. Pursuit can rid your opponent of their Ghost- or Psychic-type, and pairs fairly well with Swellow's Ghost immunity to Ghost-type moves. Lastly, Protect ensures a free turn to activate Swellow's status orb and allows Swellow to scout for dangerous moves; it is often the best opening play for Swellow. Your choice of status orb should be based on how you intend to use Swellow: a Toxic Orb will deal less damage than a Flame Orb over the first three turns (excluding / including? the initial activation turn), but any longer and the Flame Orb will be the less damaging choice. </p>

[ADDITIONAL COMMENTS]

<p><remove space>Swellow enjoys entry hazard support from Pokemon such as Ferroseed and Steelix. Wynaut, Dugtrio, and Magneton are all excellent teammates, as they can trap and KO the Rock- and Steel-type Pokemon that plague Swellow, such as..? . As a Flying-type, Swellow is weak to Stealth Rock weak, and needs Rapid Spin support to at function at its best consider "reach its full potential". This can be provided by Pokemon such as Hitmonlee, Hitmonchan, Sandslash, and Claydol. These Pokemon also threaten Swellow's counters and can help keep your opponent on their toes when attempting to counter Swellow. you need to be more specific here imo; this reads like filler. give some examples, maybe evaluate which of them provides the most offensive / defensive spin, any other type of support they can give etc In general, Fighting-type Pokemon such as Sawk, Primeape, and Hariyama provide have decent offensive synergy for with Swellow, and as their strong STABs can easily score a super effective hits on the Rock- and Steel-type Pokemon that wall your blue bird. </p>

[OTHER OPTIONS Other Options]
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<p><remove space>A Choice Band set can be used for immediate power, sacrificing the ability to switch moves for slightly increased longevity. Rapid Spin support is required for this set, which will often be forced out due to Swellow's easily walled STABs. Endeavor can be used to get in a last-ditch hit when Swellow's health is low, but is unreliable, and as such usually inferior to it's other moves. Work Up and Roost can be used if you feel one of the above moves is uneeded, but they have limited use due to Swellow's frailty.</p>

[CHECKS AND COUNTERS Checks and Counters]

<p>Most Rock- and Steel-types can easily counter Swellow. Aggron gets a special mention, as he it 4x resists both of Swellow's STABs and can strike back with a powerful STAB, Head Smash. Steelix and Ferroseed also give Swellow issues. Although Ferroseed takes neutral damage from Swellow's Brave Bird, the already painful recoil is worsened by Ferroseed's Iron Thorns Barbs. Steelix and Regirock are both excellent counters too, as they take little damage from any of Swellow's attacks, and can strike back with Gyro Ball or Stone Edge, respectively. Choice Scarf users and Sharpedo also have an easy time revenging Swellow, outspeeding and KOing it.</p>

[DREAM WORLD Dream World]

<p><remove space>Swellow's Dream World ability is Scrappy. Though normally a great ability, it has little use on Swellow. It can run a gimmicky, unblockable what's this mean? F.E.A.R pretty sure this isn't a coined term, so expand it set, but in most cases you should stick to stick to with Guts.</p>
 
in the fourth sentence of the overview, take out which. Also, in the set comments, there's an "As" with a capital a after a comma.

Nice analysis, we could try swellow in our team!
 
short enough for a quick check

[Overview]

<p>Swellow is an extremely underrated threat in the RU metagame. Clocking in at a blazingly blazing fast base 125 Speed, it is one of the fastest Pokemon in the tier. Despite a relatively low base 85 Attack, Swellow is no pushover offensively. Swellow's ability, Guts, is fantastic for a physical sweeper,[comma] as Guts raises its damage output to incredible levels when Swellow is afflicted with a status condition. Coupled with its powerful STAB moves in Facade and Brave Bird, all the above characteristics enable Swellow to pack frightening power. This speedy bird does have one glaring weakness, however; it lacks a usable Ground or Fighting-type move and is therefore walled by the many Steel and Rock-type Pokemon in the RU tier. Swellow must also be mindful of residual damage; on top of its weakness to Stealth Rock, recoil from Brave Bird and status damage from a Flame or Toxic orb Orb quickly drain its health. Do not let this fool you into thinking Swellow is useless though. If given proper support,[comma] this majestic bird can be a great asset to your team.</p>

[SET]
name: Guts
move 1: Facade
move 2: Brave Bird
move 3: U-turn / Pursuit
move 4: Quick Attack / Protect
item: Toxic Orb / Flame Orb
ability: Guts
nature: Jolly
evs: 252 Atk / 4 Def / 252 Spe

[SET COMMENTS]

<p>This set is Swellow's bread and butter. After a Guts boost,[comma] it's Attack stat shoots up to an impressive 403. Additionally, Swellow's main STAB move, Facade, is ramped up to reaches a solid 140 Base Power. Brave Bird is Swellow's secondary STAB move remove space , and provides coverage against Pokemon that resist, or are immune to Facade, remove commas such as Dusknoir. U-turn allows you to scout out for Swellow's counters, and can get Swellow out of unsafe matchups. Quick Attack is a fairly powerful STAB priority move, preying on weakened Choice Scarfed Choice Scarf foes, priority users, and,[comma] notably, +1 non-Aqua Jet Speed Sharpedo. not too sure about this anymore, Sharpedo runs Speed to outspeed Swellow Pursuit can rid your opponent of their Ghost-[add hyphen] or Psychic-type, and pairs well with Swellow's immunity to Ghost-type moves. Lastly, Protect ensures a free turn to activate Swellow's status orb and allows Swellow to scout for dangerous moves; it is often the best opening play for Swellow. Your choice of status orb should be based on how you intend to use Swellow: a Toxic Orb will deal less damage than a Flame Orb over the first three turns, but any longer and the Flame Orb will be the less damaging choice.</p>

[ADDITIONAL COMMENTS]

<p>Swellow enjoys entry hazard support from Pokemon such as Ferroseed and Steelix. Wynaut, Dugtrio, and Magneton are all excellent teammates, as they can trap and KO the Rock-[add hyphen] and Steel-type Pokemon that plague Swellow, such as Steelix and Aggron. As a Flying type, Swellow is weak to Stealth Rock, and needs Rapid Spin support to reach its full potential. This can be provided by Pokemon such as Hitmonlee, Hitmonchan, Sandslash, and Claydol. These Pokemon also threaten Swellow's counters and can help keep your opponent on their toes when attempting to counter Swellow,.[watch out for punctuation change here!!] Claydol has relatively good defensive synergy with Swellow and can take special hits well, Sandslash does the same and can take physical hits very well, while and both can threaten Swellow's counters with a STAB Ground-type move. Hitmonlee and Hitmonchan provide a more offensive spin in the rapid spinning department, being able to put offensive pressure on the opposing team, they also cannot be spinblocked due to access to Foresight. In general, Fighting-type Pokemon such as Sawk, Primeape, and Hariyama have decent offensive synergy with Swellow,[comma] as their strong STABS can easily score super effective hits on the Rock-[add hyphen] and Steel-type Pokemon that wall your blue bird. </p>

[Other Options]

<p>A Choice Band set can be used for immediate power, sacrificing the ability to switch moves for slightly increased longevity. Rapid Spin support is required for this such a set, which will often be forced out due to Swellow's easily walled STABs. Endeavor can be used to get in a last-ditch hit when Swellow's health is low, but is unreliable and as such usually inferior to it's other moves. Work Up and Roost can be used if you feel one of the above moves is unneeded uneeded, but they have limited use due to Swellow's fraility. </p>

[Checks and Counters]

<p>Most Rock-[add hyphen] and Steel-types can easily counter Swellow. Aggron gets a special mention, as it 4x resists both of Swellow's STABs and can strike back with a powerful STAB Head Smash. Steelix and Ferroseed also give Swellow issues, Although although Ferroseed takes neutral damage from Swellow's Brave Bird, the already painful recoil is worsened by Ferroseed's Iron Barbs. Steelix and Regirock are both excellent counters too, as they take little damage from any of Swellow's attacks and can strike back with Gyro Ball or Stone Edge, respectively. Choice Scarf users and Sharpedo also have an easy time revenging Swellow, outspeeding and KOing it.</p>

[DREAM WORLD]

<p>Swellow's Dream World ability is Scrappy. Though normally a great ability, it has little use on Swellow. It can run a gimmicky, unblockable F.E.A.R set, but, in most cases,[comma] you should stick with Guts.</p>

withholding my stamp because you didn't implement everything (mainly small punctuation stuff) from sirndpt. Also, I may not have substantial internet access until Monday, so anyone floating around can stamp this when the changes are made.
 
just pointing out a couple of things V0x missed that maybe weren't too obvious in my previous check

overview
it lacks a usable Ground<hyphen> or Fighting-type move and is therefore walled by the many Steel<hyphen> and Rock-type Pokemon in the RU tier

set comments
it's its Attack stat shoots up to an impressive 403

additional comments
Hitmonlee and Hitmonchan provide a more offensive spin in the rapid spinning department take on Rapid Spin, being able to put offensive as their good offenses put pressure on the opposing team; <punctuation change!> they also cannot be spinblocked due to access to Foresight.

other options
is unreliable and as such usually inferior to it's its other moves

checks and counters
Steelix and Ferroseed also give Swellow issues, Although although Ferroseed takes neutral damage from Swellow's Brave Bird, the already painful recoil is worsened by Ferroseed's Iron Barbs.
this should either be "and although" or a semicolon instead of a comma; personally I prefer the second.

and can strike back with Gyro Ball or Stone Edge, <remove comma> respectively

one last thing. not too sure if it affects anything, but js- [DREAM WORLD] is not in all caps.
 
After weezing is done, i will never write an analysis again. im just not good enough at this, not like im good at anything.

the small punctuation issues were accidental, with most of them i accidentally backspaced them while implementing another change, others i just plain forgot.
 
added a paragraph about Work Up and Roost in AC because it was not done so like I asked but it's ok

uploaded regardless
 
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