AAA whats a resist again? (MGLO Arcanine-H) [QC: 2/2] {GP: 1/1} (Done)

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[SET]
Magic Guard (Arcanine-Hisui) @ Life Orb
Ability: Magic Guard
EVs: 252 Atk / 4 SpD / 252 Spe
Jolly Nature
- Head Smash
- Flare Blitz
- Close Combat / Will-O-Wisp
- Extreme Speed / Stealth Rock / Flame Charge

[SET COMMENTS]
Hisuian Arcanine is a strong wallbreaker, capable of denting many physically defensive Pokemon such as Scream Tail while taking advantage of Magic Guard by using Head Smash and Flare Blitz in combination with Life Orb without any drawbacks. Close Combat allows Hisuian Arcanine to hit Ting-Lu and Well-Baked Body Iron Treads, while Will-O-Wisp threatens burns on checks like physically defensive Quaquaval and Garchomp. Extreme Speed is useful priority that picks off weakened targets, Stealth Rock allows Hisuian Arcanine to act as an offensive entry hazard setter that pressures Corviknight and Iron Treads, and Flame Charge boosts its Speed to thwart potential revenge killers. As Hisuian Arcanine places a lot of pressure on physical walls, other physical cleaners like Meowscarada and Chien-Pao can be partnered with Hisuian Arcanine to clean up after it has broken those walls while providing speed control. Since Hisuian Arcanine is checked by Garchomp and bulky Water-types like Quaquaval, Refrigerate Regieleki makes a good partner for it by forcing these Pokemon out, pivoting Hisuian Arcanine in, and helping to deal with faster threats through its raw Speed. Hisuian Arcanine's middling Speed makes slow pivots like Corviknight good partners due to their ability to bring it in safely; alternatively, Corviknight's dual screens set allows Arcanine to take a hit and strike back.

[SET CREDITS]
Written by:
https://www.smogon.com/forums/members/natcrozma.580765/
Quality checked by:
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[SET]
Magic Guard (Arcanine-Hisui) @ Life Orb
Ability: Magic Guard
EVs: 252 Atk / 4 SpD / 252 Spe
Jolly Nature
- Head Smash
- Flare Blitz
- Close Combat / Will-O-Wisp
- Extreme Speed / Stealth Rock / Flame Charge

[SET COMMENTS]
Hisuian Arcanine is a strong wallbreaker, capable of denting many Physically Defensive Pokemon such as Dondozo, all the while taking advantage of Magic Guard by allowing it to use Head Smash, Flare Blitz and Life Orb without any drawback. Close Combat allows it to hit Ting-Lu and Well-Baked Body Iron Treads while Will-O-Wisp threatens burns on checks like Physically Defensive Quaquaval and Garchomp, Extreme Speed allows it to revenge kill Non-STAB and with no SE coverage, Extreme Speed from H-Arc doesn't actually make it reliable at revenge killing, just can snipe faster stuff at low HP, so it might be worth rephrasing this, Stealth Rock allows it to act as an offensive Stealth Rock setter, and Flame Charge boosts its speed which allows a potential sweep and an Adamant nature. As Hisuian Arcanine places a lot of pressure on Physically Defensive Pokemon, other physical wallbreakers like Slither Wing can be partnered with Arcanine to overload those Physically Defensive Pokemon. Polteageist also benefits from the holes placed into opposing teams that gives it an easier time to clean up Polteageist is a weird partner to mention as Hisuian Arcanine doesn't actually remove any checks for Polteageist as none of its checks actually want to stay in on Polteageist. As Hisuian Arcanine is checked by Garchomp and bulky waters like Quaquaval, Refrigerate Regieleki makes a good partner for it by chasing those Pokemon out and being able to pivot out into Arcanine. Corviknight also works as another good partner, with its Intimidate Pivot sets allowing Hisuian Arcanine to come in safely, Might be worth mention Corv can help absorb revenge killing attempts (or similar partners like Meloetta could as well) or its Dual Screens set allowing Hisuian Arcanine to live a hit and Flame Charge to start a sweep. Might be worth mentioning in both Regieleki and Slither Wing mention that they can help against faster offensive pokemon Arc-H can struggle against with their speed and priority respectively.

[SET CREDITS]
Written by:
https://www.smogon.com/forums/members/natcrozma.580765/
Quality checked by:
https://www.smogon.com/forums/lordbox.611238/
https://www.smogon.com/forums/members/
Grammar checked by:
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LordBox said:
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[SET]
Magic Guard (Arcanine-Hisui) @ Life Orb
Ability: Magic Guard
EVs: 252 Atk / 4 SpD / 252 Spe
Jolly Nature
- Head Smash
- Flare Blitz
- Close Combat / Will-O-Wisp
- Extreme Speed / Stealth Rock / Flame Charge

[SET COMMENTS]
Hisuian Arcanine is a strong wallbreaker, capable of denting many Physically Defensive Pokemon such as Dondozo, all the while taking advantage of Magic Guard by allowing it to use Head Smash, Flare Blitz and Life Orb without any drawback. Close Combat allows it to hit Ting-Lu and Well-Baked Body Iron Treads while Will-O-Wisp threatens burns on checks like Physically Defensive Quaquaval and Garchomp, Extreme Speed allows it to revenge kill Non-STAB and with no SE coverage, Extreme Speed from H-Arc doesn't actually make it reliable at revenge killing, just can snipe faster stuff at low HP, so it might be worth rephrasing this, Stealth Rock allows it to act as an offensive Stealth Rock setter, and Flame Charge boosts its speed which allows a potential sweep and an Adamant nature. As Hisuian Arcanine places a lot of pressure on Physically Defensive Pokemon, other physical wallbreakers like Slither Wing can be partnered with Arcanine to overload those Physically Defensive Pokemon. Polteageist also benefits from the holes placed into opposing teams that gives it an easier time to clean up Polteageist is a weird partner to mention as Hisuian Arcanine doesn't actually remove any checks for Polteageist as none of its checks actually want to stay in on Polteageist. As Hisuian Arcanine is checked by Garchomp and bulky waters like Quaquaval, Refrigerate Regieleki makes a good partner for it by chasing those Pokemon out and being able to pivot out into Arcanine. Corviknight also works as another good partner, with its Intimidate Pivot sets allowing Hisuian Arcanine to come in safely, Might be worth mention Corv can help absorb revenge killing attempts (or similar partners like Meloetta could as well) or its Dual Screens set allowing Hisuian Arcanine to live a hit and Flame Charge to start a sweep. Might be worth mentioning in both Regieleki and Slither Wing mention that they can help against faster offensive pokemon Arc-H can struggle against with their speed and priority respectively.

[SET CREDITS]
Written by:
https://www.smogon.com/forums/members/natcrozma.580765/
Quality checked by:
https://www.smogon.com/forums/lordbox.611238/
https://www.smogon.com/forums/members/
Grammar checked by:
https://www.smogon.com/forums/members/
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also added a few minor stuff like "while" here and there
 
add remove conjecture
[SET]
Magic Guard (Arcanine-Hisui) @ Life Orb
Ability: Magic Guard
EVs: 252 Atk / 4 SpD / 252 Spe
Jolly Nature
- Head Smash
- Flare Blitz
- Close Combat / Will-O-Wisp
- Extreme Speed / Stealth Rock / Flame Charge

[SET COMMENTS]
Hisuian Arcanine is a strong wallbreaker, capable of denting many Physically Defensive physically defensive Pokemon such as Dondozo Scream Tail while taking advantage of Magic Guard by allowing it to use Head Smash, Flare Blitz and Life Orb without any drawback. Close Combat allows it to hit Ting-Lu and Well-Baked Body Iron Treads while Will-O-Wisp threatens burns on checks like Physically Defensive physically defensive Quaquaval and Garchomp,. Extreme Speed is useful priority that picks off weakened targets, Stealth Rock allows it to act as an offensive Stealth Rock setter that pressures Corviknight and Iron Treads, and Flame Charge boosts its Speed which allows a potential sweep and an Adamant nature to thwart potential revenge killers. As Hisuian Arcanine places a lot of pressure on Physically Defensive Pokemon physical walls, other physical wallbreakers like Slither Wing can be partnered with Arcanine to overload those Physically Defensive Pokemon, as well as providing strong priority in First Impression I would focus here on more fast physical cleaners like Meow and Pao, since H-Arc breaks the walls for them. They also cover for its low Speed. As Hisuian Arcanine is checked by Garchomp and bulky waters like Quaquaval, Refrigerate Regieleki makes a good partner for it by chasing those Pokemon out and being able to pivot out into Arcanine, while helping to deal with faster threats through its raw speed. Corviknight also works as another good partner, with its Intimidate Pivot sets absorbing revenge kill attempts while allowing Hisuian Arcanine to come in safely, or with its Dual Screens set allowing Hisuian Arcanine to live a hit and Flame Charge to start a sweep. make this sentence more general; since it is relatively slow, it appreciates slow pivots like Corviknight getting it in safely, while dual screens support can allow it to take a hit and hit back hard, or something to that effect

[SET CREDITS]
Written by:
https://www.smogon.com/forums/members/natcrozma.580765/
Quality checked by:
https://www.smogon.com/forums/members/lordbox.611238/
https://www.smogon.com/forums/members/ut.523866
Grammar checked by:
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QC 2/2!

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UT said:
add remove conjecture
[SET]
Magic Guard (Arcanine-Hisui) @ Life Orb
Ability: Magic Guard
EVs: 252 Atk / 4 SpD / 252 Spe
Jolly Nature
- Head Smash
- Flare Blitz
- Close Combat / Will-O-Wisp
- Extreme Speed / Stealth Rock / Flame Charge

[SET COMMENTS]
Hisuian Arcanine is a strong wallbreaker, capable of denting many Physically Defensive physically defensive Pokemon such as Dondozo Scream Tail while taking advantage of Magic Guard by allowing it to use Head Smash, Flare Blitz and Life Orb without any drawback. Close Combat allows it to hit Ting-Lu and Well-Baked Body Iron Treads while Will-O-Wisp threatens burns on checks like Physically Defensive physically defensive Quaquaval and Garchomp,. Extreme Speed is useful priority that picks off weakened targets, Stealth Rock allows it to act as an offensive Stealth Rock setter that pressures Corviknight and Iron Treads, and Flame Charge boosts its Speed which allows a potential sweep and an Adamant nature to thwart potential revenge killers. As Hisuian Arcanine places a lot of pressure on Physically Defensive Pokemon physical walls, other physical wallbreakers like Slither Wing can be partnered with Arcanine to overload those Physically Defensive Pokemon, as well as providing strong priority in First Impression I would focus here on more fast physical cleaners like Meow and Pao, since H-Arc breaks the walls for them. They also cover for its low Speed. As Hisuian Arcanine is checked by Garchomp and bulky waters like Quaquaval, Refrigerate Regieleki makes a good partner for it by chasing those Pokemon out and being able to pivot out into Arcanine, while helping to deal with faster threats through its raw speed. Corviknight also works as another good partner, with its Intimidate Pivot sets absorbing revenge kill attempts while allowing Hisuian Arcanine to come in safely, or with its Dual Screens set allowing Hisuian Arcanine to live a hit and Flame Charge to start a sweep. make this sentence more general; since it is relatively slow, it appreciates slow pivots like Corviknight getting it in safely, while dual screens support can allow it to take a hit and hit back hard, or something to that effect

[SET CREDITS]
Written by:
https://www.smogon.com/forums/members/natcrozma.580765/
Quality checked by:
https://www.smogon.com/forums/members/lordbox.611238/
https://www.smogon.com/forums/members/ut.523866
Grammar checked by:
https://www.smogon.com/forums/members/
QC 2/2!

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GP Team
 
Amateur gp (no bulli :Heart:) (Ac=add comma,Rc=remove comma, fs = fullstop)

Hisuian Arcanine is a strong wallbreaker, (Rc) capable of denting many physically defensive Pokemon (Ac) such as Scream Tail while taking advantage of Magic Guard (add fs) by allowing it to This ablilty allows it to use Head Smash, Flare Blitz and Life Orb without any drawback. Close Combat allows it to hit Ting-Lu and Well-Baked Body Iron Treads (Ac) while Will-O-Wisp threatens burns on checks like physically defensive Quaquaval and Garchomp. Extreme Speed is useful priority that picks off weakened targets, Stealth Rock allows it to act as an offensive Stealth Rock setter (Ac) that pressures pressuring Corviknight and Iron Treads, (Rfs) (Ac) and Additionally Flame Charge boosts its Speed to thwart potential revenge killers. As Since Hisuian Arcanine places a lot of pressure on physical walls, other physical cleaners like Meowscarada and Chien-Pao can be partnered with Arcanine to clean up after Arcanine it has broken those walls (Ac) while helping assisting Arcanine with its Speed issue. Since As Hisuian Arcanine is checked by Garchomp and bulky waters like Quaquaval, Refrigerate Regieleki makes a good partner for it by chasing those Pokemon out and being able to pivot out into Arcanine, while helping to deal with faster threats through its raw speed. Due to Hisuian Arcanine's middling speed makes (Ac) slow pivots like Corviknight make good partners due to their ability to bring Arcanine in safely (Ac) alternatively, (Rc) Corviknight's Dual Screens set allows Arcanine to live a hit and strike back.
 
1/1 GP Team done
[SET]
Magic Guard (Arcanine-Hisui) @ Life Orb
Ability: Magic Guard
EVs: 252 Atk / 4 SpD / 252 Spe
Jolly Nature
- Head Smash
- Flare Blitz
- Close Combat / Will-O-Wisp
- Extreme Speed / Stealth Rock / Flame Charge

[SET COMMENTS]
Hisuian Arcanine is a strong wallbreaker, capable of denting many physically defensive Pokemon such as Scream Tail while taking advantage of Magic Guard by allowing it to use using (it takes advantage of mg by using these moves directly not by being allowed to use them) Head Smash (RC) and Flare Blitz and in combination with Life Orb without any drawbacks. Close Combat allows it Hisuian Arcanine to hit Ting-Lu and Well-Baked Body Iron Treads, (AC) while Will-O-Wisp threatens burns on checks like physically defensive Quaquaval and Garchomp. Extreme Speed is useful priority that picks off weakened targets, Stealth Rock allows it Hisuian Arcanine to act as an offensive Stealth Rock entry hazard (repetition) setter that pressures Corviknight and Iron Treads, and Flame Charge boosts its Speed to thwart potential revenge killers. As Hisuian Arcanine places a lot of pressure on physical walls, other physical cleaners like Meowscarada and Chien-Pao can be partnered with Hisuian Arcanine to clean up after Arcanine it has broken those walls while helping Arcanine with its Speed issue providing speed control. ('helping with its speed issue' is kinda vague) Since Hisuian Arcanine is checked by Garchomp and bulky waters Water-types like Quaquaval, Refrigerate Regieleki makes a good partner for it by chasing those Pokemon out and being able to pivot out into Arcanine, while forcing these Pokemon out, pivoting Hisuian Arcanine in, and helping to deal with faster threats through its raw speed Speed. Hisuian Arcanine's middling speed Speed makes slow pivots like Corviknight good partners due to their ability to bring Arcanine it in safely; alternatively, Corviknight's Dual Screens dual screens set allows Arcanine to live take a hit and strike back.

[SET CREDITS]
Written by:
https://www.smogon.com/forums/members/natcrozma.580765/
Quality checked by:
https://www.smogon.com/forums/members/lordbox.611238/
https://www.smogon.com/forums/members/ut.523866/
Grammar checked by:
https://www.smogon.com/forums/members/


yokoisop Thanks for showing interest in GP! I'm going to go over your check briefly here, but feel free to hit me up on discord (autumndreams) and ask me anything further. I would also recommend joining the GP server, going to the reaction-roles channel and giving yourself the amchecker role for access to a private channel where we can give you advice as you progress. I would also recommend trying things from the GP workshop for now too.
- Firstly, it's important to bold your changes so they're more visible. This is especially important for punctuation changes. I'd also recommend saying 'add period' instead of 'add full stop' because that's American English and would be clearer to most writers. You should also add the commas yourself when you comment (AC) for ease of implementation.
- Be careful with subjective changes, particularly single-word ones. The role of GP is to preserve the voice of the writer as much as possible, so their work can be up on site in their own words as much as possible. You want to make sure you're checking what's in the analysis and not what you'd personally write if this was your own analysis; what sounds better to you may not sound better to the writer. Most of your changes fall under this; if there's not error, then it's fine, and you don't need to reword things just for the sake of rewording them. Here are some examples that might help for future reference:
  • 'by allowing it to' -> 'This ability allows it to' - there isn't a need to split the sentences, as it's not a run-on or anything like that, so this change wasn't necessary.
  • 'that pressures' -> 'pressuring' - both of these structures are perfectly fine, so changing one to another removes the writer's voice and ability to choose their words.
  • You changed 'as' to 'since' in one sentence, then changed 'since' to 'as' in the next. Both of these words are functionally the same, so tehre isn't a need to substitute one for another. By doing this, you remove the writer's choice of words in an arbitrary way.
  • 'Hisuian Arcanine's middling speed makes' -> 'Due to Hisuian Arcanine's middling speed' - both structures are fine here too, so there's no reason to make big prose changes if you can't justify them beyond 'this sounds better.'
- By adding a comma before 'such as' on teh first line, you've opened a new clause. You need a comma after 'Scream Tail' to close that clause. It may be helpful to visualise it as parentheses: Hisuian Arcanine is a strong wallbreaker, capable of denting many physically defensive Pokemon (such as Scream Tail) while taking advantage of Magic Guard - this has teh clause closed off entirely. However, but only adding one comma, your change reads as this: Hisuian Arcanine is a strong wallbreaker, capable of denting many physically defensive Pokemon (such as Scream Tail while taking advantage of Magic Guard
- Smogon uses the serial/Oxford comma (comma before and in a list of three or more), so it should be Head Smash, Flare Blitz, and Life Orb.
- With your and -> additionally change, you've created 'Stealth Rock allows it to act as an offensive Stealth Rock setter, pressuring Corviknight and Iron Treads, Additionally Flame Charge boosts its Speed to thwart potential revenge killers.' This isn't correct at all because you've created two distinct sentences by capitalising additionally, but they're separated by a comma instead of a period.
- All instances of 'Arcanine' should be 'Hisuian Arcanine' because they are two separate Pokemon and aren't interchangeable.
- Commas before 'while' are only needed when it means 'whereas' / is showing contrast. If 'while' is used to mean 'at the same time as' then a comma isn't needed. Therefore, you wouldn't add a comma where it says 'while helping with its speed issue' because 'while' doesn't mean 'whereas' here. You're also using two different colours for AC across this check, which can be confusing for a writer.
- 'Bulky Waters' -> 'bulky Water-types' - casual slang like this isn't accepted in analyses.
- Stats (HP, Attack, Defense, Special Attack, Special Defense, Speed) are always capitalised when referring to the stat.
- 'Dual Screens' -> 'dual screens' - this isn't capitalised.
- Pokemon don't 'live' hits, they can 'survive' or 'take' tem in the same way people don't 'live' an accident or something like that.
 
autumn said:
1/1 GP Team done
[SET]
Magic Guard (Arcanine-Hisui) @ Life Orb
Ability: Magic Guard
EVs: 252 Atk / 4 SpD / 252 Spe
Jolly Nature
- Head Smash
- Flare Blitz
- Close Combat / Will-O-Wisp
- Extreme Speed / Stealth Rock / Flame Charge

[SET COMMENTS]
Hisuian Arcanine is a strong wallbreaker, capable of denting many physically defensive Pokemon such as Scream Tail while taking advantage of Magic Guard by allowing it to use using (it takes advantage of mg by using these moves directly not by being allowed to use them) Head Smash (RC) and Flare Blitz and in combination with Life Orb without any drawbacks. Close Combat allows it Hisuian Arcanine to hit Ting-Lu and Well-Baked Body Iron Treads, (AC) while Will-O-Wisp threatens burns on checks like physically defensive Quaquaval and Garchomp. Extreme Speed is useful priority that picks off weakened targets, Stealth Rock allows it Hisuian Arcanine to act as an offensive Stealth Rock entry hazard (repetition) setter that pressures Corviknight and Iron Treads, and Flame Charge boosts its Speed to thwart potential revenge killers. As Hisuian Arcanine places a lot of pressure on physical walls, other physical cleaners like Meowscarada and Chien-Pao can be partnered with Hisuian Arcanine to clean up after Arcanine it has broken those walls while helping Arcanine with its Speed issue providing speed control. ('helping with its speed issue' is kinda vague) Since Hisuian Arcanine is checked by Garchomp and bulky waters Water-types like Quaquaval, Refrigerate Regieleki makes a good partner for it by chasing those Pokemon out and being able to pivot out into Arcanine, while forcing these Pokemon out, pivoting Hisuian Arcanine in, and helping to deal with faster threats through its raw speed Speed. Hisuian Arcanine's middling speed Speed makes slow pivots like Corviknight good partners due to their ability to bring Arcanine it in safely; alternatively, Corviknight's Dual Screens dual screens set allows Arcanine to live take a hit and strike back.

[SET CREDITS]
Written by:
https://www.smogon.com/forums/members/natcrozma.580765/
Quality checked by:
https://www.smogon.com/forums/members/lordbox.611238/
https://www.smogon.com/forums/members/ut.523866/
Grammar checked by:
https://www.smogon.com/forums/members/


yokoisop Thanks for showing interest in GP! I'm going to go over your check briefly here, but feel free to hit me up on discord (autumndreams) and ask me anything further. I would also recommend joining the GP server, going to the reaction-roles channel and giving yourself the amchecker role for access to a private channel where we can give you advice as you progress. I would also recommend trying things from the GP workshop for now too.
- Firstly, it's important to bold your changes so they're more visible. This is especially important for punctuation changes. I'd also recommend saying 'add period' instead of 'add full stop' because that's American English and would be clearer to most writers. You should also add the commas yourself when you comment (AC) for ease of implementation.
- Be careful with subjective changes, particularly single-word ones. The role of GP is to preserve the voice of the writer as much as possible, so their work can be up on site in their own words as much as possible. You want to make sure you're checking what's in the analysis and not what you'd personally write if this was your own analysis; what sounds better to you may not sound better to the writer. Most of your changes fall under this; if there's not error, then it's fine, and you don't need to reword things just for the sake of rewording them. Here are some examples that might help for future reference:
  • 'by allowing it to' -> 'This ability allows it to' - there isn't a need to split the sentences, as it's not a run-on or anything like that, so this change wasn't necessary.
  • 'that pressures' -> 'pressuring' - both of these structures are perfectly fine, so changing one to another removes the writer's voice and ability to choose their words.
  • You changed 'as' to 'since' in one sentence, then changed 'since' to 'as' in the next. Both of these words are functionally the same, so tehre isn't a need to substitute one for another. By doing this, you remove the writer's choice of words in an arbitrary way.
  • 'Hisuian Arcanine's middling speed makes' -> 'Due to Hisuian Arcanine's middling speed' - both structures are fine here too, so there's no reason to make big prose changes if you can't justify them beyond 'this sounds better.'
- By adding a comma before 'such as' on teh first line, you've opened a new clause. You need a comma after 'Scream Tail' to close that clause. It may be helpful to visualise it as parentheses: Hisuian Arcanine is a strong wallbreaker, capable of denting many physically defensive Pokemon (such as Scream Tail) while taking advantage of Magic Guard - this has teh clause closed off entirely. However, but only adding one comma, your change reads as this: Hisuian Arcanine is a strong wallbreaker, capable of denting many physically defensive Pokemon (such as Scream Tail while taking advantage of Magic Guard
- Smogon uses the serial/Oxford comma (comma before and in a list of three or more), so it should be Head Smash, Flare Blitz, and Life Orb.
- With your and -> additionally change, you've created 'Stealth Rock allows it to act as an offensive Stealth Rock setter, pressuring Corviknight and Iron Treads, Additionally Flame Charge boosts its Speed to thwart potential revenge killers.' This isn't correct at all because you've created two distinct sentences by capitalising additionally, but they're separated by a comma instead of a period.
- All instances of 'Arcanine' should be 'Hisuian Arcanine' because they are two separate Pokemon and aren't interchangeable.
- Commas before 'while' are only needed when it means 'whereas' / is showing contrast. If 'while' is used to mean 'at the same time as' then a comma isn't needed. Therefore, you wouldn't add a comma where it says 'while helping with its speed issue' because 'while' doesn't mean 'whereas' here. You're also using two different colours for AC across this check, which can be confusing for a writer.
- 'Bulky Waters' -> 'bulky Water-types' - casual slang like this isn't accepted in analyses.
- Stats (HP, Attack, Defense, Special Attack, Special Defense, Speed) are always capitalised when referring to the stat.
- 'Dual Screens' -> 'dual screens' - this isn't capitalised.
- Pokemon don't 'live' hits, they can 'survive' or 'take' tem in the same way people don't 'live' an accident or something like that.
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