VGC 21 Zacian [Series 11]

[Evelyie]

[SET]
name: Offensive
move 1: Behemoth Blade
move 2: Sacred Sword / Close Combat
move 3: Substitute / Swords Dance
move 4: Protect
item: Rusted Sword
ability: Intrepid Sword
nature: Adamant
evs: 124 HP / 76 Atk / 60 Def / 44 SpD / 204 Spe

[SET COMMENTS]
Zacian-C is the the best Restricted Pokemon in Series 11 due to its sky-high Attack stat, great Speed, and great defensive typing. Behemoth Blade is an excellent STAB move that is able to punish Dynamax-reliant Pokemon like Venusaur and Thundurus. Sacred Sword and Close Combat maul threats that resist Behemoth Blade like Kyogre, Urshifu-S, and mainly Incineroar, which a Fairy-type STAB move wouldn't be as effective against. Sacred Sword is weaker, but its ability to get around Max Steelspike's boosts keeps it optimal, while Close Combat is an explosive attack that can OHKO physically defensive Incineroar at +1. Substitute protects Zacian-C from status conditions and Intimidate while punishing passive plays; meanwhile, Swords Dance allow Zacian-C to keep its offensive presence even after getting crippled by Intimidate and Max Wyrmwind. The Adamant nature optimizes the Attack gain from Intrepid Sword and Swords Dance, while the Speed EVs allow it to outspeed even Venusaur in sun while at +1. Its good bulk allows it to survive Venusaur's Max Quake and opposing Zacian-C's Behemoth Blade, and with dual screens support it can even survive Landorus-T's Max Quake and Venusaur's Max Flare.

Grimmsnarl's dual screens and speed control in Scary Face allow Zacian-C to more safely pressure targets like opposing Zacian-C, Groudon, Venusaur, and Landorus-T. Thundurus can punish Intimidate from Incineroar while also boosting Zacian-C's Speed and Attack with its Max Airstream and Max Knuckle. Venusaur, Charizard, and Coalossal are all great early residual damage inflicters thanks to their G-Max Moves, which can put foes in range of Zacian-C's hits during the endgame. Landorus-T and Incineroar can stack Intimidate drops against threats like Groudon and opposing Landorus-T, protecting Zacian-C from physical attacks, while also being good Venusaur checks. Zacian-C also greatly appreciates Lapras's G-Max Resonance and its ability to OHKO Fire- and Ground-types like Landorus-T and Incineroar.

[CREDITS]
- Written by: [[Evelyie, 541609]]
- Quality checked by: [[Giokio, 517038]]
- Grammar checked by: [[Finland, 517429]]

 

[Giokio]

sword doggo

[SET]
name: Offensive
move 1: Behemoth Blade
move 2: Sacred Sword / Close Combat
move 3: Substitute / Swords Dance
move 4: Protect
item: Rusted Sword
ability: Intrepid Sword
nature: Adamant
evs: 124 HP / 76 Atk / 60 Def / 44 SpD / 204 Spe

[SET COMMENTS]
Zacian-C is the premier Restricted in Series 11 due to its signature move, great Speed and good bulk, defensive typing, and Attack stat. Behemoth Blade is an excellent Steel-type STAB that bypasses Dynamax and punishes Pokémon like Venusaur and Thundurus (the content is ok, but you should clarify all your points, what does it mean that it bypasses Dynamax? Why did you mention those two mons specifically? I would call them common Dynamax abusers). Sacred Sword provides coverage against Incineroar, Urshifu-S and Kyogre (try to elaborate more, you should say why the fighting move complements its coverage well and give a spotlight to Incin here). Close Combat is an option if you want (I prefer that anayses remain on third person, reword it please) higher damage output, although it leaves you vulnerable and it is hindered by Max Steelspike's boosts. Play Rough can be an option, although due to its low accuracy and lower relevance it's not recommended (i think we can remove this entirely, instead you can explain why Sacred Sword is better than Fairy Stab before where you also talk about Close Combat). Substitute punishes passive plays and protects Zacian-C from Intimidate coming off Incineroar and Landorus-T, and status conditions, by Venusaur and Grimmsnarl, while Swords Dance preserves its offense against Max Wyrmwind (pay attention to the grammar, always tweak your sentences after you have finished writing). The Adamant natute optimizes the Attack gain, while the Speed EVs allow it to outspeed Venusaur under sun at +1 (not very clear, first time i read this i thought it was the Venusaur the one with the +1 in speed). Its bulk protects it from Venusaur's Max Quake, and paired with Grimmsnarl's screens, it can take even more hits like Landorus-T's Max Quake (saying that its bulk protects it is not right, maybe you were trying to say: Thanks to its bulk, Zacian can Survive hits like Venusaur's Max Quake......; I think that you should also add at least another mention for each of the cases you mention, "it can take X's attack name and Y's attack name, and under screens is able to survive even Z's attack name and P's attack name").

Grimmsnarl's dual screens and Speed control provides Zacian-C longevity, giving it more opportunities to strike targets like Kyogre, Groudon, Venusaur and Landorus-T(the beginning doesn't sound right, saying just "provides longevity" feels rushed and many people may not understand what it means, always remember that we try to write those for people that don't know anything about VGC). Thundurus is a great Dynamax option, boosting itself and Zacian-C with Max Airstream and Max Knuckle, while punishing Intimidate creating a hyper offensive combo (so this has suddently become Thundurus's analysis; remember that we are speaking of Zacian's partners, and that should be the first point, you can talk about Zacian AS a partenr after you have mentioned everything else). Venusaur, Charizard and Coalossal are all great residual damage setters to put opponents in Behemoth Blade's range (should be expanded a bit, especially the Coalossal point, since Zacian + Coalossal is an entire archetype). Incineroar and Landorus-T cycle Intimidate against Groudon and opposing Landorus-T protecting Zacian-C from physical attacks, while also being good Venusaur checks (I changed this in Sole Survivor's analysis, "cycle Intimidate" is a term used in VGC but almost nowhere on the other parts of Smogon). Lapras's G-Max Resonance and its capacity to OHKO Fire- and Ground-types like Landorus-T and Incineroar are much appreciated by Zacian-C.

[CREDITS]
- Written by: [[username1, userid1]]
- Quality checked by: [[Giokio, 517038]]
- Grammar checked by: [[username1, userid1]]

Since you want your own style to be preserved i decided to use more comments than usual, however you will have to work more on improving your formal writing and implement it fast, Zacian must come out quickly, it's the most important mon after Venusaur probably.
However, don't be in a rush, take some time to think what important information you want give to the reader and rework your analysis accordingly, i know you can do it.
Here is zee's analysis for series 10, maybe you can use it:https://www.smogon.com/dex/ss/pokemon/zacian-crowned/vgc21/

 

[Evelyie]

sword doggo

[SET]
name: Offensive
move 1: Behemoth Blade
move 2: Sacred Sword / Close Combat
move 3: Substitute / Swords Dance
move 4: Protect
item: Rusted Sword
ability: Intrepid Sword
nature: Adamant
evs: 124 HP / 76 Atk / 60 Def / 44 SpD / 204 Spe

[SET COMMENTS]
Zacian-C is the premier Restricted in Series 11 due to its signature move, great Speed and good bulk, defensive typing, and Attack stat. Behemoth Blade is an excellent Steel-type STAB that bypasses Dynamax and punishes Pokémon like Venusaur and Thundurus (the content is ok, but you should clarify all your points, what does it mean that it bypasses Dynamax? Why did you mention those two mons specifically? I would call them common Dynamax abusers). Sacred Sword provides coverage against Incineroar, Urshifu-S and Kyogre (try to elaborate more, you should say why the fighting move complements its coverage well and give a spotlight to Incin here). Close Combat is an option if you want (I prefer that anayses remain on third person, reword it please) higher damage output, although it leaves you vulnerable and it is hindered by Max Steelspike's boosts. Play Rough can be an option, although due to its low accuracy and lower relevance it's not recommended (i think we can remove this entirely, instead you can explain why Sacred Sword is better than Fairy Stab before where you also talk about Close Combat). Substitute punishes passive plays and protects Zacian-C from Intimidate coming off Incineroar and Landorus-T, and status conditions, by Venusaur and Grimmsnarl, while Swords Dance preserves its offense against Max Wyrmwind (pay attention to the grammar, always tweak your sentences after you have finished writing). The Adamant natute optimizes the Attack gain, while the Speed EVs allow it to outspeed Venusaur under sun at +1 (not very clear, first time i read this i thought it was the Venusaur the one with the +1 in speed). Its bulk protects it from Venusaur's Max Quake, and paired with Grimmsnarl's screens, it can take even more hits like Landorus-T's Max Quake (saying that its bulk protects it is not right, maybe you were trying to say: Thanks to its bulk, Zacian can Survive hits like Venusaur's Max Quake......; I think that you should also add at least another mention for each of the cases you mention, "it can take X's attack name and Y's attack name, and under screens is able to survive even Z's attack name and P's attack name").

Grimmsnarl's dual screens and Speed control provides Zacian-C longevity, giving it more opportunities to strike targets like Kyogre, Groudon, Venusaur and Landorus-T(the beginning doesn't sound right, saying just "provides longevity" feels rushed and many people may not understand what it means, always remember that we try to write those for people that don't know anything about VGC). Thundurus is a great Dynamax option, boosting itself and Zacian-C with Max Airstream and Max Knuckle, while punishing Intimidate creating a hyper offensive combo (so this has suddently become Thundurus's analysis; remember that we are speaking of Zacian's partners, and that should be the first point, you can talk about Zacian AS a partenr after you have mentioned everything else). Venusaur, Charizard and Coalossal are all great residual damage setters to put opponents in Behemoth Blade's range (should be expanded a bit, especially the Coalossal point, since Zacian + Coalossal is an entire archetype). Incineroar and Landorus-T cycle Intimidate against Groudon and opposing Landorus-T protecting Zacian-C from physical attacks, while also being good Venusaur checks (I changed this in Sole Survivor's analysis, "cycle Intimidate" is a term used in VGC but almost nowhere on the other parts of Smogon). Lapras's G-Max Resonance and its capacity to OHKO Fire- and Ground-types like Landorus-T and Incineroar are much appreciated by Zacian-C.

[CREDITS]
- Written by: [[username1, userid1]]
- Quality checked by: [[Giokio, 517038]]
- Grammar checked by: [[username1, userid1]]

Since you want your own style to be preserved i decided to use more comments than usual, however you will have to work more on improving your formal writing and implement it fast, Zacian must come out quickly, it's the most important mon after Venusaur probably.
However, don't be in a rush, take some time to think what important information you want give to the reader and rework your analysis accordingly, i know you can do it.
Here is zee's analysis for series 10, maybe you can use it:https://www.smogon.com/dex/ss/pokemon/zacian-crowned/vgc21/

implemented, + check discord when u can thx for the qc really liked reading ur notes

 

[Giokio]

QC

View attachment 382156
[SET]
name: Offensive
move 1: Behemoth Blade
move 2: Sacred Sword / Close Combat
move 3: Substitute / Swords Dance
move 4: Protect
item: Rusted Sword
ability: Intrepid Sword
nature: Adamant
evs: 124 HP / 76 Atk / 60 Def / 44 SpD / 204 Spe

[SET COMMENTS]
Zacian-C is the premier the best Restricted in Series 11 due to its sky high Attack stat, great Speed and defensive typing. Behemoth Blade is an excellent Steel-type STAB, that, due to its effect, is able to punish Dynamax-reliant Pokémon like Venusaur and Thundurus. Sacred Sword and Close Combat allows Zacian-C to maul threats that resists its Steel-type attack, like Kyogre, Urshifu-S and mainly Incineroar, which also a upon which Fairy-type STAB wouldn't be as effective. Sacred Sword is weaker, although due to its capacity of punishing ability to punish Max Steelspike's boosts it remains optimal, while Close Combat is an explosive attack that can OHKO physically defensive Incineroar at +1. Substitute protects Zacian-C from status conditions and Intimidate, while punishing passive plays from the opponent,; meanwhile Swords Dance offers Zacian-C ways to recover its Intrepid Sword's boost keep its offensive presence even after getting crippled by Intimidate and Max Wyrmwind. The Adamant natute optimizes the Attack gain from boosts, while the Speed EVs allows it to outspeed Venusaur under sun, at +1 (plz help here, didnt find a good way to say it) even venusaur in sun while at +1. Its good bulk allows it to survive Venusaur's Max Quake and opposing Zacian-C's Behemoth Blade, and under with dual screens support it can even survive Landorus-T's Max Quake and Venusaur's Max Flare.

Grimmsnarl's dual screens and Speed control in Scary Face reduces damage recieved by Zacian-C, allowing allow it to safely apply more pressure against targets like opposing Zacian-C, Groudon, Venusaur and Landorus-T. Thundurus can punish Intimidate from Incineroar while also boosting Zacian-C's Speed and Attack with its Max moves in Airstream and Knuckle. Venusaur, Charizard and Coalossal are all great residual damage setters thanks to their G-Max moves, that can put opponents in range of Zacian-C's hits during the endgame(it seemes like they put the residual damage in the end game, while usually they put it turn 1, a proper rewording is needed) . Landorus-T and Incineroar can abuse stack Intimidate drops against Groudon and opposing Landorus-T,(AC) protecting Zacian-C from physical attacks,(RC) while also being good Venusaur checks (Groudon isn't exactly a good Venu check, are you sure about what you wrote?). Lapras's G-Max Resonance and its capacity to OHKO Fire- and Ground-types like Landorus-T and Incineroar are much appreciated by Zacian-C.

[CREDITS]
- Written by: [[username1, userid1]]
- Quality checked by: [[username1, userid1]]
- Grammar checked by: [[username1, userid1]]

I feel like if you implement this well i'll stamp

 

[Evelyie]

QC

View attachment 382156
[SET]
name: Offensive
move 1: Behemoth Blade
move 2: Sacred Sword / Close Combat
move 3: Substitute / Swords Dance
move 4: Protect
item: Rusted Sword
ability: Intrepid Sword
nature: Adamant
evs: 124 HP / 76 Atk / 60 Def / 44 SpD / 204 Spe

[SET COMMENTS]
Zacian-C is the premier the best Restricted in Series 11 due to its sky high Attack stat, great Speed and defensive typing. Behemoth Blade is an excellent Steel-type STAB, that, due to its effect, is able to punish Dynamax-reliant Pokémon like Venusaur and Thundurus. Sacred Sword and Close Combat allows Zacian-C to maul threats that resists its Steel-type attack, like Kyogre, Urshifu-S and mainly Incineroar, which also a upon which Fairy-type STAB wouldn't be as effective. Sacred Sword is weaker, although due to its capacity of punishing ability to punish Max Steelspike's boosts it remains optimal, while Close Combat is an explosive attack that can OHKO physically defensive Incineroar at +1. Substitute protects Zacian-C from status conditions and Intimidate, while punishing passive plays from the opponent,; meanwhile Swords Dance offers Zacian-C ways to recover its Intrepid Sword's boost keep its offensive presence even after getting crippled by Intimidate and Max Wyrmwind. The Adamant natute optimizes the Attack gain from boosts, while the Speed EVs allows it to outspeed Venusaur under sun, at +1 (plz help here, didnt find a good way to say it) even venusaur in sun while at +1. Its good bulk allows it to survive Venusaur's Max Quake and opposing Zacian-C's Behemoth Blade, and under with dual screens support it can even survive Landorus-T's Max Quake and Venusaur's Max Flare.

Grimmsnarl's dual screens and Speed control in Scary Face reduces damage recieved by Zacian-C, allowing allow it to safely apply more pressure against targets like opposing Zacian-C, Groudon, Venusaur and Landorus-T. Thundurus can punish Intimidate from Incineroar while also boosting Zacian-C's Speed and Attack with its Max moves in Airstream and Knuckle. Venusaur, Charizard and Coalossal are all great residual damage setters thanks to their G-Max moves, that can put opponents in range of Zacian-C's hits during the endgame(it seemes like they put the residual damage in the end game, while usually they put it turn 1, a proper rewording is needed) . Landorus-T and Incineroar can abuse stack Intimidate drops against Groudon and opposing Landorus-T,(AC) protecting Zacian-C from physical attacks,(RC) while also being good Venusaur checks (Groudon isn't exactly a good Venu check, are you sure about what you wrote?). Lapras's G-Max Resonance and its capacity to OHKO Fire- and Ground-types like Landorus-T and Incineroar are much appreciated by Zacian-C.

[CREDITS]
- Written by: [[username1, userid1]]
- Quality checked by: [[username1, userid1]]
- Grammar checked by: [[username1, userid1]]

I feel like if you implement this well i'll stamp

done

 

[Giokio]

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[SET]
name: Offensive
move 1: Behemoth Blade
move 2: Sacred Sword / Close Combat
move 3: Substitute / Swords Dance
move 4: Protect
item: Rusted Sword
ability: Intrepid Sword
nature: Adamant
evs: 124 HP / 76 Atk / 60 Def / 44 SpD / 204 Spe

[SET COMMENTS]
Zacian-C is the the best Restricted Pokemon in Series 11 due to its sky-high (added hyphen) Attack stat, great Speed, (AC) and great defensive typing. Behemoth Blade is an excellent Steel-type STAB, that, due to its effect, STAB move that is able to punish Dynamax-reliant Pokemon (removed E accent) like Venusaur and Thundurus. Sacred Sword and Close Combat allow Zacian-C to maul threats that resists its Steel-type attack, like maul threats that resist Behemoth Blade like Kyogre, Urshifu-S, (AC) and mainly Incineroar, upon which Fairy-type STAB which a Fairy-type STAB move wouldn't be as effective against. Sacred Sword is weaker, although due to its ability to punish Max Steelspike's boosts it remains optimal, but its ability to get around Max Steelspike's boosts keeps it optimal, while Close Combat is an explosive attack that can OHKO physically defensive Incineroar at +1. Substitute protects Zacian-C from status conditions and Intimidate (RC) while punishing passive plays; meanwhile, (AC) Swords Dance offers Zacian-C ways allow Zacian-C to keep its offensive presence even after getting crippled by Intimidate and Max Wyrmwind. The Adamant natute nature optimizes the Attack gain from boosts, Intrepid Sword and Swords Dance, while the Speed EVs allow it to outspeed even Venusaur in sun while at +1. Its good bulk allows it to survive Venusaur's Max Quake and opposing Zacian-C's Behemoth Blade, and with dual screens support it can even survive Landorus-T's Max Quake and Venusaur's Max Flare.

Grimmsnarl's dual screens and speed control in Scary Face allow it to safely apply more pressure against Zacian-C to more safely pressure targets like opposing Zacian-C, Groudon, Venusaur, (AC) and Landorus-T. Thundurus can punish Intimidate from Incineroar while also boosting Zacian-C's Speed and Attack with its Max moves in Airstream and Max Knuckle. Venusaur, Charizard, (AC) and Coalossal are all great early residual damage setters inflicters thanks to their G-Max moves, that can put opponents Moves, which can put foes in range of Zacian-C's hits during the endgame. Landorus-T and Incineroar can stack Intimidate drops against threats like Groudon and opposing Landorus-T, protecting Zacian-C from physical attacks, (AC) while also being good Venusaur checks. Zacian-C also greatly appreciates Lapras's G-Max Resonance and its capacity ability to OHKO Fire- and Ground-types like Landorus-T and Incineroar are much appreciated by Zacian-C.

[CREDITS]
- Written by: [[Evelyie, userid1]] (fill id)
- Quality checked by: [[Giokio, userid1]] (fill id)
- Grammar checked by: [[Finland, 517429]]

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[Giokio]

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