Is it ok if someone can give me feedback on my rap? First one I've ever done where I actually written down the lyrics.
RAP ROUND ONE
POKEMON: Heracross
VICTIM: Walrein
Background music:http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=0ttSMscpYZ4
LYRICS:
Think you can beat me with something like that?
Well I'm gonna grind you with my close combat
Ice typing worst typing I've ever seen
Ma boss heracross is always the envy
Think that you can just toxic me
But wait! I've got an ability
Guts boost +1 it was meant to be
Finish you off quick with a blinding CC
(chorus)
Might have caught me off guard with dat surf
But didn't you know? UU is ma turf
I forgot to mention that hail just got nerfed
So bring on the pain, this is gonna hurt!
Megahorn is just gonna pound
Earthquake is gonna bring you to the ground
Maybe you subbed but it doesn't matter
Stone edge is gonna leave you tatters
A walrus what? So really weak
My giant blue beetle gonna make you leak
Fighting vs ice is just common sense
Better hold on this is gonna be a mess
(chorus)
Might have caught me off guard with dat surf
But didn't you know? UU is ma turf
I forgot to mention that hail just got nerfed
So bring on the pain, this is gonna hurt!
Hail is gone... Oh I'm glad
You be ragin, what? I think you are mad
Putting a Nu in UU is just plain bad
a whooper would do better and thats just sad
Forgot to mention that I might be scarfed
But is it a life orb? A choice band? Hurry up and start
Choose your move carefully or you will fail
Feels like a massacre so 'cross you be going to jail
(chorus)
Might have caught me off guard with dat surf
But didn't you know? UU is ma turf
I forgot to mention that hail just got nerfed
So bring on the pain, this is gonna hurt!
If this was your idea of a good stall
Then I assure you, walrein was made to fall
Heracross be OP, he be standin tall
Ranked in the top of UU he be pwning all
So walrein only standing with 1 hp
Howd he survive that? It's a mystery
You switching to get away with nothing but moot
Wait what? I just called pursuit
Heracross is the boss of all ya newbs
A samurai of might and clad in blue
He beats up hail! Walruses too
So watch out stall and wall, he be comin for you!
You should really try recording it. Written verses are kinda hard to hear internally.Is it ok if someone can give me feedback on my rap? First one I've ever done where I actually written down the lyrics.
swear moreIs it ok if someone can give me feedback on my rap? First one I've ever done where I actually written down the lyrics.
Ooooft this is V. good. My entry was a joke, but I'll try come up with something before the weekend's up.
Thanks man, appreciate the kind words :) I'm happy with the lyrics but gotta work on the delivery for next round if I make it haha.Holy shit Exxegutor was amazing. I gotta rewrite my rap now.
This was clever, I like these kinds of word plays. My God after mattj's post the recordings here have improved exponentially, now I HAVE TO re-record my entry. Hopefully I'll post it today.let me make this clear like my steel
you cant intimidate me
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I aint effected by gunk
I aint affected by most stuff
That stings! And it's motherfrakkin on, our first reply certainly did deliver! BTW for those interested I posted my re-recording as well, hope it sounds better.You're just about haxing, how about some real skill?
That's why I'm attacking with motherfucking Beedrill
Oh shit son you ripped it!