Marowak (BW2 Revamp) QC 0/3

[Alfalfa]

Ready for QC checks

 

[ryan]

This is still formatted incorrectly. I'll outline what I want it to look like to reflect this.

[Overview]

(overview goes here)

[SET]
name: Offensive
move 1: Bonemerang
move 2: Stone Edge
move 3: Double-Edge
move 4: Stealth Rock / Substitute
item: Thick Club
ability: Rock Head
nature: Adamant
evs: 200 HP / 252 Atk / 56 Spe

[SET COMMENTS]

(set comments here)

[ADDITIONAL COMMENTS]

(AC here)

[Other Options]

(OO here)

[Checks and Counters]

(C&C here)

The set above is also the set that we want to go onsite. Marowak doesn't even learn Ice Punch, and Double Edge is an easy move to spam with Marowak, as the only things that resist it in NU don't want to take a Bonemerang. For this same reason, Rock Head is the only ability that you should be using. The Speed EVs let you outspeed Modest Shell Smash Torkoal before it gets off the boost and OHKO it so that it can't do anything. The HP EVs allow Marowak to survive a CB Close Combat from Jolly Sawk and OHKO it with Bonemerang even if it has Sturdy.

[SET COMMENTS]

• Please mention why you would want to use Stealth Rock here. First off, Marowak's typing clashes with a lot of Pokemon that commonly use Stealth Rock, so you don't want to stack your weaknesses. Marowak also has trouble getting up a Sub against a lot of Pokemon because of its low Speed and subpar defensive typing. And finally, because Marowak has such a good lead matchup against other Stealth Rock leads, it's not hard to get up Stealth Rock against many of them.
• The mention that Earthquake can be used over Bonemerang should be in Other Options (or Additional Comments at best, but I would never run it over Bonemerang). Other options that can be considered don't go in Set Comments.
• Make sure you state "Stone Edge rounds off coverage with Bonemerang" since that's what's being used on the set
• Cut all mentions of Ice Punch, as Marowak does not learn it
• You can state that Substitute can be used over Stealth Rock if you already have another setter

[ADDITIONAL COMMENTS]

• Explain what the EVs are used for, which I outlined above
• Mention that no other item should be used, as Thick Club is what makes Marowak viable
• Only mention entry hazards if you have specific KOes it gets with them; every Pokemon appreciates entry hazards, so if you don't have any specific examples, there's no need to state that
• You have three different points on how to beat Tangela; you can cut that down and just mention that Toxic Spikes support helps break down bulky walls that Marowak cannot beat

[Other Options]

• Cut the bulky Stealth Rock setter point because that's basically what this set is
• You can cut the mention of every other item being bad because I want that in the AC

[Checks and Counters]

• Again, Marowak does not learn Ice Punch, so scrap that in the first point

Please make ALL of these changes, and I'll give it a second look. I'm happy to have new people looking to help in C&C, but QC is here to help you; please let us. :)

 

[Alfalfa]

It doesn't learn Ice Punch? I thought it did. What a shame.
EDIT: Updates made.

 

[Raseri]

Seeing as this still doesn't have the proper format, even when all you had to do was c/p it. QC has decided to reassign this to WhiteDMist

 

[Alfalfa]

What did I not do right? I coded it because I was afraid to remove the stuff before. Can you tell me what I am specifically doing wrong?