Burninator's Warstory02

[~Trogdor~]

Burninator Warstory02

(Xenma) My Team:

(Tytus) His Team:

6-6

tytus sent out Weavile (lvl 100 Weavile ?).
Xenma sent out Ninjask (lvl 100 Ninjask ?).
Weavile is exerting its pressure!
Weavile used Ice Shard.
It's super effective!
Ninjask lost 99% of its health.
Ninjask used Substitute.
But it failed!
Ninjask's leftovers restored its health a little!
Ninjask restored 6% of its health.
Ninjask's Speed Boost raised its speed!
---

Ninjask is always been my lead. I knew those extra health EVs would work out against Ice Shard, one of Ninjask's weaknesses.

foreys has entered the room.
Xenma switched in Aggron (lvl 100 Aggron ?).
Weavile used Ice Shard.
It's not very effective...
Aggron lost 5% of its health.
Aggron's leftovers restored its health a little!
Aggron restored 5% of its health.
---
tytus switched in Tentacruel (lvl 100 Tentacruel ?).
Aggron used Stealth Rock.
Pointed stones float in the air around your foe's team!
---
Tentacruel used Surf.
It's super effective!
Aggron lost 100% of its health.
Xenma's Aggron fainted.
---

I knew he would die against a Tentacruel but I needed to get in a stealth rock.

5-6

Xenma switched in Poliwrath (lvl 100 Poliwrath ?).
Poliwrath used Belly Drum.
Poliwrath lost 50% of its health.
Poliwrath's attack was raised.
Tentacruel used Rapid Spin.
Tentacruel blew away the spikes!
Poliwrath lost 3% of its health.
---

Aggron death was in vain when I forgot he knew Rapid Spin. I have never used him before so I did not know. I should have researched him since he was OU.

Poliwrath used Brick Break.
It's not very effective...
A critical hit!
Tentacruel lost 100% of its health.
tytus's Tentacruel fainted.
---

Ahhh Poliwrape avenged him......

5-5

Xenma: polirape
tytus: wow
tytus switched in Zapdos (lvl 100 Zapdos).
Zapdos is exerting its pressure!
Poliwrath used Rock Slide.
It's super effective!
Zapdos lost 100% of its health.
tytus's Zapdos fainted.
---

5-4

tytus switched in Tangrowth (lvl 100 Tangrowth ?).
Poliwrath used Brick Break.
Tangrowth lost 67% of its health.
Tangrowth used Power Whip.
It's super effective!
Poliwrath lost 47% of its health.
Xenma's Poliwrath fainted.
Tangrowth's leftovers restored its health a little!
Tangrowth restored 6% of its health.
---

Noooooo Polirape. >.<

4-3

Xenma switched in Ninjask (lvl 100 Ninjask ?).
tytus switched in Weavile (lvl 100 Weavile ?).
Weavile is exerting its pressure!
Ninjask used X-Scissor.
It's super effective!
Weavile lost 100% of its health.
tytus's Weavile fainted.
Ninjask's leftovers restored its health a little!
Ninjask restored 6% of its health.
Ninjask's Speed Boost raised its speed!
---

I planned to X-Scissor to KO Tangrowth but he switched in Weavile for a OHKO. Which is of course better.

4-3

tytus: wow that ws stupid
tytus switched in Electivire (lvl 100 Electivire ?).
Xenma: i made some mistakes like that in my last battle.
Ninjask used X-Scissor.
Electivire lost 54% of its health.
Electivire used Thunderbolt.
It's super effective!
Ninjask lost 14% of its health.
Xenma's Ninjask fainted.
---

3-3

Xenma switched in Heatran (lvl 100 Heatran ?).
Electivire used Cross Chop.
Electivire's attack missed!
Heatran used Earth Power.
It's super effective!
Electivire lost 46% of its health.
tytus's Electivire fainted.
Heatran lost 10% of its health.
---

3-2

Xenma: wow hax
tytus switched in Heatran (lvl 100 Heatran ?).
tytus: eh
Xenma: cross chop=miss
tytus: bound to happen sometimes
Heatran used Earth Power.
It's super effective!
Heatran lost 100% of its health.
tytus's Heatran fainted.
Heatran lost 10% of its health.
---

Haha my Heatran's faster.

3-1

tytus switched in Tangrowth (lvl 100 Tangrowth ?).
tytus: lol gg
Xenma: gg
Heatran used Lava Plume.
It's super effective!
Tangrowth lost 39% of its health.
tytus's Tangrowth fainted.
Xenma wins!
foreys has left the room.
tytus has left the room.

3-0

It was a fun little battle. He made a few mistakes but still it was a great way to test out a new team before I build it for wi-fi. It wasn't really a close battle but I made some good calls so I think it was good on my part.

 

[~Trogdor~]

I know but stupid mistakes and luck make a good comedy. But anyway I knew about my mistakes.

 

[ToF]

The luck made all the difference in this match, not that great of a warstory IMO.

 

[Stallion]

Too many stupid mistakes, and wasn't close enough to warrant being a warstory.

 

[Viashino_wizard]

Well... the battle was short, you both made stupid mistakes, and your commentary was a little. Honestly, this just wasn't a battle worth Warstorying.

Also, there is no real excuse to leave Aggron in against Tentacruel when you have Poliwrath available to Water Absorb.

 

[Bourbon]

I thought that you had to get these things approved. What happened to that rule ?_?

 

[Slice n Dice]

Please... post warstories that have lots of skillful plays/ twists. Not pointless 10 turn matches where the opponent forfeits.

 

[Chompy]

Why did you let your Aggron take a hit from surf?

Why did he not send out Tangrowth to KO Poliwrath in the first place?

Like everyone said there were way to many mistakes.

 

[junior]

A good warstory usually contains...

1. Good prediction from both trainers.
2. A battle between 2 people who have about the same amount of skill.
3. A close battle.
4. Some kind of sudden, unexpected or unusual twist.

I can list a lot more, but that would be wasting my time.

 

[Rhykune]

Borrrinnnggg...
What smogon wants are suspenseful warstories that leave us hanging, not stuff like this. 10 Turns of predictable play with no twists and many mistakes is not a warstory. I'd say that this is more of a slaughterstory, and we sure get enough of those.

 

[Taylor]

The match was too short for my liking. 1 turn in that game where no Pokemon fainted, yeah...

Warstorys need an actualy story to them, to make them interesting.

I am sure you have already, but check some of these in this sub-forum: http://www.smogon.com/forums/forumdisplay.php?f=57

They're well presented, well written, and they keep you reading (the majority anyway). Some stories that are added to them make them far more inspiring to read, some over and over again.

 

[Bologo]

No offense, but I could've made this in 5 minutes. You seem to have written 11 sentences of actual commentary. That alone should tell you something.

Not only was this boring, but it makes me believe that you really don't care about making warstories. Honestly, you can't just pick random battles that are terribly played and put next to zero commentary in it and expect people to have sympathy for you just because you posted it.

I swear, these kinds of warstories are making people brush off reading warstories more and more, which means that people are more likely to just brush off potentially good warstories, which in my mind, is really unfair to those who actually try.

Last time you posted a warstory, you had NO commentary in it. You basically did the same thing this time, except it was a much worse battle, way too short, no war, no nothing.

Sorry, but I have to be completely blunt here, if I were to title this as an actual story, it would be called "Baby's first picture book".

I'm honestly not impressed at all, and if you thought this was a comedy, it really wasn't, because if I was watching this, I wouldn't be laughing with you, but heh, I'd be laughing AT you.

Next time you decide to make a warstory, think a little please.

 

[IggyBot]

A good warstory usually contains...

1. Good prediction from both trainers.
2. A battle between 2 people who have about the same amount of skill.
3. A close battle.
4. Some kind of sudden, unexpected or unusual twist.

I can list a lot more, but that would be wasting my time.

5. Commentary
6. Good commentary when it's actually written