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Welcome to the Grammar Prose Workshop v4! We've decided to revive and revamp this project in order to encourage more users to contribute to Smogon through GP checking analyses and articles. This workshop is where users can turn to learn more about the process known as Grammar and Prose, commonly referred to as "GP". This particular facet of Smogon handles the editing of written content to ensure that it is grammatically correct before going on-site. There are several areas where grammar checking is needed, including the following:

Areas Where GP Is Needed
Contributions & Corrections

Commonly abbreviated as C&C, this is the part of the site where Pokemon analyses and articles that dictate or explain relevant information for the many generations and tiers are written. The GP phase happens after the QC (Quality Control) phase, which fine-tunes the competitive quality of the content. After an analysis has received all its Quality Control checks (usually indicated by QC 2/2 or QC 3/3), the writer will change the thread tag to Copyediting, which means that it's time for the writeup to go through GP, usually consisting of two checks. After the writer of the analysis has implemented the GP checks, the analysis is generally ready for upload.
The Flying Press

The spiritual successor to The Smog, The Flying Press releases individual articles about a variety of topics relating to Smogon, from Pokemon spotlights to tournament coverage to PS! room overviews. Note that the GP standards for The Flying Press are more relaxed than in C&C. Also, unlike C&C, The Flying Press's writing workshop is not public; you must have permission to view it, which is usually only given through having an article approved in the submission phase or becoming part of the official GP or HTML team.

Once an article's thread tag changes to Grammar, the writer is done with the article and is now awaiting your edits. After the writer of the article has implemented two GP checks, the article must have HTML done, and then it is generally ready for publishing. Be advised that art may come to a project at any time of these projects and has no bearing on the order of phases therein.

Useful Links
  • The Spelling and Grammar Standards is full list of the criteria the GP team follows (we suggest bookmarking it). If you've lurked here on Smogon for a while, a lot of the common terms and usage of the terms should be somewhat second-nature by now, which is a huge benefit. If you haven't lurked very much, not to worry; this is a task that becomes easier with experience because there's a lot of repetition. It won't take long to catch on even though it may seem like a ton.
  • fleurdyleurse has compiled an extensive list of notes for new GPers to use as a reference as well, which Milak and Estronic have updated. It can be found here.
  • A guide to making subjective GP changes can be found here.
  • The GP Team Queue is where writers post their analyses that are ready for the GP phase; the list of links in the OP is (usually) an updated list of every analysis currently waiting for GP checks. Although you can go and search for analyses to practice on yourself, this thread will help you find an analysis much easier.
Applying Your Knowledge As Contribution

Before being accepted as an official member of the GP team, you'll obviously need to prove that you have what it takes to fit the bill. The best way to show your skills here is to do what we call amchecks, or amateur checks. These can be posted in any analysis after it reaches the Copyediting phase as indicated by the thread tag. The writer is not required to implement your changes, but they are allowed to, and it's not uncommon for an official GPer to come behind you and validate your work or give you a few pointers to help you improve. Keep in mind, however, that your amchecks do not count as official checks and thus do not count toward the completion of the Copyediting phase, unless an official GPer stamps your work to indicate that it is satisfactory (which is huge if that happens). However, official GPers will not always go over amchecks and may go on and just post an official one. Remember that you cannot leave placeholders for amchecks, as they are not official; also, make sure the writer knows it's an amcheck to avoid confusion. Amchecks can be done in The Flying Press if you already have access for another reason.

When you do checks of your own, you'll want to do is establish a key at the top of your amcheck post first and foremost, which indicates what colors mean to add and remove content, and you can use them to indicate other things as well, including side comments, capitalization, and so on.

An example of this is as follows:

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Zangoose is one of the most effective wall breakers and late-game sweepers in the NU metagame. Zangoose also shines as one of the best possible sweepers for Sticky Web-based teams. After just a single turn needed to activate toxic boost, Zangoose has more initial power than most Pokemon in the tier. Its power can be bolstered further with Swords Dance, although Zangoose's poor bulk and lack of resistnces makes it difficlut for it to find a time to set up. This forces Zangoose to rely on double switches, and pivoting moves in order to switch in safely. Despite Zangoose's excellent offensive moves in Facade, Knock Off, and Close Combat Zangoose's base 90 speed is merely above-average. Thankfully, Quick Attack and Sticky Web support can make up for this flaw, making Zangoose one of the top offensive threats in the tier.
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As you might have guessed, (AC) and (RC) are short for add comma and remove comma, respectively. These are commonly used at Smogon in addition to the punctuation change simply because a color change on something so small can be easy to overlook otherwise. Comments you make, as indicated by your key, are not implemented and you can use them to convey thoughts you have throughout the read as you are checking. The example comment here regarding adding Sticky Web to Team Options is assuming that the writer left it out, and their mention of Sticky Web mitigating one of Zangoose's flaws is a good place to bring that to their attention.

You can use any colors you like, though I recommend at least starting with blue and red, especially since red is extremely easy to indicate that something is incorrect and casts out all confusion early on.

Once you have done a fair amount of solid amchecks, generally 10 or so and possibly stamped, you can submit an application to join the GP team by messaging Estronic, Rabia, and The Dutch Plumberjack a submission including proof of your GP abilities. They will either tell you how you can improve, ask for more examples before they come to a decision, or add you to the GP team. If you'd like for an official GPer to look over your work, you can inquire about this in #questions on the GP Discord, which can be found here. The GP Discord is the best way to meet other GPers and amcheckers as well as recieve feedback and answers from others. You can contact one the following GPers preferably on Discord if you want to be tutored or if you would like them to go over some of your amchecks:
Time to Practice!

Below are some exercises that contain several errors. Test yourself here first if you'd like by providing GP editions of these examples to correct where they are wrong. Some have more identifiable mistakes than others, and some may need to be completely reworded.

Disclaimer: Some of these exercises were taken from published work on Smogon. We trust you to work with pure honesty, using your own judgement only; of course, practice is the key and making mistakes will only help you gain more confidence. So don't hesitate to ask if you're unsure!

Furthermore, we will provide additional material once every two weeks for you to work on. A GPer will then try reviewing the amchecks and spot the more common mistakes, giving tips and tricks on how to become better at noticing them as well as helping you improve flow and avoid making subjective changes when it's not needed.

The new pool of Pokèmon kalos introduced weren't as hyped-up as previous ones, as it was very small compared to the batches of mons other regions introduced. Regardless, some of the Pokémon introduced became really popular fan-favourites, such as the slick Greninja and the goofy Goomy, though some just didn't hit the mark. That isn't usually a problem, but, like I said the small number of new Pokémon who entered the fray leaded to not a lot of options for people to be impressed with. However, the introduction of Mega-Evolution brought old Pokémon in the spotlight to be shown off in new, striking and powerful forms. Many designs of this new form become immediate favorites to many, such as Mega Lucario and Mega Blaziken, whereas some of them helped other Pokémon to get attention they've never had, such as Mega Banette and Mega Medicham. The Legendaries, however, weren't as striking as I hoped for, since most of them felt like they were missing something, specifically Zygarde at the time before Alola rolled around funnily enough. Overall, I think Kalos introduced a fare number of cool Pokémon, but the introduction of Mega Evolution created a series of amazingly-designed and popular Pokémon that people can consider to be their favourite addition.


Specs Deciudeye is one of the most devastating wallbreakers in Never Used. Only Skuntank and Sap Sipper Miltank resists or are immune to Decidueye's STAB combinations, and the former cannot reliably switch into multiple Leaf Storms. Additionally, Leaf Storm and Shadow Ball have excellent synergy, the former nails Darktypes like Silvally-dark and Persian-A, while the latter hits Steel and Poison-type like Silvally-Steel, Ferroseed and Gardobor, as well as Rotom-fan. Hurricane compliments these two moves good, providing coverage for Sap Sipper Miltank and chunking Eldegoss for more damage than Shadow Ball. Although U-Turn is preferred, so Decidueye can abuse the switches it forces, Roost enables it to take advantage on its Defensive utility more frequently. Giga Drain is also an option that offers recovery while being less exploitable then Roost.


Hawlucha excels at cleaning up in the late-game, easily sweeping after the Pokemon who can give it trouble are gone or weak. As such, Hawlucha thrives on hyper-offense teams, abusing the damage its teammates have already done. A suicidal lead such as Excadrill work best on HO teams, granting it Stealth Rock support. Grimmsnarl would also be a great addition to provide Screens support, easing Hawlucha's set-up greatly. Teammates such as Gyarados, Togekiss and Kommo-o that can also setup to sweep work great, as Hawlucha can potentially cleanup after they've heavily damaged the opponent's team. Kommo-o in particular offers great synergy with Hawlucha, as it can weaken or kill Pokemon like Aegislash, Toxapex and various Fairy-type with its expansive move pool to give Hawlucha an easier time cleaning up. Fairy and Psychic-types such as Hatterene, Grimmsnarl, and Clefable make setting up and sweeping challenging for Hawlucha, so Aegilsash is a great teammate that can help cover for that. Hawlucha can also be used more early as a potential Dynamaxed user, as its ability to boost its Attack and Speed with Close Combat and Max Brave Bird can easily get out of hand for the opponent.


Barrasekwda make for a decent lategame sweeper on Rain teams thanks to its amazing speed tier and Swift Swim allowing it to outspeed the entire metagame, as well as its great Atk. Liquidation allows Barraskewda to 2hit-KO defensive Pokemon like Corviknight and Clefable under rain. Close Combat allows it to 2hit-KO Ferrothorn and RotomWash as well as safely 1KO Cloyster thanks to Swift Swim, however, be careful against Ferrothorn, as Power Whip or Knock Off will cripple your chances of cleanupping. Psychic Fangs helps Barraskewda pressure Toxapex and Kommo-O, though you must be cautious of a Burn from Scald when facing Toxapex. Aqua Jet is useful to revenge kill Pokemon outside of Rain, such as Dugtrio, weakened Zeraora and +1 Excadrill. Crunch can be used if specifically targeting Dragapult and Jellicent is more desirable, but the priority from Aqua Jet is often too useful to pass on. An Adamant Nature grants Barraskewda a good chance to kill Clefable under rain, helps it potentially 2HKO Toxapex, and lets it always 1KO Sylveon under rain.


Since Charizard only has a niche on Sun teams, Torkoal is a required teammate for Charizard to function well and succed. Torkoal can also provide additional utility to help Charizard, such as removing Rocks with Rapid Spin and chipping down opponents with Toxic or Stealth Rocks damage. Venusaur, while already the premier sweeper for Sun teams, can abuse Charizard's ability to weaken and take out walls such as Mandibuzz and Toxapex. In return, Venusaur can take care of Pokemon that outSpeed Charizard thanks to Chlorophyll, such as Zeraora. Although Charizard can muscle through Specially Defensive Walls like Blissey, it's best to accompany it with a physical breaker to take care of them easier, especially if Sun isn't active. For example, Darmanitan under sun can 1-KO them with Flare Blitz, while acting as a general revenge killer with a Choice Scarf, though the amount of recoil it will take makes it tough to manage well. Because Charizard's frailty makes it difficult for it to switch inside, pivots such as Blissey, Xatu or Clefable can safely bring it into battle thanks to Teleport.


Apart from being more suave, Mega Gallade has some merits over Mega Medicham. Swords Dance boost it’s Atk to greater heights allowing it to break through bulky Pokemon like Mega Latias and Celesteela easier. Moreover, its 110-Base Speed allows it to outspeed a good chunk of Over Used, including Garchomp and nonChoice Scarf Kartana, and its solid Special bulk allows it to take hits such as Clefable’s Moonblast. Knock Off allows it to threaten Psychics like Reuniclus and Mew, who would otherwise be hard to break down and worsen the effectiveness of switches like Clefable and Tapu Fini through removing their Leftovers recovery. When put together these traits make Mega Gallade into a very strong wallbreaker. Tapu Fini makes for a good partner for Mega Gallade as Misty Terrain will protect it from status such as Static from Zapdos and Will-o-Wisp from Rotom-Wash. Also, Tapu Lele provides useful utility in Psychic terrain, boosting the power of Zen Headbutt greatly.


Amoonguss has rose in Usage since Zygarde's ban and challenges Tangrowth as a Grass type with Regenerator. It fits wells on bulky offensives due to its immunity to Toxic, enough special bulk to run Black Sludge and key resistances to Fairy-, Electric-, and Water-. Its many resistances allow it to switch into many Special Attackers like Magearna, Tapu Koko and Greninja-Ash and cripple them with status. Also, Amoonguss can sleep or paralyse Pokemon like Mega Alakazam and Tornadus-T with Spore or Stun Spore respectively when they switch in and can take at least one of their attacks at high health. Amoonguss can even take on the likes of Kartana and Mega Mawile. However, Amoonguss's lack of damage output hinders its offensive presence so teammates like Mega Mawile, Mega Medicham, Keldeo and Kartana can capitalize of status it inflicts. Water-types like Rotom-w and Slowbro-Mega appreciate Amoongus’s resistance to Electric, and Steel-types like Celeestela, Heatran and Magearna can cover for its Psychic-type weakness.


Thanks to its mixed Defenses, Haze, and reliable recoveries, Milotic finds itself a niche in OU as a bulky Water type. Its naturally high special defense help it check Pokemon such as Dragapult, Clefable and specs Aegislash, and its typing and decent Def allow it to tank hits from Pokemon like Dracovish. Additionally, Marvel Scale allows it to become even more physically bulky when statused, potentially discouraging the foe to use status moves; however being inflicted by Toxic isn't adviced, since it shortens the number of turns Milotic can stay in. Scald can potentially punish attackers with a burn. Dragon Breath gives Milotic the ability to also spread Paralysis against Pokemon like Dracovish, Dragapult or Hydreigon. The combination of Recover + Haze helps to prevent set-up Pokemon such as Gyarados, Kommo-O and Corvikight from getting out of hand against Milotic. The given EVs spread alongside a Calm Nature allows Milotic to avoid being 2HKO'd by Specs Aegislash after Stealth Rock damage, while still being physically bulky enough to take on Pokemon like Scarf Dracovish.


Zeraora makes for a very splashable breaker thanks to its extremely colorful coverages and incredibly high Speed-tier, outspeeding nearly the entire metagame. This set in particular allows it to lure in bulky Ground-types like Hippowdon or Seismitoad and lower their effectiveness with Grass Knot, paving the way for its teammates to clean in the late game. Opting for Knock Off means Zeraora will be able to cripple Rotom-Heat and reliably damage Dragapult; on the other hand Play Rough improve it’s matchup against Kommo-O and maintains coverage for Dragapult. Pivots such as Corviknight and Teleport Clefable help to get Zeraora safely inside the field, especially against Hippowdon and Seismitoad, since it's still vulnerable to their moves. Speaking of Hippowdon and Seismitoad, teammates that appreciate them being under pressure such as Rotom-Heat and Terrakion enjoy Zeraora’s presence. Also, Rotom-H can still be too problematic for Zeraora, therefore defensive switches like Seismitoad and Gastrodon prove to be useful teammates.


Ludicolo finds itself a unique niche on drizzle teams, able to take care of common bulky Waters that Rain teams usually struggle with. Giga Drain OHKOs Seismitoad and Gastrodon and can potentially 2hko Rotom-Wash, Vaporeon and Milotic paving the way for most rain sweepers. Ice Beam targets Dragons like Dragapult and Kommo-o and Focus Blast helps against Ferrothorn and Kyurem. However even with Life Orb alongside rain and a Modest nature, Ludicolo struggles in killing Pokemon its meant to target and can easily be OHKO'd by them in return. For example, Ice Beam has a low chance at 1HKO Dragapult, and Focus Blast only 2HKOs Kyurem. Additionally, Ludicolo needs to be careful against certain defensive threats such as Ferrothorn or Toxapex. The former can take at least one Focus Blast and makes Ludicolo a lot less threatening with Knock Off while the latter can recover off all of Ludicolo's attacks and Poison it, wearing it down alongside Life Orb recoil.


Polteageist is one of the most threatening setup sweepers in underused, capable of OHKO a majority of the tier when at +2, only being unable to reliably 1KO a few Pokemon such as Zarude, Incineroar, Umbreon, Bisharp or Gigalith. Its Ghost-type and decent Special Bulk enable it to set-up fairly reliably on opponents such as Heliolisk, and Noivern, making it harder for a lot of the tier to punish set up and prevent a lategame clean. Stored Power abuses the boosts acquired by Shell Smash to boost its power to be able to more effectively target bulkier foes as well as Ghost immunities such as Heliolisk and Porygon-Z. It can also one-hit KO Heavy-Duty Boots Chansey at +4. Giga Drain compliments Polteageist's coverage, targeting Krookodile, Obstagoon and SpDef Rhyperior, which are not killed by Polteageist's other movies even when boosted. Giga Drain also grants Polteageist some recovery, which can help it healing to 100% and be able to activate its sash if it has been chipped. A Focus Sash gives Polteageist guaranteed setup against almost any foe, allowing it to bypass Pokemon that would ordinarily OHKO it and use Shell Smash to clean-up weakened teams lacking priorities. White Herb is also an option to give Polteageist more bulk after setting up so it can take a hit while boosted, but the ability to set-up against almost any foe is often too useful to give up. It also struggles to take priority attacks such as Bisharp's Sucker Punch even with its Def restored.


Mimikyu fit best on offensive teams that appreciate it’s ability to set-up easy and clean a weak opposing team in the lategame. These teams also benefits from Disguise enabling Mimikyu to Revenge-Kill a key threat at a pinch. As such, wallbreakers such as Obstagoon and Lycanroc-Dusk, who can chip or remove checks to Mimikyu such as Skarmory, Weezing-Galar and def Incineroar are good partners. Lycanroc Dusk also can help chip Doublade in range of Mimikyu's attacks and provide extra priority if Mimikyu fails to clean late game. Due to Mimikyu's low damage output, it appreciates hazards to chip opponents such as Jirachi into range of it’s attacks, potentially preventing them from breaking its Disguise. As such, Stealth Rockers such as Krookodile and Terrakion make good partners. Mimikyu also fits well on Webs due to the Speed reduction allowing it to remove threats like Terrakion and Keldeo before they can break its Disguise as well as being a good check to Noivern on these teams, so Araquanid is a good partner to set the entry hazard. Special Araquanid can also lure and weaken or remove Skarmory, who is one of Mimikyu's biggest checks.


There's about a hundred "new" Pokémon that you can catch on the isle of armor, and I must say that I'm happy that some of my favourites made the cut. A lot of fan favourites in general snagged a ticket, such as Volcarona, Zoroark, Magnezone and more. However, when it comes to regional representation, it's fairly imbalanced. For example, nearly a quarter of the added Pokémon were a part of the original 151, while the only Pokémon that were added that appeared first in Hoenn are the Sharpedo line, Exploud line, and Azurill (who barely counts). I know it was confirmed before that there will only be around 100 Pokémon added, and I really don't mean to sound greedy here, but I wish there was more additions to the party; I was really hoping for the Expansion Pass to eventually add all of the Pokèmon back, but with the number of Pokémon added in the Isle of Armor, I don't really have my hopes up for the Crown Tundra to drop 400+ Pokémon to make them all available. In regards to actual new Pokémon, though, Urshifu is a great addition to anyone’s team. I found it very helpful for do things such as Dynamax Raids or grind money, and while I opted for its Single-Strike form, I'm sure its Rapid-Strike form can excel to do such things as well. Lastly, when I saw Galarian Slowbro, I was hoping for new Galarian forms as well, but alas I was left empty handed. It was honestly the perfect opportunity for GF to add more regional forms, especially consider they’re very popular among the community, so it’s pretty unfortunate. I'm fairly satisfied with what Pokémon were added, but like most things in SS, what we got is probably much lower then people’s expectations.


NP Cofagrigus takes a much more offense approach to the Pokémon, taking advantage of NU's lack of sturdy Ghost types checks by buffing its Shadow Ball to dangerous levels. Additionally, this set maintains the usefulness of Cofagrigus' Ghost-typing, taking advantage of Choice-item foes like Toxicroak and Indeedee to gain chances to setup. Something that may immediately stand out to you is this set's last move slot. Despite this set being based around boosting Cofagrigus's SpAtk, Body Press is oftentimes the preferred coverage, because it hits Ghost-resists and immunities like Silvally Dark, Skuntank, and Indeedee-F harder than any of Cofagrigus's possible non-boosted special coverage moves would, although Energy Ball is a great alternative that also smacks Quagsire. Cofagrigus even has the option of dropping Trick Room and running both Body Press and Energy Ball, giving it a phenomenal stall matchup at the cost of its matchup against offense teams. If you choose to do this, make sure to maximise Cofagrigus's Speed IVs and invest enough evs in speed to outpace Clefairy.
 
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Choice Specs Decidueye(Spelling) is one of the most devastating wallbreakers in Never Used NU. Only Skuntank and Sap Sipper Miltank resists or are immune to Decidueye's STAB combinations, and the former cannot reliably switch into multiple Leaf Storms. Additionally, Leaf Storm and Shadow Ball have excellent synergy;(comma->semicolon) the former nails Dark-types(AH) like Silvally-Dark(Capitalize) and Alolan Persian-A, while the latter hits Steel-(AH)and Poison-type like Silvally-Steel, Ferroseed,(AC) and Gardobor, as well as Rotom-fan Rotom-S. Hurricane compliments complements these two moves good, providing coverage for Sap Sipper Miltank and chunking (might be a little informal?) Eldegoss for more damage than Shadow Ball. Although U-Turn is preferred, so Decidueye can abuse to capitalize on the switches it Decidueye forces, Roost enables it to take advantage on of its defensive(lowercase) utility more frequently. Giga Drain is also an option that offers recovery while being less exploitable then Roost.

Thanks to its mixed Defenses bulk, Haze, and reliable recoveries recovery, Milotic finds itself a niche in OU as a bulky Water-type(AH). Its naturally high Special Defense helps it check Pokemon such as Dragapult, Clefable and Choice Specs(Capitalize) Aegislash, and its typing and decent Defense allow it to tank hits from Pokemon like Dracovish. Additionally, Marvel Scale allows it Milotic to become even more physically bulky when statused, potentially discouraging the foe to use from using status moves; however being inflicted by Toxic isn't adviced adviseable, since it shortens the number of turns Milotic can stay in. Scald can potentially punish physical attackers (subjective; more accurate)with a burn. Dragon Breath gives Milotic the ability to also spread paralysis(lowercase) against Pokemon like Dracovish, Dragapult,(AC) or and Hydreigon. The combination of Recover + Haze helps to prevent set-up Pokemon setup sweepers such as Gyarados, Kommo-o,(lowercase, AC) and Corvikight Corviknight from getting out of hand against Milotic. The given EVs spread alongside a Calm Nature allows Milotic to avoid being 2HKO'd 2HKOed by Choice Specs Aegislash after Stealth Rock damage, while still being physically bulky enough to take on Pokemon like Choice Scarf Dracovish.

A minor suggestion for the OP might be to sort the GP examples into analysis and article to make it easier for some people that might want to focus on a particular section!

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Decidueye: resists -> resist, Gardobor -> Garbodor, U-Turn -> U-turn, offers -> provides
Milotic: comma after however
 
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Polteageist is one of the most threatening setup sweepers in underused UU, capable of OHKOing a majority of the tier metagame when at +2 after a Shell Smash boost, only being unable to reliably 1KO OHKO a few Pokemon such as Zarude, Incineroar, Umbreon, Bisharp,(AC) or and Gigalith. Its Ghost-type Ghost typing and decent special bulk enable it to set-up set up fairly reliably on opponents foes ("opponent" refers to the opposing battler, not the Pokemon) such as Heliolisk(RC) and Noivern, making it harder for a lot of the tier metagame to punish set up setup and prevent a late-game(AH) clean sweep. Stored Power abuses utilizes ("Abuse" means "use in a negative way / to a negative effect" or "assault"; it should not be used as a substitute for "make heavy use of" or "benefit from") the boosts acquired by Shell Smash boosts to boost its power to be able to more effectively target bulkier foes as well as foes that are immune to Ghost-type moves,(AC) immunities such as Heliolisk and Porygon-Z. It can also one-hit KO OHKO Heavy-Duty Boots Chansey at +4 after two Shell Smash boosts. Giga Drain compliments Polteageist's coverage, targeting Krookodile, Obstagoon,(AC) and SpDef specially defensive Rhyperior, which are not killed by Polteageist's Polteageist cannot take out with its (Pokemon don't get killed) other movies even when boosted. Giga Drain also grants Polteageist some recovery, which can help it healing to 100% bring it back to full health and be able to let it activate its sash Focus Sash if it has been chipped. A Focus Sash gives Polteageist guaranteed setup against almost any foe, allowing it to bypass Pokemon that would ordinarily otherwise OHKO it and use Shell Smash to clean up(RH) weakened teams lacking priorities priority moves. White Herb is also an option to give that gives Polteageist more bulk after first setting up so it can take a hit while boosted, but the ability to set up(RH) against almost any foe is often too useful to give up. It also struggles to take priority attacks moves such as Bisharp's Sucker Punch even with its Defense restored.

Choice Specs Deciudeye Decidueye is one of the most devastating wallbreakers in Never Used NU. Only Skuntank and Sap Sipper Miltank resists or are immune to Decidueye's STAB combinations moves, and the former cannot reliably switch into multiple Leaf Storms multiple times. Additionally, Leaf Storm and Shadow Ball have excellent synergy;(RC; ASC) the former nails Dark-(AH)types like Silvally-Dark and Persian-A Alolan Persian, while and the latter hits Steel-(AH) and Poison-types like Silvally-Steel, Ferroseed,(AC) and Gardobor Garbodor, as well as Rotom-fan Rotom-S. Hurricane compliments complements these two moves good well, providing coverage for Sap Sipper Miltank and chunking dealing more damage to Eldegoss for more damage than Shadow Ball. Although U-turn is preferred(RC) as the last move, as it lets Decidueye can abuse take advantage of ("Abuse" means "use in a negative way / to a negative effect" or "assault"; it should not be used as a substitute for "make heavy use of" or "benefit from") the switches it forces, Roost enables it to take advantage on of its defensive utility more frequently. Giga Drain is also an option that offers provides recovery while being less exploitable then than Roost.

Ludicolo finds itself a unique niche on drizzle rain teams, as it is able to take care of common bulky Waters Water-types that rain teams usually struggle with against. Giga Drain OHKOs OHKOes Seismitoad and Gastrodon and can potentially 2HKO Rotom-Wash Rotom-W, Vaporeon,(AC) and Milotic,(AC) thus paving the way for most other rain sweepers. Ice Beam targets Dragons Dragon-types like Dragapult and Kommo-o,(AC) and Focus Blast helps against Ferrothorn and Kyurem. However,(AC) even with Life Orb and alongside rain and a Modest nature, Ludicolo struggles in killing to take out (Pokemon don't get killed) Pokemon its it's meant to target and can easily be OHKO'd OHKOed by them in return. For example, Ice Beam has a low chance at 1HKO to OHKO Dragapult, and Focus Blast only 2HKOs 2HKOes Kyurem. Additionally, Ludicolo needs to be careful against certain defensive threats such as Ferrothorn or and Toxapex;(RP; ASC) the former can take at least one Focus Blast and makes Ludicolo a lot less threatening with Knock Off,(AC) while and the latter can recover off all of Ludicolo's attacks and poison it, wearing it down alongside Life Orb recoil.
 

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Only Skuntank and Sap Sipper Miltank resists or are immune to
Watch out for these, "resists" is 3rd pers. singular. The correct verb would be "resist", as the subject is plural!

while the latter hits Steel-(AH)and Poison-type
Again, object is plural (like Silvally, Ferroseed, and Garbodor). "Poison-types" is what you should use here.

Hurricane compliments complements these two moves good [...] chunking (might be a little informal?)
Very minor thing here, but when you come across adjectives used in the wrong way, you might wanna replace them with the correct adverb; in this case, "well". Also, "chunking" is just fine when used as a synonym for "weakening".

Although U-Turn is preferred, so Decidueye can abuse to capitalize on the switches it Decidueye forces
This is good! A bit of a subjective change, but nonetheless valid. One thing to remember is the spelling of the move U-turn -> the "t" must not be capitalized.

while being less exploitable then Roost.
Then = Afterwards, next
Than is the correct choice here, as this sentence is clearly comparing two moves.

Thanks to its mixed Defenses bulk
fyi "defenses" is accepted as a term meaning a Pokemon's general defensive capabilities.

Pokemon such as Dragapult, Clefable and Choice Specs(Capitalize) Aegislash
Don't forget to use serial commas! Dragapult, Clefable, (comma) and Choice Specs Aegislash.

however being inflicted by Toxic isn't adviced adviseable
Watch out for the spelling, it's "advisable".

after Stealth Rock damage, while still being physically bulky enough to take on Pokemon like Choice Scarf Dracovish.
In this case, "while" isn't used to indicate contrast, but rather something that happens simultaneously. Therefore, there's no need to use a comma before it.

DC It's good that you spotted most of this stuff after double checking. Always make sure you read everything twice after you've made all of your changes. Very nicely done! You missed a couple of things here and there, but I can tell that you do know how the process works, you know how to minimize subjective changes, and you definitely have read the main rules and standards. Again, don't forget to double-check everything!!


bulkier foes as well as foes that are immune to Ghost-type moves,(AC) immunities such as
Ghost-immune Pokemon would've been the better choice here to improve flow.

It can also one-hit KO OHKO Heavy-Duty Boots Chansey at +4 after two Shell Smash boosts.
Bit of a subjective change, but yes I can see why you made this. It definitely makes it clearer to understand who "it" is.

Giga Drain compliments Polteageist's coverage
Watch out for these!
compliment = to say something nice to somebody
complement = to match, and as a consequence to enhance.

which are not killed by Polteageist's Polteageist cannot take out with its (Pokemon don't get killed) other movies even when boosted
You probably missed this, but it's always best to double-check for the spelling of everything.

into multiple Leaf Storms multiple times. Additionally, Leaf Storm and Shadow Ball have excellent synergy;(RC; ASC)
This is also good, but fyi moves can have plural forms. Also, not sure why you removed the adverb, it's generally something that improves flow and gives more "fluidity" to the text, so yeah unless it's something completely unnecessary or used in the wrong context, just don't change it.

,(AC) thus paving the way for most other rain sweepers.
"Most" doesn't hold the same meaning as "other". The author wants to underline how Giga Drain allows almost all rain sweepers to sweep late-game or in general to just have an easier time vs the opponent's team. This is one of those things you'll need to practice for, as avoiding making too many subjective changes can potentially alter the content of the analysis.

even with Life Orb and alongside rain and a Modest nature
Not sure why the "and" here. Life Orb alongside rain and a Modest nature reads just fine, and using two conjunctions together doesn't really help.

royesk You definitely know your way around GP, you've read the rules, and you know how to adjust some of the more complex sentences without making them excessively long. Continue working and fixing all the minor issues I pointed out and you'll get there in no time!
 
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Ludicolo finds itself has a unique niche on drizzle rain teams, since it is able to take care of the common bulky Waters Water-types that Rain rain teams usually struggle with. Giga Drain OHKOs OHKOes Seismitoad and Gastrodon, (AC) and can potentially 2hko 2HKO Rotom-W, Vaporeon, (AC) and Milotic, (AC) thereby paving the way for most rain sweepers its teammates. Ice Beam targets Dragons Dragon-types like Dragapult and Kommo-o and Focus Blast helps against Ferrothorn and Kyurem. However, (AC) even with Life Orb, (AC) alongside rain support, (AC) and a Modest nature, Ludicolo struggles in killing removing Pokemon its it is meant to target and can easily be OHKO'd OHKOed by them in return. For example, Ice Beam has a low chance at 1HKO to OHKO Dragapult (RC) and Focus Blast only 2HKOs 2HKOes Kyurem. Additionally, Ludicolo needs to be careful against certain defensive threats such as Ferrothorn or and Toxapex. The former can take at least one Focus Blast and makes Ludicolo a lot less threatening with Knock Off while the latter can recover off all of Ludicolo's attacks and Poison poison it, wearing it down alongside Life Orb recoil.

Amoonguss has rose risen in usage since Zygarde's ban and challenges competes with Tangrowth as a Grass-type with Regenerator. It fits wells on bulky offensives offense teams due to its immunity to Toxic, enough special bulk to run Black Sludge, (AC) and key resistances to Fairy-, Electric-, and Water-type. Its many resistances allow it to switch into many special attackers like Magearna, Tapu Koko, (AC) and Greninja-Ash Ash-Greninja and cripple them with status. Also, Amoonguss can also sleep or paralyze Pokemon like Mega Alakazam and Tornadus-T with Spore or Stun Spore respectively when they switch in and can take at least one of their attacks at high health. Amoonguss can even take on the likes of Kartana and Mega Mawile. However, Amoonguss's lack of damage output hinders its offensive presence, (AC) however, so teammates like Mega Mawile, Mega Medicham, Keldeo, (AC) and Kartana can capitalize of on the status it inflicts. (Restructured this sentence a bit) Water-types like Rotom-W and Slowbro-Mega Mega Slowbro appreciate Amoonguss' resistance to Electric Electric-type resistance (RC) and Steel-types like Celeestela, Heatran, (AC) and Magearna can cover for its Psychic-type weakness.

Grammar checking for the first time, keen to hear the feedback.
 

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Blui I notice a lot of subjective changes. in general, try to avoid making these unless they make the writing more readable and help it to make sense more. If the original makes sense, there's no need to change the phrasing because in GP we want to preserve the voice of the writer as much as possible.
Ludicolo finds itself has (this change isn't super necessary because "finds itself a niche" is fine to say) a unique niche on drizzle rain teams, since it is (you also don't really need to add this either because the original isn't incorrect) able to take care of the common bulky Waters Water-types that Rain rain teams usually struggle with. Giga Drain OHKOs OHKOes Seismitoad and Gastrodon, (AC) (don't add the comma here. only use a comma after "and" if both clauses make sense on their own. the second clause wouldn't make sense as a sentence on its own so you don't put a comma) and can potentially 2hko 2HKO Rotom-W, Vaporeon, (AC) and Milotic, (AC) thereby (adding comma is correct but no need to add thereby here because the original still makes sense) paving the way for most rain sweepers its teammates. (I wouldn't change this because it kinda is a content change too. the original paragraph makes it clear that ludicolo paves the way for rain sweepers but by changing that to "its teammates" you remove the information that its teammates are rain sweepers) Ice Beam targets Dragons Dragon-types like Dragapult and Kommo-o (add a comma here because both clauses make sense on their own) and Focus Blast helps against Ferrothorn and Kyurem. However, (AC) even with Life Orb, (AC) alongside rain support, (AC) and a Modest nature, Ludicolo struggles in killing removing Pokemon its it is meant to target and can easily be OHKO'd OHKOed by them in return. For example, Ice Beam has a low chance at 1HKO to OHKO Dragapult (RC) (keep the comma here because both clauses make sense on their own) and Focus Blast only 2HKOs 2HKOes Kyurem. Additionally, Ludicolo needs to be careful against certain defensive threats such as Ferrothorn or and Toxapex. The former can take at least one Focus Blast and makes Ludicolo a lot less threatening with Knock Off (add a comma here; use commas before while if it means whereas. here it does because your're contrasting two statements. don't use a comma before while if ti means "at the same time as") while the latter can recover off all of Ludicolo's attacks and Poison poison it, wearing it down alongside Life Orb recoil.

Amoonguss has rose risen in usage since Zygarde's ban and challenges competes with (subjective change that idt is super necessary) Tangrowth as a Grass-type with Regenerator. It fits wells on bulky offensives offense teams due to its immunity to Toxic, enough special bulk to run Black Sludge (here you'd change this to something like "special bulk that allows it to run Black Sludge" or anything similar t=so the sentence structure is parallel. for sentences like these you want all parts to make sense where the sentence splits. "its immunity to Toxic and "its resistances" both make sense but "its enough special bulk to run Black Sludge" does not), (AC) and key resistances to Fairy-, Electric-, and Water-type. (when listing stuff like this you can just say resistances to Fairy, Electric, and Water) Its many resistances allow it to switch into many special attackers like Magearna, Tapu Koko, (AC) and Greninja-Ash Ash-Greninja and cripple them with status. Also, Amoonguss can also sleep (a pokemon can't "sleep" something, it can put a foe to sleep) or paralyze Pokemon like Mega Alakazam and Tornadus-T with Spore or Stun Spore respectively when they switch in and can take at least one of their attacks at high health. Amoonguss can even take on the likes of Kartana and Mega Mawile. However, Amoonguss's lack of damage output hinders its offensive presence, (AC) however, (this change doesn't really make sense because the original was "however it can't damage so strong teammates help" but you changed it to "amoonguss has lack of damage however strong teammates help" so I would keep the original structure so it makes more sense) so teammates like Mega Mawile, Mega Medicham, Keldeo, (AC) and Kartana can capitalize of on the status it inflicts. (Restructured this sentence a bit) Water-types like Rotom-W and Slowbro-Mega Mega Slowbro appreciate Amoonguss' (when dealing with pokemon ending in s you always say Amoonguss's and not Amoonguss') resistance to Electric Electric-type resistance (RC) (resistance to Electric is fine, and you'd keep the comma here because both clauses make sense on their own) and Steel-types like Celeestela, Heatran, (AC) and Magearna can cover for its Psychic-type weakness.
 
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Zeraora makes for a very splashable effective breaker thanks to its extremely colorful coverages and incredibly high Speed-tier speed tier, outspeeding nearly the entire metagame. This set in particular allows it to lure in bulky Ground-types like Hippowdon or Seismitoad and lower their effectiveness weaken them with Grass Knot, paving the way for its teammates to clean in the late (AH) game. Opting for Knock Off means allows Zeraora will be able to cripple Rotom-Heat Rotom-H and reliably damage Dragapult; on the other hand (AC) Play Rough improves it’s its matchup against Kommo-O Kommo-o and maintains coverage for Dragapult. Pivots (AC) such as Corviknight and Teleport Clefable (AC) help to get Zeraora switch in safely inside the field. This is especially true against Ground-types, like Hippowdon and Seismitoad, since it's still vulnerable to their moves. Speaking of Hippowdon and Seismitoad, teammates Teammates that appreciate Ground-type Pokemon being under pressure (AC) such as Rotom-Heat and Terrakion (AC) enjoy Zeraora’s presence. Also, Rotom-H can still be too problematic for Zeraora, therefore defensive switches checks to it, like Seismitoad and Gastrodon (AC) prove to be useful teammates.
 

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Zeraora makes for a very splashable effective wallbreaker
Nice catch on the first mistake, splashable is something we'd all very much avoid in analysis. However, make sure to also change "breaker", as it's not really clear. 90% of the time you'll have to change it to "wallbreaker" (or "stallbreaker" in some rare cases, it all depends on the context of the analysis)
incredibly high Speed-tier Speed tier
Speed in "Speed tier" always has to be capitalized. The only instance where "speed" doesn't start with a capital letter is in "speed control".
paving the way for its teammates to clean in the late (AH) game.
It's good that you spotted the hyphen missing; however, always remove "in the" before early- / mid- / late-game. In addition, I'd recommend making more clear changes: "in the late-game(AH)" or even "in the late game late-game(AH)". You added the (AH), but you didn't really add the hyphen itself, so it can be a bit confusing. This helps the author understand what they have to change and avoids confusion when they implement your GP check.
to lure in bulky Ground-types like Hippowdon or and Seismitoad
Watch out for these, the object is plural (Ground-types) and therefore you can't use "or", which is used when the object is singular ("A Ground-type like Hippowdon or Seismitoad" -> this would've been correct).
Pivots (AC) such as Corviknight and Teleport Clefable (AC)
There's no need to use commas between the examples mentioned here, as you're not rly introducing nonessential elements, but rather something of key importance. In addition, when adding commas, make sure you actually do add the commas, don't underestimate the author's knowledge about how to implement GP checks, our job is to always be 100% clear.
help to get Zeraora switch in safely inside the field. This is especially true against Ground-types, like Hippowdon and Seismitoad
I feel like there's a lot of unnecessary stuff here. "switch in safely" is correct, no objections. But you could've improved flow by simply adding a comma afterwards and continue the sentence without adding extra knowledge. "help Zeraora switch in safely, especially against Hippowdon and Seismitoad, since it's still vulnerable to their moves". Better right?
Speaking of Hippowdon and Seismitoad, teammates Teammates that appreciate Ground-type Pokemon being under pressure
Again, this is another instance where you're being a bit too liberal with the changes, which can potentially alter the content of the analysis. The focus of the sentence is Hippowdon and Seismitoad specifically, not really Ground-types in general. The sentence was just fine as it was :)
enjoy Zeraora’s presence
This is a tough one, but always make sure there aren't any curly apostrophes (’), always replace them with the regular ones ('). Zeraora’s Zeraora's.
therefore defensive switches checks to it, like Seismitoad and Gastrodon (AC) prove to be useful teammates.
Same thing once again.
1) Therefore is introducing a new clause, so it can't really be connected to its previous one via a comma, you'd need to use a more solid punctuation mark, that is a semicolon (;). In addition, "checks" isn't the correct word choice here, but "switch-ins" is, as it's the noun indicating a Pokemon that can repeatedly switch into another foe. These are two different words that are used to describe two different roles, they are not interchangeable and you'll need to pay close attention to what the reader is trying to convey and absolutely avoid changing the content of the analysis.
"[...] problematic for Zeraora;(ASC) therefore,(AC) defensive switch-ins to it such like Seismitoad and Gastrodon prove to be useful teammates"

So, AV Cosmoem, overall you know the basic rules and you know what our standards are. I recommend working on fixing the formatting when adding changes, especially punctuation marks, and practicing a bit more in order to avoid making subjective and, most of the time, unnecessary changes that don't actually improve the quality of the analysis. I'm always available on Discord if you want to go over some extra stuff, so make sure to reach out to me if you need help:swole:
 
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Barrasekwda Barraskewda make for is a decent lategame late-game sweeper on Rain rain teams thanks to its great Attack, and the combination of its amazing speed Speed tier and Swift Swim allowing it to outspeed the entire metagame, (RC) as well as its great Atk. Liquidation allows Barraskewda to 2hit-KO 2HKO defensive Pokemon in rain like Corviknight and Clefable under rain. Close Combat allows it to can safely OHKO Cloyster, (AC) and 2hit-KO 2HKO Ferrothorn and RotomWash Rotom-W; (add semi-colon) as well as safely 1KO Cloyster thanks to Swift Swim (assuming that Barraskewda is already in rain, stating Close Combat suffice without the need to mention Swift Swim),(RC) however, be careful against Ferrothorn, as Power Whip or Knock Off will cripple hinder your its chances of cleanupping late-game sweeping. Psychic Fangs helps Barraskewda pressure Water-resistant Pokemon like Toxapex and Kommo-O, though when facing Toxapex, (AC) you must be cautious of a potential Burn burn from Scald when facing Toxapex. Aqua Jet is a useful priority move to revenge kill Pokemon weakened faster threats outside of Rain, such as Dugtrio, weakened Zeraora and +1 Speed-boosted Excadrill. Crunch can be another useful alternative against Ghost-types like can be used if specifically targeting Dragapult and Jellicent is more desirable, (RC) but the priority from Aqua Jet is often too useful to pass on. An Adamant Nature nature grants allows Barraskewda to maximum its damage output. a good chance to kill KO Clefable under rain, helps it potentially 2HKO Toxapex, and lets it always 1KO OHKO Sylveon under rain. (Clefable and Toxapex have been mentioned already above, and there are 2 contradictory statements on Clefable being 2HKO in the beginning and OKHO in this last sentence; I did the calcs for max Physical Defensive Clefable [lol], so I decided to just provide a more general statement for having an Adamant nature)
 
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Since Charizard only has a niche on Sun sun teams, Torkoal is a required teammate for Charizard to function well and succed. (I feel like this is filler, both sentences get the point across. If this isn't filler, then "succed" is spelled "succeed".) Torkoal can also provide additional utility to help Charizard, such as removing Rocks Stealth Rock with Rapid Spin and chipping down opponents with Toxic or Stealth Rocks Stealth Rock damage. Venusaur, while already the premier sweeper for Sun sun teams, can abuse benefit from Charizard's ability to weaken and take out walls such as Mandibuzz and Toxapex. In return, Venusaur can take care of Pokemon that outSpeed outspeed Charizard thanks to Chlorophyll, such as Zeraora. Although Charizard can muscle through Specially Defensive Walls specially defensive walls like Blissey, it's best to accompany it with a physical wallbreaker to take care of them easier, especially if Sun sun isn't active. For example, Darmanitan under sun can 1-KO OHKO them with Flare Blitz, while acting as a general revenge killer with a Choice Scarf, though the amount of recoil it will take makes it tough to manage well. Because Charizard's frailty makes it difficult for it to switch inside, pivots such as Blissey, Xatu or and Clefable can safely bring it into battle thanks to Teleport.
 

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Mimikyu fits best on offensive teams that appreciate its (RA) ability to set-up (RH) easy easily and clean a weakened opposing team in the lategame late-game (AH). These teams also benefits from Disguise enabling Mimikyu to Revenge-Kill revenge kill (RH) a key threat at in a pinch. As such, wallbreakers such as Obstagoon and Lycanroc-Dusk, who can chip or remove checks to Mimikyu such as Skarmory, Weezing-Galar, (AC) and def defensive Incineroar are good partners. Lycanroc-Dusk (AH) also can can also help chip Doublade in into range of Mimikyu's attacks and provide extra priority if Mimikyu fails to clean late-game (AH). Due to Mimikyu's low damage output, it appreciates hazards entry hazard support to chip opponents such as Jirachi into range of its (RA) attacks, potentially preventing them from breaking its Disguise. As such, Stealth Rockers setters such as Krookodile and Terrakion make good partners. Mimikyu also fits well on Webs Sticky Webs teams due to the Speed reduction allowing it to remove threats like Terrakion and Keldeo before they can break its Disguise as well as being a good check to Noivern on these teams, so Araquanid is a good partner to set the entry hazard Sticky Webs. Special Araquanid can also lure and weaken or remove Skarmory, who is one of Mimikyu's biggest checks.
 
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Specs Deciudeye is one of the most devastating wallbreakers in Never Used NU. Only Skuntank and Sap Sipper Miltank resists or are immune to Decidueye's STAB combinations, and the former cannot reliably switch into multiple Leaf Storms. Additionally, Leaf Storm and Shadow Ball have excellent synergy, the former nails Dark space here types like such as Silvally-dark and Persian-A, while the latter hits Steel and Poison-types like Silvally-Steel, Ferroseed and Gardobor, as well as Rotom-fan. Hurricane compliments these two moves good well, providing coverage for Sap Sipper Miltank and chunking Eldegoss for more damage than Shadow Ball. Although U-Turn is preferred, so that Decidueye can abuse the switches it forces, Roost enables it to take advantage on of its Defensive utility more frequently. Giga Drain is also an option that offers recovery while being less exploitable then Roost.
 

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thanks to its great Attack, and the combination of its amazing speed Speed tier and Swift Swim allowing it to outspeed the entire metagame
There's no need for a comma at the beginning, when you're listing objects always use a comma when there's three or more objects, since Smogon uses serial commas. In addition, a comma should be used before "allowing it", as you're introducing a new sentence and therefore it needs to be separated from its previous one, think of it as "which allows it"!
in rain like Corviknight and Clefable under rain
"Under rain" is perfectly fine.
Close Combat allows it to can safely OHKO Cloyster, (AC) and 2hit-KO 2HKO Ferrothorn and RotomWash Rotom-W;
This is good; however, the two sentences don't need to be separated by a comma, as the argument is the same and the information needs to be provided into one single sentence.
(add semi-colon) as well as safely 1KO Cloyster thanks to Swift Swim (assuming that Barraskewda is already in rain, stating Close Combat suffice without the need to mention Swift Swim),(RC)
This is very important: you're using the same color for extra notes & comments as well as for punctuation marks, this could create confusion and the author could potentially miss some of the edits they're supposed to make. People have their own preferences regarding colors, but my recommendation is to stick with something that's easily recognizable and avoids confusion. In addition, try using aliases when possible: (add semi-colon) -> (ASC).
will cripple hinder your its chances of cleanupping late-game sweeping.
"Cleaning" would've been the more correct word choice here.
Psychic Fangs helps Barraskewda pressure Water-resistant Pokemon like Toxapex and Kommo-O, though when facing Toxapex, (AC) you must be cautious of a potential Burn burn from Scald when facing Toxapex.
1) While "Water-resistant Pokemon" is not necessarily incorrect, it's not the precise idea the author wanted to convey. They wanted to specifically point out Toxapex and Kommo-o as Psychic Fangs' targets.
2) Watch out the spelling of Pokemon names: it's Kommo-o, not Kommo-O.
3) A comma should be added after "though", since it's not used a subordinating conjunction here, but as an adverb. It's exactly like "therefore", "however", "nevertheless", and so on... they're all adverbs and always need a comma after them.
Aqua Jet is a useful priority move to revenge kill Pokemon weakened faster threats outside of Rain, such as Dugtrio, weakened Zeraora and +1 Speed-boosted Excadrill.
1) Again, you took the liberty of adding extra stuff that isn't 100% incorrect, but it isn't needed. Try avoiding any subjective and unnecessary change that doesn't add anything content-wise.
2) Watch out the spelling of weather conditions, they're never capitalized. rain, not Rain.
3) "Speed-boosted" isn't rly ideal as a term. The context here is pretty clear, since Aqua Jet is a priority move, the +1 on Excadrill will 99,9% of the time mean +1 in Speed; therefore, there's no need to change that.
Here's how the sentence would read without the extra stuff: "Aqua Jet is a useful priority move to revenge kill Pokemon outside of rain, such as Dugtrio, Zeraora, and +1 Excadrill."
Crunch can be another useful alternative against Ghost-types like can be used if specifically targeting Dragapult and Jellicent is more desirable, (RC) but the priority from Aqua Jet is often too useful to pass on.
Honestly, the first sentence was just fine as it was. "Targeting" was used as a noun, so that might be the reason why you decided to change it; in addition, you added extra information that slightly changes the content of the text. The author wants to explain that Crunch specifically hits Dragapult and Jellicent, not really Ghost-types in general. I also don't know why you completely removed the last sentence, the only thing worth changing here is probably the verb "pass on", which could perhaps be replaced with "pass up".
I feel like you're just trying to over complicate this when it's not needed. The problem with the sentence, or any text used as a sample here, isn't really about QC stuff, most if not all of these are outdated and extremely old, so you should not bother doing calcs and whatnot.
"An Adamant Nature nature grants Barraskewda a good chance to kill OHKO (Pokemon are not killed) Clefable under rain, helps it potentially 2HKO Toxapex, and lets it always 1KO OHKO Sylveon under rain." This is literally all there was to change :blobthumbsup:

Things you have to keep in mind if you're planning on doing more of these:
- Avoid making subjective changes, it's extremely important not to alter the content of the analysis, as that is not the GP team's job. If your edit isn't really adding anything to the analysis, then just don't add it. Try asking yourself, "Is this really necessary, or am I adding something just for the sake of doing it? Is the sentence perfectly understandable even without the addition of extra information?"
- Pick a different color when making comments, I don't care if it's purple, yellow, orange, or black, just pick one lol
- Make sure you read everything twice to spot minor mistakes like the spelling of some words or Pokemon names.

Again, I'm always available on Discord if you have any question! Don't be discouraged and keep going!
 
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Torkoal is a required teammate for Charizard to function well and succed. (I feel like this is filler, both sentences get the point across. If this isn't filler, then "succed" is spelled "succeed".)
Fair, I'm not particularly against removing the last bit, good catch on spotting the spelling!
Darmanitan under sun can 1-KO OHKO them with Flare Blitz, while acting
Remember to always remove the commas when "while" isn't used as adversative conjunction.
pivots such as Blissey, Xatu or and Clefable
Watch out for the serial commas! "[...] Xatu,(AC) and Clefable [...]"
Nice job AV Cosmoem!!

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that appreciate its (RA) ability to set-up (RH)
This is more of a personal note, but when I have to add/remove apostrophes or hyphens, I always like to be as clear as possible, and it's something I'd recommend you to do as well. "it's its ; set-up(RH) set up" -> this is what I mean.
As such, wallbreakers such as Obstagoon and Lycanroc-Dusk, who can chip or remove checks to Mimikyu such as Skarmory, Weezing-Galar
1) "As such" isn't really ideal here, since it's not really a synonym for "therefore" or "hence", which would obviously be the more correct options.
2) Watch out the spelling of formes, it's Lycanroc-D, not Lycanroc-Dusk.
3) "Who" should never be used to refer to Pokemon. "Which" would've been the correct choice here.
4) Again, spelling of formes. It's Galarian Weezing, not Weezing-Galar.
Mimikyu also fits well on Webs Sticky Webs teams
It's "Web", not "Webs"
before they can break its Disguise as well as being a good check to Noivern on these teams
Remember to always use a comma when a gerund follows "as well as", since you're basically starting a new sentence.
or remove Skarmory, who is one of Mimikyu's biggest checks.
Same thing, "who" isn't the correct pronoun, "which" is.

So overall most of the mistakes were pretty much the same, you definitely need to take a look at the Standards to make sure you learn the correct spelling of all Pokemon's formes, as well as other specific terms. In addition, make sure you format all of the minor changes in the clearest way possible:blobthumbsup:

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Specs Deciudeye is one of the most devastating wallbreakers in Never Used NU.
First thing, always use bold when making changes, it's of vital importance!
- Watch out for the spelling, it's Decidueye, not Deciudeye.
- "Specs" isn't really clear and it's not accepted as a substitute for "Choice Specs", always make sure the items are listed correctly.
Only Skuntank and Sap Sipper Miltank resists or are immune to Decidueye's STAB combinations
Make sure you use singulars and plurals correctly. "Skuntank and Miltank" is a plural subject, so "resist" is the correct verb here (3rd pers. plural). Conversely, "STAB combination" doesn't need a plural, the word itself indicates the presence of both STAB moves.
the former nails Dark space here types like such as Silvally-dark and Persian-A
1) No space needed when talking about types, "Dark-types" is the correct spelling.
2) "such as" and "like" are interchangeable, there's rly no need to replace it, as it doesn't add anything.
3) Watch out for the spelling of formes: it's Silvally-Dark (capital D, since it's a type) and Alolan Persian.
while the latter hits Steel and Poison-types like Silvally-Steel, Ferroseed and Gardobor, as well as Rotom-fan.
1) As I said, when talking about types, and specifically when they're used to indicate Pokemon of that specific type, you must use a hyphen. "Steel- and Poison-types" -> this is the correct one.
2) Always make sure you use serial commas: "Silvally-Steel, Ferroseed,(comma) and Garbodor"
3) Spelling of Pokemon and formes names. It's Garbodor, not Gardobor. Rotom-S, not Rotom-fan.
Hurricane compliments these two moves good well
Good catch on replacing the adjective with the adverb. However, watch out for the spelling of the verb. "To compliment" means to say something nice to somebody and is therefore incorrect. "Complements" is the correct word choice here.
Although U-Turn is preferred, so that Decidueye can abuse the switches it forces
1) Spelling, once again. It's U-turn, not U-Turn (the t is not capitalized).
2) A comma is not needed before "so" when it has the same meaning of "so that". In addition, there really is no need to remove "that", it's a very minor thing that doesn't improve flow.
3) "Abuse" should NEVER be used in analysis, as it means "to treat badly" or "use something negatively". When you see it, always change it to something like "benefit from" or "take advantage of".
its Defensive utility
Spelling: defensive doesn't need a capital letter.
while being less exploitable then Roost.
This is a comparison, which obviously needs the word "than"; "then" has a completely different meaning (afterwards, next).

There's more work to be done here, I recommend reading this revamped guide, since it covers pretty much the basics and can be a very good starting point to learn from. Once you have taken a look at it, I recommend going through the Standards to start covering smaller stuff such as spelling of formes, items and whatnot. Remember to always use bold when making changes, and make sure you read everything twice or even three times.
 

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Hawlucha excels at cleaning up in the late-game, easily sweeping after the Pokemon who that can give it trouble are gone or weak weakened or removed. As such, Hawlucha thrives on hyper-offense hyper offense (RH) teams, abusing taking advantage of the damage its teammates have already done. A suicidal suicide lead such as Excadrill work works best on HO teams, granting it Stealth Rock support. Grimmsnarl would also be is also a great addition to provide Screens dual screens support, easing Hawlucha's set-up setup greatly. Teammates such as Gyarados, Togekiss, (AC) and Kommo-o that can also setup to and sweep work great, as Hawlucha can potentially cleanup clean up after they've heavily damaged the opponent's team. Kommo-o in particular offers great synergy with Hawlucha, as it can weaken or kill KO Pokemon like Aegislash, Toxapex, (AC) and various Fairy-type Fairy-types with its expansive move pool movepool to give Hawlucha an easier time cleaning up. Fairy and Psychic-types such as Hatterene, Grimmsnarl, and Clefable make setting up and sweeping challenging difficult for Hawlucha, so Aegilsash Aegislash is a great teammate that can help cover for that those weaknesses. Hawlucha can also be used more early as a potential Dynamaxed Dynamax user, as its ability to boost its Attack and Speed with Close Combat Max Knuckle and Max Brave Bird Airstream respectively can easily get out of hand for the opponent.
 
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Zeraora makes for a very splashable effective wallbreaker thanks to its extremely colorful versatile coverages and incredibly high Speed-tier(RH), outspeeding nearly the entire metagame. This set in particular allows it to lure in bulky Ground-types like Hippowdon or and Seismitoad and lower their effectiveness weaken them with Grass Knot, paving the way for its teammates to clean in the late-game(AH). Opting for Knock Off means allows Zeraora will be able to cripple Rotom-Heat Rotom-H and reliably damage Dragapult; on the other hand,(AC) Play Rough improves it’s its matchup against Kommo-O Kommo-o and maintains coverage for Dragapult. Pivots such as Corviknight and Teleport Clefable help to get Zeraora switch in safely inside the field, especially against Hippowdon and Seismitoad, since it's still vulnerable to their moves. Speaking of Hippowdon and Seismitoad, teammates that appreciate them being under pressure such as Rotom-Heat Rotom-H and Terrakion enjoy Zeraora’s Zeraora's presence. Also, Rotom-H can still be too problematic for Zeraora,(RC);(ASC) therefore, (AC) defensive switches switch-ins to it like Seismitoad and Gastrodon can prove to be useful teammates.
 
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Hawlucha excels at cleaning up in the late-game, easily sweeping after the Pokemon who that can give it trouble are gone or weak weakened or removed. As such, Hawlucha thrives on hyper-offense hyper offense (RH) teams, abusing taking advantage of the damage its teammates have already done. A suicidal suicide lead such as Excadrill work works best on HO teams, granting it Stealth Rock support. Grimmsnarl would also be is also a great addition to provide Screens dual screens support, easing Hawlucha's set-up setup greatly. Teammates such as Gyarados, Togekiss, (AC) and Kommo-o that can also setup to and sweep work great, as Hawlucha can potentially cleanup clean up after they've heavily damaged the opponent's team. Kommo-o in particular offers great synergy with Hawlucha, as it can weaken or kill KO Pokemon like Aegislash, Toxapex, (AC) and various Fairy-type Fairy-types with its expansive move pool movepool to give Hawlucha an easier time cleaning up. Fairy and Psychic-types such as Hatterene, Grimmsnarl, and Clefable make setting up and sweeping challenging difficult for Hawlucha, so Aegilsash Aegislash is a great teammate that can help cover for that those weaknesses. Hawlucha can also be used more early as a potential Dynamaxed Dynamax user, as its ability to boost its Attack and Speed with Close Combat Max Knuckle and Max Brave Bird Airstream respectively can easily get out of hand for the opponent.
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As such, Hawlucha thrives on hyper-offense hyper offense (RH) teams, abusing taking advantage of the damage its teammates have already done.
1) "As such" isn't really a synonym for a word like therefore, which should be used instead (or something else that's a synonym)
2) Nitpicky, but although you made the right grammar/standards change re: abusing/taking advantage of, I think that whole clause is kind of pointless as is, because as is first two sentences read something like "Hawlucha is good late-game, sweeping to take advantage when Pokemon that give it trouble are weakened, so it thrives on hyper offense teams, taking advantantage of its teammates weakening Pokemon." The underlined parts basically say the same thing.

I'd personally change that second part to something like "... thrives on hyper offense teams, taking advantage of how good these teams are at weakening foes." Maybe not exacly that, gets the point across while adding a little new information (hyper offense teams especially good) and not retreading the same ground so directly. TLDR: Just keep in mind that words that don't functionally add information are good targets to change or remove.

A suicidal suicide lead such as Excadrill work works best on HO teams...
1) "HO" -> "hyper offense" (disallowed abbreviations)

...and Kommo-o that can also setup...
1) "setup" -> "set up" (verb form)

Fairy and Psychic-types such as Hatterene, Grimmsnarl, and Clefable make setting up and sweeping challenging difficult for Hawlucha, so Aegilsash Aegislash is a great teammate that can help cover for that those weaknesses.
1) "Fairy" should have a hyphen after
2) "challenging" and "difficult" are functionally synonyms, so that change appears to be unneeded/subjective, though if there's a reason to the contrary you should state it in comment
3) "for" doesn't need to be removed, although "that" -> "those weaknesses" is a good change

Hawlucha can also be used more early as a potential Dynamaxed Dynamax user, as its ability to boost its Attack and Speed with Close Combat Max Knuckle and Max Brave Bird Airstream respectively can easily get out of hand for the opponent.
1) Yes, "more early" should be changed, but you can keep the "more" idea and clarify what is earlier than what.
"Hawlucha can also be used earlier in the game as a potential..."
Even if "more" wasn't present, though, "early" is awkwardly stranded, so I would replace it with "early-game".
2) "respectively" at the end of the clause needs commas.
"...and Max Airstream, (AC) respectively, (AC) can easily..."
 
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Polteageist is one of the most threatening setup sweepers in UU underused, capable of OHKOing a majority of the tier when at +2, only being unable to reliably OHKO 1KO a few Pokemon such as Zarude, Incineroar, Umbreon, Bisharp, (AC) and or Gigalith. Its Ghost-type Ghost-typing and decent special Special bulk Bulk enable it to set-up (RH) fairly reliably on opponents such as Heliolisk, (RC) and Noivern, making it harder for a lot of the tier to punish set up and prevent a lategame clean. Stored Power abuses the boosts acquired through by Shell Smash to boost its power to be able to more effectively target bulkier foes as well as Ghost immunities such as Heliolisk and Porygon-Z. (RP) It can while also one-hit KO OHKOing Heavy-Duty Boots Chansey at +4. Giga Drain complements compliments Polteageist's coverage, targeting Krookodile, Obstagoon and specially defensive SpDef Rhyperior, which are not KOed killed by Polteageist's other moves movies even when boosted. Giga Drain also grants Polteageist some recovery, which can help to heal it up it healing to 100% and be able to activate its Focus Sash sash if it has been chipped. A Focus Sash gives Polteageist guaranteed setup against almost any foe, allowing it to bypass Pokemon that would ordinarily OHKO it and use Shell Smash to clean-up (RH) against weakened teams lacking priority moves priorities. White Herb is also an option to give Polteageist more bulk after setting up so it can take a hit while boosted, but the ability to set-up (RH) against almost any foe is often too useful to give up. Even with White Herb, (AC) however, (AC) it can struggle It also struggles to take priority attacks such as Bisharp's Sucker Punch even with its Def restored.
 

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Its Ghost-type Ghost-typing and decent special Special bulk Bulk
Watch out here, it's "Ghost typing", without the hyphen. Also, when making changes, make sure you format everything the author needs to remove first, and then you can add corrections, so that the colors look more cohesive and there's less confusion. Like this: Special Bulk special bulk
on opponents such as Heliolisk, (RC) and Noivern
"Opponents" can only be used to refer to the opposing player. "Foes" or simply "Pokemon" can be used to replace it.
making it harder for a lot of the tier to punish set up and prevent a lategame clean
1) Remember that "set up" is a verb, and "setup" is the noun indicating the act of setting up. In this case, the latter would've been the correct choice.
2) Watch out for the spelling of the three main phases of a battle, "early-game", "mid-game", and "late-game". Always use the hyphen!
Stored Power abuses the boosts acquired through by Shell Smash to boost its power to be able to more effectively target bulkier foes as well as Ghost immunities such as Heliolisk and Porygon-Z
There's a lot of stuff you missed here, let's go step-by-step.
1) The verb "to abuse" should almost never be used in Pokemon analysis, as it means "to use something negatively" or "to assault". Whenever you see it, always remember to change it to a more appropriate choice, such as "to take advantage of" or "to benefit from".
2) This is more of a subjective change, but the "to boost its power" is honestly redundant here, don't you think? We all know what Stored Power does! Improving flow is also something that GPers should watch out for, and it can be hard at first, since you'll be scared of making a too subjective change, but in this case the sentence reads perfectly fine even without that small addition.
3) "Immunity" can only be referred to types, e.g: "Skarmory can provide a Ground immunity". In this case, the author specifically mentions two Pokemon that are immune to Ghost, therefore the correct choice would be "Ghost-immune Pokemon" (don't forget the hyphen on this as well!)
. (RP) It can while also one-hit KO OHKOing Heavy-Duty Boots Chansey at +4.
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which can help to heal it up it healing to 100%
This is okay, although the only thing worth changing here was actually the verb, as you can't use a gerund after "help", but you must always use an infinitive. "can help it heal".
Shell Smash to clean-up (RH) against weakened teams
"Clean up" is accepted, without the hyphen of course, as a transitive verb. So all you had to change here was the hyphen.

Don't have much to say about the rest! My first recommendation is to have another look at the standards thread, or simply the guide containing the major stuff to watch out for. What I did notice, however, is that you tend to format your changes in a casual order. Of course, the colors are going to be pretty self-explanatory, but my advice is to always follow the pattern of "stuff that's being removed" first and "stuff that's being added" after. It'll be easier for the author to implement your check this way.
 

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Apart from being more suave, Mega Gallade has some merits over Mega Medicham. Swords Dance boost it’s Atk its Attack to greater heights allowing it to break through bulky Pokemon like Mega Latias and Celesteela easier. Moreover, its 110-Base base 110 Speed allows it to outspeed a good chunk of Over Used, including Garchomp and nonChoice non-Choice Scarf Kartana, and its solid Special bulk allows it to take hits such as Clefable’s Clefable's (ASCII Apostrophe) Moonblast. Knock Off allows it to threaten Psychics Psychic-types like Reuniclus and Mew, who would otherwise be hard to break down and worsen the effectiveness of switches like Clefable and Tapu Fini through removing their Leftovers recovery. When put together these traits make Mega Gallade into a very strong wallbreaker. Tapu Fini makes for a good partner for Mega Gallade as Misty Terrain will protect it from status such as Static from Zapdos and Will-o-Wisp Will-O-Wisp from Rotom-Wash. Also, Tapu Lele provides useful utility in Psychic Terrain(Capitalize), boosting the power of Zen Headbutt greatly.
 

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Swords Dance boost it’s Atk its Attack to greater heights allowing it to break through bulky Pokemon like Mega Latias and Celesteela easier.
- Your change to the full stat is correct.
- It should be Swords Dance boosts not boost because Swords Dance is singular. Boost makes it plural, so you need to change to boosts.
- There should be a comma before allowing. use commas before gerunds, such as "Nasty Plot boosts its Special Attack, enabling ti to breal through foes" or "Knock Off can be run, preventing it from being too passive."
- Easier -> more easily.

Moreover, its 110-Base base 110 Speed allows it to outspeed a good chunk of Over Used, including Garchomp and nonChoice non-Choice Scarf Kartana, and its solid Special bulk allows it to take hits such as Clefable’s Clefable's (ASCII Apostrophe) Moonblast.
- OverUsed not Over Used, but OU is usually preferred.
- "special bulk" not Special bulk. Special should only be capitalised when it's referring to the Special Attack or Special Defense stats.

Knock Off allows it to threaten Psychics Psychic-types like Reuniclus and Mew, who would otherwise be hard to break down and worsen the effectiveness of switches like Clefable and Tapu Fini through removing their Leftovers recovery.
- Never refer to Pokemon as who. Use either which or that, whichever is appropriate, so you'd use which here.
- You would add a comma before and here to close the which clause. "Knock Off allows it to threaten Psychic-types like Reuniclus and Mew, which would otherwise be hard to break down, and worsens the effectiveness of switch-ins like Clefable and Tapu Fini through removing their Leftovers recovery." When you close a clause, you could remove it from the sentence with it still making sense. "Knock Off allows it to threaten Psychic-types like Reuniclus and Mew and worsens the effectiveness of switch-ins like Clefable and Tapu Fini through removing their Leftovers recovery."
- Worsen should change to worsens to be parallel with allows.
- Switches should change to switch-ins because a switch-in is a Pokemon that switches into Gallade.

When put together these traits make Mega Gallade into a very strong wallbreaker.
- Add a comma after together because it's a separate clause. You can tell when because adding it to the end of the sentence would make sense "These traits make Mega Gallade into a very strong wallbreaker when put together." Because you reverse the order of the clauses, use a comma (like that sentence I just typed).

Tapu Fini makes for a good partner for Mega Gallade as Misty Terrain will protect it from status such as Static from Zapdos and Will-o-Wisp Will-O-Wisp from Rotom-Wash.
- Use a comma before as and since if they mean because.
- The status is paralysis and burn, not Static and Will-O-Wisp, because those abilities/moves inflict the paralysis and burn status.
 

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Apart from being more suave, Mega Gallade has some merits over Mega Medicham. Swords Dance boost it’s Atk boosts its Attack to greater heights,(AC) allowing it to break through bulky Pokemon like Mega Latias and Celesteela easier more easily. Moreover, its 110-Base Speed Speed allows it to outspeed a good chunk of Over Used the metagame, including Garchomp and non-(AH)Choice Scarf Kartana, and its solid Special bulk allows it to take hits such as Clefable’s Moonblast. Knock Off allows it to cripple switchins such as Clefable and Tapu Fini as well as threaten Psychics Psychic-types like Reuniclus and Mew, who that would otherwise be hard to break down and worsen the effectiveness of switches like Clefable and Tapu Fini through removing their Leftovers recovery. When put together these traits make Mega Gallade into a very strong wallbreaker. Tapu Fini makes for a good partner for Mega Gallade,(AC) as Misty Terrain will protect it from status such as Static from Zapdos and Will-o-Wisp Will-O-Wisp from Rotom-Wash. Also Lastly, Tapu Lele provides useful utility in Psychic terrain, boosting the power of Zen Headbutt greatly.
 

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Moreover, its 110-Base Speed Speed allows it to outspeed
You're removing dex info here, which is not really ideal. Unless the sentence contains unnecessary information, it's best to always leave it as it is. What you should do, however, is change the formatting to: base 110 Speed.
and its solid Special bulk
Special is never capitalized unless it's used to refer to the stat Special Defense, in this case it's a simple adjective.
Knock Off allows it to cripple switchins such as Clefable and Tapu Fini as well as threaten Psychics Psychic-types like Reuniclus and Mew, who that would otherwise be hard to break down and worsen the effectiveness of switches like Clefable and Tapu Fini through removing their Leftovers recovery.
Okay so, you took a more liberal approach here.
- The order of the two sentences didn't really need to be tweaked in my opinion. What you should've noticed was the presence of "that" after a comma, which is incorrect, as "that" needs to be used in a restrictive sense. When you notice this, please replace it with "which".
- switches and switch-ins are two very different things. It's good that you noticed the mistake and changed it, but remember that the spelling is switch-in, don't forget the hyphen!
This is how the sentence would look like now: "Knock Off allows it to threaten Psychic-types like Reuniclus and Mew, which would otherwise be hard to break down,(another comma is needed here) and lower (worsen isn't rly the best word choice here) the effectiveness of switch-ins like Clefable and Tapu Fini through removing their Leftovers recovery."
When put together these traits make
Don't forget a comma when using introductory clauses! "When put together,(comma) these traits..."
from status such as Static from Zapdos and Will-o-Wisp Will-O-Wisp from Rotom-Wash.
- These aren't really status conditions, but rather the means by which the status conditions are inflicted. You always have to make sure everything is as clear as possible. This is a possible solution to this: "Status effects such as paralysis from Zapdos's Static and burn from Rotom-W's Will-O-Wisp"
- Make sure you also watch out for the spelling of formes and such. It's Rotom-W, not Rotom-Wash.
Psychic terrain
Terrain is capitalized.

As I said, you definitely know the rules and how to circumvent weird sentences without changing too much, I would recommend trying with Mini analysis to see how that works for you. Make sure you always read everything twice to notice any typos, formatting errors, and whatnot.
 
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The new pool of Pokèemon kKalos introduced weren't wasn't as hyped-up as previous ones, as it was very small compared to the batches of monsPokemon other regions introduced. Regardless, some of the Pokéemon introduced became really popular fan-favourites, such as the slick Greninja and the goofy Goomy, though some just didn't hit the mark. That isn't usually a problem, but, like I said, the small number of new Pokéemon who entered the fray leaded to not a lot offew options for people to be impressed with. However, the introduction of Mega-Evolution brought old Pokéemon in the spotlight to be shown off in new, striking, and powerful forms. Many designs of thiese new forms become immediate favorites to many, such as Mega Lucario and Mega Blaziken, whereas some of them helped other Pokéemon to get attention they've never had, such as Mega Banette and Mega Medicham. The Llegendaries, however, weren't as striking as I hoped for, since most of them felt like they were missing something, specifically Zygarde at the time before Alola rolled around, funnily enough. Overall, I think Kalos introduced a fareir number of cool Pokéemon, but the introduction of Mega Evolution created a series of amazingly-designed and popular Pokémon that people can consider to be their favourite addition.

Choice Specs Deciudeye is one of the most devastating wallbreakers in Never UsedNU.; Oonly Skuntank and Sap Sipper Miltank resists or areis immune to Decidueye's STAB combinations, and the former cannot reliably switch into multiple Leaf Storms. Additionally, Leaf Storm and Shadow Ball have excellent synergy,; the former nails Dark-types like Silvally-dDark and Persian-AAlolan Persian, while the latter hits Steel and Poison-types like Silvally-Steel, Ferroseed and Gardobor, as well as Rotom-fanRotom-S. Hurricane compliments these two moves good, providing coverage for Sap Sipper Miltank and chunkinghitting Eldegoss for more damage than Shadow Ball. Although U-Turn is preferred, soallowing Decidueye canto abuse the switches it forces, Roost enables it to take advantage on its Ddefensive utility more frequently. Giga Drain is also an option that offers recovery while being less exploitable then Roost.
 

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Thanks to its mixed defenses, Haze, and reliable recoveries recovery, Milotic finds itself a niche in OU as a bulky Water type Water-type. Its naturally high Special Defense help it check Pokemon such as Dragapult, Clefable, (AC) and Choice Specs Aegislash, and its typing and decent Def Defense, (AC) allow it to tank hits from Pokemon like Dracovish. Additionally, Marvel Scale allows it to become even more physically bulky when statused inflicted with status, potentially discouraging the foe to use from using status moves; however, (AC) being inflicted by Toxic poison isn't adviced advised, since it shortens the number of turns Milotic can stay in. Scald can potentially punish physical attackers with a burn. Dragon Breath gives Milotic the ability to also spread paralysis against Pokemon like Dracovish, Dragapult, (AC) or Hydreigon. The combination of Recover + Haze helps to prevent set-up setup Pokemon such as Gyarados, Kommo-O, (AC) and Corvikight from getting out of hand against Milotic. The given EVs spread alongside a Calm nature allows Milotic to avoid being 2HKO'd 2HKOed by Choice Specs Aegislash after Stealth Rock damage (RC) while still being physically bulky enough to take on Pokemon like Choice Scarf Dracovish.
 
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