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The new pool of Pokèemon kKalos introduced weren't wasn't as hyped-up as previous ones, as it was very small compared to the batches of monsPokemon other regions introduced.
- In articles, and not analyses, Pokemon with the accent is fine. Ina n analysis, you should always change it, but this was an article extract, so keeping it is fine.
- I'd also note that instead of changing a letter in the middle of the word, it's usually clearer for the writer to just rewrite the word so the change is more visible.

but, like I said,
- Here, you should mark on comma additions / removals with AC and RC. Just the punctuation with a different colour is really hard for a writer to see, so they may miss it while implementing. Something like "like I said, (AC)" makes it a lot more visible for the writer.

Pokéemon who
- Don't refer to Pokemon as who because they're not people; use which or that.

- Changes like this are also kinda hard to read imo because you're only striking out half the word, and when it stops might not be super visible to everyone. Rewriting could make it a lot more easier for a writer to notice. I notice other parts of this check like this, like "thiese," so try to focus on making your checks as readable for a writer as possible, as te=hey are the ones who have to implement your changes.

Mega-Evolution
- You're correct in removing the hyphen, but it's also not super clear so you coukd makr it on using AH or just rewriting the phrase, and even if it is seen, there was no space added so it might get mistakenly implemented as MegaEvolution.

powerful forms.
- Use formes when referring to different in battle formes like Mega Evolutions and stuff like Rotom formes.

amazingly-designed
This doesn't need to be hyphenated because the adverb ends in -ly so ti describes the designs. Stuff like defensively oriented also follow this rule.


NU.; Oonly
- The original structure was fine here imo, so this change was an unnecessary subjective change. In GP, we want to avoid unneccessary subjective changes because we want to preserve the original analysis and writer's voice as much as possible because it's their analysis, and if we change too much, we can lose their writing style. For now, just try to focus on objective things in analyses to get a better grip of the standards, then it becomes easier with experience to know what a subjective change improves readability and improves the analysis, whcih is the only times they should be made.

Skuntank and Sap Sipper Miltank resists or areis immune to Decidueye's STAB combinations
- It should be "resist or are immune to" because it's referring to two Pokemon (Skuntank and Miltank) so it's plural.
- It should be STAB combination not combinations because there is one combination of its STAB moves (the combination of Grass + Dark)

Steel and Poison-types
- When listing multiple types, use a hyphen after all of them. Steel- and Poison-types is correct.

Silvally-Steel, Ferroseed and Gardobor
- Smogon uses the serial/Oxford comma *comma before and in a list fo 3 or more), so you would need to add a comma after Ferroseed.

Hurricane compliments these two moves good,
- It should be complements not compliments because compliments refers to complimenting someone / saying good things about them.
- You're right that good isn't correct, but you could change it to something like "complements these moves well" to avoid removing the information that it's a good option. GP should always avoid removing content and changing meanings because those meanings have been quality checked.

- U-turn not U-Turn.

- Don't use abuse in analyses because of the negative connotations, so something like "take advantage of" is better.
- The change in this sentence is also somewhat unneccesary, as the original is still fine and grammatically correct.


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Its naturally high Special Defense help
- It should be helps not help here because the sentence is singular, referring to just Milotic.

and its typing and decent Def Defense, (AC) allow it to tank hits from Pokemon like Dracovish.
- You removed information here by removing its typing. GP should never remove or change content because the content was approved or added by QC. GP doesn't have that metagame knowledge, so removing approved content can lead to changing the meanings to what QC didn't want.
- Not sure why you added a comma here, you don't need one before allow.

Pokemon like Dracovish, Dragapult, (AC) or Hydreigon.
- It should be and here because Pokemon is plural. x or y is singular, and x and y is plural.

- Kommo-o not Kommo-O.
 
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Since Charizard only has a niche on Ssun teams, Torkoal is a required teammate for Charizard to function well and succeed.(Fixed a typo) Torkoal can also provide additional utility to help Charizard, such as removing Rrocks with Rapid Spin and chipping down opponentsfoes with Toxic or Stealth Rocks(not plural, right? also, foes should be used to refer to the enemy Pokemon, while opponent should be the enemy trainer.) damage. Venusaur, while already the premier sweeper for Sunsun teams, can abusebenefit from Charizard's ability to weaken and take out walls such as Mandibuzz and Toxapex.(Abuse should ONLY be used in a negative tone or way. Benefit from is way better.) In return, Venusaur can take care of Pokemon that outSpeedoutspeed Charizard thanks to Chlorophyll, (RC)such as Zeraora(The comma felt unnecessary...). Although Charizard can muscle through Specially Defensive Wallsspecially defensive walls like Blissey, it's best to accompany it with a physical breaker to take care of them easier, especially if Sunsun isn't active. For example, Darmanitan under sun can 1-OHKO them with Flare Blitz, (RC) while acting as a general revenge killer with a Choice Scarf, though the amount of recoil it will take makes it tough to manage well. Because Charizard's frailtypoor bulk makes it difficult for it to switch inside, pivots such as Blissey, Xatu, (AC)or Clefable can safely bring it into battle thanks to Teleport.

Polteageist is one of the most threatening setup sweepers in underusedUU, capable of OHKOing a majority of the tier when at +2 after Shell Smash, only being unable to reliably 1KOOHKO a few Pokemon such as Zarude, Incineroar, Umbreon, Bisharp, (AC) orand Gigalith. Its Ghost-typeGhost typing and decent Special BulkDefense enable it to set- up (RH) fairly reliably on opponentsfoes such as Heliolisk, (RC)and Noivern, making it harder for a lot of the tier to punish set upsetup and prevent a late-game(AH) clean.(Opponent refers to the enemy trainer, while foe refers to the enemy Pokemon.) Stored Power abusesmakes use of the boosts acquired by Shell Smash to boost its power to be able to more effectively target bulkier foes as well as Ghost immunities those immune to Ghost-type moves such as Heliolisk and Porygon-Z.(It is unnecessary to say "boost its power" when you already said "boosts acquired by Shell Smash". Immunities are never nouns, only to refer to traits. Also, abuse should not be used when referring to something positive the 'mon can take advantage of.) It can also one-hit OHKO Heavy-Duty Boots Chansey at +4. Giga Drain compliments Polteageist's coverage, targeting Krookodile, Obstagoon and SpDefspecially defensive Rhyperior, which are not killed by Polteageist's other moviesmoves even when boosted. Giga Drain also grants Polteageist some recovery, which can help it by healing it to 100% and be ableallow it to activate its sash if it has been chipped. A Focus Sash gives Polteageist guaranteed setup against almost any foe, allowing it to bypass Pokemon that would ordinarily OHKO it and use Shell Smash to clean-up (RH)weakened teams lacking prioritiespriority moves. White Herb is also an option to give Polteageist more bulk after setting up so it can take a hit while boosted, but the ability to set-up (RH) against almost any foe is often too useful to give up. It also struggles to take priority attacks such as Bisharp's Sucker Punch even with its Defense restored.
 
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such as removing Rrocks
"Rocks" can't be used as an alternative to "Stealth Rock", you must always use the latter.
it's best to accompany it with a physical breaker to take care of them easier
- Make sure the author always explains what type of "breaker" they're referring to; most of the time, it's a wallbreaker, but if you're not sure you can always leave a note in your check and they'll edit it upon implementing.
- "Easier" is an adjective, and it's therefore incorrect in this sentence, you'll come across these very often and you'll need to be able to tell when it's supposed to be an adjective or an adverb; in this case, the correct choice would be "more easily".
makes it difficult for it to switch inside
Always make sure your edits are made in the clearest way possible. Every GPer has their own method, but I would always recommend new amcheckers to avoid editing the words directly, but rather format the incorrect word entirely and then proceed to type the correct solution, obviously with the appropriate colors. In this case, you left an "s", which could cause confusion during the implementation process. My advice is to always go for edits like this: to switch inside in.
, pivots such as Blissey, Xatu, (AC)or Clefable
- There's a few things worth noticing here. The first sentences introduces one of Charizard's weaknesses, while the second proceeds to list solutions that could make up for this. Usually, sentences like these read better when separated by a more solid punctuation mark, mainly a semicolon, which would then be followed by adverb like "therefore". This is a more subjective approach, but it's good to learn how to handle these as well.
- The main mistake, however, was the use of "or" instead of "and", which is obviously the correct solution because the subject being listed is plural ["pivots"]

when at +2 after Shell Smash
This feels a bit unnecessary, but I understand why you made this change. Most of the time, +2 is self-explanatory, as Shell Smash is also mentioned further and it's pretty clear for the reader to understand what +2 refers to.
decent Special BulkDefense
"special bulk" is accepted and doesn't just refer to its Special Defense, but also its HP, so by changing it you also made a slight content change, albeit a very minor one.
Ghost immunities those immune to Ghost-type moves
Ghost-immune foes is perfectly accepted and less wordy.
Giga Drain compliments Polteageist's coverage
Watch out for this, it's a common mistake. Complements, not compliments; the latter means "to say something nice to somebody".

The second half of Polteageist is rly well done! Again, if you have questions feel free to reach out to us via Discord :D
 
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BarrasekwdaBarraskewda makes for a decent late-game(AH) sweeper on Rainrain teams thanks to its amazing speed tier and Swift Swim, (AC)allowing it to outspeed the entire metagame, as well as its great AtkAttack. Liquidation allows Barraskewda to 2hit-KO2HKO defensive Pokemon like Corviknight and Clefable under rain. Close Combat allows it to 2hit-KO2HKO(We ALWAYS use xHKO, where x is the number of hits it will take to KO the Pokemon. If x=1, replace 1 with O.) Ferrothorn and RotomWashRotom-W as well as safely 1KOOHKOing(Remember the "ing" suffix!) Cloyster thanks to Swift Swim;(RC, ASC) however, be careful against Ferrothorn,(RC) as Power Whip or Knock Off will cripple your chances of cleanuppingcleaning up. Psychic Fangs helps Barraskewda pressure Toxapex and Kommo-OKommo-o(The final O in Kommo-o is always lowercase.), though you must be cautious of a Burnburn from Scald when facing Toxapex. Aqua Jet is useful to revenge kill Pokemon outside of Rainrain,(RC) such as Dugtrio, weakened Zeraora and +1 Excadrill at +1. Crunch can be used if specifically targeting Dragapult and Jellicent is more desirable, but the priority from Aqua Jet is often too useful to pass on. An Adamant Naturenature grants Barraskewda a good chance to kill Clefable under rain, helps it potentially 2HKO Toxapex, and lets it always 1KOOHKO Sylveon under rain.
 
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Lunaflare thus looks a lot better so don't be disheartened by a lot of comments, and you can always pm me on discord for more feedback / to ask questions.

speed tier
- Always capitalise stats (HP / Attack / Defense / Special Attack / Special Defense / Speed), so it should be Speed tier.

owever, be careful against Ferrothorn,(RC) as Power Whip or Knock Off will cripple your chances of cleanuppingcleaning up.
- Don't refer to Pokemon as you, so you should say "cripple Barraskewda's chances."

you must be cautious of a Burnburn from Scald
- Again, Barraskewda should be cautious of a burn, not you.

such as Dugtrio, weakened Zeraora and +1 Excadrill at +1.
- Comma after Zeraora because Smogon uses the serial comma.
- +1 Excadrill is fine and accepted, so if you see someone referring to boosts in that way, it's fine to keep.

kill Clefable
- Pokemon don't die, so you don't use "kill" in analyses unless you're saying revenge kill. Instead, it can KO Clefable.
 

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Mimikyu fits best on offensive teams that appreciate it’s its ability to set-up set up easy and clean a weak opposing team in the lategame late-game (AH). These teams also benefits from Disguise, (AC) enabling Mimikyu to Revenge-Kill revenge kill (RH) a key threat at a pinch. As such Therefore, wallbreakers such as Obstagoon and Lycanroc-Dusk, who which can chip or remove checks to Mimikyu such as Skarmory, Weezing-Galar Galarian Weezing, (AC) and def Incineroar are good partners. Lycanroc Dusk Lycanroc-D also can help chip Doublade in range of Mimikyu's attacks and provide extra priority if Mimikyu fails to clean late game late-game (AH). Due to Mimikyu's low damage output, it appreciates hazards to chip opponents foes such as Jirachi into range of it’s its attacks, potentially preventing them from breaking its Disguise. As such Therefore, Stealth Rockers Rock setters such as Krookodile and Terrakion make good partners. Mimikyu also fits well on Webs Sticky Web teams due to the Speed reduction, (AC) allowing it to remove threats like Terrakion and Keldeo before they can break its Disguise as well as being a good check to Noivern on these teams, so Araquanid is a good partner to set the entry hazard. Special Araquanid can also lure and weaken or remove Skarmory, who which is one of Mimikyu's biggest checks.
 
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Mimikyu fits best on offensive teams that appreciate it’s its ability to set-up set up easy and clean a weak opposing team in the lategame late-game (AH).
- Easy should be changed to easily here. Easily is the adverb that describes the ability to set up.

at a pinch
- The phrase is "in a pinch," which often comes up with other low HP-related thngs.

def Incineroar
- Def is used as shorthand for defensive, so instead of removing it, you'd just say "defensive Incineroar"
 

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Ludicolo finds itself a unique niche on drizzle rain teams, able to take care of common bulky Waters Water-types that rain(lowercase) teams usually struggle with. Giga Drain OHKOs OHKOes Seismitoad and Gastrodon and can potentially 2hko Rotom-Wash 2HKO Rotom-W, Vaporeon,(AC) and Milotic,(AC) paving the way for most rain sweepers. Ice Beam targets Dragons Dragon-types like Dragapult and Kommo-o,(AC) and Focus Blast helps against Ferrothorn and Kyurem. However,(AC) even with Life Orb alongside rain and a Modest nature, Ludicolo struggles in killing to KO Pokemon its it is meant to target and can easily be OHKO'd OHKOed by them in return. For example, Ice Beam has a low chance at 1HKO to OHKO Dragapult, and Focus Blast only 2HKOs 2HKOes Kyurem. Additionally, Ludicolo needs to be careful against certain defensive threats such as Ferrothorn or and Toxapex. The former can take at least one Focus Blast and makes make Ludicolo a lot less threatening with Knock Off,(AC) while the latter can recover off all of Ludicolo's attacks and poison(lowercase) it, wearing it down alongside Life Orb recoil.

NP Nasty Plot Cofagrigus takes a much more offense approach to the Pokémon, taking advantage of NU's lack of checks to sturdy Ghost types checks Ghost-types by buffing its Shadow Ball to dangerous levels. Additionally, this set maintains the usefulness of Cofagrigus's Ghost-(RH)typing, taking advantage of Choice-item choice item foes like Toxicroak and Indeedee to gain chances to setup set up. Something that may immediately stand out to you is this set's last move slot moveslot. Despite this set being based around boosting Cofagrigus's SpAtk Special Attack, Body Press is oftentimes the preferred coverage,(RC) because it hits Ghost-resists and immunities Ghost-resistant and -immune foes like Silvally-(AH)Dark, Skuntank, and Indeedee-F harder than any of Cofagrigus's possible other non-boosted special coverage moves would, although Energy Ball is a great alternative that also smacks Quagsire. Cofagrigus even has the option of dropping Trick Room and running both Body Press and Energy Ball, giving it a phenomenal stall matchup at the cost of its matchup against offense teams. If you choose to do this, make sure to maximise maximize Cofagrigus's Speed IVs and invest enough evs EVs in Speed(capitalize) to outpace Clefairy.
 
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Amoonguss has rose risen in Usage usage since Zygarde's ban and challenges Tangrowth as a Grass(AH)type with Regenerator. It fits wells on bulky offensives offense due to its immunity to Toxic, having (added "having" to preserve parallelism) enough special bulk to run Black Sludge(AC) and key resistances to Fairy-, Electric-, and Water-type attacks. Its many (replaced with "numerous") for variety's sake) numerous resistances allow it to switch into many Special Attackers special attackers like Magearna, Tapu Koko(AC) and Greninja-Ash Ash-Greninja and cripple them with status. Also, Amoonguss can put to sleep or paralyse paralyze Pokemon like Mega Alakazam and Tornadus-T with Spore or Stun Spore respectively ("respectively" is unneeded here since both Mega Alakazam and Tornadus-T are affected by Spore and Stun Spore) when they switch in and can take at least one of their attacks at high health. Amoonguss can even take on the likes of Kartana and Mega Mawile. However, Amoonguss's lack of damage output hinders its offensive presence(AC) so teammates like Mega Mawile, Mega Medicham, Keldeo(AC) and Kartana can should be used to (added to improve clarity - the sentence originally implies that Amoonguss's teammates capitalize off the status Amoonguss inflicts because Amoonguss's damage output is low) capitalize of off status it inflicts. Water-types like Rotom-w Rotom-W and Slowbro-Mega Mega Slowbro appreciate Amoongus’s Amoonguss's resistance to Electric(AH)type attacks, and Steel-types like Celeestela Celesteela, Heatran(AC) and Magearna can cover for its Psychic-type weakness.
 

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Celebiii first thing i would recommend is to bold your changes and also choose a different comment colour because that yellow is basically invisible on light
key resistances to Fairy-, Electric-, and Water-type attacks. I
- "key resistances to Fairy, Electric, and Water is also accepted.

can take at least one of their attacks at high health.
- When referring to the stat, use HP instead of health.

Amoonguss's resistance to Electric(AH)type attacks,
- Both "resistance to Electric" and "resistance to Electric-type attacks are correct, so in general, keep the original if both are fine to preserve writer voice.

Overall you have a good grasp of both English grammar and Smogon standards; just make your checks more readable in future.
 
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Barrasekwda Barraskewda makes for a decent lategame late-game sweeper on Rain teams thanks to its amazing speed tier and it's ability Swift Swim,(AC) allowing it to outspeed the entire metagame.(AP) as well as Due to its great Atk Attack,(AC) Liquidation allows Barraskewda to 2hit-KO 2HKO defensive Pokemon like Corviknight and Clefable under rain. Close Combat allows it to 2hit-KO 2HKO Ferrothorn and RotomWash Rotom-W as well as safely 1KO OHKOing Cloyster.(AP) thanks to Swift Swim,(the ability doesn't help it OHKO Cloyster) however However, be careful against Ferrothorn, as Power Whip or Knock Off will cripple your chances of cleanupping cleaning up. Psychic Fangs helps Barraskewda pressure Toxapex and Kommo-O Kommo-o, though you must be cautious of a Burn burn from Scald when facing Toxapex. Aqua Jet is useful to revenge kill Pokemon outside of Rain, such as Dugtrio, weakened Zeraora,(AC) and +1 Excadrill. Crunch can be used if specifically targeting Dragapult and Jellicent is more desirable, but the priority from Aqua Jet is often too useful to pass on. An Adamant Nature nature grants Barraskewda a good chance to kill OHKO Clefable under rain, helps it potentially 2HKO Toxapex, and lets it always 1KO OHKO Sylveon under rain.
 
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First of all, I truly recommend to always bold your edits.

Rain teams thanks to its amazing speed tier and it's ability Swift Swim
- rain, just like other weather conditions, is never capitalized.
- Speed, just like any other stat, is always capitalized.
- it's = it is. In this case, you need a possessive adjective, which is "its". Always pay close attention to these.
.(AP) as well as Due to its great Atk Attack,(AC)
Not rly sure why you decided to change the structure of this. The original one wanted to emphasize which factors make Barraskewda a great late-game sweeper on rain teams, and its Attack is one of these; it doesn't rly have anything to do with Liquidation.
"[...] allowing it to outspeed the entire metagame, as well as its great Attack." -> only thing worth changing was Atk.
revenge kill Pokemon outside of Rain
same thing, rain is not capitalized.
.(AP) thanks to Swift Swim,(the ability doesn't help it OHKO Cloyster) however However
This is fine, but the edits can look kinda messy. My n.1 suggestion is to always edit what you need to remove first, then proceed to add the correct options, and then you can add a comment explaining why you made that specific change.

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Choice Specs Deciudeye Decidueye is one of the most devastating wallbreakers in Never Used NU. Only Skuntank and Sap Sipper Miltank resists or are immune to Decidueye's STAB combinations, and the former cannot reliably switch into multiple Leaf Storms multiple times. Additionally, Leaf Storm and Shadow Ball have excellent synergy, the former nails Dark-types(AH) like Silvally-dark Silvally-Dark and Persian-A Alolan Persian, while the latter hits Steel and Poison-type like Silvally-Steel, Ferroseed and Gardobor Garbodor, as well as Rotom-fan Rotom-S. Hurricane compliments these two moves good, providing coverage for Sap Sipper Miltank and chunking Eldegoss for more damage than Shadow Ball. Although U-Turn U-turn is preferred, so Decidueye can abuse the switches it forces, Roost enables it to take advantage on its Defensive defensive utility more frequently. Giga Drain is also an option that offers recovery while being less exploitable then than Roost.
 

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Choice Specs Deciudeye Decidueye is one of the most devastating wallbreakers in Never Used NU. Only Skuntank and Sap Sipper Miltank resists or are immune to Decidueye's STAB combinations combination, and the former cannot reliably switch into multiple Leaf Storms multiple times.
1. "STAB combination" instead of "STAB combinations" - Decidueye only has one STAB combination (Grass + Ghost), so it should be singular.
2. "multiple Leaf Storms" was fine in this case, so you didn't need to change it.

Additionally, Leaf Storm and Shadow Ball have excellent synergy;(comma to semicolon) the former nails Dark-types(AH) like Silvally-dark Silvally-Dark and Persian-A Alolan Persian, while the latter hits Steel-(AH) and Poison-types like Silvally-Steel, Ferroseed,(AC) and Gardobor Garbodor, as well as Rotom-fan Rotom-S.
1. There should be a semicolon over a comma after synergy; the second part of the sentence can function as a standalone sentence.
2. It should be "Steel- and Poison-types" over "Steel and Poison-type" - When listing multiple types, use a hyphen. Its also "-types" because the object in reference (like Silvally-Steel, Ferroseed, and Garbodor) is plural.
3. There should a comma after Ferroseed and before and (Smogon uses Serial commas).

Hurricane compliments complements these two moves good well, providing coverage for Sap Sipper Miltank and chunking Eldegoss for more damage than Shadow Ball.
1. "Complements" over "Compliments" - Complement is referring to making something better or enhancing it, whereas Compliment means to say good things about someone.
2. Your removal of "good" was the right thing to do, but you should replace it with something similar to avoid changing the meaning of the sentence. In this case, "complements these two moves well" makes sense.

Although U-Turn U-turn is preferred, so Decidueye can abuse utilize the switches it forces, Roost enables it to take advantage on of its Defensive defensive utility more frequently. Giga Drain is also an option that offers recovery while being less exploitable then than Roost.
1. "utilize" or some phrase that shares a similar meaning over "abuse" - abuse is used in a negative connotation, so it doesn't fit the sentence here.
2. "take advantage of" over "take advantage on"

Good work!
 
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Mimikyu fit fits best on offensive teams that appreciate it’s its (RA) ability to set-up easy set up easily and clean a weak weakened opposing team in the lategame. late-game. (Late-game is always spelled with a hyphen.) These teams also benefits benefit from Disguise, (AC) enabling Mimikyu to Revenge-Kill a key threat at a pinch revenge kill a threat to its teammates. As such, wallbreakers such as Obstagoon and Lycanroc-Dusk, Lycanroc-D who can chip or remove checks to Mimikyu such as Skarmory, Weezing-Galar Galarian Weezing, (AC) and def defensive Incineroar are good partners. Lycanroc Dusk Lycanroc-D also can can also help chip Doublade in range of be KOed by to the point where Mimikyu's attacks can KO it and provide extra priority potentially sweep if Mimikyu fails to clean late game. Due to Mimikyu's low damage output, it appreciates entry hazards to chip opponents such as Jirachi into range of being KOed by it’s its attacks, potentially preventing (RC) to prevent them from breaking its Disguise. As such, Stealth Rockers Rock setters such as Krookodile and Terrakion make good partners. Mimikyu also fits well on Webs appreciates Sticky Web support from teammates such as Araquanid due to the Speed reduction, (AC) allowing it to remove threats like Terrakion and Keldeo before they can break its Disguise as well as being a good check to checking Noivern. on these teams, so Araquanid is a good partner to set the entry hazard. Special Araquanid can also lure in and either weaken or remove Skarmory, who is one of Mimikyu's biggest checks.

Mimikyu fits best on offensive teams that appreciate its ability to set up easily and clean a weakened opposing team late-game. These teams also benefit from Disguise, enabling Mimikyu to revenge kill a threat to its teammates. As such, wallbreakers such as Obstagoon and Lycanroc-D can chip or remove checks to Mimikyu such as Skarmory, Galarian Weezing, and defensive Incineroar are good partners. Lycanroc-D can also help chip Doublade to the point where Mimikyu's attacks can KO it and potentially sweep if Mimikyu fails to clean late game. Due to Mimikyu's low damage output, it appreciates entry hazards to chip opponents such as Jirachi into range of being KOed by its attacks to prevent them from breaking its Disguise. As such, Stealth Rock setters such as Krookodile and Terrakion make good partners. Mimikyu also appreciates Sticky Web support from teammates such as Araquanid due to the Speed reduction, allowing it to remove threats like Terrakion and Keldeo before they can break its Disguise as well as checking Noivern. Araquanid can also lure in and either weaken or remove Skarmory, who is one of Mimikyu's biggest checks.
 
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Apart from being more suave, Mega Gallade has some merits over Mega Medicham. Swords Dance boost it’s Atk its Attack to greater heights, (AC) allowing it to break through bulky Pokemon like Mega Latias and Celesteela easier. Moreover, its 110-Base Speed base 110 Speed allows it to outspeed a good chunk of Over Used OverUsed, including Garchomp and nonChoice non-Choice Scarf Kartana, and its solid Special special bulk allows it to take hits such as Clefable’s Moonblast. Knock Off allows it to threaten Psychics Psychic-types like Reuniclus and Mew, who would otherwise be hard to break down, (AC) and worsen the effectiveness of switches switch-ins like Clefable and Tapu Fini, (AC) through removing their Leftovers recovery. When put together, (AC) these traits make Mega Gallade into a very strong wallbreaker. Tapu Fini makes for a good partner for Mega Gallade, (AC) as Misty Terrain will protect it from status such as Static from Zapdos and Will-o-Wisp Will-O-Wisp from Rotom-Wash. Also, Tapu Lele provides useful utility in Psychic terrain Terrain, boosting the power of Zen Headbutt greatly.
 

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enabling Mimikyu to Revenge-Kill a key threat at a pinch revenge kill a threat to its teammates.
Good catch on the spelling of "revenge kill"; however, the only other thing worth changing was the preposition "at", which should've been replaced by "in".
As such, wallbreakers such as
Generally, you'd want to being a sentence with "as such" when it's referred to a noun in a previous sentence. 90% of the time you'll encounter these, just replace them with "Therefore".
wallbreakers such as Obstagoon and Lycanroc-Dusk, Lycanroc-D who can chip or remove checks to Mimikyu such as
By removing the relative pronoun, the sentence can't make sense. "Teammates like x y that can deal with z are good partners" -> you see? It's pretty clear that something's missing, and this is not grammatically correct. Just make sure "who" is never used to refer to Pokemon; "that" would've been the correct option.
provide extra priority potentially sweep if Mimikyu fails to clean late game.
These are two very different things, and unfortunately this is a very subjective change that can't be made without approval of a QC member. "Extra priority" is perfectly fine as it is, just make sure "late-game" is always hyphenated.
it appreciates entry hazards to chip opponents such as Jirachi into range of being KOed by it’s its attacks, potentially preventing (RC) to prevent them from breaking its Disguise.
Major thing worth changing here was "opponents", which should never be used to refer to Pokemon, but only players. The last part of the sentence wasn't incorrect, so there was no point in changing it.
Mimikyu also fits well on Webs appreciates Sticky Web support from teammates such as Araquanid due to the Speed reduction, (AC) allowing it to remove threats like Terrakion and Keldeo before they can break its Disguise as well as being a good check to checking Noivern.
This was good, just remember that a comma is needed before "as well as" in this case!
either weaken or remove Skarmory, who
Again, make sure "who" is never used as a pronoun to refer to Pokemon!


allows it to threaten Psychics Psychic-types like Reuniclus and Mew, who would
Same thing here, "which" is the correct option here, as "who" should only be used when referred to players.
like Clefable and Tapu Fini, (AC) through removing their Leftovers recovery.
A comma isn't needed before "through", the sentence can't really stand on its own without a subject.
as Misty Terrain will protect it from status such as Static from Zapdos and Will-o-Wisp Will-O-Wisp from Rotom-Wash
This was good, but if we want to be really picky, then we should probably change the word "status", which is slightly vague and incorrect here. Status = paralysis, burn, poison. Static = ability. Will-O-Wisp = move. "[...] protect it from status effects inflicted by Zapdos's Static and Rotom-W's Will-O-Wisp" -> this could've been a possible solution

Lunaflare there were definitely some good subjective changes that didn't alter the analysis's content, but make sure that what you're adding mainly focuses on the grammar and doesn't interfere with the QC universe, also watch out for the main comma rules & minor stuff such as hyphens and spelling! Keep it up!

UrAverageHuman there wasn't much to change in this sample, but definitely good job for your first try! Last sentence was a bit tricky, so I can't blame you for leaving it as it was :p
 
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Polteageist is one of the most threatening setup sweepers in underused UU, capable of OHKO a majority of the tier when at +2 capable of threatening an OHKO on the majority of the tier after a Shell Smash boost, only being unable to reliably 1KO OHKO a few Pokemon such as Zarude, Incineroar, Umbreon, Bisharp or Gigalith. Its Ghost-typing and decent Special Bulk enable it to set-up fairly reliably on opponents such as Heliolisk (RC) and Noivern, making it harder for a lot of the tier to punish it setting up and prevent a lategame clean sweep. Stored Power abuses the boosts acquired by Shell Smash to boost its power to be. This makes it able to more effectively target bulkier foes, (AC) as well as Ghost immunities immune Pokemon such as Heliolisk and Porygon-Z. It can also one-hit KO OHKO Heavy-Duty Boots Chansey at +4 after two Shell Smash boosts. Giga Drain compliments Polteageist's coverage, targeting Krookodile, Obstagoon and SpDef Rhyperior, which are not killed KO'd by Polteageist's other movies moves even when boosted. Giga Drain also grants Polteageist some recovery (RC) which can help it healing to 100% full health and be able to activate its sash Focus Sash if it has been chipped. A Focus Sash gives Polteageist guaranteed setup against almost any foe, allowing it to bypass Pokemon that would ordinarily OHKO it and use Shell Smash to clean-up weakened teams lacking priorities. White Herb is also an option to give Polteageist more bulk after setting up so it can take a hit while boosted, but the ability to set-up set up against almost any foe is often too useful to give up. It also struggles to take priority attacks such as Bisharp's Sucker Punch even with its Defence restored.
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Barrasekwda makes for a decent late-game (hyphen) sweeper on rain teams thanks to its amazing Speed tier and Swift Swim, (comma) allowing it to outspeed the entire metagame, as well as its great Atk Attack. Liquidation allows Barraskewda to 2hit-KO 2HKO defensive Pokemon like Corviknight and Clefable under rain. Close Combat allows it to 2hit-KO 2HKO Ferrothorn and RotomWash Rotom-W as well as safely 1KO OHKO Cloyster thanks to Swift Swim, however, be careful against Ferrothorn, as Power Whip or Knock Off will cripple your chances of cleanupping sweeping (I think this sounds better). Psychic Fangs helps Barraskewda pressure Toxapex and Kommo-o, though you it must be cautious of a burn from Scald when facing Toxapex. Aqua Jet is useful to revenge kill Pokemon outside of rain, such as Dugtrio, weakened Zeraora, (comma) and +1 Excadrill. Crunch can be used if specifically targeting Dragapult and Jellicent is more desirable nts if this helps makes it difficult to read, but the priority from Aqua Jet is often too useful to pass on. An Adamant nature grants Barraskewda a good chance to kill KO Clefable under rain, helps it potentially 2HKO Toxapex, and lets it always 1KO OHKO Sylveon under rain.
 
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Ludicolo finds itself a unique niche on drizzle rain teams, able with the ability to take care of common bulky Waters Water-types that Rain rain teams usually struggle with. Giga Drain OHKOs OHKOes Seismitoad and Gastrodon, (AC) and can potentially 2hko Rotom-Wash 2HKO Rotom-W, Vaporeon, (AC) and Milotic, (AC) paving the way for most rain sweepers. Ice Beam targets Dragons Dragon-types like Dragapult and Kommo-o, (AC) and while Focus Blast helps against Ferrothorn and Kyurem. However even with Life Orb alongside rain and a Modest nature, Ludicolo struggles in killing to KO Pokemon its it's meant to target, (AC) and can easily be OHKO'd OHKOed by them in return. For example, Ice Beam has a low chance at 1HKO to OHKO Dragapult, and Focus Blast only 2HKOs 2HKOes Kyurem. Additionally, Ludicolo needs to be careful against certain defensive threats such as Ferrothorn or and Toxapex. The former can take at least one Focus Blast, (AC) and makes Ludicolo a lot less threatening with Knock Off, (AC) while the latter can recover off all of Ludicolo's attacks and Poison poison it with Toxic, wearing it down alongside Life Orb recoil.
 
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Amoonguss has rose risen in Usage usage since Zygarde's ban and challenges Tangrowth as a Grass type with Regenerator. It fits wells on bulky offensives offensive teams due to its immunity to Toxic, enough special bulk to run Black Sludge, (AC) and key resistances to Fairy-, Electric-, and Water-type moves. Its many resistances allow it to switch into many "Many" doesn't need to be repeated here to get the point Special Attackers special attackers like Magearna, Tapu Koko, (AC) and Greninja-Ash Ash-Greninja and cripple them with status. Also, Amoonguss can sleep or paralyse when Pokemon like Mega Alakazam and Tornadus-T with Spore or Stun Spore respectively when they switch in, Amoonguss and can take at least one of their attacks at high health and put them to sleep or paralyse them with Spore or Stun Spore respectively. Reordered this section so that points with similar intent go together. Amoonguss can even take on the likes of Kartana and Mega Mawile. However, Amoonguss's lack of damage output hinders its offensive presence, (AC) so teammates like Mega Mawile, Mega Medicham, Keldeo, (AC) and Kartana can capitalize of on the status it inflicts. Water-types like Rotom-w Rotom-W and Slowbro-Mega Mega Slowbro appreciate Amoongus’s Amoonguss's resistance to Electric. (FS) , and This should be split into two sentences because it is two separate points, the Electric resistance does not affect the Steel-types in any way. Steel-types like Celeestela, Celesteela, Heatran, (AC) and Magearna can cover for its Psychic-type weakness.


Thanks to its mixed Defenses defenses, Haze, and reliable recoveries recovery, Milotic finds itself a niche in OU as a bulky Water type. Its naturally high special defense Special Defense help helps it check Pokemon such as Dragapult, Clefable and specs Choice Specs Aegislash, and its typing and decent Defense allow it to tank hits from Pokemon like Dracovish. Additionally, Marvel Scale allows it to become even more physically bulky when statused, potentially discouraging the foe to use from using status moves; however, (AC) being inflicted by Toxic isn't adviced advised, since it shortens the number of turns Milotic can stay in. Scald can potentially punish attackers with a burn. Dragon Breath gives Milotic the ability to also spread Paralysis paralysis against Pokemon like Dracovish, Dragapult and or Hydreigon. The combination of Recover + and Haze helps to prevent set-up (RH) Pokemon such as Gyarados, Kommo-O Kommo-o, (AC) and Corvikight Corviknight from getting out of hand against overwhelming Milotic. The given EVs EV spread alongside a Calm Nature nature allows Milotic to avoid being 2HKO'd (RA) by Choice Specs Aegislash after Stealth Rock damage, while still being physically bulky enough to take on Pokemon like Choice Scarf Dracovish.
 

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capable of OHKO a majority of the tier when at +2 capable of threatening an OHKO on the majority of the tier after a Shell Smash boost
Only thing worth changing here was the "verb", which is supposed to be used with its -ing form if preceded by "capable of" -> capable of OHKOing a majority [...]"
a few Pokemon such as Zarude, Incineroar, Umbreon, Bisharp or Gigalith
Object being listed is plural, which means you can't use "or" as a conjunction; "and" would be the correct choice here.
In addition, Smogon uses serial comma (x, y, and z) -> comma before the last element listed if there are 3 or more.
Its Ghost-typing and decent Special Bulk enable it to set-up fairly reliably on opponents such as Heliolisk (RC) and Noivern, making it harder for a lot of the tier to punish it setting up and prevent a lategame clean sweep.
Let's tackle each error one by one:
- Ghost typing, not Ghost-typing. A hyphen is only needed for "Ghost-types like Spectrier and Gastly [...]"
- Special Bulk -> neither of these two words are capitalized. The only instances where "Special" would have to be capitalized is when it indicates Special Attack and Special Defense.
- set up, not set-up. A hyphen is not needed for this verb. Set-up can be used as an adjective, however, to indicate a Pokemon that has successfully set up.
- "opponents" can only be used to refer to opposing players, use foes when you're talking about opposing Pokemon.
- "[...] to punish setup" was the correct solution here, as "setup" is a noun indicating the act of setting up.
- late-game, not lategame.
- clean / sweep are pretty much always interchangeable, there really is no point to replace one with the other.
Stored Power abuses the boosts
Never use the word "abuse", it holds a very negative connotation that is not really appropriate in almost any Pokmon-related context you'll come across here on Smogon. Instead, you can use "take advantage of" or "exploit".
, (AC) as well as Ghost immunities immune Pokemon such as
A comma isn't really needed before "as well as", as it's pretty much nothing more than a substitute for "and".
The second change was correct; however, make sure you spell it correctly: Ghost-immune Pokemon, not Ghost immune Pokemon.
at +4 after two Shell Smash boosts
Again, same thing, no point in changing this, it's pretty clear who's at +4 and which move is used to gain such boosts.
Giga Drain compliments Polteageist's coverage, targeting Krookodile, Obstagoon and SpDef Rhyperior, which are not killed KO'd by Polteageist's
- Compliment -> to say sth nice to someone. The correct word here is "complements"
- specially defensive [Pokemon name], not SpDef [Pokemon name. The shortened version of the stats names are only used in the importable set that's provided at the beginning of the analysis, and SpDef isn't even the correct one, we use SpD.
- KOed, not KO'd.
Giga Drain also grants Polteageist some recovery (RC) which can help
A comma is indeed needed before "which", as you're introducing a non-restrictive sentence. You can find more about this here.
allowing it to bypass Pokemon that would ordinarily OHKO it and use Shell Smash to clean-up weakened
Clean up, not clean-up.
even with its Defence restored
Defense, not Defence.

Abhisdn417 There's definitely a bit of work to be done, I recommend going through the resources linked in the OP, as they cover a good portion of the main rules you'll need to watch out for when making changes. Perhaps you can simply start with the Tricks of the Trade, which lists the major ones! Obviously, we're all still available to answer your question in our Discord server.

as well as safely 1KO OHKO Cloyster thanks to Swift Swim, however, be careful against Ferrothorn
A sentence starting with "however" (or nevertheless, therefore & other more solid adverbs) should be either preceded by a period or, in this case, a semicolon.
Crunch can be used if specifically targeting Dragapult and Jellicent is more desirable nts if this helps makes it difficult to read
If you remove that part the sentence stops making sense. Think of "specifically targeting Dragapult and Jellicent" as the whole subject, "Crunch can be used if x, but the priority [...]" -> you see?

Light Sanctity the rest is good! On a personal note, I'd recommend starting doing amchecks only from here on, as it's pretty clear that you can work with small bits of texts, you just have to tackle more complex ones like full analysis in order to have a better understanding of the more complex rules!
 

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Ludicolo finds itself a unique niche on drizzle rain teams, able with the
This is not a bad change; however, I'm not rly a fan of starting sentences with "with". One possible solution would be to slightly alter the structure, like this: "[...] rain teams,(RC) able thanks to its ability to take care [...]". Better, no?
Giga Drain OHKOs OHKOes Seismitoad and Gastrodon, (AC) and can potentially
A comma isn't rly needed here, as "can" still belongs to the main sentence and refers to Giga Drain, that's why the subject isn't repeated again; the 2nd sentence couldn't stand on its own without it, try reading it as a separate and independent clause "and can potentially 2HKO" -> no subject, therefore impossible to stand on its own.
However even with Life Orb alongside rain and a Modest nature Ludicolo struggles
Always make sure a comma is added after "however". In this case, a second comma is needed after "nature; think of the whole beat going from "even" to "nature" as a parenthetical element -> a word or group of words that interrupts the flow of a sentence and adds additional (but nonessential) information to that sentence.
Pokemon its it's meant to target, (AC) and can easily be OHKO'd OHKOed
Same thing here, if you want to separate the two sentences with a comma (it's not rly needed but you're free to do so), you must add the subject again in the second one.
The former can take at least one Focus Blast, (AC) and makes
Same part 2

UrAverageHuman you definitely have potential, very solid work! I recommend going through some of the comma rules, which you can find in pretty much all the resources available. Next step is amchecks for sure, give it a try!

challenges Tangrowth as a Grass type with Regenerator.
First and foremost, always make sure to bold your changes. This is absolutely fundamental!
Watch out for the spelling of types indicating Pokemon, it's Grass-type, not Grass type.
Also, Amoonguss can sleep or paralyse when Pokemon like Mega Alakazam and Tornadus-T with Spore or Stun Spore respectively when they switch in, Amoonguss and can take at least one of their attacks at high health and put them to sleep or paralyse them with Spore or Stun Spore respectively.
This is rly good! A few things though:
- when you're adding punctuation marks, always make sure to leave it in a comment (whether it is the same color for additions or comments is up to you, as long as it's bolded :p)
- Smogon uses American English spelling, so it's paralyze, not paralyse.
- "respectively" is always preceded (and followed if the sentence continues) by a comma.
Water-types like Rotom-w Rotom-W and Slowbro-Mega Mega Slowbro appreciate Amoongus’s Amoonguss's resistance to Electric. (FS) , and This should be split into two sentences because it is two separate points, the Electric resistance does not affect the Steel-types in any way. Steel-types like Celeestela, Celesteela, Heatran, (AC) and Magearna can cover for its Psychic-type weakness.
This was already split into two sentences. "[...] appreciate Amoonguss's resistance to Electric, and (comma + new subject = beginning of new sentence, the comma is simply used to have a less solid break between the two sentences, as this is supposed to be the section regarding teammates.) Steel-types like [...]"
can cover for its Psychic-type weakness.
"Cover for" was perfectly fine as it was.
Milotic finds itself a niche in OU as a bulky Water type
Again, watch out for the spelling of this, it's easy to miss!
Pokemon such as Dragapult, Clefable and specs Choice Specs Aegislash
Don't forget that we use serial commas, so another comma before the 3rd and last element of the list is always needed!
The combination of Recover + and Haze helps to prevent set-up (RH)
Make sure this is clear, the author might still think that the two words need to be separated, and since we're talking about the act of setting up, the correct option is "setup". You can simply mark the whole word with red and write the correct one next to it in blue, it's much clearer and simpler for the writer.
allows Milotic to avoid being 2HKO'd
Removing the apostrophe was correct, but make sure the spelling is correct as well. It's 2HKOed.
after Stealth Rock damage, while still being physically bulky enough to take on
A comma isn't needed before "while" here, as it's not really working as an adversative conjunction, but rather as a coordinating one. In addition, by separating the two sentences you'll realize how the second one can't really stand on its own without a subject!

TailGlowVM overall solid work! I recommend going through some of the basic spelling rules and working on fixing the formatting, since it can really cause confusion during the implementation process!
 

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Zeraora makes for a very splashable effective wallbreaker thanks to its extremely colorful coverages and incredibly high Speed- tier, outspeeding nearly the entire metagame. This set in particular allows it to lure in bulky Ground-types like Hippowdon orand Seismitoad and lower their effectiveness with Grass Knot, paving the way for its teammates to clean in the late-game(AH). Opting for Knock Off meanallows Zeraora willto be able to cripple Rotom-Heat and reliably damage Dragapult; on the other hand Play Rough improves its matchup against Kommo-Oo and maintains coverage for Dragapult. Pivots such as Corviknight and Teleport Clefable help to get Zeraora safely inside the field switch in safely, especially against Hippowdon and Seismitoad, since it's still vulnerable to their moves. Speaking of Hippowdon and Seismitoad, teammates that appreciate them being under pressure such as Rotom-Heat and Terrakion enjoy Zeraora's presence. Also, Rotom-H can still be too problematic for Zeraora, therefore,(AC) defensive switches like Seismitoad and Gastrodon prove to be useful teammates.
 
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