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Last intermediate sob. I was unsure about a few things.
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Chien PaoChien-Paoappreciates Mandibuzz defogging awayremoving entry hazards with Defog to prevent it from being worn down by hazardsthem. repetition It can also bring Chien PaoChien-Pao in safely using a slow U-turn. Mandibuzz is a great switch inswitch-in to FightingFighting-type attacks from enemiesfoes(1) like Choice Scarf Sneasler and ScarfGreat Tusk,(AC) which Chien PaoChien-Pao is extremely vulnerable to (RC)(2) as well as being capable of checking set up sweepers like Azumarill orand Scizor with Foul Play. In return, Chien-Pao deals with opponents whichfoes that can cause Mandibuzz problems like Sandy Shocks orand Baxcalibur. Kingambit has impressive offensive synergy with Chien PaoChien-Pao due to its neutrality to Fairy-type (RC)moves and being able to eliminate opponentsfoes like Hatterene with Iron Head (RC)andas well as Choice Scarf Flutter Mane with Sucker Punch after rocksStealth Rock damage. (3) In return,(AC)Chien-PaoChien Pao hits threats to Kingambit like DDDragon Dance Dragonite, Iron Treads, Landorus-TherianLandorus-T,(AC) and defensive Gliscor.
1. I assumed enemies is not acceptable as I've never seen it written in an analysis before.
2. I'm unsure if the comma should have been removed here.
3. I was unsure if the structure of the original sentence was acceptable. I restructured it because "being able to eliminate" is the verb phrase for both Hatterene and Flutter Mane and seperating just "Choice Scarf Flutter Mane" into its one section looked wrong. I don't really have a technical justification which is why I am doubtful about it.
It can also bring Chien PaoChien-Pao in safely using a slow U-turn. Mandibuzz is a great switch inswitch-in to FightingFighting-type attacks from enemiesfoes(1) like ChoiceScarf Sneasler and ScarfGreat Tusk,(AC) which Chien PaoChien-Pao is extremely vulnerable to (RC)(2) as well as being capable of checking set up sweepers like Azumarill orand Scizor with Foul Play.
- you missed the ambiguity with "It can also bring Chien-Pao in safely" the sentence immediately before this starts with Chien-Pao as its subject, and the "it" in that sentence also refers to Chien-Pao. because of that, starting the next sentence with "It" naturally sounds like you're still talking about Chien-Pao, which sounds like Chien-Pao is bringing itself in?
therefore, this should be "Mandibuzz can also bring Chien-Pao in safely"
- for your first doubt about changing "enemies" to "foes" should actually be reverted! don't worry your instinct makes sense because we use "foe" for opposing Pokemon a lot, but "enemy" is also accepted by the Spelling and Grammar Standards. in Section 2.2: Grammar conventions the standards say "Enemy" and "opposing Pokemon" are also accepted fixes!
- you correctly changed "Scarf Sneasler" to "Choice Scarf Sneasler" and "Tusk" to "Great Tusk" but be careful! you accidentally removed the Scarf from Great Tusk in the process. the original is referring to both Pokemon as Choice Scarf users, so "Choice Scarf Sneasler and Great Tusk" can now read like only Sneasler is holding Choice Scarf. the least intrusive fix would be:
"Choice Scarf Sneasler and Choice Scarf Great Tusk" we never want a GP changes we make to accidentally alter the approved QC content, even slightly (unless you're failiar with the metagame and are QC yourself :p) when making direct changes remember to preserve as much of the original wording as possible
- for the second doubt you had, the comma you removed after "to" actually needs to stay, but this isn't really an "as well as" rule "which Chien-Pao is extremely vulnerable to" is basically extra information inserted into the sentence to explain the Fighting-type attacks Chien-Pao is weak to, because it's extra information, it needs a comma before and after it
if we took this entire sentence:
"Mandibuzz is a great switch-in to Fighting-type attacks from enemies like Choice Scarf Sneasler and Choice Scarf Great Tusk, which Chien-Pao is extremely vulnerable to, as well as being capable of checking setup sweepers like Azumarill and Scizor with Foul Play"
if we removed the bolded part entirely, the sentence would still work: "Mandibuzz is a great switch-in to Fighting-type attacks ... as well as being capable of checking setup sweepers..." that's how you can tell the "which" part is extra information rather than something the sentence needs to make sense. since it's extra info, it gets wrapped in commas, Fleur's notes specifically say that non-essential clauses should be set off by a pair of commas.
heres a simple example:
"Dragonite, which is weak to Ice, can still set up.
"which is weak to Ice" is extra information, so it gets wrapped in commas
- last thing in this section but you missed changing "set up sweepers" to "setup sweepers". "set up" is the verb, while "setup" is the noun / modifier
here, "setup" is describing what kind of sweepers Azumarill and Scizor are, so it's "setup sweepers"
"Azumarill can set up" = verb
"Azumarill is a setup sweeper" = noun/modifier
In return, Chien-Pao deals with opponents whichfoes that can cause Mandibuzz problems like Sandy Shocks orand Baxcalibur.
- no notes here, but did want to mention the "opponents" to "foes" changes here are correct! this is different from "enemies" because "opponent" specifically refers to the human battler, whereas Sandy Shocks and Baxcalibur
Kingambit has impressive offensive synergy with Chien PaoChien-Pao due to its neutrality to Fairy-type (RC)moves and being able to eliminate opponentsfoes like Hatterene with Iron Head (RC)andas well as Choice Scarf Flutter Mane with Sucker Punch after rocksStealth Rock damage. (3)
for your third doubt, you were right to notice that the original Kingambit sentence has an awkward structure, but the issue isn't really the separation between Hatterene and Flutter Mane. the awkward bit comes earlier:
"due to its neutrality to Fairy-type, being able to eliminate foes like..."
that structure can make "being able to eliminate..." sound like a result of Kingambit's Fairy neutrality, as though being neutral to Fairy is what enables Kingambit to KO Hatterene and Flutter Mane, they're actually supposed to be two separate reasons Kingambit synergises with Chien-Pao:
its neutrality to Fairy-type
its ability to eliminate those Fairy-types
so the cleanest and least intrusive fix is to make those two ideas parallel:
"Kingambit has impressive offensive synergy with Chien-Pao due to its neutrality to Fairy-type and ability to eliminate foes like Hatterene with Iron Head and Choice Scarf Flutter Mane with Sucker Punch after Stealth Rock."
changing "and" to "as well as" between Hatterene and Flutter Mane isn't needed btw, the original "and" works perfectly once the unnecessary comma before it is removed, so changing it to "as well as" would just be a lateral change
also, adding "moves" after "Fairy-type" isn't wrong, but it isn't necessary either. "neutrality to Fairy-type" already communicates the matchup, so keeping that wording is the less intrusive option
- one really small thing changing "rocks" to "Stealth Rock" is correct, but you don't need to add "damage" afterwards... "after Stealth Rock" already means after taking Stealth Rock damage. "damage" is only ever necessary in situations like "Stealth Rock chip damage" because "chip" can't stand alone as a noun, but there's no similar issue here sooo "afterStealth Rock" is fine
In return,(AC)Chien-PaoChien Pao hits threats to Kingambit like DDDragon Dance Dragonite, Iron Treads, Landorus-TherianLandorus-T,(AC) and defensive Gliscor.
i know this ended up being a long ass feedback post, but that's genuinely more because the mistakes here were a lot more nuanced than in your previous exercises rather than because you did badly. at this point, you seem pretty comfortable with most of the objective rules, and a lot of what we're getting into now is stuff like ambiguity, least intrusive changes, and knowing when something that feels awkward actually justifies a change. i also really liked the comments you left, especially where you recognised something felt off but weren't sure you had a technical justification for changing it, really strong attempt overall
Cloyster is a strong late gamelate-game presence on Hyper Offensehyper offense teams with powerful wall breakerswallbreakers and set upsetup sweepers. It struggles to break through bulky Water typesWater-types and other Ice resistsIce-resistant Pokemon since it lacks coverage; Serperior(Dont you mean Cloyster here)OHKOsOHKOes them with super-effective STABssuper effective STAB moves, (RC) while pressuring other opponentsfoes with its boosted special attackSpecial Attack. Cloyster also has a bad matchup intoagainstInfernape and Breloom, (AC) as they have access to super-effectivepriortiysuper effective priority moves such as Vacuum Wave and Mach Punch. Defoggers like Altaria-MegaMega Altaria, Hydreigon, (AC) or Gliscor help Cloyster,(AC)as it is relied on to switch in often and it cannot do so due to its vulnerability to Stealth RocksStealth Rock.
Welcome! Glad to see your interest in GP! I highly recommend using the GP formatting tool when doing checks, as it saves so much time by doing the formatting for you automatically. You can find the tool, as well as instructions for how to use it, under the "Formatting GP Checks" section in the OP of this thread (the OP also contains other GP resources that are very useful, so be sure to look through all of them). I'll point out any formatting errors in my feedback, but just know that using the tool should fix all of those.
Cloyster is a strong late gamelate-game presence on Hyper Offensehyper offense teams with powerful wall breakerswallbreakers and set upsetup sweepers.
Good work with all the changes here! With capitalization fixes, the GP tool will only show the change on the first letter, so it will look like "...presence on hyper offense teams...." The same applies for your "Special Attack" change in the next sentence.
It struggles to break through bulky Water typesWater-types and other Ice resistsIce-resistant Pokemon since it lacks coverage; Serperior(Dont you mean Cloyster here)OHKOsOHKOes them with super-effective STABssuper effective STAB moves, (RC) while pressuring other opponentsfoes with its boosted special attackSpecial Attack.
From the "Commas" heading under "Section 1: English Grammar" of the GP Beginner Notes document, commas should be used before "as" and "since" whenever they are used to mean "because" (though "because" itself does not need a comma before it). Here, "since" is indeed used to mean "because," as it is indicating the causation between lacking coverage and struggling to break through certain Pokemon, so a comma should be used before it.
I'll get to the substance of your comment in a bit, but I first wanted to caution you about what things you highlight in your add color vs. your comment color. Anything that is in your comment color should not be a part of the original text, and it should not be a part of your direct changes either. Here, "Serperior" is part of the original text, so it should be left unformatted; instead, you should just leave the comment after the word "Serperior." Using the GP tool will make sure this doesn't happen.
As for the point you made, it actually should be Serperior, which is being suggested as a potential teammate for Cloyster. The part before the semicolon explicitly says that "it," which is standing in for "Cloyster," struggles to break through bulky Water-types and other Ice-resistant Pokemon; it wouldn't make much sense if we were talking about how Cloyster actually OHKOes those same Pokemon immediately after, as this would undermine the point made in the first clause.
When you are suggesting to remove a comma, you should just delete the comma when you leave the (RC) comment. Also, for consistency's sake, all of your comments should be italicized. The GP tool will do both of these for you.
Cloyster also has a bad matchup intoagainstInfernape and Breloom, (AC) as they have access to super-effectivepriortiysuper effective priority moves such as Vacuum Wave and Mach Punch.
Defoggers like Altaria-MegaMega Altaria, Hydreigon, (AC) or Gliscor help Cloyster,(AC)as it is relied on to switch in often and it cannot do so due to its vulnerability to Stealth RocksStealth Rock.
Here, the examples being provided are for a plural category ("Defoggers"), so the list of examples should also be plural, meaning it should use "and" rather than "or." If the category were singular, then "or" would be correct (for example, "A Defogger like Mega Altaria, Hydreigon, or Gliscor").
Whenever you have two independent clauses separated by a FANBOYS ("For," "And," "Nor," "But," "Or," "Yet," "So") conjunction, a comma should be used before the conjunction. Here, "it is relied on to switch in often" is an independent clause, and so is "it cannot do so due to its vulnerability to Stealth Rock." Since these two independent clauses are separated by "and," there should be a comma before the "and."
Good work here overall! Make sure to familiarize yourself with the GP formatting tool and acquaint yourself with the other resources found in the OP of this thread, as they are very useful for learning GP. Let me know via forum PM or Discord if you have any questions about my feedback or anything else related to GP; otherwise, feel free to try another Beginner exercise!
Ceruledge is an exceptional early gameearly-game breaker on Fire-teamsFire teams,(AC) as it has access to strong STABs(RC)STAB moves and priority. Swords Dance allows it to setupset up quickly, enabling it to break opponents who would otherwise take hits like Toxapex or Goodra-Hisui. Poltergeist is essential for Ceruledge to hit Fire resistsFire-resistant Pokemon like Gouging-FireGouging Fire, Toxapex, Skeledirge,(AC) and Heatran,(AC) as it is otehrwiseotherwise has a bad matchup intoagainst them. Weak Armor paired with Focus Sash provides a speed boost to Ceruledge (RC) while also preventing it from being OHKOdOHKOed if there are no hazards.
- changing "early game" to "early-game", "Fire-teams" to "Fire teams", adding the comma before "as", and changing "STABs" to "STAB moves" are all correct, nice job!
- you did miss one thing with "breaker", though. "Breaker" isn't accepted on its own in analyses; it should be either "wallbreaker" or "stallbreaker" depending on what the Pokemon is doing. Here, Ceruledge is a wallbreaker, so this should be:
this is covered in the GP Beginner Notes under "Other Formatting", which specifically says that "breaker" can't be used on its own.
Swords Dance allows it to setupset up quickly, enabling it to break opponentswho would otherwise take hits like Toxapex orGoodra-Hisui.
- changing "setup" to "set up" is correct! "set up" is the verb, while "setup" is the noun
there are a few things you missed later in the sentence:
- "opponents" should be "foes". "Opponent" refers to the opposing player, while "foe" refers to the opposing Pokemon. this is explicitly covered in the Spelling & Grammar Standards
Marshadow can pressure foes such as Dragapult and Gholdengo with its Ghost-type STAB moves, often forcing the opponent to switch.
- "who" should be "that". Pokemon aren't referred to with "who"; the Spelling & Grammar Standards specify that "who", "he", and "she" shouldn't be used for Pokemon, with "which", "that", and "it" used instead.
- "or" should be "and" here because Toxapex and Hisuian Goodra are both examples of Pokemon that can take these hits rather than mutually exclusive alternatives. the GP Beginner Notes go over "and" vs "or" under the singular/plural section.
- "Goodra-Hisui" should be "Hisuian Goodra". Regional formes are written as "Alolan X", "Galarian X", "Hisuian X", etc. this is covered in both the GP Beginner Notes and the Spelling & Grammar Standards.
Poltergeist is essential for Ceruledge to hit Fire resistsFire-resistant Pokemon like Gouging-FireGouging Fire, Toxapex, Skeledirge,(AC) and Heatran,(AC) as itis otehrwiseotherwise has a bad matchup intoagainst them.
- "Fire resists" to "Fire-resistant Pokemon" is correct! "Resist" can't be used as a noun to refer to a Pokemon
- removing the hyphen from "Gouging Fire", adding the Oxford comma after "Skeledirge", fixing the typo in "is otehrwise", adding the comma before "as", and changing "into" to "against" are all correct, great job here!
- there's still an ambiguity with "it otherwise has a bad matchup against them". Since the sentence starts with Poltergeist, "it" can read as though Poltergeist itself has a bad matchup against these Pokemon, when the intended subject is Ceruledge. This should be clarified to:
"as Ceruledge otherwise has a bad matchup against them."
this is more of a clarity issue than an objective formatting rule. Fleur's notes specifically cover wording that creates unintended or ambiguous meanings and emphasize making sure the intended subject is clear
Weak Armor paired with Focus Sash provides a speed boost to Ceruledge (RC) while also preventing it from being OHKOdOHKOed if there are no hazards.
- removing the comma before "while also" and changing "OHKOd" to "OHKOed" are both correct!
- "speed" should be "Speed" here. When referring to one of the actual Pokemon stats, Attack, Defense, Special Attack, Special Defense, and Speed are capitalized. this is covered in the GP Beginner Notes.
- "hazards" should be "entry hazards", since this is the first mention of hazards in the paragraph. the GP Beginner Notes "Other Formatting" section specifies that the first mention per paragraph should be "entry hazards"; after that, "hazards" on its own is fine.
the main things i'd keep in mind for your next check is to go over some of the ctrl + f proof reading method for stuff like "breaker", opponent/foe, "who", regional formes, stat capitalization, and entry hazards. i'd also keep an eye on ambiguous pronouns like the "it" in the Poltergeist sentence, since that's the sort of thing that can be easy to gloss over even when the sentence is technically readable. nice work overall
In section 4 of the beginner notes doc, there's a list of words that we recommend using ctrl + f for in a text to check that all the errors associated with those words hae been covered off.
For example, if you ctrl + f for the word 'and', you have every instance highlighted, so you can see if the and/but/or commas are correct, if it should be 'or' instead due to the and/or rule, and if there are Oxford commas if needed. Ctrl + f for the word 'as' highlights each one so you can check each instance to see if the word means 'because' etc.
It may seem time consuming on paper to check every word on that list, but what it does instead is proofread systematically for each common error instead of reading over and over trying to remember every possible error at once.
Brave Bird hits threatening Grass-Types and Fighting TypesFighting-types such as Amoonguss, Celebi,(AC)andor Infernape super-effectively(RC)super effectively while also having the ability to revenge-kill weakneedrevenge kill weakened slower opponentsfoes. Z-Brave BirdSupersonic Skystrike OHKOs Latias and Hydreigon after Stealth RocksRock,(AC) but running it means Crobat cannot run Black Sludge. U-turn allows Crobat to utilise its high Speed to pivot out of Flying resistsFlying-resistant Pokemon that it has a bad match up into(RC)matchup against while keeping up momentum for its team. Taunt is essential,(AC) as it shuts down defensive Pokemon such as Alomomola (RC) and prevents opponentsfoes such as Hippowdon from being able to setupsetup Entry hazards .
some words will be highlighted to make it easier to point out things
i've also marked areas that need a comma with ",(AC)"
great job, i'm just gonna touch on the stuff you missed rather than going through every sentence, since you got the vast majority of the changes here right
Brave Bird hits threatening Grass-Types and Fighting TypesFighting-types such as Amoonguss, Celebi,(AC)andor Infernape super-effectively(RC)super effectively while also having the ability to revenge-kill weakneedrevenge kill weakened, (AC) slower opponentsfoes.
- really good job here! all of these changes you've done are correct
- you did miss one thing with "weakened slower foes", though. this should be "weakened, slower foes". "weakened" and "slower" are both independently describing "foes", so they're coordinate adjectives and need a comma between them.
an easy way to check this is whether you can put "and" between them or reverse their order:
"weakened and slower foes"
"slower, weakened foes"
both still make sense, which is a good sign that they're coordinate adjectives. this is covered in Fleur's notes under commas
Z-Brave BirdSupersonic SkystrikeOHKOs Latias and Hydreigon after Stealth RocksRock,(AC) but running it means Crobat cannot run Black Sludge.
- the one thing you missed here is "OHKOs" should be "OHKOes"
"OHKOes" is the verb
"Crobat OHKOes Latias"
"OHKOs" is the plural noun
"Crobat scores several OHKOs"
here, Supersonic Skystrike is actively doing the OHKOing, so you want "OHKOes".
U-turn allows Crobat to utilise its high Speed to pivot out of Flying resistsFlying-resistant Pokemon that it has a bad match up into(RC)matchup against while keeping up momentum for its team.
- the one thing you missed here is "utilise" should be "utilize". Smogon uses American English, so British spellings like "utilise" need to be Americanized.
Taunt is essential,(AC) as it shuts down defensive Pokemon such as Alomomola (RC) and prevents opponentsfoes such as Hippowdon from being able to setupsetupEntry hazards .
Hippowdon is performing the action here, so it should be "set up entry hazards".
- "Entry" should also stay lowercase here, so the full phrase should be "set up entry hazards".
overall, this was really well done! you caught most of the objective stuff here, really strong attempt overall! go ahead and try one of the intermediate exercies :)
Slither-WingSlither Wing is a niche defensive pivot whichthat uses it'sits interesting type, serviceable bulk,(AC) and reliable recovery in Morning Sun to check attackers like Great Tusk, Breloom,(AC)andor Kingambit. U-turn generates momentum for Slither-Wing'sSlither Wing's team against monsPokemon such as Flutter Mane and Skeledirge,(AC)asand it importantly allows Slither-WingSlither Wing to avoid being trapped by Gothitelle. Close Combat OHKOsOHKOes Iron Bundle and Chi-Yu and 2HKOs2HKOes Miraidon,(AC) which Body Press cannot do. Will-O-Wisp's burn stops the Pokemon Slither-WingSlither Wing checks from using it as set upsetup fodder, and it also punishes opponentsfoes such as Toxapex or Corviknight for switching in. Morning Sun heals Slither-WingSlither Wing for 50% of its health, helping it to consistently switch into Great Tusk consistently. Tera Water provides a resistance to Fire typeFire-type attacks from Koraidon and Chi-Yu (RC) and Water typeto Water-type attacks from Iron Bundle and Palafin,(AC) allowing for a last ditchlast-ditch counterattack. 168 Speed EVs out speed adamantoutspeed Adamant Breloom,(AC) and the Rest are dumped intois invested in physical bulk.
Nice job handling the jump to the Intermediate exercises!
Slither-WingSlither Wing is a niche defensive pivot whichthat uses it'sits interesting type, serviceable bulk,(AC) and reliable recovery in Morning Sun to check attackers like Great Tusk, Breloom,(AC)andor Kingambit.
It should be "typing" rather than "type" here; we only use "type" when hyphenating it with the actual typing. For example, Pikachu is an "Electric-type," but Electric is its "typing," not its "type."
U-turn generates momentum for Slither-Wing'sSlither Wing's team against monsPokemon such as Flutter Mane and Skeledirge,(AC)asand it importantly allows Slither-WingSlither Wing to avoid being trapped by Gothitelle.
Adding the comma was correct here, but changing "and" to "as" actually changes the meaning of the sentence and should be avoided. Using "as" implies a causation, but avoiding being trapped by Gothitelle is not the reason why U-turn generates momentum for Slither Wing's team against the Pokemon listed; rather, this is simply being listed as an additional benefit of U-turn, so "and" is appropriate.
Close Combat OHKOsOHKOes Iron Bundle and Chi-Yu and 2HKOs2HKOes Miraidon,(AC) which Body Press cannot do.
Nice work with all the objective fixes here! A minor prose note: it can often be a bit confusing for a reader to see "and" repeated in such quick succession, separated by just one term ("OHKOes Iron Bundle and Chi-Yu and 2HKOes Miraidon"). For clarity, it's often best to slightly reword things to avoid this repetition; for example, you could say "OHKOes Iron Bundle and Chi-Yu while 2HKOing Miraidon" instead.
Will-O-Wisp's burn stops the Pokemon Slither-WingSlither Wing checks from using it as set upsetup fodder, and it also punishes opponentsfoes such as Toxapex or Corviknight for switching in.
There is an ambiguous "it" in this sentence; the first "it" refers to Slither Wing, but the second "it" refers to Will-O-Wisp (or perhaps to Will-O-Wisp's burn; it's not quite clear). Whenever you use "it" multiple times in the same sentence, all instances of "it" must refer to the same thing (the same applies for other pronouns such as "they"). Although we generally try to avoid subject repetition when possible, it is okay to repeat the subject if using "it" would introduce an ambiguity.
Remember that your examples need to match in number to their category! Here, "foes" is plural, so the list of examples should use "and" rather than "or."
Morning Sun heals Slither-WingSlither Wing for 50% of its health, helping it to consistently switch into Great Tusk consistently.
The placement of "consistently" was actually fine as-is. This is an example of a lateral change; from Section 3 of the Beginner Notes: "A lateral change is a change from one correct word/phrase -> a second correct word/phrase that doesn’t have a prose justification and is made based on preference / 'this sounds better.' This is bad because it takes away correct words/phrases that the writer chose to use, which reduces the amount of voice they have in the analysis." We obviously want to correct grammar and prose errors, but we also want to preserve as much of the writer's original voice as possible while doing so. Even if you would have put "consistently" at the end of the sentence had you been the one writing it from scratch, it is not wrong at its current placement, so it should not be changed.
The fact that Morning Sun heals Slither Wing for 50% of its health is what we call dex info. From Section 3 of the Beginner Notes: "Dex info is basic information about the game that can be found elsewhere on the dex / on Google (such as the type chart, what moves / items / abilities do, etc). You can treat it like a dictionary definition. It takes up space for something that doesn't need to be explained and can get in the way of the key point of the sentence, the 'so what' of why something is being run. ... You should remove dex info if it’s not relevant to the point / ‘so what’ of a sentence." Here, you can just say, "Morning Sun helps Slither Wing to consistently switch into Great Tusk."
Tera Water provides a resistance to Fire typeFire-type attacks from Koraidon and Chi-Yu (RC) and Water typeto Water-type attacks from Iron Bundle and Palafin,(AC) allowing for a last ditchlast-ditch counterattack.
Repeating the "to" before "Water-type" is not objectively wrong, but it's also not necessary because the first "to" is already implied to carry over to all items of the list. Because this wasn't wrong originally, adding "to" is a lateral change that should be avoided.
Just like I mentioned in the Close Combat sentence, repeating "and" in quick succession like this can be confusing, and if a clean fix is possible, it's a good idea to implement it. Here, you can simply use "as well as," so that it reads, "Fire-type attacks from Koraidon and Chi-Yu as well as Water-type attacks from Iron Bundle and Palafin."
168 Speed EVs out speed adamantoutspeed Adamant Breloom,(AC) and the Rest are dumped intois invested in physical bulk.
The Speed EVs do not outspeed Breloom themselves; rather, they enable Slither Wing to outspeed it. Make sure that whenever Speed benchmarks are being discussed, the Pokemon is doing the outspeeding rather than the EVs.
In this sentence, we are not referring to the move Rest; rather, we are using a standard English definition of "rest," i.e. "remaining"/"leftover," so it should not be capitalized.
Speaking of which, "the rest" refers to "EVs" (more specifically, the ones remaining after 168 are invested in Speed), which is plural, so "are" was actually correct rather than "is."
Good work overall! It's great to see that you're doing well in terms of the fundamentals even in the more difficult exercises. If you have any questions about the new stuff (like lateral changes or dex info, for example), feel free to send me a message! I'd also strongly encourage you to read through the relevant sections of the Beginner Notes document so you can get some more information. Otherwise, go ahead and take a stab at another Intermediate exercise when you feel ready!
Thanks to Tidy Up,(AC) Cinccino is the main enabler of hyper offense teams, letting them run many powerful hazard weakhazard-weak Pokemon such as Oricorio-Pa'u, Arcanine, and Ninetales-Alola. Knock Off lets Cinccino hit Ghost TypesGhost-types like Chandelure (RC) as well as Bronzong, an otherwise problematic wall. Encore allows CincinnoCinccino to capitalize on passive foes which setupthat set up entry hazards, boost their stats, or heal up such as Gligar, Registeel, and Sylveon. Teammates like Diancie, Toxtricity,(AC) and Scyther can work alongside Cinccino to overwhelm shared Steel-type checks like Copperajah and Bronzong (RC);(ASC) however,(AC)Fire-Fires and FightingsFighting-types such as Chandelure, Tauros-Paldea-AquaPaldean Tauros-W, and Heracross that easily beat these same Steel-types work as well. Grassy Terrain teams also heavily benefit from CinccinosCinccino's presence,(AC) since it lets Oricorio formsOricorio's formes, Grafaiai, and Arcanine switch-inswitch in without having to take chip damage from hazards.
Thanks to Tidy Up,(AC) Cinccino is the main enabler of hyper offense teams, letting them run many powerful hazard weakhazard-weak Pokemon such as Oricorio-Pa'u, Arcanine, and Ninetales-Alola.
The first time that hazards are referenced in a particular paragraph or section, it should be written out as "entry hazards." Any subsequent mentions can be shortened to just "hazards," but the first one needs to have "entry" in front.
Be careful about forme names! You can see a full list of forme names to be used in analyses at the very beginning of the Spelling and Grammar Standards. In particular, regional formes are formatted as e.g. "Alolan Ninetales" rather than "Ninetales-Alola," and Oricorio formes are identified by their typing, so "Oricorio-Pa'u," the Psychic-type forme, is "Oricorio-P."
Encore allows CincinnoCinccino to capitalize on passive foes which setupthat set up entry hazards, boost their stats, or heal up such as Gligar, Registeel, and Sylveon.
So, it seems like you remembered the rule about "entry hazards," but you just missed it in the first instance (in the first sentence). If you had said "entry hazard-weak" in the first sentence, then you wouldn't need to add "entry" to this sentence.
Grassy Terrain teams also heavily benefit from CinccinosCinccino's presence,(AC) since it lets Oricorio formsOricorio's formes, Grafaiai, and Arcanine switch-inswitch in without having to take chip damage from hazards.
I don't know that this is objectively wrong, per se, but as a matter of convention, we usually say "the Oricorio formes" rather than "Oricorio's formes." Good work with all the other changes here, though!
You did a really awesome job here with all the changes! Just make sure that you double check your checks very carefully before submitting them and that you don't forget some of the more fundamental rules as you get to the harder exercises (like rules about forme names)! Let me know if you have any questions about this feedback! Otherwise, feel free to try another intermediate exercise!
One of BreloomsBreloom's main struggles is getting past Poison TypesPoison-types like Vileplume, Dragalge,(AC) and Slowbro-GalarGalarian Slowbro, so Psychic- and Ground-types like Munkidori, Uxie, or Flygon are greatly appreciated. The former two as well as Kilowattrel and Dragalge excel at pivoting Breloom in on Dark- and Steel-types like Klefki, Registeel,(AC)and Alolan Mukor Muk-Alola with their U-turn and Flip Turn. Articuno-GGalarian Articuno is an exceptionally good partner whichthat can provide U-turn support,(AC)and can use Future Sight to limit Breloom's switchinsswitch-ins even further, and abusetake advantage of Vileplume's Strength Sap with its ability Competitive. In a similar vein, pivot partners such as Mienshao, Incineroar, Inteleon,(AC) and the aforementioned Flygon make good partners since they commonly draw in Water typesWater-types like Vaporeon, Milotic, Gastrodon,(AC)andor Swampert, for Breloom to abusecapitalize on. Teammates like Incineroar, A-MukAlolan Muk, and Bronzong (RC) also make for decent teammates, handling the Psychic- and Fairy-types (RC) like Uxie, Munkidori, Whimsicott,(AC)andor Sylveon whothat force Breloom out.
The 'or' should be changed to 'and' here because the subject Psychic- and Ground-types is plural (we know this because types refers to more than one). Therefore, plural subject means you use the plural connecting word 'and'. You fix this error later on in the check, so make sure you're proofreading throughout.
In a similar vein, pivot partners such as Mienshao, Incineroar, Inteleon,(AC) and the aforementioned Flygon make good partners since they commonly draw in Water typesWater-types
There needs to be a comma before 'since' here. Commas before 'since' follow the same rule as commas before 'as' (used to mean 'because').
There's also a repetition issue here, as the sentence says 'pivot partners make good partners'. To remove that repeated word, you could either say 'pivots such as xyz' or 'pivot partners such as xyz commonly draw in...'. Either way, the word 'partners' is only said once. Section 3 of the Beginner Notes covers prose errors that you should look out for, including repetition, so make sure to familiarise yourself with those.
they commonly draw in Water typesWater-types like Vaporeon, Milotic, Gastrodon,(AC)andor Swampert, for Breloom to abusecapitalize on.
The comma before 'for' here can be removed because it's not fulfilling any comma rule; the clause after the comma isn't a separate thing/an aside to the rest of the sentence, so it doesn't need to grammatically be separated.
Teammates like Incineroar, A-MukAlolan Muk, and Bronzong (RC) also make for decent teammates
Similarly to the previous repetition point, this sentence has 'teammates like xyz also make for decent teammates', where the word is said twice.
Nice work overall here! Make sure to be consistent with the fixes you make across a check: in section 4 of the beginner notes, there's a guide on how to use ctrl + f to proofread. This is highly recommended because it adds more of a guarantee in the process of catching basic errors by checking them systematically with highlighed words compared to just skimming a text and trying to remember all the errors at the same time. Try this out on another intermediate exercise, or if you'd like more practice looking at those fundamental errors (like commas and or/and) in isolation, you can do that on one of the beginner ones.
Ceruledge is an exceptional early game breakerearly-game wallbreaker on Fire-teamsFire teams,(AC) as it has access to strong STABs(RC)STAB attacks and priority. Swords Dance allows it to setupset up quickly, enabling it to break opponents whofoes that would otherwise take hits like Toxapex or Goodra-Hisuiand Hisuian Goodra. Poltergeist is essential for Ceruledge to hit foes that resist Fire resists like Gouging-FireGouging Fire, Toxapex, Skeledirge,(AC) and Heatran,(AC) as it is otehrwiseotherwise has a bad matchup into them. Weak Armor paired with Focus Sash provides a Speed boost to Ceruledge (RC) while also preventing it from being OHKOdOHKOed if there are no hazards.
Ceruledge is an exceptional early game breakerearly-game wallbreaker on Fire-teamsFire teams,(AC) as it has access to strong STABs(RC)STAB attacks and priority. Swords Dance allows it to setupset up quickly, enabling it to break opponents whofoes that would otherwise take hits like Toxapex or Goodra-Hisuiand Hisuian Goodra.
Poltergeist is essential for Ceruledge to hit foes that resist Fire resists like Gouging-FireGouging Fire, Toxapex, Skeledirge,(AC) and Heatran,(AC) as it is otehrwiseotherwise has a bad matchup into them.
While "foes that resist Fire" isn't wrong, a less intrusive fix would be "Fire-resistant Pokemon/foes." This keeps the same general structure of "[type-based adjective] + [noun]" instead of changing it to "[noun] that [verb] [type]." Remember that when there are multiple ways to correct a sentence, we want to make the least intrusive change possible!
The words "into" and "against" are not interchangeable; "a bad matchup against them" is correct.
Weak Armor paired with Focus Sash provides a Speed boost to Ceruledge (RC) while also preventing it from being OHKOdOHKOed if there are no hazards.
The first time that hazards are referenced in a particular paragraph or section, they should be explicitly referred to as "entry hazards." Any subsequent mentions of them in the same paragraph or section can just be shortened to "hazards," but once a new paragraph or section starts, it needs to be "entry hazards" once again. This is the first reference to hazards in the paragraph, so it should be "entry hazards."
Overall, great work on this check! Let me know if you have any questions about my feedback. One last bit of advice: I noticed that the color you used for your (AC) and (RC) comments is your add color rather than your comment color. We prefer that you use the comment color for these because it makes it clearer for the writer. You can do this in the GP Tool by checking the box to the right of "Use Comment Color" under "Punctuation Markers" in the "Formatting" menu. If you want to double-check to make sure that your settings are the same as what we recommend, you should check out the GP Tool guide in the OP of this thread! In any case, I think you've clearly demonstrated that you're ready for the Intermediate level exercises, so feel free to try one out next!
Brave Bird hits threatening Grass-Types and Fighting TypesFighting-types such as Amoonguss, Celebi,(AC)andor Infernape super-effectively(RC)super effectively while also having the ability to revenge-kill weakneedrevenge kill weakened,(AC) slower opponents. Z-Brave Bird OHKOsSupersonic Skystrike OHKOes Latias and Hydreigon after Stealth RocksRock,(AC) but running it means Crobat cannot run Black Sludge. U-turn allows Crobat to utilise its high Speed to pivot out of Flying resistsFlying-resistant Pokemon that it has a bad match up into(RC)matchup against while keeping up momentum for its team. Taunt is essential,(AC) as it shuts down defensive Pokemon such as Alomomola (RC) and prevents opponentsfoes such as Hippowdon from being able to setupset up entry hazards.
Brave Bird hits threatening Grass-Types and Fighting TypesFighting-types such as Amoonguss, Celebi,(AC)andor Infernape super-effectively(RC)super effectively while also having the ability to revenge-kill weakneedrevenge kill weakened,(AC) slower opponents.
the 'opponents' at the end should be foes.
you caught this error in the last sentence but missed it here so I'm gonna use this to highlight the importance of using Ctrl + F list (in the beginner notes doc) to make sure you dont miss common words/errors
U-turn allows Crobat to utilise its high Speed to pivot out
My last intermediate, I'll try to do my best. Also, I have a few questions for the GP checker after they check this. Is it recommended for me to be tutored, or should I do the advanced exercises first, or should I begin amchecks i dont know exactly what to do
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Chien PaoChien-Paoappreciates Mandibuzz defogging awayremoving entry hazards to prevent it from being worn down by hazards. It can also bring Chien PaoChien-Pao in safely using a slow U-turn. MandibuzzIt is also a great switch inswitch-in to FightingFighting-type attacks from enemiesfoes like Choice Scarf Sneasler and Choice Scarf Tusk,(AC) which Chien PaoChien-Pao is extremely vulnerable to, as well as being capable of checking set upsetup sweepers like Azumarill orand Scizor with Foul Play. In return, Chien-Pao deals with opponents which can cause problemsproblematic foes to Mandibuzz like Sandy Shocks orand Baxcalibur. Kingambit has impressive offensive synergy with Chien PaoChien-Pao due to its neutrality to Fairy-typeFairy-types, being able to eliminate opponentsfoes like Hatterene with Iron Head (RC) and Choice Scarf Flutter Mane with Sucker Punch after rocksStealth Rock. In return,(AC)Chien-PaoChien Pao hits threats to Kingambit like DDDragon Dance Dragonite, Iron Treads, Landorus-TherianLandorus-T,(AC) and defensive Gliscor.
Slither-WingSlither Wing is a niche defensive pivot whichthat uses it'sits interesting typetyping, serviceable bulk,(AC) and reliable recovery in Morning Sun to check attackers like Great Tusk, Breloom,(AC)andor Kingambit. U-turn generates momentum for Slither-Wing'sSlither Wing's team against monsPokemon such as Flutter Mane and Skeledirge,(AC) and it importantly allows Slither-WingSlither Wing to avoid being trapped by Gothitelle. Close Combat OHKOsOHKOes Iron Bundle and Chi-Yu and 2HKOsalong with 2HKOing Miraidon,(AC) which Body Press cannot do. Will-O-Wisp's Burn stops the Pokemon Slither-WingSlither Wing checks from using itSlither Wing as set upsetup fodder (RC);(ASC) it also punishes opponentsfoes such as Toxapex orand Corviknight for switching in. Morning Sun heals Slither-Wing for 50% of its health, helpinghelps it to consistently switch into Great Tusk. Tera Water provides a resistance to Fire typeFire-type attacks from Koraidon and Chi-Yu (RC)and Water typealong with Water-type attacks from Iron Bundle and Palafin,(AC) allowing for a last ditch counterattack. 168 Speed EVs out speed adamantlets Slither Wing outspeed Adamant Breloom,(AC) and the rest are dumped into physical bulk.
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really good attempt! you got a lot of the objective formatting stuff here, so i'm mainly gonna focus on the stuff that was missed and a couple places where the change went a bit further than it needed to
Chien PaoChien-Paoappreciates Mandibuzz defogging awayremoving entry hazards to prevent it from being worn down by hazards.
- you correctly identified the issue with "defogging away" as move names shouldn't be used as verbs, however, "removing entry hazards" loses the information that Mandibuzz is specifically using Defog
the smallest fix would be:
"removing entry hazards with Defog"
- there's also one issue with deleting "by hazards" entirely. i'm guessing this was to avoid repeating "hazards", which is a good thing to notice! but completely removing it also removes the thing that's wearing Chien-Pao down. the GP Beginner Notes says that when there are multiple ways to fix something, we want the option that preserves the most of the author's original wording
instead of deleting the whole thing:
"to prevent it from being worn down by them"
would preserve the point without the repetition.
- also just a tiny proofreading thing: there's no space between the Chien-Pao edit and "appreciates" here (sometimes the tool messes up, so its worth proofreading and adding spaces wherever necessary)
It can also bring Chien PaoChien-Pao in safely using a slow U-turn. MandibuzzIt is also a great switch inswitch-in to FightingFighting-type attacks from enemiesfoes like Choice Scarf Sneasler and Choice Scarf Tusk,(AC) which Chien PaoChien-Pao is extremely vulnerable to, as well as being capable of checking set upsetup sweepers like Azumarill orand Scizor with Foul Play.
this pronoun is ambiguous, the sentence before it contains both Chien-Pao and Mandibuzz, and Chien-Pao is the grammatical subject, so starting the next sentence with "It" makes the reader stop and work out that you actually mean Mandibuzz:
"Mandibuzz can also bring Chien-Pao in safely using a slow U-turn. It is a great switch-in..."
now "It" has a clear antecedent because Mandibuzz was just established as the subject
- i'd also remove the added "also" from "It is also a great switch-in". there's nothing grammatically wrong with it, but the author didn't originally have it, and it isn't fixing an error. remember adding or replacing wording solely because it sounds a little nicer to us is a lateral change
- likewise, changing "enemies" to "foes" is also lateral. "foes" is definitely correct, but the Spelling and Grammar Standards accept "enemy" and "opposing Pokemon" as well. so there's no reason to remove the author's wording here
In return, Chien-Pao deals with opponents which can cause problemsproblematic foes to Mandibuzz like Sandy Shocks orand Baxcalibur.
- the main issue here is that "problematic foes to Mandibuzz" rewrites considerably more than necessary
the actual rule this sentence is testing is "which" to "that"
the Which vs That section in the GP Beginner Notes explains that "that" introduces restrictive information, meaning we're identifying the specific foes that cause problems rather than adding optional information about every foe
so i'd preserve the original structure much more closely:
"In return, Chien-Pao deals with foes like Sandy Shocks and Baxcalibur that can cause problems for Mandibuzz."
the important tutoring takeaway here is that once you've identified the actual error, fix that error first rather than rebuilding the whole phrase around it
Kingambit has impressive offensive synergy with Chien PaoChien-Pao due to its neutrality to Fairy-typeFairy-types, being able to eliminate opponentsfoes like Hatterene with Iron Head (RC) and Choice Scarf Flutter Mane with Sucker Punch after rocksStealth Rock.
Kingambit isn't neutral to Fairy-type Pokemon; it's neutral to Fairy-type attacks. the GP Beginner NotesType Weaknesses / Resistances section makes this distinction because a Pokemon's typing doesn't account for whatever coverage moves it might carry.
so this should be:
"neutrality to Fairy-type attacks"
there's also a smaller structural issue with:
"due to its neutrality to Fairy-type attacks, being able to eliminate..."
the easiest way to look at this is that the sentence is giving two reasons Kingambit has good synergy with Chien-Pao:
- its neutrality to Fairy-type attacks
- its ability to eliminate foes like Hatterene and Choice Scarf Flutter Mane
because both of these are doing the same job in the sentence, they should follow the same grammatical structure. right now, you have "its neutrality" followed by "being able to eliminate", so the two parts don't match.
this is what Parallelism in Fleur's notes is getting at: when two ideas are being presented in the same grammatical role, they should generally be phrased in the same way.
the least intrusive fix would be:
"due to its neutrality to Fairy-type attacks and ability to eliminate foes..."
In return,(AC)Chien-PaoChien Pao hits threats to Kingambit like DDDragon Dance Dragonite, Iron Treads, Landorus-TherianLandorus-T,(AC) and defensive Gliscor.
- perfect! no notes, you caught basically everything i'd want here
to answer your question, yes, i'd definitely recommend doing the advanced exercises next before jumping straight into amchecks. they'll give you a better idea of the more subjective / prose-heavy stuff that comes up in real checks, and it'll be useful to get some practice with that first
overall, this was a really strong check! most of the objective rules and formatting were handled really well, and the main things i'd focus on from here are watching for ambiguous pronouns, making sure a fix doesn't accidentally remove information, and making the least intrusive change possible. there were a couple places where you clearly spotted that something was wrong but changed a little more than you needed to, which is a much more nuanced issue than simply missing an objective rule
this was a pretty solid effort all things around, great job ^^ here are a few quick notes wrt your attempt:
Will-O-Wisp's Burn stops the Pokemon Slither-WingSlither Wing checks from using itSlither Wing as set upsetup fodder (RC);(ASC) it also punishes opponentsfoes such as Toxapex orand Corviknight for switching in.
couple things to note here:
1) good job catching the capitalisation for Will-O-Wisp! on a similar note, status conditions should not be capitalised per the standards
Status effects (paralysis, sleep, etc.) are not capitalized.
2) in the first clause, changing "it" to "Slither Wing" means that there is repetition in the clause now ("...stops the Pokemon Slither Wing checks from using Slither Wing as setup fodder" -> this reads a bit clunky). originally ("...stops the Pokemon Slither Wing checks from using it as setup fodder"), it is fairly clear that "it" refers to Slither Wing, since you can't really use Will-O-Wisp (a move) as setup fodder.
the issue really arises from the second instance of "it" after the comma splice (that one can plausibly mean Will-O-Wisp or Slither Wing). your use of a semicolon to fix the comma splice is fine, so you can replace this "it" with Will-O-Wisp to specify what it means, like so:
Will-O-Wisp's burn stops the Pokemon Slither Wing checks from using it as set up fodder (RC)it;(ASC)Will-O-Wisp also punishes opponents such as Toxapex or Corviknight for switching in.
another approach is to make use of a coordinating conjunction (like "and") to connect the two independent clauses, like so:
Will-O-Wisp's burn stops the Pokemon Slither Wing checks from using it as set up fodder (RC)it alsoand punishes opponents such as Toxapex or Corviknight for switching in.
here, what "it" refers to can be a little ambiguous due to the dex info removal, so it's best to change it to "Slither Wing" here to specify that that's what's being referred to.
168 Speed EVs out speed adamantlets Slither Wing outspeed Adamant Breloom,(AC) and the rest are dumped into physical bulk.
Black Glasses and Tera Dark should exclusively be used with Kowtow Cleave,(AC) as these enhance Kingambit's offensive pressure; with 5five Supreme Overlord boosts, Kingambit can reach feats like 2HKOing Dondozo with Kowtow Cleave,(AC)OHKOing Walking Wakeand 1HKOing Walking-Wake and,(AC) at +2,(AC) Dragonite through Multiscale with Sucker Punch. Air Balloon allows Kingambit to setupset up on would bewould-be checks inlike Landorus-T and most Great TusksTusk, become a sturdy switch inswitch-in to offenseoffensive threats like Kyurem, Roaring Moon, and Dragonite whothat rely on their Ground-type coverage to hit it, and gain an immunity to Spikes that limitslimit Kingambit before it gets going. KingambitsKingambit's potential and defensive utility in the late gamelate-game make it nearly a nearly staple on offensive archetypes from bulky to hyper offense while still fitting on balance. Physical teammates like Ogerpon-WellspringOgerpon-W, Zamazenta, and Swords Dance Valiant can overwhelm shared checks like ZanazentaZamazenta, Landorus-TherianLandorus-T, and Dondozo. Dark TypeDark-type offensive threat inthreats like Darkrai (RC) and Samurott-HisuiHisuian Samurott form a DarkspamDark-type spam core with Kingambit to overwhelm Dark resistsDark-resistant Pokemon like Zamazenta and Tera Fairy users like GholdemgoGholdengo and Moltres together.
Thanks to Tidy Up,(AC) Cinccino is the main enabler of hyper offense teams, letting them run many powerful hazard weakentry hazard-weak Pokemon such as Oricorio-Pa'uOricorio-P, Arcanine, and Ninetales-AlolaAlolan Ninetales. Knock Off lets Cinccino hit Ghost TypesGhost-types like Chandelure (RC) as well as Bronzong, an otherwise problematic wall. Encore allows Cincinno to capitalize on passive foes which setupthat set up hazards, boost their stats, or heal up such as Gligar, Registeel, and Sylveon. Teammates like Diancie, Toxtricity,(AC) and Scyther can work alongside Cinccino to overwhelm shared Steel-type checks like Copperajah and Bronzong (RC);(ASC) however,(AC)Fire-Fires and FightingsFighting-types such as Chandelure, Tauros-Paldea-AquaPaldean Tauros-W, and Heracross that easily beat these same Steel-types work as well. Grassy Terrain teams also heavily benefit from CinccinosCinccino's presence since it lets Oricorio formsformes, Grafaiai, and Arcanine switch-inswitch in without having to take chip damage from hazards.
Black Glasses and Tera Dark should exclusively be used with Kowtow Cleave,(AC) as these enhance Kingambit's offensive pressure; with 5five Supreme Overlord boosts, Kingambit can reach feats like 2HKOing Dondozo with Kowtow Cleave,(AC)OHKOing Walking Wakeand 1HKOing Walking-Wake and,(AC) at +2,(AC) Dragonite through Multiscale with Sucker Punch.
The nested list structure here is rather complicated, so I'll try and break it down:
Kingambit can reach feats like:
2HKOing:
Dondozo (with Kowtow Cleave)
OHKOing:
Walking Wake (with Sucker Punch)
at +2, Dragonite through Multiscale (with Sucker Punch)
This means that, overall, the list actually only has two items, with one of thosee items being a two-item list itself. Because of that, the structure of including "and" between the Walking Wake and Dragonite examples but not between the Dondozo and Walking Wake examples doesn't quite work. An example of something that does follow the nested structure is "...Kingambit can reach feats like 2HKOing Dondozo with Kowtow Cleave as well as OHKOing Walking Wake and, at +2, Dragonite through Multiscale with Sucker Punch."
Air Balloon allows Kingambit to setupset up on would bewould-be checks inlike Landorus-T and most Great TusksTusk, become a sturdy switch inswitch-in to offenseoffensive threats like Kyurem, Roaring Moon, and Dragonite whothat rely on their Ground-type coverage to hit it, and gain an immunity to Spikes that limitslimit Kingambit before it gets going.
The correct word here was actually "limits" rather than "limit." The subject corresponding to this verb is "an immunity to Spikes," which is a singular noun, so we should use "limits" (by the way, the move "Spikes" is also singular because it refers to the move itself, so even if Spikes was the subject, we'd still use "limits" and not "limit).
From the GP Beginner Notes: "Use semicolons in a list to separate list items if one or more of the list items has a comma. This uses the structure to make it clear where the main list starts and ends, using semicolons for that and keeping commas for any sublists (Fire-types like Charizard; Grass-types like Venusaur, Meganium, and Sceptile; and Water-types like Blastoise)."
Here, there are three list items, and the second item has commas in it ("Kyurem, Roaring Moon, and Dragonite"), so we should use semicolons to separate the main list. This means replacing the commas after "Tusk" and "hit it" with semicolons.
KingambitsKingambit's potential and defensive utility in the late gamelate-game make it nearly a nearly staple on offensive archetypes from bulky to hyper offense while still fitting on balance.
From the Spelling and Grammar Standards: "These words are adjectives and adverbs, not nouns; therefore, say 'late-game,' not 'in the late-game.'"
You did change it from "in the late-game" to "in late-game," but the "in" should also have been removed, per this standard. Saying "in late-game" still treats "late-game" as a noun rather than an adjective.
Physical teammates like Ogerpon-WellspringOgerpon-W, Zamazenta, and Swords Dance Valiant can overwhelm shared checks like ZanazentaZamazenta, Landorus-TherianLandorus-T, and Dondozo.
"Physical teammates" should be "Physically offensive teammates" because "physical" alone is an incomplete descriptor of a Pokemon.
"Valiant" should be "Iron Valiant" - make sure the full name of the Pokemon is used every time!
Sometimes, when a Pokemon is both recommended as a teammate and talked about as a potential foe, particularly within the same sentence, it can be a bit confusing for the reader. This is the case with Zamazenta in this sentence, so it could help to specify "opposing Zamazenta" there for clarity.
Dark TypeDark-type offensive threat inthreats like Darkrai (RC) and Samurott-HisuiHisuian Samurott form a DarkspamDark-type spam core with Kingambit to overwhelm Dark resistsDark-resistant Pokemon like Zamazenta and Tera Fairy users like GholdemgoGholdengo and Moltres together.
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Encore allows Cincinno to capitalize on passive foes which setupthat set up hazards, boost their stats, or heal up such as Gligar, Registeel, and Sylveon.
"Cinccino" is misspelled here as "Cincinno." Make sure to pay really close attention to spellings when you're doing checks!
Grassy Terrain teams also heavily benefit from CinccinosCinccino's presence since it lets Oricorio formsformes, Grafaiai, and Arcanine switch-inswitch in without having to take chip damage from hazards.
From the GP Beginner Notes: "Commas should be used before 'as' and 'since' if they mean because; the word 'because' itself does not need this."
Here, "since" is used as "because," indicating the causation relation between the teammates that Cinccino lets switch in without taking chip damage and the benefit given to Grassy Terrain teams as a result. Therefore, "since" should have a comma before it.
Changing "forms" to "formes" was a good catch! However, "Oricorio formes" leaves a bit of ambiguity - some of the Oricorio formes, or all of them? If some, which ones? The implication as-read is all of them, so this can be clarified by saying "the Oricorio formes" instead.
Really great work here! These are all the notes I had, let me know if you have any questions! I think you're ready to take on the Advanced exercises!
