I tell you guys, Registeel owns *Warstory*

Pyong

Well, this is my first warstory, hope you guys enjoy.

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My team at a glance:
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Salaspectrum team at a glance:
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Leftovers is going to be skiped as well as toxic orb.
(Registell, Dusknoir, Blissey, Togekiss, Metagross and Slowbro all have leftovers, and Brellom the little drug user holds a drug called Toxic Orb)
 Rules:

Ladder Match
Sleep Clause
Freeze Clause

OHKO Clause
Evasion Clause

Species Clause
Strict Damage Clause


1# Turn:


Salaspectrum sent out Staraptor (lvl 100 Staraptor ?).
matheusfullmetal sent out Orichalcum (lvl 100 Registeel).
Vulcan has entered the room.
Vulcan has left the room.
Staraptor used U-turn.
It's not very effective...
Orichalcum lost 7% of its health.
Salaspectrum switched in Heatran (lvl 100 Heatran ?).
Orichalcum used Thunder Wave.
Heatran is paralysed! It may be unable to move!


Well, paralize is always nice and even better in sweppers like heatran.
Or maybe he isn't is a swepper...

2# Turn:

 matheusfullmetal switched in Gaara (lvl 100 Tyranitar ?).
Gaara's Sand Stream whipped up a sandstorm!
A sandstorm brewed!
Heatran used Stealth Rock.
Pointed stones float in the air around your foe's team!
The sandstorm rages.


Well, as i said, no sweeper here, more like a tank.
Ttar can take him nicely, no problem here thanks to sandstorm boost, but...

3# tun:

 Salaspectrum switched in Staraptor (lvl 100 Staraptor ?).
Staraptor's intimidate cut Gaara's attack!
Gaara used Earthquake.
It doesn't affect Staraptor...
The sandstorm rages.



I should have predicted that -_-'...



4# turn:

matheusfullmetal switched in Hollow (lvl 100 Dusknoir ?).
Hollow is exerting its pressure!
Pointed stones dug into Hollow.
Hollow lost 12% of its health.
Staraptor used U-turn.
It's not very effective...
Hollow lost 10% of its health.
Salaspectrum switched in Breloom (lvl 100 Breloom ?).
The sandstorm rages.
Breloom was badly poisoned!


Nice predict Salaspectrum, at least dusknoir isn't is raped by brellom, but i guess that dusknoir won't be getting much action today...

5# turn:

 Breloom used Substitute.
Breloom lost 25% of its health.
Breloom made a substitute!
Hollow used Fire Punch.
It's super effective!
The substitute took damage for Breloom!
Breloom's substitute faded!
The sandstorm rages.


Dusknoir fist's were on fire, but dusknoir is aged and can't take much action, and then...

6# turn:

 Breloom used Spore.
Hollow fell asleep!
Hollow is fast asleep!
The sandstorm rages.


Dusknoir go takes a nap after smelling some brellom drugs...

7# turn:

 matheusfullmetal switched in Zaraki Kenpachi (lvl 100 Garchomp ?).
Pointed stones dug into Zaraki Kenpachi.
Zaraki Kenpachi lost 6% of its health.
Breloom used Substitute.
Breloom lost 25% of its health.
Breloom made a substitute!
The sandstorm rages.


I predicted that subs and switched into my suber( no brightpowder here ).

8# turn:

Breloom is tightening its focus!
Zaraki Kenpachi used Substitute.
Zaraki Kenpachi lost 25% of its health.
Zaraki Kenpachi made a substitute!
Breloom used Focus Punch.
A critical hit!
The substitute took damage for Zaraki Kenpachi!
Zaraki Kenpachi's substitute faded!
The sandstorm rages.


LOL, critical hits on my subs...

9# turn:

 Breloom is tightening its focus!
Zaraki Kenpachi used Substitute.
Zaraki Kenpachi lost 25% of its health.
Zaraki Kenpachi made a substitute!
Breloom used Focus Punch.
Breloom's attack missed!
The sandstorm rages.


Ohayo for the miss, you can do it chomp, go there and smack some shrooms Ò_Ó

10# turn:

 Breloom is tightening its focus!
Zaraki Kenpachi used Dragon Claw.
The substitute took damage for Breloom!
Breloom's substitute faded!
Breloom used Focus Punch.
The substitute took damage for Zaraki Kenpachi!
Zaraki Kenpachi's substitute faded!
The sandstorm rages.


A predictable turn, there no much to say here...

11# turn:

 Salaspectrum switched in Slowbro (lvl 100 Slowbro ?).
Zaraki Kenpachi used Fire Blast.
It's not very effective...
Slowbro lost 15% of its health.
Slowbro was burned!
Zaraki Kenpachi lost 10% of its health.
The sandstorm rages.


I predicted a skarmory/bronzong and then...Slowbro :p
At least i got a burn here, bur now i lost the surprise orb fire blast on my sub-chomp...

12# turn:

 matheusfullmetal switched in Gaara (lvl 100 Tyranitar ?).
Gaara's Sand Stream whipped up a sandstorm!
Pointed stones dug into Gaara.
Gaara lost 12% of its health.
Slowbro used Ice Beam.
Gaara lost 15% of its health.
The sandstorm rages.


Talk about obvious.
TTar came to play with the Barney wanabe.
Ops, let me interrupt the action to show something, the (in)famous slowbro family renegade member:
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13# turn:

 Gaara used Crunch.
It's super effective!
Slowbro lost 60% of its health.
Salaspectrum's Slowbro fainted.
Gaara lost 10% of its health.
The sandstorm rages.


I wonder wy he stayed, but anyway, see ya Barney.

Until now: (Me)6X5(Salaspectrum)

14# turn:

 Salaspectrum switched in Staraptor (lvl 100 Staraptor ?).
Staraptor's intimidate cut Gaara's attack!
Staraptor used Close Combat.
It's super effective!
Gaara lost 62% of its health.
matheusfullmetal's Gaara fainted.
Staraptor's defence was lowered.
Staraptor's special defence was lowered.
The sandstorm rages.


You fough well TTar( i could have switched to dusknoir, but i can't afford to eat a brave bird or have a U-turned brellom in my face )

Until now: (me)5X5(Salaspectrum)

15# turn:

 matheusfullmetal switched in Orichalcum (lvl 100 Registeel).
Pointed stones dug into Orichalcum.
Orichalcum lost 6% of its health.
Salaspectrum switched in Heatran (lvl 100 Heatran ?).
Orichalcum used Thunder Wave.
But it failed!
The sandstorm rages.

I know that close combat, but i also know how high is my registell def, but this was kinda of a wasted turn.

16# turn:

 matheusfullmetal switched in Orihime (lvl 100 Blissey ?).
Pointed stones dug into Orihime.
Orihime lost 12% of its health.
Heatran is paralysed! It can't move!
The sandstorm rages.


The little blazing frog can't do much to my fat nurse without explosion...

17# turn:

 Orihime used Wish.
Orihime made a wish!
Heatran used Lava Plume.
Orihime lost 13% of its health.
The sandstorm rages.


Maybe he want to know my nurse M7.

18# turn:

 matheusfullmetal switched in Zaraki Kenpachi (lvl 100 Garchomp ?).
Pointed stones dug into Zaraki Kenpachi.
Zaraki Kenpachi lost 6% of its health.
Heatran used Explosion.
Zaraki Kenpachi lost 28% of its health.
matheusfullmetal's Zaraki Kenpachi fainted.
Salaspectrum's Heatran fainted.
The sandstorm rages.


I switch into my dragon to heal him, but the happy chomp was received by a blast from the frog, and so chomp died as a man protecting his love, the nurse that often protects him from that iced attacks.
(1 minute of silence in memory of chomp)

Until now:(me)4X4(Salaspectrum)

19# turn:

 Salaspectrum switched in Metagross (lvl 100 Metagross).
matheusfullmetal switched in Orichalcum (lvl 100 Registeel).
Pointed stones dug into Orichalcum.
Orichalcum lost 6% of its health.
Metagross used Earthquake.
It's super effective!
Orichalcum lost 39% of its health.
Orichalcum used Thunder Wave.
Metagross is paralysed! It may be unable to move!
The sandstorm rages.


Yes man, this registell ia very bulky in def and is 3HKoed by metagross( maybe 4HKO with some luck).

20# turn:

 matheusfullmetal switched in Hevn (lvl 100 Togekiss ?).
Pointed stones dug into Hevn.
Hevn lost 25% of its health.
Metagross used Earthquake.
It doesn't affect Hevn...
The sandstorm rages.


Easy predict as my chicken comes into a quake from that 4 legs spider.

21# turn:

Hevn used Air Slash.
It's not very effective...
Metagross lost 18% of its health.
Metagross flinched!
The sandstorm rages.
Hevn is buffetted by the sandstorm!


Gogogo paraflinch

22# turn:

 Hevn used Air Slash.
It's not very effective...
A critical hit!
Metagross lost 38% of its health.
Metagross used Thunderpunch.
It's super effective!
Hevn lost 45% of its health.
The sandstorm rages.


No paraflich, but i have such a sturdy chicken for sure...

23# turn:

 Hevn used Roost.
Hevn restored 50% of its health.
Metagross used Meteor Mash.
Hevn lost 50% of its health.
The sandstorm rages.
Hevn is buffetted by the sandstorm!


I was hoping for a thunderpunch/paralize/miss, but none happens...

24# turn:

 Hevn used Roost.
Hevn restored 50% of its health.
Metagross is paralysed! It can't move!
The sandstorm rages.
Hevn is buffetted by the sandstorm!


Go chicken, now you are at your best form!

25# turn:

 Hevn used Air Slash.
It's not very effective...
Metagross lost 20% of its health.
Metagross flinched!
The sandstorm rages.


Oh yeah, togekiss is rockin hard.

26# turn:

Hevn used Air Slash.
It's not very effective...
Metagross lost 18% of its health.
Metagross flinched!
The sandstorm rages.
Hevn is buffetted by the sandstorm!


The obese spider was hopeless against my chicken.

27# turn:

 Hevn used Air Slash.
It's not very effective...
Metagross lost 18% of its health.
Metagross is paralysed! It can't move!
The sandstorm rages.


Well, this is the beauty of paraflich

28# turn:

 Salaspectrum switched in Salamence (lvl 100 Salamence ?).
Salamence's intimidate cut Hevn's attack!
Hevn used Aura Sphere.
It's not very effective...
Salamence lost 18% of its health.
The sandstorm rages.


I was ready to finish gross wen that intimidating dragon rise from gross back -_-

29# tun:

 Salaspectrum switched in Staraptor (lvl 100 Staraptor ?).
Staraptor's intimidate cut Hevn's attack!
Hevn used Body Slam.
Staraptor lost 11% of its health.
Staraptor is paralysed! It may be unable to move!
The sandstorm rages.

He switched predicting blissey, but togekiss stays in and mess staraptor.

30# turn(man, this is no stall but its taking soooo long...):

 Salaspectrum switched in Salamence (lvl 100 Salamence ?).
Salamence's intimidate cut Hevn's attack!
Hevn used Air Slash.
Salamence lost 49% of its health.
The sandstorm rages.


Here comes the dragon...

31# turn:

 Salamence used Draco Meteor.
Hevn lost 79% of its health.
matheusfullmetal's Hevn fainted.
Salamence's special attack was harshly lowered.
The sandstorm rages.


Bye Hevn, i will miss ya.
(i didn't switched into bliss cause i feared draco meteor, and maybe he switched in the 30# turn predicting blissey)

Until now:(Salaspectrum)4X3(me)

32# turn:

 matheusfullmetal switched in Orichalcum (lvl 100 Registeel).
Pointed stones dug into Orichalcum.
Orichalcum lost 6% of its health.
Salaspectrum switched in Metagross (lvl 100 Metagross).
Orichalcum used Ice Punch.
It's not very effective...
Metagross lost 5% of its health.
The sandstorm rages.


Meh demage.

33# turn:

 Orichalcum used Iron Head.
It's not very effective...
Metagross lost 8% of its health.
Metagross flinched!
The sandstorm rages.


Well, even if that look nOOb, it wasn't, i did that to ensure that he will use quake next turn.

34# turn:

 matheusfullmetal switched in Orihime (lvl 100 Blissey ?).
Pointed stones dug into Orihime.
Orihime lost 12% of its health.
Metagross used Earthquake.
Orihime lost 34% of its health.
The sandstorm rages.


Yea, i was right, and since he is at low health and paralized, blissey can take him.

35# turn:

 Orihime used Flamethrower.
It's super effective!
Metagross lost 36% of its health.
Salaspectrum's Metagross fainted.
The sandstorm rages.


Blissey KOed gross, things starts lokking good =DD

Until now:(me)3X3(Salaspectrum)

36# turn:

 Salaspectrum switched in Breloom (lvl 100 Breloom ?).
Breloom used Substitute.
Breloom lost 25% of its health.
Breloom made a substitute!
Orihime used Flamethrower.
It's super effective!
The substitute took damage for Breloom!
Breloom's substitute faded!
The sandstorm rages.


He predicts a switch and i predict a subs.

37# turn:

 Breloom used Seed Bomb.
Orihime lost 28% of its health.
matheusfullmetal's Orihime fainted.
The sandstorm rages.


That fucking Drug user Koed my nurse...call the police @_@

Until now:(Salaspectrum)3X2(me)

38# turn:

 matheusfullmetal switched in Orichalcum (lvl 100 Registeel).
Pointed stones dug into Orichalcum.
Orichalcum lost 6% of its health.
Salaspectrum switched in Staraptor (lvl 100 Staraptor ?).
Orichalcum used Ice Punch.
It's super effective!
Staraptor lost 40% of its health.
The sandstorm rages.


Well, since my ghost was slepping, i had nothing to fear.

39# turn:

 Orichalcum used Stealth Rock.
Staraptor used Close Combat.
It's super effective!
Orichalcum lost 48% of its health.
Staraptor's defence was lowered.
Staraptor's special defence was lowered.
The sandstorm rages.


This was the better turn in my opinion, i could have Koed him, but as i am faster due to the paralize, i am able to lay some rocks, otherwise salamence would enter and rape myn slepping ghost and my fat alien.

40# turn:

 Salaspectrum switched in Salamence (lvl 100 Salamence ?).
Pointed stones dug into Salamence.
Salamence lost 14% of its health.
Salaspectrum's Salamence fainted.
Orichalcum used Ice Punch.
But there was no target!
The sandstorm rages.


As i said...
(note that registell punched the air with it frigid fist, maybe he was felling a hot atmosfere...)

Until now:(me)2X2(Salaspectrum)

41# turn:

 Salaspectrum switched in Staraptor (lvl 100 Staraptor ?).
Pointed stones dug into Staraptor.
Staraptor lost 18% of its health.
Salaspectrum's Staraptor fainted.
Salaspectrum switched in Breloom (lvl 100 Breloom ?).
Pointed stones dug into Breloom.
Breloom lost 6% of its health.
Breloom used Substitute.
Breloom lost 25% of its health.
Breloom made a substitute!
Orichalcum used Ice Punch.
It's super effective!
A critical hit!
The substitute took damage for Breloom!
Breloom's substitute faded!
The sandstorm rages.


Staraptor enters just to die, and here comes that fucking drug user that subs as i punch him.

Until now:(me)2X1(Salaspectrum)

42# turn:

 Breloom used Substitute.
Breloom lost 25% of its health.
Breloom made a substitute!
Orichalcum used Ice Punch.
It's super effective!
The substitute took damage for Breloom!
Breloom's substitute faded!
The sandstorm rages.


Well, more subs and frigid fists.

43# turn:

 Breloom used Seed Bomb.
It's not very effective...
Orichalcum lost 12% of its health.
Orichalcum used Ice Punch.
It's super effective!
Breloom lost 28% of its health.
Salaspectrum's Breloom fainted.
matheusfullmetal wins!


And then, my fat stell alien became the winner alongside with the old slepping ghost.

Props:
-Registell for the incredible performance and killing his entire team(not really, but paralized a lot of things)
-Salaspectrum for a amazing battle
-The amazing predicts(from both parts if i can say)
-Staraptor U-turns that caused me a lot of problems.

Slops:
-Hetran for exploding on my chomp( it was my bad, my slop)
-TTar for not killed so much
-Dusknoir for being a sleppy head the entire battle( but that wasn't was a real slop, sice the sleep clause helped me here)

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So, i hope you guys liked that battle as i did.
 
Sorry, but would you mind adding in the sprites of both teams competing, and removing the nicknames? (Or at least adding in parenthesis the pokemon's real name next to the nickname?) Then I could read it more easily and review it.
 
Sweeper.

Registeel.

Battle wasn't all that great and the comments made it kind of a chore to read, unfortunately. Points for Registeel, though.
 
Fun match, neat team. Always fun to see odd pokemon in OU (Registeel, Staraptor, Slowbro in one match >_>). The Barney = Slowbro thing was pretty funny, too.

Salaspectrum's team couldn't quite handle the paralysis that you were spreading, and that Explosion on Garchomp probably cost him the match (otherwise he had the perfect counter to your Registeel in Heatran).

Other than that, this warstory could use a LOT more polish. Seriously, use a spelling/grammar checker before you post things like this:

Well, as i said, no swepper here, more like a tank.
Ttar can take him nicely, no problema here thanks to sandstoirm boost, but...

3# tun:
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Although the formatting is decent overall, silly mistakes like this make your story difficult to read instead of being an enthralling tale of your battle. If you expect readers to take your warstory seriously, you should at least put some effort into taking it seriously yourself.

Also, is there a reason why there are 11 broken picture links at the top of the page (where the sprites are)? Removing these could help you out too.
 
Neh warstory.
The grammer makes my eyes bleed.
Apart from that, it wasn't so bad. I didn't see this amazing prediction that you talked about though.
 
I remember facing a Registeel like that one once. Man, that was a bitch to take down. (Oops, sorry Orihime... XD)

Sasuke hates these kind of stories; too much--

LOG! (cookie to anyone who gets that reference)

I can't say that I liked the lack of commentary, though. Still, Thunder Wave / Iron Head Registeel isn't seen all that often (probably because a STAB 80 BP attack isn't going to go that far with a 75 Base Attack), but it can be annoying nonetheless.

By the way, from Registeel we saw Thunder Wave / Iron Head / Ice Punch. The last move wouldn't happen to be Iron Defense, would it?
 
Shiney said:
Neh warstory.
The grammer makes my eyes bleed.
Apart from that, it wasn't so bad. I didn't see this amazing prediction that you talked about though.
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Learn to spell before you put others down about their grammar. Fun warstory. Any warstory where Breloom takes a beating gets a thumbs up from me.
 
matheusfullmetal said:
I wonder wy he stayed, but anyway, see ya Barney.
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I expected Pursuit >.>

matheusfullmetal said:
Why did he switch? That is a mystery for my little mind, and togekiss is owning some asses out there.
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I anticipated Blissey. Paralysis on Staraptor sucked real bad though. lol

jrrrrrrr said:
Salaspectrum's team couldn't quite handle the paralysis that you were spreading, and that Explosion on Garchomp probably cost him the match (otherwise he had the perfect counter to your Registeel in Heatran).
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I really intended to Explode on Garchomp at that point. I couldn't risk not KOing with Earth Power and having a half-healthy Sand Veil-abusing Chomp once again. Though in hindsight, I really shouldn't have.

I was really hoping that Intimidate would affect Registeel before the SR kills. Breloom would've survived through a Sub if so. But that wasn't the case.

Oh, and Registeel was a bitch. Seriously.

gg there.

CardsOfTheHeart said:
By the way, from Registeel we saw Thunder Wave / Iron Head / Ice Punch. The last move wouldn't happen to be Iron Defense, would it?
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Stealth Rock :)
 
gmax said:
Learn to spell before you put others down about their grammar. Fun warstory. Any warstory where Breloom takes a beating gets a thumbs up from me.
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You seem to be defending the OP's lack of proper spelling and general presentation...
Besides, spelling grammar as grammer is a personal quirk of mine and doesn't make anything I type unpleasant to the eyes and or unreadable. I'm also going to point out that spelling and grammer are two different things.
 
Shiney said:
You seem to be defending the OP's lack of proper spelling and general presentation...
Besides, spelling grammar as grammer is a personal quirk of mine and doesn't make anything I type unpleasant to the eyes and or unreadable. I'm also going to point out that spelling and grammer are two different things.
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If your English isn't lacking in flaws, you have no right to criticise others. And for the record, incorrect spellings make what you write flawed. Its like your going to a dude named Curt and telling him that writing his name as Kurt instead is justified because you find it cooler. Incorrect usage of English makes it unpleasant to read, and deliberate misspellings such as grammer, liek, teh etc. are even more irritating simply because they are deliberate.
 
decent battle
i fail to see the great predictions though

registeel was good in this battle


i am against sub garchomp though (brightpowder, leftovers, or whatever)
you used it to get a miss (abuse sand veil) and get ahead of breeloom...
...not to block status/sub on a switch/take a suprising attack/explosion
he would have kept breaking your subs
 
Well, the explosion part was MY bad, and good move for salaspectrum, otherwise, nobody on his team at this point( paralize, half health...) would be able to take chomp.
 
Worse than the grammar was the commentary. Calling things homosexual, obese and sexy chicken doesn't make you clever. It makes your story obnoxious to read. The battle wasn't bad, but please try to act like you are moderately intelligent when you write your commentary.
 
Ever heard about comedy?
I think that a moderately intelligent person uderstand that, so try to think better on your commentary, ok?
 
gmax said:
If your English isn't lacking in flaws, you have no right to criticise others. And for the record, incorrect spellings make what you write flawed. Its like your going to a dude named Curt and telling him that writing his name as Kurt instead is justified because you find it cooler. Incorrect usage of English makes it unpleasant to read, and deliberate misspellings such as grammer, liek, teh etc. are even more irritating simply because they are deliberate.
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Okay, you seem to be taking the English language very seriously, good for you. Myself, I don't mind occasional mistakes in someones typing, though not if they are repeated throughout a passage. You also seem to have misinterpreted what I said, I type grammer because of a habit I picked up when I started typing, not because it looks 'cooler'.
Two other things, the 'high and mighty, I'm better then you' attitude doesn't impress me at all, kindly stop it. And by your own arguements you shouldn't be criticizing anyone, as your English is flawed too.
If you have any problems about my English grammar, or anything else, contact my by PM, lets not clog up a thread with childish bickering.
 
The constant "homessexual" and "ass" in every single comment really makes this a pain to read, I don't think needing to bash every single opponent with a curse word is really necessary >_>;;. Non of it was funny, it just sounds like a 10 year old that got his hands on a book of curses.
 
Lets say that 8/43 turn have this words, but why do you guys complain about me calling metagross obese?
Of course, if this is against rules, well, so i take it out.
 
It's not against the rules. It just makes you sound like an idiot. We would rather you spend a few extra minutes coming up with some more intelligent commentary than just slapping some insults into the text and assuming it adds "color."
 
Ok, i still think that there is no problem on that "Insults", but i made this warstory fro people fun, and if people don't like that "insults", so i should replace these "insults" with something better.
But tomorrow, now i am lazy.
 
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