(Archive) Small Objective Changes Thread

[(makeup)]

ok, sorry
well since I like nitpicking

Moreover, most Fire-types such as Ponyta, Growlithe, Houndour, and Vulpix have the ability Flash Fire, allowing them to absorb Fire-type attacks aimed at Hoppip and begin firing off boosted Fire Blasts.

Is this a joke or was the author just being really repetitive? In my opinion, it would flow better if the word "fire" weren't used as much.
Team Options second sentence....
http://www.smogon.com/dp/pokemon/hoppip

 

[(makeup)]

I feel like a troll posting here so much but....
http://www.smogon.com/dp/pokemon/machoke

Machoke's ability, No Guard, along with DynamicPunch sets him

sets shouldn't be pluralized (this is in the overview)

 

[Fatecrashers]

that 'fire' thing is fine imo

changed machoke to this

No Guard and DynamicPunch set him apart from other Fighting-types in the UU metagame

 

[BenZyvera]

http://http://www.smogon.com/dp/pokemon/lickitung

Under the swords dance set, it says: "after a swords Dance, lickitung reaches a devastating 32 attack stat."

I'm not sure what the real stat is supposed to be, but I do know that 32 isn't devastating, chansey has a higher atk stat than that.

 

[ShinyAzelf]

http://http://www.smogon.com/dp/pokemon/lickitung

Under the swords dance set, it says: "after a swords Dance, lickitung reaches a devastating 32 attack stat."

I'm not sure what the real stat is supposed to be, but I do know that 32 isn't devastating, chansey has a higher atk stat than that.

Nothing is wrong with that. If you havn't realised, that was a Little Cup analysis, where all Pokemon are at level 5.

 

[Plusle]

http://www.smogon.com/forums/showthread.php?t=12495

It says in the battle server box about Shoddy Battle and needs to be changes to Pokemon Online.

 

[Rising_Dusk]

I'm not sure if you meant to link to that thread, but that is an ancient tournament thread from 2006 and there is nothing wrong with it.

 

[Warped Worlds]

http://www.smogon.com/dp/pokemon/empoleon

In the gen 4 Empoleon analysis, there is some false information.

"With 240 Spe EVs and an Agility, Empoleon reaches 432 Speed, outspeeding +1 Jolly Gyarados and Dragonite, Choice Scarf Togekiss, +2 Adamant Metagross, and Choice Scarf Heatran."

The Sub Petaya Empoleon set claims it outruns +2 Adamant Metagross, but the new standard Adamant Agility Metagross 60HP/252Atk/196Spe which hits 450Spe after an Agility. Sub Petaya Empoleon cannot outrun that without running a +Spe nature.

 

[Rising_Dusk]

AKA: Speed creep strikes again. I've fixed it.

 

[Ninja-persian]

http://www.smogon.com/dp/pokemon/exploud

"Thanks to Soundproof Exploud's Attack boosts cannot be Roared away, nor is he forced out by Perish Song."

A comma Is missing after "Soundproof" and "is he" should be replaced by "be".

 

[Ninja-persian]

http://www.smogon.com/dp/pokemon/floatzel
From the team options section.

"Stealth Rock support is very useful for the offensive sets to make dealing with Pokemon such as Uxie an easier task as well"

To make sound better, "offensive sets to make dealing with pokemon" should be refrased to "offensive sets, as it makes dealing with pokemon such as Uxie an easier task in addition to making Moltres a much less scary sweeper."

 

[Fatecrashers]

good point about the run-on sentence

changed to this:

Stealth Rock support is very useful for the offensive sets, as it makes dealing with Pokemon such as Uxie an easier task, as well as making Moltres a much less scary sweeper.

just needs caching now

 

[Ninja-persian]

http://www.smogon.com/dp/pokemon/drifblim

"Drifblim is such a versatile Pokemon, with a lot of extra moves not even mentioned in the sets listed above."
In the optional changes section.

Change "such a", to "an extremely" or " a very".

 

[Ninja-persian]

http://www.smogon.com/dp/pokemon/dunsparce

"Fortunately, Dunsparce has one, utterly amazing advantage"
In Dunsparce's overview.

Take out the unnecessary comma after "one", as it is misplaced.

 

[Ninja-persian]

http://www.smogon.com/dp/pokemon/bellossom
In the overview section of Bellossom

"she's as average a Grass-type as can exist."
Poor wording here. Change the sentence to:

"She's as average as a Grass-type pokemon can be"

 

[guddagudda]

http://www.smogon.com/dp/pokemon/bellossom
In the overview section of Bellossom

"she's as average a Grass-type as can exist."
Poor wording here. Change the sentence to:

"She's as average as a Grass-type pokemon can be"

both of your changes seem unnecessary, especially the one i have quoted

 

[Ninja-persian]

both of your changes seem unnecessary, especially the one i have quoted

If you can't read the thread correctly, it says "typos" and "poor wording". I'm pretty sure they fall in this category.

 

[Aeron Ee1]

If you manage to find any of the sets mentioned in the Optional Changes section, setting up on Camerupt is an easy way of making your opponent regret using him. The Defensive Dancer Altaria is perfect, as it resists almost all of Camerupt's movepool and can block any status with Safeguard before setting up Dragon Dances with impunity, using its natural bulk and Roost to shrug off anything but a boosted Hidden Power Ice. Milotic can come in on any move bar Explosion, sponge status with Marvel Scale, and swiftly KO any Camerupt with ease, making it another excellent check to him. These sets are just generally much easier to wall either due to lack of coverage, investment, being locked onto an attack, or some combination of the three; so just be smart with your switching and you should be in the green.

http://www.smogon.com/dp/pokemon/camerupt

last paragraph of C&C.

 

[Rising_Dusk]

"Fortunately, Dunsparce has one, utterly amazing advantage"

Fixed this.

"she's as average a Grass-type as can exist."

This is fine as-is.

last paragraph of C&C.

Fixed.

 

[Fire Blast]

In the Blissey overview it says, "Blissey does come with negative traits, however, the primary one is her horrible Defense stat."

Better would be: "However, Blissey does come with negative traits, the primary one being her horrible Defensive stat."

http://www.smogon.com/dp/pokemon/blissey

 

[jc104]

In the Blissey overview it says, "Blissey does come with negative traits, however, the primary one is her horrible Defense stat."

Fixed.

 

[Aeron Ee1]

Setting up on Camerupt is an easy way of making your opponent regret using him. Bulky Dragon Dance Altaria is perfect, as it resists almost all of Camerupt's movepool and can block any status with Safeguard before setting up Dragon Dances with impunity, using its natural bulk and Roost to shrug off anything but a boosted Hidden Power Ice. Milotic can come in on any move bar Explosion, sponge status with Marvel Scale, and swiftly KO any Camerupt with ease, making it another excellent check to him. These sets are just generally much easier to wall either due to lack of coverage, investment, being locked onto an attack, or some combination of the three; so just be smart with your switching and you should be in the green.

Now this part doesn't make any sense... it's supposed to say, at the beginning, "if you find yourself up against any of the sets in other options".. =[

 

[Rising_Dusk]

I've fixed that and a few other errors I noticed in that analysis.

 

[(makeup)]

With excellent physical defense, Ghost typing, as well as access to Will-O-Wisp, Duskull is one of the premier walls in the Little Cup environment.

http://www.smogon.com/dp/pokemon/duskull first sentence

Okay this sentence is very strange in my opinion. Firstly, shouldn't the word "defense" be capitalized? Furthermore, Duskull's defenses are equal, so why mention it from one side and not the other? Also, the bold part sounds extremely odd. I would replace "as well as" with "and" or something to make it flow better.

 

[(makeup)]

okay here's another strange part from the same duskull thing

With access to Will-O-Wisp, as well as a semi-reliable recovery move, Duskull can be extremely hard to take down, and can proceed to wear down the opposing team rather quickly.

Totally a run-on sentence, and it sounds extremely strange when reading it to yourself.