[OU Warstory] Wanna be toasted?

Here I am with another Warstory, even if you probably don't remember about me. To be honest I should've posted it a long time ago but lately I've been really busy, sorry. D: Anyway, I was testing a new team when I had the battle I'm going to show you. This time I've asked the consent to write the story using my foe's real name, though. As you can see I'm not so good with the prefaces, therefore here's the battle. (I'm "point" as in the previous story)

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Point's moves will look like this.
J.T's moves will look like this.
Other text will look like this.
Leftovers will be omitted.
Nicknames will be omitted.
Score will be shown after every KO.

Rules:
• Ladder Match
• Sleep Clause
• Freeze Clause
• OHKO Clause
• Evasion Clause
• Species Clause
• Strict Damage Clause
• Soul Drew Clause

J.T sent out Skarmory.
point sent out Bronzong.

Here we go. I'm in a clear disadvantage since Bronzong can't do anything to Skarmory while it can set-up Stealth Rock and Spikes. I'm pretty sure he's going to get some kind of entry hazards, but if I use SR next turn he'll Whirwind me on my switch and do free damages to my pokes. So I decided to switch immediately, thinking I'll have other chances to get my Stealth.

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point switched in Flygon.
Skarmory used Stealth Rock.
Pointed stones float in the air around the foe's team!

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And my favourite sweeper comes in the game. My options are three: Draco Meteor, predicting other -probably scarfers- dragons which would enter to take Earthquake or Fire Blast; Earthquake, predicting either bulky waters or fire pokemons (entered to take Fire Blast); Fire Blast, to strongly hit Skarmory, playing conservatively.
I have no idea about how J.T plays but I don't wanna risk getting Spikes on my field on the second turn predicting a switch, so I'm going to use my fire move.

J.T switched in Heatran.
Flygon used Fire Blast.
Heatran's Flash Fire raised its fire power!

First exact predict by his side, and first wrong predict by mine. Perhaps it is a Scarftran, which is not so troublesome for my team. Anyway, he doesn't know what kind of Flygon is my dragon: maybe he thinks I'm scarfed or banded, and so locked in Fire Blast, and he's expecting a switch. But I don't think he wants to take so many risks using Earth Power. However he could use a powerful fire move, boosted by Flash Fire. I decided to send its little brother, my Life Orb'd Rest-Talk Heatran, expecting either Dragon Pulse, HP Ice or a fire move.

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point switched in Heatran.
Pointed stones dug into Heatran.
Heatran lost 12% of its health.

Heatran used Hidden Power.
It's not very effective...
Heatran lost 5% of its health.


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I wasn't wrong, yay. Obviously he won't leave Heatran dying under an Earth Power. I think he'll switch in something like Salamence or Gyarados (in conclusion something flying or levitating): it would be perfect, cause my Heatran has a move which has a 30% of chances of disable them. Yeah I'm talking about Lava Plume.

J.T switched in Porygon2.
Porygon2 traced Heatran's Flash Fire!
Heatran used Lava Plume.
Porygon2's Flash Fire raised its fire power!

Uh, not bulky waters or salamence. And so this is his Heatran's counter. Nice to know it: the only move that can frighten Heatran is Thunder Wave but mine is resttalker so I can take it without problems. I decided to switch though, since this is the chance I was waiting for and talking about before. Furthermore if I switch I leave him the doubt that I'm scarfed or not.

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point switched in Bronzong.
Pointed stones dug into Bronzong.
Bronzong lost 6% of its health.

Porygon2 used Thunder Wave.
Bronzong is paralysed! It may be unable to move!

...The chance to set-up Stealth Rock, yes. I know that it means a free switch in for Skarmory and so a free layer of Spikes, but I need them if I want to win. About my team, three pokemons of six are damaged by Spikes and three by SR. Just one by both of them. So one layer of Spikes shouldn't be a problem.

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J.T switched in Skarmory.
Bronzong used Stealth Rock.
Pointed stones float in the air around the foe's team!

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As I expected he wants to get more entry hazards. My Bronzong has Hypnosis but I don't want to send Skarm to sleep since it gives easy switch-in to Flygon and Heatran. And about it it's time to do some damages with the dragon or the "burning steel"! (it's not so difficult to imagine which of them I'm going to send :D)

point switched in Flygon.
Pointed stones dug into Flygon.
Flygon lost 6% of its health.

Skarmory used Spikes.
Spikes were scattered around the foe's team!

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Did you guess right? I think so. Flygon vs Skarmory, again. Right now both of us are trying to enter in the head of the opponent for doing the best move. I've seen only three members of his team. Skarmory, Heatran and Porygon-2. Earthquake would hurt only Heatran, but I suppose he will not send it cause he did it before; Draco Meteor seems to me a good option since it does decent damages to Skarmory and heatran and hits hard porygon-2, while Fire Blast would be a good choice only if he decides to stay in with Skarmory.
I thought for about 2 minutes and then I decided. *suspance*

Flygon used Fire Blast.
It's super effective!
Skarmory lost 64% of its health.
Flygon lost 10% of its health.

Skarmory used Whirlwind.

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I won this mindgame! I thought that Fire Blast would have KO'ed the bird, but it didn't. Oh, and right now J.T knows that I have Life Orb. By the way, I'm hoping Whirlwind is selecting something that isn't Bronzong. All my Pokes are able to finish skarm except it. I trust in you, god! Let me switch in Heatran! I'm sure you will do it.

point switched in Bronzong (lvl 100 Bronzong).
Pointed stones dug into Bronzong.
Bronzong lost 6% of its health.


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God doesn't listen to me. To be honest, God never listens to me >:(
Anyway, this means that Skarmory could take advantage of the situation for recovering, getting another layer of Spikes or either using Whirwind again (which is what I would have done if I were in this situation). I hope J.T doesn't think like me.

point switched in Heatran.
Pointed stones dug into Heatran.
Heatran lost 12% of its health.
Heatran was hurt by Spikes!
Heatran lost 12% of its health.

Skarmory used Roost.
Skarmory restored 50% of its health.

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Puff, pant, my health is even more low now.. I have to use Rest as soon as possible, but not now. I'm gonna use Earth Power to hurt Porygon-2 since the switch is obvious.. That cybernetic duck makes me really nervous, and I want to kill it with all my heart <3

J.T switched in Porygon2.
Porygon2 traced Heatran's Flash Fire!
Pointed stones dug into Porygon2.
Porygon2 lost 12% of its health.

Heatran used Earth Power.
Porygon2 lost 37% of its health.
Heatran lost 10% of its health.


37% isn't enough to kill it with another hit; however I suppose he's going to use Recover, so I'll keep using Earth Power hoping in the 10% of chance of SpDef drop. If he uses Thunder Wave (but I really doubt about it since he risks wasting a turn if I switch in Bronzong) I will quickly press on Rest.

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Heatran used Earth Power.
A critical hit!
Porygon2 lost 57% of its health.

J.T's Porygon2 fainted.
Heatran lost 10% of its health.

Point 6 - 5 J.T

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Believe me, I'm really sorry for that >_< We were playing a good battle, and I really dislike when I hax / I'm haxed. But unfortunately it's a part of the game, and this battle can still be great, despite of some critical hit.

J.T switched in Infernape.
Pointed stones dug into Infernape.
Infernape lost 12% of its health.


Uh-oh. I have no real Infernape's counters. But I think that crit makes J.T pretty nervous. If I'm right he has lost his patience and he will try to defeat Heatran as soon as possible. So the only thing I can do is switch in Gengar on the likely Close Combat -hoping he doesn't predict a switch-.

point switched in Gengar.
Pointed stones dug into Gengar.
Gengar lost 12% of its health.

Infernape used Close Combat.
It doesn't affect Gengar...

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Pheeeeeew. Gengar is still at 94% of its health fortunately. Oh, wait, just a moment... 94%? Stealth Rocks did 12%. Why is my gengar holding Leftovers?! Oh, understood. Before there was another Pokemon instead of Gengar, and it was holding Leftovers. And I forgot to change the item. Damned Gengar and damned Lefties >;( I lost a lot of power... By the way. J.T's team has Skarmory, Porygon-2, Heatran, Infernape and two unknown Pokemons, and I wouldn't be surprised if one of them is Blissey. So, since I suppose he's going to switch, why don't try with Focus Punch?

Gengar is tightening its focus!
J.T switched in Scizor.
Pointed stones dug into Scizor.
Scizor lost 12% of its health.

Gengar used Focus Punch.
Scizor lost 37% of its health.

Ouch, I'd like so much Life Orb right now ;_; if I were Life Orb'd I would've done more damages and probably got Scizor in the KO range of Thunderbolt. Anyway, Gengar can still do something useful. I don't think he's gonna use Bullet Punch: there's no one Gengar that doesn't escape while facing a Scizor, so Pursuit will surely KO me. But I'm carrying one of the most understimated moves of DPPt. Die and take your foe with you, useless ghost!!

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Gengar used Destiny Bond.
Gengar is trying to take its foe with it!
Scizor used Pursuit.
It's super effective!
Gengar lost 100% of its health.
point's Gengar fainted.
Gengar took Scizor with it!
J.T's Scizor fainted.


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Point 5 - 4 J.T

J.T switched in Infernape.
point switched in Flygon.
Pointed stones dug into Infernape.
Infernape lost 12% of its health.
Pointed stones dug into Flygon.
Flygon lost 6% of its health.


Again that hateful Infernape. I really detest it. And now that Gengar is dead I've got nothing which is able to take a stabbed Close Combat. Very nice situation, yeah. I can only pray... Flygon, I belive in you (no, I'm not Naruto), resist and kill this dirty monkey!

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J.T switched in Gengar.
Pointed stones dug into Gengar.
Gengar lost 12% of its health.

Gengar makes ground moves miss with Levitate!
Flygon used Earthquake.
Flygon's attack missed!

I've been quite predictable. Overmuch predictable. In any case I can't stay in and take a Shadow Ball: my safest switch is Bronzong. Perhaps if it's a Choice Specs Gengar it's over.

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point switched in Bronzong.
Pointed stones dug into Bronzong.
Bronzong lost 6% of its health.

Gengar used Shadow Ball.
Bronzong lost 31% of its health.

No Life Orb recoil, no Leftovers recovery, not so many damages for being specsed... it's a Scarf Gengar. A Scarf Gengar ready to come in the ball to let enter a famous metallic bird.

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J.T switched in Skarmory.
Pointed stones dug into Skarmory.
Skarmory lost 12% of its health.

point switched in Heatran.
Pointed stones dug into Heatran.
Heatran lost 12% of its health.
Heatran was hurt by Spikes!
Heatran lost 12% of its health.


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Yeah I knew that. I love double switch. I did that to have the opportunity of using Rest. Now that Porygon has passed away, sweeping would be easier, but Life Orb's recoil could be a problem so I need to be at good health.

Heatran used Rest.
Heatran fell asleep!
Heatran restored 86% of its health.

Skarmory used Whirlwind.

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Wow he stayed in, I didn't expect that. If Whirwind will select Bronzong again I swear I'll commit a suicide.

point switched in Lucario.
Pointed stones dug into Lucario.
Lucario lost 3% of its health.
Lucario was hurt by Spikes!
Lucario lost 12% of its health.


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Mindgame again. I have three options: Swords Dance, Close Combat or Crunch. I would leave out Swords Dance for two reasons: first, I'm facing a phazer. Second, but not less important, he has a Gengar that can easily come in on that and OHKO me with Focus Blast.
My second option is Close Combat. I don't know what percentage it does to Skarmory (I think that's high though), but -again- I absolutely can't let Gengar enter without any damage.
In other words, I should use Crunch. He knows Gengar is dangerous... Who is going to win this mindgame?

Lucario used Crunch.
It's not very effective...
Skarmory lost 12% of its health.
Lucario lost 10% of its health.

Skarmory used Spikes.
Spikes were scattered around the foe's team!

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Not me apparently. xD I've another layer of Spikes on my field. This looks pretty bad, guys. I have to close this match quickly. I think you've understood what I'm going to do.

point switched in Flygon.
Pointed stones dug into Flygon.
Flygon lost 6% of its health.

Skarmory used Spikes.
Spikes were scattered around the foe's team!

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Other Spikes, damn >_< I think he won't stay in and take a Fire Blast, so I decided to go with Earthquake. Now that I'm reading again this battle I notice that I did a lot of mistakes x_x

Flygon used Earthquake.
It doesn't affect Skarmory...
Skarmory used Roost.
Skarmory restored 2% of its health.

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Flygon used Earthquake.
It doesn't affect Skarmory...
Skarmory used Whirlwind.
point switched in Heatran.
Pointed stones dug into Heatran.
Heatran lost 12% of its health.
Heatran was hurt by Spikes!
Heatran lost 25% of its health.


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What a BIG FAIL. He predicted right for two times. I'm getting old for this kind of things, sigh. By the way, now I've 1/3 chances of get the right move. I think it's an acceptable risk. I can't see one more minute this hateful bird.
Do you want to be toasted?

Heatran is fast asleep!
Heatran used Sleep Talk.
Heatran used Lava Plume.

It's super effective!
Skarmory lost 100% of its health.
J.T's Skarmory fainted.
Heatran lost 10% of its health.


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Point 5 - 3

Finally. I feel really satisfied. However I know what is waiting for me: Scarfgar. My nightmare :(

J.T switched in Gengar.
Pointed stones dug into Gengar.
Gengar lost 12% of its health.


Here we go. Mh, my opponent is a good player as I could see. Probably he will predict a switch -Bronzong?- and use Shadow Ball. On the other hand if he decides to use Focus Blast, it firstly has 30% chances of miss and secondly, in case it doesn't miss and OHKOes me, on next turn Bronzong will come in without problems and go with EQ/Gyro Ball. Why don't try?

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Gengar used Focus Blast.
Gengar's attack missed!
Heatran is fast asleep!

Heatran used Sleep Talk.
Heatran used Lava Plume.

Gengar lost 76% of its health.
J.T's Gengar fainted.
Heatran lost 10% of its health.


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Point 5 - 2 J.T

Okay, I haxed, I know. I'm sorry for that. But as explained before if Focus Blast didn't miss I don't think that I would've certainly lost... I still have Bronzong, I could revenge kill Infernape with Lucario, and I still have Flygon for take some fire move / earth power from Heatran. And I've another Pokemon -that you didn't see- which can enter on Gengar's Shadow Balls and Heatran's fire moves.

J.T switched in Heatran.
Pointed stones dug into Heatran.
Heatran lost 12% of its health.


Now is quite simple. He totally lost his patience.. I'm pretty sure he's going to use Earth Power, so.. go, Bronzong!

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point switched in Bronzong.
Pointed stones dug into Bronzong.
Bronzong lost 6% of its health.

Bronzong makes ground moves miss with Levitate!
Heatran used Earth Power.
Heatran's attack missed!

He still has Heatran and Infernape: both of them can't take an Earthquake, so I think explaining all next moves is no needed.

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J.T switched in Infernape.
Pointed stones dug into Infernape.
Infernape lost 12% of its health.

Bronzong used Earthquake.
It's super effective!
Infernape lost 63% of its health.
J.T's Infernape fainted.


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Point 5 - 1 J.T

J.T switched in Heatran.
Pointed stones dug into Heatran.
Heatran lost 12% of its health.


And, as last surprise, here's the pokemon that I was talking about!

point switched in Porygon2.
Porygon2 traced Heatran's Flash Fire!
Pointed stones dug into Porygon2.
Porygon2 lost 12% of its health.
Porygon2 was hurt by Spikes!
Porygon2 lost 25% of its health.

Heatran used Flamethrower.
Porygon2's Flash Fire raised its fire power!

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...I have the cyberduck too! I think it's gg. Nice battle, J.T =)

J.T has left the room.

J.T's damned team:

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Props:
- My Heatran for killing Skarmory and Gengar
- Bronzong for killing the dirty monkey
- Gengar for killing Scizor with a forgotten move :D
- His Skarmory for setting Stealth and Spikes
- Me for some nice predict
- J.T for some nice predict too
- ...and Porygon for letting quit my opponent!

Slops:
- Me for forgetting Life Orb >_>
- Me for many big mistakes..
- Flygon, 'cause in this match he didn't do its best :(
- Crits and misses cause I hate them
- Lucario for being quite useless in the match (yeah I know it's all my fault)
- J.T for quitting. :(

Thanks for reading!

Blood Tears
 
Well, I don't want to hurt you, but a lot of spelling mistakes made the read a bit hard for the eyes. The battle was somewhat average, and you were very lucky, not only with the crit and Focus Blast miss, but with the two Lava Plumes through Sleep Talk in a row. The format was decent and some mindgames did keep me reading like I always do. Not that bad, but try to read some of the better warstories. Maybe it'll help you improve next time.
 
I honestly don't see focus blast as hax. 30% miss chance is hugenormous. Using it is a gamble. Sure odds are it will hit, but relying on it is foolish. It's part of the moves balance. Same as defense drops on Close Combat or Recoil damage on flare-blitz.

Nice read though. And the lava plumes are haxy. Wish Rest-talk would work that well for me. I always get rest.
 
I skimmed over the warstory, and it was decent, but I have a note to make on the Special Mixgon, which was developed by Colonel M and tested and written up by me.

To be honest, its not meant to power through walls with brute force, which is what you were attempting to do when you tried to beat down Skarmory. If you want to do that, you should use a Classical Mixmence. Flygon's advantage is that so many people think he's Scarfed (~65%)/Banded (~20%), so you should have tried to do stuff like come in on Heatran and Infernape and flash around Earthquake, and later spring the trap by 2HKOing Skarmory on the switch-in with Fire Blast. Not to mention that Flygon minimizes residual damage, while Salamence suffers against it.

But to your credit, Flygon wouldn't have been very useful against your opponent's kind of team anyways.
 
This is a "Meh" Warstory.Mispredicts,Some spelling mistakes,and the hax made the warstory abit medicore.


6.1/10,as the above poster suggested try finding a better battle and check for spelling mistakes before posting a warstory.
 
Honestly, this warstory was just fine. People will see a user with 6 posts and go in expecting it to be junk, but this was a good warstory. The prediction games were interesting and it was played pretty well overall. It wasn't a novel, but I thought the writing definitely wasn't terrible and it kept me reading throughout the entire warstory. Nice job.
 
that battle had some critical hax in it, definitely coulda been better, and not sure what a resttalk heatran is gonna do, especially since the list of things that can 2hko is pretty big =/

6/10
 
I read the entire warstory, and while it wasn't mind-blowing, it still was an enjoyable read. The main issues I see with the battle are the odd risks taken in the match. Skarmory staying in on Flygon? And then in on Heatran? I can understand the need to rack up residual damage, but even with ResTalk, taking those sort of chances can really hurt one's chances of winning, evident in this battle.
 
It was good. You had determination and persistence which was evident with you EQs. Not great as there was a load of hax, but it was still good. To me, hax is acceptable under 3 conditions:
1. One player gets haxed A LOT while the other doesn't but he/she manages to win.
2. Both players get haxed equally.
3. When it is CurseandRestalk Snorlax against CurseandRestalk Snorlax, it is a first to crit game.

Anyways, good battle and good useage of pokemon.
 
Now you will get a better comment.

I read the whole warstory and I was entertained. You put effort in it. The biggest downside is that your opponent quit. You made some misplays and it is not perfect, no warstory is. I think it is not that bad, and much better than "average". However, next time, pick a better battle. I see great warstories from you in the future. 8/10.
 
I really don't see what's wrong with his opponents quitting when he has a (most likely) choiced Heatran left stuck using a competely ineffective move against something that isn't an offensive powerhouse. There's no point reading Porygon2 spending 7 turns trying to bring down Heatran with Thunderbolt when the game is decided.
 
Nice warstory. i enjoyed reading it (thought, to be honest, i have not actually read many yet) Just two small points;
1. Luck favouring you so much; Sleeptalking Heatran getting Plume, hoping for a 10% drop to Sp. Def against Porygon2 and critting it. etc
2. The sprite positioning of your pokemon and his seemed to switch. e.g from after your Gengar took down his Scizor with Destiny Bond until you sent out Heatran.

Small Point. An English-Speaking Native and a Native English Speaker are different things.
 
Well, I don't want to hurt you, but a lot of spelling mistakes made the read a bit hard for the eyes. The battle was somewhat average, and you were very lucky, not only with the crit and Focus Blast miss, but with the two Lava Plumes through Sleep Talk in a row. The format was decent and some mindgames did keep me reading like I always do. Not that bad, but try to read some of the better warstories. Maybe it'll help you improve next time.

Um, not to be a jerk but, considering the attention to detail in the formatting and the somewhat awkward use of correctly spelled words here and there, I am guessing that this guy put a serious effort into writing a warstory in a language other than his mother tongue (ie. the author is probably not an English-Speaking Native), which makes your comment just seem kinda mean-spirited. :/

Want to try writing a warstory in Spanish, German or Japanese and see if you can do it without avoiding a few spelling mistakes?
 
Nice formatting and sprites, I understand that those take a lot of effort. But also agreeing with almost everyone that the battle could have been a little better, and your though process could have been more descriptive. Overall nice job! 7/10
 
Yeah it's pretty obvious that English isn't this guy's native tongue. And with that taken into consideration I think he has done a good job! There was a little bit of luck in the match, and had the opponent just preserved infernape rather than saccing him, he'd probably have won, but there were some pretty cool mindgames and I read to the end. It's definitely not the best warstory, but it's also very far from the worst.
 
Average battle, average format, average... everything. Too much hax, mispredictions, and spelling mistakes. 4/10
 
Decent battle. Bit too much hax though for my liking.
That said, it was an enjoyable read, look forward to a another story from you in the future.
 
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