Grammar-Prose Workshop v6

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Welcome to the Grammar Prose Workshop v6! We've decided to revive and revamp this project in order to encourage more users to contribute to Smogon through GP checking analyses and articles. This workshop is where users can turn to learn more about the process known as Grammar and Prose, commonly referred to as "GP". This particular facet of Smogon handles the editing of written content to ensure that it is grammatically correct before going on-site. There are several areas where grammar checking is needed, including the following:

Areas Where GP Is Needed

Contributions & Corrections

Commonly abbreviated as C&C, this is the part of the site where Pokemon analyses and articles that dictate or explain relevant information for the many generations and tiers are written. The GP phase happens after the QC (Quality Control) phase, which fine-tunes the competitive quality of the content. After an analysis has received all its Quality Control checks (usually indicated by QC 1/1 or QC 2/2), the writer will change the thread tag to Copyediting, which means that it's time for the writeup to go through GP, usually consisting of one or two checks. After the writer of the analysis has implemented the GP checks, the analysis is generally ready for upload.

The Flying Press

The spiritual successor to The Smog, The Flying Press releases individual articles about a variety of topics relating to Smogon, from Pokemon spotlights to tournament coverage to PS! room overviews. Note that the GP standards for The Flying Press are more relaxed than in C&C. Also, unlike C&C, The Flying Press's writing workshop is not public; you must have permission to view it, which is usually only given through having an article approved in the submission phase or becoming part of the official GP or HTML team.

Once an article's thread tag changes to Grammar, the writer is done with the article and is now awaiting your edits. After the writer of the article has implemented two GP checks, the article must have HTML done, and then it is generally ready for publishing. Be advised that art may come to a project at any time of these projects and has no bearing on the order of phases therein.

Social Media Spotlights

Social Media Spotlights consist of individual Pokemon set spotlights for different tiers that are uploaded to social media sites like Facebook and Twitter. These are meant to be short and sweet and only require one QC and GP check each.

Disclaimer: Please keep in mind that amchecks are currently not allowed on The Flying Press articles and Social Media Spotlights due to their time sensitive nature, but you are welcome to practice on analyses in the C&C forum!

Useful Links
  • The Spelling and Grammar Standards is a full list of the criteria the GP team follows (we suggest bookmarking it). If you've lurked here on Smogon for a while, a lot of the common terms and usage of the terms should be somewhat second-nature by now, which is a huge benefit. If you haven't lurked very much, not to worry; this is a task that becomes easier with experience because there's a lot of repetition. It won't take long to catch on even though it may seem like a ton.
  • The GP Discord is the best way to meet other GPers and amcheckers as well as receive feedback and answers from others. Once you have joined, you can go to #reaction-roles to self-assign the amchecker role, which gives you access to a feedback-focused channel for amcheckers.
  • fleurdyleurse has compiled an extensive list of notes for new GPers to use as a reference as well. It can be found here.
  • autumn has complied a beginner-friendly document containing key standards and grammar rules to learn as well as advice on subjective changes and proofreading.
  • A guide to making subjective GP changes can be found here.
  • The GP Team Queue is where analyses that are ready for the GP phase are listed; the list of links in the OP is an automated list of every analysis currently waiting for GP checks. Although you can go and search for analyses to practice on yourself, this thread will help you find an analysis much easier.
  • If you've done a few amchecks and/or workshop exercises already and are interested in joining the GP team, consider signing up for tutoring to receive more involved and thorough feedback here. An official GPer will be assigned to you and will help mentor you by answering any questions you may have and looking over your amchecks.
  • Zrp200 has created a tool that auto-formats GP checks, which can be found here.
Joining the GP Team

Before being accepted as an official member of the GP team, you'll obviously need to prove that you have what it takes to fit the bill. The best way to show your skills here is to do what we call amchecks, or amateur checks. These can be posted in any analysis after it reaches the Copyediting phase as indicated by the thread tag. The writer is not required to implement your changes, but they are allowed to, and it's not uncommon for an official GPer to come behind you and validate your work or give you a few pointers to help you improve. If you have an official tutor, thye will take a look at all of your checks,

Keep in mind, however, that your amchecks do not count as official checks and thus do not count toward the completion of the Copyediting phase, unless an official GPer stamps your work to indicate that it is satisfactory (which is huge if that happens). However, official GPers will not always go over amchecks and may go on and just post an official one. Remember to make sure the writer knows it's an amcheck to avoid confusion.

When you do checks of your own, you'll want to do is establish a key at the top of your amcheck post first and foremost, which indicates what colors mean to add and remove content, and you can use them to indicate other things as well, including side comments, capitalization, and so on. Blue is used for add, red is used for remove, and any other distinct color can be used for comments. You can customize the different shades of blue and red, but make sure you stick to those base colors! The GP chck formatting tool can create a color key by selecting the Color Legend option.

A worked example of a GP check courtesy of autumn is as follows:

Hydro Pump is the preferred STAB due to its power but it can be unreliable at times. Alternatively, Surf can be run for accuracy in exchange for power. Ice Beam compliments Inteleon's Water STAB really well by hitting Grass types like Rotom-Mow and Vileplume Super Effectively. Dark Pulse provides Inteleon with a coverage move so that it isn't completely useless against Water-types like Vaporeon or Basculegion. Instead of Ice Beam or Dark Pulse, Inteleon could opt for Air Slash to better target Toxicroak and Tauroa-Paldea-Aqua but its lower base power means that it's worse at breaking through other Pokemon.

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Hydro Pump is the preferred STAB move due to its power, (AC) but it can be unreliable at times. Alternatively, Surf can be run for accuracy in exchange for power. Ice Beam compliments complements Inteleon's Water Water-type STAB move really well by hitting Grass types Grass-types like Rotom-Mow Rotom-C and Vileplume Super Effectively super effectively. Dark Pulse provides Inteleon with a coverage move so that it isn't completely useless against Water-types like Vaporeon or and Basculegion. Do you mean Basculegion-M or Basculegion-F? It needs to be one of the two. Instead of Ice Beam or Dark Pulse, Inteleon could opt for Air Slash to better target Toxicroak and Tauroa-Paldea-Aqua Paldean Tauros-W, (AC) but its lower base power Base Power means that it's worse at breaking through other Pokemon.

Explanations for all the edits in the above hide tag are as follows:

Hydro Pump is the preferred STAB option due to its power, (AC) but it can be unreliable at times.
The term 'STAB' can't be used on its own because STAB refers to the 1.5x bonus only and not any actual moves that are boosted by the bonus. Therefore, if a writer has 'STAB' on its own, you should change it to STAB move, STAB attack, or STAB option.

The comma before 'but' is added here because the clause after it is independent. As explained in fleur's notes:
  • Coordinating conjunctions (FANBOYS: for, and, nor, but, or, yet, so) should not be preceded by a comma when the clause that comes after is dependent (i.e. the clause cannot stand alone as a sentence).
    • In the same vein, when the two clauses being connected are independent, a comma must be placed before the coordinating conjunction.
    • e.g. Kingdra is a great fit on Water teams and works well on Dragon teams too (correct). / Kingdra is a great fit on Water teams, and it works well on Dragon teams too (second clause is now independent; needs comma after).
In this example, the clause that comes after 'but' is 'it can be unreliable at times'. This makes sense as a standalone sentence without needing to depend on the other part.


Ice Beam compliments complements Inteleon's Water Water-type STAB move
A common error made is confusing compliment and complement. A compliment is something like 'you're really good at GP!', whereas complement refers to one thing working well with another. In a Pokemon context, you'll always be looking for 'complement' because analyses talk about pairings and synergy.

As explained above, STAB can't be used on its own. The type name also can't be used on its own (without -type at the end) when talking about moves, so instead of 'a Water STAB move', we can change it to 'a Water-type STAB move.'

by hitting Grass types Grass-types like Rotom-Mow Rotom-C and Vileplume Super Effectively super effectively.
Types are hyphenated, so we say Grass-types and not Grass types or Grass Types.

Pokemon forme names (not form) are truncated, and the full list of them is in the very first point of the standards. Not all of them are intuitive (like this one where you would assume Rotom-M, which isn't the case), so make sure to always reference this list!

The term super effective / super effectively does not use any capital letters or hyphens, so look out for this example and super-effectively, both of which are incorrect.

Dark Pulse provides Inteleon with a coverage move so that it isn't completely useless against Water-types like Vaporeon or and Basculegion. Do you mean Basculegion-M or Basculegion-F? It needs to be one of the two.
As explained in fleur's notes:
  • Note that "x and y" is plural, while "x or y" is singular.
    • e.g. Ground-types such as Landorus-T and Dugtrio is correct, but Ground-types such as Landorus-T or Dugtrio is not, as "Ground-types" is plural and needs to be matched with a plural. If "x or y" is preferred by the writer, opt for A Ground-type such as Landorus-T or Dugtrio.
In this example, Water-types is plural, referring to more than one Water-type. Because this is plural, the list needs to grammatically agree with that and be separated by the plural 'and' not the singular 'or'.

This sentence is a good example of when a GPer would place a comment. From the GP standards, we know that using "Basculegion" without any suffix is incorrect. However, it isn't readily apparent whether the author is referring to Basculegion-M or -F, so we should ask the author or QC team for clarification.

Inteleon could opt for Air Slash to better target Toxicroak and Tauroa-Paldea-Aqua Paldean Tauros-W, (AC) but its lower base power Base Power means that it's worse at breaking through other Pokemon.
The first change here follows on from the previous formes point where the standards will guide you. It is also worth noting that for regional formes, they are formatted with the region first and differ from the PS teambuilder. The GP standard is Alolan Ninetales / Galarian Slowking / Hisuian Samurott not Ninetales-Alola.

The comma before 'but' here also uses the same rule as the first sentence change. 'Its lower Base Power means that it's worse at breaking through other Pokemon' works as a standalone without depending on the other part.

Note that Base Power does use capital letters.

Once you have done a fair amount of solid amchecks, you can submit an application to join the GP team by messaging the GP leaders and mods (deetah, Lumari, Rabia, adorluigi, autumn, sunny004) a submission including proof of your GP abilities. They will either tell you how you can improve, ask for more examples before they come to a decision, or add you to the GP team. More information about joining the GP team can be found in the guide thread.

Time to Practice!

Below are some exercises that contain several errors. Test yourself here first if you'd like by providing GP editions of these examples to correct where they are wrong. Some have more identifiable mistakes than others, and some may need to be completely reworded. To receive feedback, simply provide your corrections as a response to this thread!

Disclaimer: Some of these exercises were taken from published work on Smogon. We trust you to work with pure honesty, using your own judgement only; of course, practice is the key and making mistakes will only help you gain more confidence. So don't hesitate to ask if you're unsure!

Disclaimer: For the best use of the GP workshop, please avoid doing more than two of the exercises at a time before receiving feedback. This is because some exercises have the same errors in them, so getting feedback between trying them out will improve your knowledge and allow you to identify errors that you may have missed before. This also makes it easier for GPers to provide timely feedback!

Slither-Wing is a niche defensive pivot which uses it's interesting type, serviceable bulk and reliable recovery in Morning Sun to check attackers like Great Tusk, Breloom or Kingambit. U-Turn generates momentum for Slither-Wing's team against mons such as Flutter Mane and Skeledirge and it importantly allows Slither-Wing to avoid being trapped by Gothitelle. Close Combat OHKOs Iron Bundle and Chi-Yu and 2HKOs Miraidon which Body Press cannot do. Will-o-Wisp's Burn stops the Pokemon Slither-Wing checks from using it as set up fodder, it also punishes opponents such as Toxapex or Corviknight for switching in. Morning Sun heals Slither-Wing for 50% of its health, helping it to consistently switch into Great Tusk. Tera Water provides a resistance to Fire type attacks from Koraidon and Chi-Yu, and Water type attacks from Iron Bundle and Palafin allowing for a last ditch counterattack. 168 speed EVs out speed adamant Breloom and the rest are dumped into physical bulk.

Enamorus-I is a top tier tera captain which should always be made one when drafted. Tera fairy further boosts its STABs making it extremely hard to check, even when it is not using damage boosting items and giving it the benefit of taking less damage from stealth rocks. Types like Fire and Ground boosts it's coverage moves further, while flipping some of it's weaknesses. Water, Poison and Steel allow you to kill opponents you otherwise would not, especially on set up sets. Ghost and electric gives it extra coverage via Tera Blast, and handles certain attacks better. Stellar type Tera Blast deals 80 damage to opponents and hits them all neutrally which synergizes well with Contrary and choice scarf boosting Enamorus-I's offensive stats while dealing massive damage to all opponents reliably.

Thanks to Tidy Up Cinccino is the main enabler of Hyper Offense teams, letting them run many powerful hazard weak Pokemon such as Oricorio-Pa'u, Arcanine, and Ninetales-Alola. Knock Off lets Cinccino hit Ghost Types like Chandelure, as well as Bronzong, an otherwise problematic wall. Encore allows Cincinno to capitalize on passive foes that setup hazards, boost their stats, or heal up such as Gligar, Registeel, and Sylveon. Teammates like Diancie, Toxtricity and Scyther can work alongside Cinccino to overwhelm shared Steel-type checks like Copperajah and Bronzong, however Fires and Fightings such as Chandelure, Tauros-Paldea-Aqua, and Heracross that easily beat these same Steel-types work as well. Grassy terrain teams also heavily benefit from Cinccinos presence, since it lets Oricorio forms, Grafaiai, and Arcanine switch-in without having to take chip from hazards.

Black Glasses + tera dark should exclusively be used with Kowtow Cleave as these propel Kingambit's offensive pressure; with 5 Supreme Overlord boosts, Kingambit can reach feats like 2HKOing Dondozo with Kowtow Cleave and 1HKOing Walking-Wake and at +2 Dragonite through Multiscale with Sucker Punch. Air Balloon allows Kingambit to setup on would be checks in Landorus-T and most Great Tusks, become a sturdy switch in to offense threats like Kyurem, Roaring Moon, and Dragonite who rely on their Ground-type coverage to hit it, and gain an immunity to Spikes that limits Kingambit before it gets going. Kingambits potential and defensive utility in the late game make it a nearly staple on offensive archetypes from Bulky to Hyper Offense while still fitting on Balance. Physical teammates like Ogerpon-Wellspring, Zamazenta, and Swords Dance Valiant can overwhelm shared checks like Zanazenta, Landorus-Therian, and Dondozo. Dark Type offensive threat in Darkrai, and Samurott-Hisui form a Darkspam core with Kingambit to overwhelm Dark resists like Zamazenta and tera Fairy users like Gholdemgo and Moltres together.

Specs Calyrex-Shadow is an excellent breaker who independantly breaks through most of its usual switch ins with accurate prediction. Grass Knot kills Arceus-Water and Arceus-Ground in one hit after hazard damage. Grass Knot also 2HKOs Ting Lu. Grass Knot pressures neutral targets like Arceus-Normal as well. Psychic 2HKOes Arceus-Normal but Psyshock is an alternative STAB that 2HKOs offensive Ho Oh and hits Pokémon such as Blissey. Trick + Choice Specs debilitate Calyrex-Shadow's checks like Ho Oh, Ting Lu, and Arceus by removing the longevity their Item grant them and forcing them to attack. Tera Ghost Astral Barrage 2HKOs Ting Lu with less chip and 2HKOs Ho Oh and Defensive Arceus forms after Calyrex-Shadow loses its Specs. Tera Grass gives Grass Knot a good chance of scoring a OHKO on Ting Lu after hazard damage, and lets it 2HKO Arceus. Tera Normal turns Calyrex-Shadow into a Ghost immunity, preventing revenging attempts from opposing Calyrex-Shadows. All 3 Tera Types also allow you to survive attacks like Ting Lu's Payback and Arceus' Shadow Claw, though the latter 2 make it vulnerable to extreme killer Arceus' ESpeed.

Scarf Meowscarada with Sword Of Ruin is a top-notch offensive pivot and revenge-killer against set-up sweepers like Polteageist, as well as other Scarfers like Sandy-Shocks. On top of that, Meowscarada can potentially clean in the late-game after using Knock Off + U-Turn to sufficiently weaken checks like Corviknight and Scream Tail. Trick is an immediate and sure-fire way for Meowscarada to shut down it's checks while Knock Off paired with Spikes are good at chipping the grounded ones into KO range. Early game breakers such as Dragonite, Chi Yu and Greninja can punch huge holes into the foe's team so that Meowscarada can sweep, in return, Meowscarada cripples Dondozo and Corviknight with its STABs for the first and offers pivot support for the latter two. Corviknight is a solid defogger and pivot that also switches into priority attacks like First Impression, -Ate Extreme Speed, and Ice Shard as well, which frees up Meowscarada to pivot more freely throughout the game.

Weavile is a staple on Ice-teams thanks to its incredible speed tier and high attack. Knock Off denies passive recovery on opponents like Corviknight or Dondozo by removing their Leftovers and it prevents chip from opponents like Great Tusk and Skarmory by Knocking Off their Rocky Helmet. At +2 Triple Axel secures the OHKO on foes like the Ogerpon forms, Kyurem, Walking Wake, Ceruledge and Goodra-Hisui. Furthermore, it is able to check Defensive Great Tusk, Iron Treads, and Non Scarf Gholdengo who can prove to be formidable foes for Ice Type teams. Ice Shard serves as a reliable countermeasure against faster foes like Scarf Enamorus, Landorus-I, and Roaring Moon. At +2, it is also able to OHKO Dragapult, while also OHKOing Garchomp without making contact which avoids chip from its Rough Skin.

One of Brelooms main struggles when trying to wall break is getting past Poison Types like Vileplume, Dragalge and Slowbro-Galar, so Psychic and Ground-types like Munkidori, Uxie, or Flygon are greatly appreciated. The former two as well as Kilowattrel and Dragalge excel at Pivoting Breloom in on Dark and Steel-types like Klefki, Registeel or Muk-Alola with their U-Turn and Flip Turn. Articuno-G is an exceptionally good partner as on top of providing U-Turn support it can use Future Sight to limit Breloom's switchins even further, and abuse Vileplume's Strength Sap with its Competitive. In a similar vein, pivot partners such as Mienshao, Incineroar, Inteleon and the aforementioned Flygon make good partners since they commonly draw in Water types like Vaporeon, Milotic, Gastrodon or Swampert, for Breloom to abuse. Teammates like Incineroar, A-Muk, and Bronzong, also make for decent teammates, handling the Psychic and Fairy-types, like Uxie, Munkidori, Whimsicott or Sylveon who force Breloom out.

Chien Pao appreciates Mandibuzz defogging away hazards to prevent it from being worn down by hazards. It can also bring Chien Pao in safely using a slow U-Turn. Mandibuzz is a great switch in to Fighting attacks from enemies like Scarf Sneasler and Scarf Tusk which Chien Pao is extremely vulnerable to, as well as being capable of checking set up sweepers like Azumarill or Scizor with Foul Play. In return, Chien-Pao deals with opponents like Sandy Shocks or Baxcalibur who can cause problems for Mandibuzz. Kingambit has impressive offensive synergy with Chien Pao due to its Neutrality to Fairy-type, being able to eliminate opponents like Hatterene with Iron Head, and Scarf Flutter Mane with Sucker Punch after rocks. In return Chien Pao hits threats to Kingambit like DD Dragonite, Iron Treads, Landorus-Therian and Defensive Gliscor.

Normalium-Z Serperior utilises Leaf Storm boosted Z-Hyper Beam to bypass most of its checks, namely Mega-Venusaur, Amoonguss, Mega-Latias, Iron Moth, Hydrapple or Victini. Hidden Power [Fire] allows Serperior to chip Aegislash and Celesteela, the only checks unfazed by a boosted Breakneck Blitz, slowly wearing them down into range of +2 or +4 HP Fire in the late game. Synthesis allows you to switch in to Rotom W and Ting Lu throughout longer games without being worn down, abusing these opportunities to chip away at its checks. Glare eases the MU against Aegislash and Celesteela by allowing you to paralyse them, and attempt to remove them. Normalium-Z Serperior is only seen on Webs and other Offense teams as its aggressive playstyle and lackluster bulk leaves it unable to attempt to setup multiple times against teams with revenge-killers like Greninja, Iron Boulder, or Mega-Aerodactyl. Sticky Webs slow down the first two but answers to Mega-Aerodactyl like Balloon Aegislash, Azumarill, Scizor and Scarf Mienshao are recommended given its ability to dodge the hazard.
 
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Slither-WingSlither Wing is a niche defensive pivot which that uses it's its interesting (imo "interesting" should be changed to a different adjective that better specifies what Slither Wing's typing brings to the table) type, serviceable bulk, (AC) and reliable recovery in Morning Sun to check attackers like Great Tusk, Breloom, (AC) and or Kingambit. U-turn generates momentum for Slither-Wing's Slither Wing's team against mons Pokemon such as Flutter Mane and Skeledirge, (AC) and it importantly allows Slither-Wing Slither Wing to avoid being trapped by Gothitelle. Close Combat OHKOs OHKOes Iron Bundle and Chi-Yu and 2HKOs 2HKOes Miraidon, (AC) which Body Press cannot do. Will-o-Wisp's Burn Will-O-Wisp stops the Pokemon Slither-Wing Slither Wing checks from using it as set up setup fodder (RC); (ASC) it also punishes opponents foes such as Toxapex or and Corviknight for switching in. Morning Sun heals Slither-Wing for 50% of its health Slither Wing (dex info), helping it to consistently switch into Great Tusk. Tera Water provides a resistance to Fire type Fire-type attacks from Koraidon and Chi-Yu (RC) and Water type as well as (changed the second instance of "and" to "as well as" to prevent repetition) Water-type attacks from Iron Bundle and Palafin, (AC) allowing for a last ditch counterattack. 168 Speed EVs out speed adamant allow Slither Wing to outspeed (note that it is Slither Wing doing the outspeeding and not the EVs themselves) Adamant Breloom, (AC) and the rest are dumped into physical bulk.
 
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Close Combat OHKOs OHKOes Iron Bundle and Chi-Yu and 2HKOs 2HKOes Miraidon

Tera Water provides a resistance to Fire type Fire-type attacks from Koraidon and Chi-Yu (RC) and Water type as well as (changed the second instance of "and" to "as well as" to prevent repetition) Water-type attacks from Iron Bundle and Palafin, (AC) allowing for a last ditch counterattack
The “as well as” change isn’t necessary, but it’s good to improve clarity. If you’re going to use it, you might as well be consistent, and use “as well as” over an “and” in the first quote.

“Last-ditch” should be hyphenated, since it comes before the noun it describes, “counterattack”, and the two words act as one whole idea.

168 Speed EVs out speed adamant allow Slither Wing to outspeed (note that it is Slither Wing doing the outspeeding and not the EVs themselves) Adamant Breloom, (AC) and the rest are dumped into physical bulk.
“Dumped” can be seen as too informal, so “invested” is recommended.

Overall, these were very small things. You basically got all the changes, good job!
 
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Normalium-Z Serperior utilises utilizes Leaf Storm boosted Z-Hyper Beam Breakneck Blitz to bypass most of its checks, namely Mega-Venusaur Mega Venusaur, Amoonguss, Mega-Latias Mega Latias, Iron Moth, Hydrapple, (AC) and or Victini. Hidden Power [Fire] allows Serperior to chip Aegislash and Celesteela, the only checks unfazed by a boosted Breakneck Blitz, slowly wearing them down into range of +2 or +4 HP boosted Hidden Power Fire in the late game late-game imo boosted seems a bit clearer if not referring to the ability to OHKO or 2HKO the given checks. Synthesis allows you Serperior to switch in to Rotom W into Rotom-W and Ting Lu Ting-Lu throughout longer games without being worn down, abusing using these switch in opportunities to chip away at its checks. Glare eases the MU matchup against Aegislash and Celesteela by allowing you to paralyse paralyze them (RC) and attempt to remove them. Normalium-Z Serperior is only seen on webs and other offense teams, (AC) as its aggressive playstyle and lackluster bulk leaves leave it unable to attempt to setup set up multiple times against teams with revenge-killers revenge killers like Greninja, Iron Boulder, or Mega-Aerodactyl Mega Aerodactyl. Sticky Webs slow Web slows down the first two, (AC) but answers to Mega-Aerodactyl Mega Aerodactyl like Balloon Aegislash, Azumarill, Scizor, (AC) or and Scarf Mienshao are recommended given its Mega Aerodactyl’s ability to dodge the entry hazard.

would greatly appreciate it if someone could give feedback on this, TIA :)
 
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Normalium-Z Serperior utilises utilizes Leaf Storm boosted Z-Hyper Beam Breakneck Blitz to bypass most of its checks, namely Mega-Venusaur Mega Venusaur, Amoonguss, Mega-Latias Mega Latias, Iron Moth, Hydrapple, (AC) and or Victini.

- Z-Crystal names aren't hyphenated, so it should be "Normalium Z".
- "Leaf Storm-boosted" should be hyphenated. Explanation taken from fleur's notes:
  • Compound adjectives (two or more words combined to form a single adjective—e.g. well-known, world-renowned, 120-Base Power) need to be hyphenated only when they used in an attributive sense (i.e. directly tied to the noun without any linking verb in between). When they are used in a predicative sense (i.e. linked to the noun with a word like "seem", "appear", or "be"), however, they should not be hyphenated.
    • e.g. The red-hot kettle was boiling. vs Well known as it may be for its versatility, Tornadus in fact has many severe limitations.
    • Remember also that modifiers made up of an adverb and adjective are never hyphenated (a really good cat, not a really-good cat).

Hidden Power [Fire] allows Serperior to chip Aegislash and Celesteela, the only checks unfazed by a boosted Breakneck Blitz, slowly wearing them down into range of +2 or +4 HP boosted Hidden Power Fire in the late game late-game imo boosted seems a bit clearer if not referring to the ability to OHKO or 2HKO the given checks.

- Saying "+X move" is fine; it didn't really need to be changed to "boosted", and doing so removed some information (just "boosted" is less specific), which you want to avoid doing as much as possible during GP.
- I always change "into range of" to "into KO range of" because the former is rather informal.

Synthesis allows you Serperior to switch in to Rotom W into Rotom-W and Ting Lu Ting-Lu throughout longer games without being worn down, abusing using these switch in opportunities to chip away at its checks.

- Replacing "abusing" was good, but "Synthesis" is the subject of this sentence, so "using" is referring to it rather than Serperior. This is probably clearer if you switch the order of the clauses: "Using these opportunities, Synthesis allows (...)". I would've changed it to something like "Synthesis allows Serperior to (...) without being worn down and use these opportunities to (...)" so it's still an extension of what Serperior is "allowed" to do by Synthesis.
- Just "opportunities" on its own was fine, and "switch-in opportunities" is hyphenated if you do use it.

Glare eases the MU matchup against Aegislash and Celesteela by allowing you to paralyse paralyze them (RC) and attempt to remove them.

- I would've replaced "you" with "Serperior" because it's the Pokemon doing the paralyzing rather than the player directly.

Normalium-Z Serperior is only seen on webs and other offense teams, (AC) as its aggressive playstyle and lackluster bulk leaves leave it unable to attempt to setup set up multiple times against teams with revenge-killers revenge killers like Greninja, Iron Boulder, or Mega-Aerodactyl Mega Aerodactyl.

- It should also be "Normalium Z" here.
- Move names should be written out in full, so it should be "Sticky Web (...) teams".
- "revenge killers" is plural, so it should be used with the plural "and" rather than the singular "or".

Sticky Webs slow Web slows down the first two, (AC) but answers to Mega-Aerodactyl Mega Aerodactyl like Balloon Aegislash, Azumarill, Scizor, (AC) or and Scarf Mienshao are recommended given its Mega Aerodactyl’s ability to dodge the entry hazard.

- Item names should be written out in full, so it should be "Air Balloon Aegislash" and "Choice Scarf Mienshao".
- "answers" is plural, so it should be used with the plural "and" rather than the singular "or"; the original conjunction was correct.
- It was clear enough what "its" was referring to; it didn't need replacing. The only other singular thing in the sentence is "Sticky Web", and it's intuitive enough that Sticky Web isn't the thing avoiding itself. Also, we use the "straight" apostrophe (') rather than the "curly" one (’).
 
Slither-Wing Slither Wing is a niche defensive pivot which that uses it's its interesting type, serviceable bulk, (AC) and reliable recovery in Morning Sun to check attackers like Great Tusk, Breloom, (AC) and or Kingambit. U-turn generates momentum for Slither-Wing's Slither Wing's team against mons Pokemon such as Flutter Mane and Skeledirge, (AC) and it importantly allows Slither-Wing Slither Wing to avoid being trapped by Gothitelle. Close Combat OHKOs OHKOes Iron Bundle and Chi-Yu and 2HKOs 2HKOes Miraidon, (AC) which Body Press cannot do. Will-o-Wisp's Burn Will-O-Wisp stops the Pokemon Slither-Wing Slither Wing checks from using it as set up setup fodder (RC). (AP) It also punishes opponents foes such as Toxapex or and Corviknight for switching in. Morning Sun heals Slither-Wing Slither Wing for 50% of its health, helping it to consistently switch into Great Tusk. Tera Water provides a resistance to Fire type Fire-type attacks from Koraidon and Chi-Yu (RC) and Water type as well as Water-type attacks from Iron Bundle and Palafin, (AC) allowing for a last ditch last-ditch counterattack. 168 Speed EVs out speed adamant are needed to outspeed Adamant Breloom and the rest are dumped into physical bulk.

Thanks to Tidy Up, (AC) Cinccino is the main enabler of hyper offense teams, letting them run many powerful hazard weak entry hazard-weak Pokemon such as Oricorio-Pa'u Oricorio-P, Arcanine, and Ninetales-Alola Alolan Ninetales. Knock Off lets Cinccino hit Ghost Types Ghost-types like Chandelure, as well as hitting Bronzong, an otherwise problematic wall. Encore allows Cincinno Cinccino to capitalize on passive foes that setup set up hazards, boost their stats, or heal up such as Gligar, Registeel, and Sylveon. Teammates like Diancie, Toxtricity, (AC) and Scyther can work alongside Cinccino to overwhelm shared Steel-type checks like Copperajah and Bronzong (RC); (ASC) however, (AC) Fire-types Fires and Fightings Fighting-types such as Chandelure, Tauros-Paldea-Aqua Paldean Tauros-W, and Heracross that easily beat these same Steel-types work as well. Grassy Terrain teams also heavily benefit from Cinccinos Cinccino's presence, since it lets Oricorio forms formes, Grafaiai, and Arcanine switch-in switch in without having to take chip damage from hazards.
 
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Kiwi good stuff^^!
Slither-Wing Slither Wing is a niche defensive pivot which that uses it's its interesting type, serviceable bulk, (AC) and reliable recovery in Morning Sun to check attackers like Great Tusk, Breloom, (AC) and or Kingambit.
you can't use "type" like this; it'd need to be "uses its interesting typing"
Morning Sun heals Slither-Wing Slither Wing for 50% of its health, helping it to consistently switch into Great Tusk.
"50% of its health" is just dex info. you can remove such sections => "Morning Sun heals Slither Wing, helping it to consistently switch into Great Tusk" or a similar variant
Teammates like Diancie, Toxtricity, (AC) and Scyther can work alongside Cinccino to overwhelm shared Steel-type checks like Copperajah and Bronzong (RC); (ASC) however, (AC) Fire-types Fires and Fightings Fighting-types such as Chandelure, Tauros-Paldea-Aqua Paldean Tauros-W, and Heracross that easily beat these same Steel-types work as well.
when mentioning numerous types together, you can omit "-types" from all but the last type
example: "Fire- and Fighting-types" Or "Water-, Grass-, and Fire-types"

Grassy Terrain teams also heavily benefit from Cinccinos Cinccino's presence, since it lets Oricorio forms formes, Grafaiai, and Arcanine switch-in switch in without having to take chip damage from hazards.
I think it's better to do "the Oricorio formes" here
 
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Choice Scarf Meowscarada with Sword of Ruin is a top-notch offensive pivot and revenge-killer revenge killer against set-up sweepers like Polteageist, as well as against other Scarfers Choice Scarf users like Sandy-Shocks Sandy Shocks. On top of that, Meowscarada can potentially clean in the late-game after using Knock Off + and U-turn to sufficiently weaken checks like Corviknight and Scream Tail. Trick is an immediate and sure-fire way for Meowscarada to shut down it's its checks, (AC) while Knock Off paired with Spikes are is good at chipping the grounded ones foes into KO range. Early game breakers Early-game wallbreakers say stallbreakers instead if these Pokémon are meant to break stall such as Dragonite, Chi Yu, (AC) and Greninja can punch huge holes into the foe's opponent's team so that Meowscarada can sweep (RC). (AP) In return, Meowscarada cripples helps Dragonite by crippling Dondozo and Corviknight with its STABs for the first and STAB moves, and it offers pivot support for the latter two Chi-Yu and Greninja. reworded for clarity Corviknight is a solid Defogger and pivot that also switches into priority attacks like First Impression, -ate Extreme Speed, and Ice Shard as well, which frees up Meowscarada to pivot more freely throughout the game.

When I came across “defogger, I checked the spelling and grammar standards and saw “Defogger” and “Spiker” capitalized but “spinner” isn’t. What’s the difference between them?

Hopefully I managed to cover some of the things that I missed last time
 
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Choice Scarf Meowscarada with Sword of Ruin is a top-notch offensive pivot and revenge-killer revenge killer against set-up sweepers like Polteageist, as well as against other Scarfers Choice Scarf users like Sandy-Shocks Sandy Shocks.
- Good job on catching the “revenge-killer” mistake.
- “Set-up sweeper” should be “setup sweeper” in this case. “Set-up” is used as an adjective to describe a Pokemon that is already boosted. For example: “The set-up Oricorio-E easily swept through the opposing team.”
- The comma before “as well as” should be removed, since the “as well as” isn’t introducing a new dependent clause.
- Adding “against” after “as well as” is unnecessary because the “as well as” is connecting the two ideas (setup sweepers and Choice Scarf users) that Choice Scarf Meowscarada is a good revenge killer against.

On top of that, Meowscarada can potentially clean in the late-game after using Knock Off + and U-turn to sufficiently weaken checks like Corviknight and Scream Tail.
- The plus sign is fine here, since it’s referencing the use of two moves together.

Trick is an immediate and sure-fire way for Meowscarada to shut down it's its checks, (AC) while Knock Off paired with Spikes are is good at chipping the grounded ones foes into KO range.
- Nice catch on the “are” to “is” change, since that stuff can be hard to catch.
- “The grounded ones” works fine. Though it could be clarified, saying “foes” changes the meaning slightly, since “the grounded ones” was talking about checks and not foes in general.


Early game breakers Early-game wallbreakers say stallbreakers instead if these Pokémon are meant to break stall such as Dragonite, Chi Yu, (AC) and Greninja can punch huge holes into the foe's opponent's team so that Meowscarada can sweep (RC). (AP) In return, Meowscarada cripples helps Dragonite by crippling Dondozo and Corviknight with its STABs for the first and STAB moves, and it offers pivot support for the latter two Chi-Yu and Greninja. reworded for clarity
-“Chi-Yu” uses a hyphen.
- Nice to see the “foe” to “opponent” changes as well as fixing that comma splice.
- Rewording for clarity here is fine, but the sentence itself is okay. However, the way that you reworded it slightly muddies the water a bit on what uses the STAB moves (Dragonite or Meowscarada) as well as what the “it” in the second half of the sentence is referring to (vague on if Meowscarada or Dragonite).

Corviknight is a solid Defogger and pivot that also switches into priority attacks like First Impression, -ate Extreme Speed, and Ice Shard as well, which frees up Meowscarada to pivot more freely throughout the game.
- I like how you got the both the “-ate” mistake and the redundancy error there.

When I came across “defogger, I checked the spelling and grammar standards and saw “Defogger” and “Spiker” capitalized but “spinner” isn’t. What’s the difference between them?
- “Defogger” and “Spiker” list the move names (Defog and [the singular version of] Spikes) outright, while “spinner” uses part of the name of Rapid Spin.
 
This felt way too quick for me not to have missed something, but posting anyway

Weavile is a staple on Ice-teams Ice teams thanks to its incredible Speed tier and high Attack. Knock Off denies passive recovery on opponents foes like Corviknight or and Dondozo by removing their Leftovers, (AC) and it prevents chip damage from opponents foes like Great Tusk and Skarmory by Knocking Off removing their Rocky Helmet. At +2, (AC) Triple Axel secures the OHKO on foes like the Ogerpon forms formes, Kyurem, Walking Wake, Ceruledge, (AC) and Goodra-Hisui Hisuian Goodra. Furthermore, it is able to check defensive Great Tusk, Iron Treads, and Non Non-Choice Scarf Gholdengo, (AC) which who can prove to be formidable foes for Ice Type Ice-type teams. Ice Shard serves as a reliable countermeasure against faster foes like Choice Scarf Enamorus, Landorus-I Landorus, and Roaring Moon. At +2, it is also able to OHKO Dragapult (RC) while also OHKOing Garchomp without making contact, (AC) which avoids chip damage from its Rough Skin.
 
Kiwi

...and it prevents chip damage from opponents foes like Great Tusk and Skarmory by Knocking Off removing their Rocky Helmet.
At +2, it is also able to OHKO Dragapult (RC) while also OHKOing Garchomp without making contact, (AC) which avoids chip damage from its Rough Skin.
Nice catch on changing "chip" to "chip damage".
At +2, (AC) Triple Axel secures the OHKO on foes like the Ogerpon forms formes, Kyurem, Walking Wake, Ceruledge, (AC) and Goodra-Hisui Hisuian Goodra.
Recognizing the introductory phrase of this sentence is good, given how ambiguous it can look at first glance.
Furthermore, it is able to check defensive Great Tusk, Iron Treads, and Non Non-Choice Scarf Gholdengo, (AC) which who can prove to be formidable foes for Ice Type Ice-type teams.
- Hyphenating "Non-Choice Scarf" is correct, but "Non" should be lowercase (think "non-toxic substance").

Not much else to say here since you caught every other error, well done.
 
This one was quick again, so hopefully no silly mistakes like the previous. I will edit my Chien-Pao response tomorrow when I wake up. I had it done, but want to check it again

Normalium-Z Normalium Z Serperior utilises utilizes Leaf Storm boosted Z-Hyper Beam Storm-boosted Breakneck Blitz to bypass most of its checks, namely Mega-Venusaur Mega Venusaur, Amoonguss, Mega-Latias Mega Latias, Iron Moth, Hydrapple, (AC) and or Victini. Hidden Power [Fire] allows Serperior to chip Aegislash and Celesteela, the only checks unfazed by a boosted Breakneck Blitz, slowly wearing them down into range of +2 or +4 HP Hidden Power Fire in the late game late-game. Synthesis allows you Serperior to switch in to Rotom W into Rotom-W and Ting Lu Ting-Lu throughout longer games without being worn down, abusing benefiting from these opportunities to chip away at its checks. Glare eases the MU matchup against Aegislash and Celesteela by allowing you Serperior to paralyse paralyze them (RC) and attempt to remove them. Normalium-Z Normalium Z Serperior is only seen on Sticky Webs and other offense teams, (AC) as its aggressive playstyle and lackluster bulk leaves it unable to attempt to setup set up multiple times against teams with revenge-killers revenge killers like Greninja, Iron Boulder, or Mega-Aerodactyl and Mega Aerodactyl. Sticky Webs slow down the first two, (AC) but answers to Mega-Aerodactyl Mega Aerodactyl like Air Balloon Aegislash, Azumarill, Scizor and Choice Scarf Mienshao are recommended given its ability to dodge the entry hazard.
 
Kiwi

Some words that I point out from your check may be highlighted.

Normalium-Z Normalium Z Serperior utilises utilizes Leaf Storm boosted Z-Hyper Beam Storm-boosted Breakneck Blitz to bypass most of its checks, namely Mega-Venusaur Mega Venusaur, Amoonguss, Mega-Latias Mega Latias, Iron Moth, Hydrapple, (AC) and or Victini.
Good job changing "Z-Hyper Beam" to "Breakneck Blitz" here.

Synthesis allows you Serperior to switch in to Rotom W into Rotom-W and Ting Lu Ting-Lu throughout longer games without being worn down, abusing benefiting from these opportunities to chip away at its checks.
Although you caught the error with using "abuse", you didn't take the subject of the sentence into account when changing it. Because Synthesis is the subject, this would make it sound like the move is benefiting from the opportunities rather than Serperior. In this case, "letting Serperior benefit from" is a better way to rephrase "abuse" here.

Glare eases the MU matchup against Aegislash and Celesteela by allowing you Serperior to paralyse paralyze them (RC) and attempt to remove them.
Good catch on "you" here.

Normalium Z Serperior is only seen on Sticky Webs and other offense teams, (AC) as its aggressive playstyle and lackluster bulk leaves it unable to attempt to setup set up multiple times against teams with revenge-killers revenge killers like Greninja, Iron Boulder, or Mega-Aerodactyl and Mega Aerodactyl.
- Catching the error on referring to "Sticky Web" as "Webs" is good; however, the move "Sticky Web" is always referred to as such, never "Sticky Webs".
- Since "its aggressive playstyle and lackluster bulk" is a plural subject, "leaves" should've been altered to "leave" instead.

Sticky Webs slow down the first two, (AC) but answers to Mega-Aerodactyl Mega Aerodactyl like Air Balloon Aegislash, Azumarill, Scizor and Choice Scarf Mienshao are recommended given its ability to dodge the entry hazard.
- "slow" should've been changed to "slows" here along with the aforementioned "Sticky Web".
- An Oxford comma is needed after "Scizor".

Otherwise, this is a solid check. There are a lot of misplaced hyphens dotted throughout the paragraph, especially with "Normalium Z", so big ups to you on catching those.
 
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Chien Pao Chien-Pao appreciates Mandibuzz defogging away entry hazards to prevent it from being worn down by hazards. It. (AP) Mandibuzz can also bring Chien Pao Chien-Pao in safely using a slow U-turn. Mandibuzz is a great switch in switch-in to Fighting Fighting-type attacks from enemies like Choice Scarf Sneasler and Choice Scarf Great Tusk, (AC) which Chien Pao Chien-Pao is extremely vulnerable to, as well as being capable of checking set up setup sweepers like Azumarill or and Scizor with Foul Play. In return, Chien-Pao deals with opponents foes like Sandy Shocks or and Baxcalibur, (AC) which who can cause problems for Mandibuzz. Kingambit has impressive offensive synergy with Chien Pao Chien-Pao due to its neutrality to Fairy-type attacks, being able to eliminate opponents foes like Hatterene with Iron Head, and Choice Scarf Flutter Mane with Sucker Punch after rocks Stealth Rock damage. If Kingambit can beat Hatterene and Flutter Mane because of its Fairy-type neutrality, change “being able” to “allowing it” and remove the comma after “iron head”. If those ideas aren’t related, replace “being able” with “and ability” and remove both commas. In return, (AC) Chien-Pao Chien Pao hits threats to Kingambit like DD Dragon Dance Dragonite, Iron Treads, Landorus-Therian Landorus-T and defensive Gliscor.

Let’s see what I need to change this time I suppose :)
 
Slither-Wing Slither Wing is a niche defensive pivot which that uses it's its interesting type, serviceable bulk, (AC) and reliable recovery in Morning Sun to check attackers like Great Tusk, Breloom, (AC) and or Kingambit. U-turn generates momentum for Slither-Wing's your team against mons Pokemon such as Flutter Mane and Skeledirge, (AC) and it importantly allows Slither-Wing Slither Wing to avoid being trapped by Gothitelle. Close Combat OHKOs OHKOes Iron Bundle and Chi-Yu and 2HKOs 2HKOes Miraidon, (AC) which Body Press cannot do. Will-O-Wisp's burn stops the Pokemon Slither-Wing Slither Wing checks from using it as set up fodder (RC); (ASC) it also punishes opponents such as Toxapex or Corviknight for switching in. Morning Sun heals Slither-Wing Slither Wing for 50% of its health, helping it to consistently switch into Great Tusk. Tera Water provides a resistance to Fire type Fire-type attacks from Koraidon and Chi-Yu (RC) and Water type Water-type attacks from Iron Bundle and Palafin, (AC) allowing for a last ditch counterattack. 168 Speed EVs out speed adamant allow Slither Wing to outspeed Adamant Breloom, (AC) and the rest are dumped into physical bulk.

Thanks to Tidy Up, (AC) Cinccino is the main enabler of hyper offense teams, letting them run many powerful hazard weak hazard-weak Pokemon such as Oricorio-Pa'u Oricorio-P, Arcanine, and Ninetales-Alola Alolan Ninetales. Knock Off lets Cinccino hit Ghost Types Ghost-types like Chandelure (RC) as well as Bronzong, an otherwise problematic wall. Encore allows Cincinno to capitalize on passive foes that setup set up entry hazards, boost their stats, or heal up such as Gligar, Registeel, and Sylveon. Teammates like Diancie, Toxtricity, (AC) and Scyther, as well as Fire- and Fighting-types such as Chandelure, Paldean Tauros-W, and Heracross can work alongside Cinccino to overwhelm shared Steel-type checks like Copperajah and Bronzong, however Fires and Fightings such as Chandelure, Tauros-Paldea-Aqua, and Heracross that easily beat these same Steel-types work as well. Grassy terrain teams also heavily benefit from Cinccinos Cinccino's presence, since it lets Oricorio forms formes, Grafaiai, and Arcanine switch-in switch in without having to take chip from hazards.
 
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Chien Pao Chien-Pao appreciates Mandibuzz defogging away entry hazards to prevent it from being worn down by hazards. It. (AP) Mandibuzz can also bring Chien Pao Chien-Pao in safely using a slow U-turn.
- "defogging" is not correct, as move names should not be used as verbs. Instead, say something like "Mandibuzz removing entry hazards with Defog" or something similar.
Mandibuzz is a great switch in switch-in to Fighting Fighting-type attacks from enemies like Choice Scarf Sneasler and Choice Scarf Great Tusk, (AC) which Chien Pao Chien-Pao is extremely vulnerable to, as well as being capable of checking set up setup sweepers like Azumarill or and Scizor with Foul Play. In return, Chien-Pao deals with opponents foes like Sandy Shocks or and Baxcalibur, (AC) which who can cause problems for Mandibuzz.
- Nice catch with matching and/or with plural/singular nouns!
Kingambit has impressive offensive synergy with Chien Pao Chien-Pao due to its neutrality to Fairy-type attacks, being able to eliminate opponents foes like Hatterene with Iron Head, and Choice Scarf Flutter Mane with Sucker Punch after rocks Stealth Rock damage. If Kingambit can beat Hatterene and Flutter Mane because of its Fairy-type neutrality, change “being able” to “allowing it” and remove the comma after “iron head”. If those ideas aren’t related, replace “being able” with “and ability” and remove both commas.
- I like this comment here. Generally, since both variations require removing the comma after "Iron Head," I would have gone ahead and done that removal (the subsequent clause is dependent either way)
In return, (AC) Chien-Pao Chien Pao hits threats to Kingambit like DD Dragon Dance Dragonite, Iron Treads, Landorus-Therian Landorus-T and defensive Gliscor.
- Nice catch with the introductory "In return!"
- You are missing an oxford comma after Landorus-T.
 
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Good job overall.

Slither-Wing Slither Wing is a niche defensive pivot which that uses it's its interesting type, serviceable bulk, (AC) and reliable recovery in Morning Sun to check attackers like Great Tusk, Breloom, (AC) and or Kingambit.

- A Pokemon has "some typing" not "some type", so it should be "interesting typing" here.

U-turn generates momentum for Slither-Wing's your team against mons Pokemon such as Flutter Mane and Skeledirge, (AC) and it importantly allows Slither-Wing Slither Wing to avoid being trapped by Gothitelle.

- Changing "Slither Wing's team" to "your team" wasn't really necessary.

Will-O-Wisp's burn stops the Pokemon Slither-Wing Slither Wing checks from using it as set up fodder (RC); (ASC) it also punishes opponents such as Toxapex or Corviknight for switching in.

- When being used as part of a compound noun (e.g., setup sweeper, setup moves, setup fodder), it's "setup" rather than "set up".
- It should be "foes" instead of "opponents" here. Opponent = the person you are battling. Foe = an opposing Pokemon.

Morning Sun heals Slither-Wing Slither Wing for 50% of its health, helping it to consistently switch into Great Tusk.
- The dex info (just an explanation of what the move does) of "for 50% of its health" could have been removed here.

Tera Water provides a resistance to Fire type Fire-type attacks from Koraidon and Chi-Yu (RC) and Water type Water-type attacks from Iron Bundle and Palafin, (AC) allowing for a last ditch counterattack.

- "Last-ditch" should be hyphenated. Explanation taken from fleur's notes:
  • Compound adjectives (two or more words combined to form a single adjective—e.g. well-known, world-renowned, 120-Base Power) need to be hyphenated only when they used in an attributive sense (i.e. directly tied to the noun without any linking verb in between). When they are used in a predicative sense (i.e. linked to the noun with a word like "seem", "appear", or "be"), however, they should not be hyphenated.
    • e.g. The red-hot kettle was boiling. vs Well known as it may be for its versatility, Tornadus in fact has many severe limitations.
    • Remember also that modifiers made up of an adverb and adjective are never hyphenated (a really good cat, not a really-good cat).

Thanks to Tidy Up, (AC) Cinccino is the main enabler of hyper offense teams, letting them run many powerful hazard weak hazard-weak Pokemon such as Oricorio-Pa'u Oricorio-P, Arcanine, and Ninetales-Alola Alolan Ninetales.

- The first mention of "hazard(s)" in a paragraph should be written out in full as "entry hazard(s)".

Encore allows Cincinno to capitalize on passive foes that setup set up entry hazards, boost their stats, or heal up such as Gligar, Registeel, and Sylveon.

- "Cinccino" is spelled incorrectly here.
- This isn't the first mention of them, so just "hazards" was fine.

Teammates like Diancie, Toxtricity, (AC) and Scyther, as well as Fire- and Fighting-types such as Chandelure, Paldean Tauros-W, and Heracross can work alongside Cinccino to overwhelm shared Steel-type checks like Copperajah and Bronzong, however Fires and Fightings such as Chandelure, Tauros-Paldea-Aqua, and Heracross that easily beat these same Steel-types work as well.

- Restructuring the sentence actually changed its meaning. In the original, it was stated that the first three teammates share their Steel-type checks with Cinccino, whereas the Fire- and Fighting-types are said to beat the Steel-types easily. In the new version, it sounds like every single teammate mentioned, including the Fire- and Fighting-types, is checked by the Steel-types.

Grassy terrain teams also heavily benefit from Cinccinos Cinccino's presence, since it lets Oricorio forms formes, Grafaiai, and Arcanine switch-in switch in without having to take chip from hazards.

- The "T" in "Grassy Terrain" should be capitalized.
- When used as a noun, it should be "chip damage" and not just "chip".
 
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Chien Pao Chien-Pao appreciates Mandibuzz defogging away hazards using defog to prevent it from being worn down by entry hazards. It can also bring Chien Pao Chien-Pao in safely using a slow U-turn. Mandibuzz is a great switch in switch-in to Fighting Fighting-type attacks from enemies like Choice Scarf Sneasler and Choice Scarf Great Tusk, (AC) which Chien Pao Chien-Pao is extremely vulnerable to, as well as being capable of checking set up setup sweepers like Azumarill or and Scizor with Foul Play. In return, Chien-Pao deals with opponents foes like Sandy Shocks or and Baxcalibur, (AC) which who can cause problems for Mandibuzz. Kingambit has impressive offensive synergy with Chien Pao Chien-Pao due to its neutrality to Fairy-type, being able to eliminate opponents like Hatterene with Iron Head (RC) and Choice Scarf Flutter Mane with Sucker Punch after rocks Stealth Rock damage. In return, (AC) Chien-Pao Chien Pao hits threats to Kingambit like DD Dragon Dance Dragonite, Iron Treads, Landorus-Therian Landorus-T, (AC) and defensive Gliscor.
 
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Black Glasses + and Tera Dark should exclusively be used with Kowtow Cleave, (AC) as these propel Kingambit's offensive pressure; with 5 Supreme Overlord boosts, Kingambit can reach feats like 2HKOing Dondozo with Kowtow Cleave and 1HKOing Walking-Wake OHKOing Walking Wake and, (AC) at +2, (AC) Dragonite through Multiscale with Sucker Punch. Air Balloon allows Kingambit to setup set up on would be would-be checks in Landorus-T and most Great Tusks (RC) Tusk variants; (ASC) become a sturdy switch in switch-in to offense offensive threats like Kyurem, Roaring Moon, and Dragonite who that rely on their Ground-type coverage to hit it (RC); (ASC) and gain an immunity to Spikes that limits can otherwise limit Kingambit before it gets going. Kingambits Kingambit's potential (specify what sort of potential you're talking about here because otherwise it is quite vague) and defensive utility in the late game late-game make it a nearly staple near-staple on offensive archetypes from bulky offense to hyper offense while still fitting on balance teams. Physical Physically offensive teammates like Ogerpon-Wellspring Ogerpon-W, Zamazenta, and Swords Dance Iron Valiant can overwhelm shared checks like Zanazenta Zamazenta, Landorus-Therian Landorus-T, and Dondozo. Dark Type Dark-type offensive threat threats in Darkrai (RC) and Samurott-Hisui Hisuian Samurott can form a Darkspam Dark-type spam core with Kingambit to overwhelm Dark resists Dark-resistant Pokemon like Zamazenta and Tera Fairy users, (AC) like Gholdemgo Gholdengo and Moltres, (AC) together.
 
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Chien Pao Chien-Pao appreciates Mandibuzz defogging away hazards using defog to prevent it from being worn down by entry hazards. It can also bring Chien Pao Chien-Pao in safely using a slow U-turn.
- "Defog" is a proper noun and needs to be capitalized.
- "It" is referring to two different nouns in these two sentences (Chien-Pao in the first, Mandibuzz in the second), so leaving them both as-is creates a lot of confusion. You'd need to change one of them to the actual noun in question.
Mandibuzz is a great switch in switch-in to Fighting Fighting-type attacks from enemies like Choice Scarf Sneasler and Choice Scarf Great Tusk, (AC) which Chien Pao Chien-Pao is extremely vulnerable to, as well as being capable of checking set up setup sweepers like Azumarill or and Scizor with Foul Play.
- Good! From a subjective prose standpoint you could have probably done more to separate the last clause because this sentence is pretty long, but don't worry about it too much at the moment.
In return, Chien-Pao deals with opponents foes like Sandy Shocks or and Baxcalibur, (AC) which who can cause problems for Mandibuzz. Kingambit has impressive offensive synergy with Chien Pao Chien-Pao due to its neutrality to Fairy-type, being able to eliminate opponents like Hatterene with Iron Head (RC) and Choice Scarf Flutter Mane with Sucker Punch after rocks Stealth Rock damage.
- "neutrality to Fairy-type" is incorrect because it's just a floating adjective with no noun here. You either need to add an article to make it a noun "neutrality to the Fairy-type," add a subsequent noun that the adjective can describe "neutrality to Fairy-type moves," or (my personal favorite) just say "Fairy neutrality"
In return, (AC) Chien-Pao Chien Pao hits threats to Kingambit like DD Dragon Dance Dragonite, Iron Treads, Landorus-Therian Landorus-T, (AC) and defensive Gliscor.
- Good here!
 
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with 5 Supreme Overlord boosts
Small numbers should always be written out (five not 5) unless you're referring to EVs ('4 Speed EVs' is correct).

Kingambit can reach feats like 2HKOing Dondozo with Kowtow Cleave and 1HKOing Walking-Wake OHKOing Walking Wake and, (AC) at +2, (AC) Dragonite through Multiscale with Sucker Punch.
All these changes are good to fix the grammar issues in this sentence, but there are some structural issues here.

Without markup, you have '2HKOing Dondozo and OHKOing Walking Wake and at +2 Dragonite', which structurally is 'this and this and this' with multiple and stackd on top of each other without anything to divide them up (like using 'as well as' to separate items or making one of the clauses independent). This also makes it a bit ambiguous to tell where Walking Wake fits into the calcs.

A simple fix would be to change the first and to 'as well as', which uses a different connective to separate the idea of what kingambit KOes with Kowtow Cleave sv what ti KOes with Sucker Punch. With that, you can have 'Kingambit can reach feats like 2HKOing Dondozo with Kowtow Cleave as well OHKOing Walking Wake and, at +2, Dragonite through Multiscale with Sucker Punch'. With a change like this, there's no confusion around which moves apply to which examples.

Double 'and' in a sentence isn't grammatically incorrect, so it shouldn't be auto cut as a rule, but if you see it, make sure it's not ither a false list ('it can do this and this and this' where you can make it into a real list) and it wouldn't benefit from varying the connective in a part to differentiate ideas.

Air Balloon allows Kingambit to setup set up on would be would-be checks in Landorus-T and most Great Tusks (RC) Tusk variants; (ASC) become a sturdy switch in switch-in to offense offensive threats like Kyurem, Roaring Moon, and Dragonite who that rely on their Ground-type coverage to hit it (RC); (ASC) and gain an immunity to Spikes that limits can otherwise limit Kingambit before it gets going.
This is really good usage of a semicolon list, which is a clear prose improvement.

Dark Type Dark-type offensive threat threats in Darkrai (RC) and Samurott-Hisui Hisuian Samurott can form a Darkspam Dark-type spam core
Another prose thing worth looking out for is repetition. You've made two correct changes with Dark-types and Dark-type spam (this one shows very clear referencing of standards, which is great!0, but when you put them together in a sentence you get 'Dark-types...can form a Dark-type spam core'.

To avoid repetition in this cae, you can cut the first one to say 'Offensive threats in Dakrai and Hisuian Samurott can form...' because the typing is mentioned right after, so no content is lost.

A similar error that comes up is phrasing like 'teammates like xyz make good teammates' 'partners liek abc make good partners'. If it can be avoided, it's good to remove double usage of a word if it's restated elsewhere in a clear way.

with Kingambit to overwhelm Dark resists Dark-resistant Pokemon like Zamazenta and Tera Fairy users, (AC) like Gholdemgo Gholdengo and Moltres, (AC) together.
Having commas before like/such as and not having them are both grammatically correct, so something to keep in mind when adding/removing them is consistency. In this sentence, the first example, Zamazenta, is not separated by commas, but the Tera Fairy examples are; this can read like one example set is more notable/relevant than the other because using commas around like/such as makes the examples an aside. It's metagame knowledge to make an assessment of which examples are key information, so as a GPer, it's best to defer to the writer unless a sentence is unclear without using commas to split off something overlong.
 
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One of Brelooms Breloom's main struggles when trying to wall break wallbreak is getting past Poison-tTypes like Vileplume, Dragalge and Slowbro-Galar, so Psychic- and Ground-types like Munkidori, Uxie, or Flygon are greatly appreciated. The former two, as well as Kilowattrel and Dragalge, (this should probably be in parentheses but in the spirit of maintaining text I'm keeping it this way) excel at pPivoting Breloom in on Dark- and Steel-types like Klefki, Registeel, or Muk-Alola (muk should go first for readability but keeping it like this for reasons already stated) with their access to U-Turn and Flip Turn respectively. Articuno-Galar is an exceptionally good partner, as on top of providing U-Turn support it can use Future Sight to limit Breloom's switch-ins even further, and abuse Vileplume's Strength Sap with its ability Competitive. In a similar vein, pivot partners, (AC) such as Mienshao, Incineroar, Inteleon,(AC) and the aforementioned Flygon make good partners since they commonly draw in Water-types like Vaporeon, Milotic, Gastrodon, or Swampert, (RC) for Breloom to abuse. Teammates like Incineroar, A-Muk Muk-Alola,(AC) (all of these probably should be Slowbro-G, Articuno-G etc but for the sake of consistency and readability keeping it this way) and Bronzong, (RC) also make for decent teammates, handling the Psychic- and Fairy-types, (RC) like Uxie, Munkidori, Whimsicott, or and Sylveon who force Breloom out.

final notes: much more I could easily see making but given how my first few submissions were a bit too subjective I'm keeping it fairly conservative for now
 
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One of Brelooms Breloom’s main struggles when trying to wall break wallbreak is getting past Poison Types Poison-types like Vileplume, Dragalge, (AC) and Slowbro-Galar Galarian Slowbro, so Psychic- and Ground-types Ground-type partners like Munkidori, Uxie, or and Flygon are greatly appreciated. The former two as well as Kilowattrel and Dragalge excel at pivoting Breloom in on Dark- and Steel-types like Klefki, Registeel, (AC) and Alolan Muk by using U-turn or or Muk-Alola with their U-Turn and Flip Turn. Articuno-G Galarian Articuno is an exceptionally good partner, (AC) as on top of providing U-turn support, (AC) it can use Future Sight to limit Breloom's switchins switch-ins even further, and abuse it can take advantage of Vileplume's Strength Sap with its ability, (AC) Competitive. In a similar vein, pivot partners pivot-partners such as Mienshao, Incineroar, Inteleon, (AC) and the aforementioned Flygon make good partners, (AC) since they commonly draw in Water types Water-types like Vaporeon, Milotic, Gastrodon, (AC) and or Swampert (RC) for Breloom to abuse threaten. Teammates like Incineroar, A-Muk Alolan Muk, and Bronzong (RC) are also make for decent teammates helpful changed to avoid redundancy, handling the Psychic- and Fairy-types, like Uxie, Munkidori, Whimsicott, (AC) and or Sylveon, (AC) which who force Breloom out.

Really feel like I could have made better use of some semicolons or something here to clear up some of these lists and whatnot, but I wasn't sure if those changes would be correct or not.

Sniped by slopcat right as I was posting <3
 
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Enamorus-IEnamorus is a top tier tera captain which top-tier Tera Captain that should always be made one when drafted. Tera Fairy further boosts its STABs Fairy-type moves, (AC) making it extremely hard to check (RC) even when it's not using damage boosting damage-boosting items and giving gives it the benefit of taking less damage from stealth rocks a Stealth Rock neutrality. Types like Tera Fire and Ground boosts it's boost its coverage moves further (RC) while flipping some of it's its weaknesses. Tera Water, Poison, (AC) and Steel allow you it to kill beat opponents you it otherwise would not, especially on set up setup sets. Tera Ghost and Electric gives give it extra coverage via Tera Blast (RC) and handles allow Enamorus to handle certain attacks better. Stellar type Tera Blast deals 80 damage to opponents and Stellar hits them all targets neutrally which and synergizes well with Contrary and choice scarf a Choice Scarf, (AC) boosting Enamorus-I's Enamorus's offensive stats while dealing massive reliable damage to all opponents reliably.


I feel like I should mention Tera Stellar separately from Tera Blast Stellar, but wasn't sure how much we can really change. Something like "Tera Stellar synergizes with Contrary and Tera Blast, allowing Enamorus to boost its offensive stats while dealing reliable damage to all foes." Is that more of a QC team or does the GP jurisdiction extend to making what they believe the author's original intent easier to understand?
 
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Not going to comment on any formatting issues here, and I have highlighted them on discord, but make sure to use the tool in future.
Poison-tTypes like Vileplume, Dragalge and Slowbro-Galar
  • Smogon uses the serial / Oxford comma, meaning a comma before ‘and’ in a list of three or more, so there needs to be a comma added after Dragalge.
  • Regional forms are formatted as Alolan/Galarian/Paldean/Hisuian x, so it's Galarian Slowking and not Slowking-Galar / Slowking-G / whatever else people can come up with. All forme names are listed in the very first point of the standards thread, which should be referenced for every check you do. This should also answer your question on consistency - there are pre-set naming conventions we use.
Psychic- and Ground-types like Munkidori, Uxie, or Flygon
'x and y' is plural, while 'x or y' is singular. If you're referring to multiple things (teammates, threats, foes etc) then you need to use 'and' in lists of examples to ensure grammatical agreement. If you're talking about one thing (a teammate, a threat, a foe etc) then you need to use 'or.'

In a sentence like this, you need to look out for two parts:

Psychic- and Ground-types like Munkidori, Uxie, or Flygon

The first is what the list is giving examples of, so here it's Psychic- and Ground-types. The second is the conective used to join the list together. These two pieces need to have grammatical agreement. This means that both have to be plural or both have to be singular, and you can't have one singular one plural.

'-types' is plural because it refers to more than one Pokemon of that type. 'Or' as the connective is singular. This means there isn't agreement, so if you change 'or' to the plural connective 'and'. you now have two plurals and agreement. You want to always change the connective instead of the subject in case the writer wanted to specifically specify either a singular or a plural subject.

(this should probably be in parentheses but in the spirit of maintaining text I'm keeping it this way)
Commas function the same way as parentheses here, so there's no need to change it. Parenthese are generally not used in analysis writing anyway.

pPivoting Breloom in on Dark- and Steel-types like Klefki, Registeel, or Muk-Alola (muk should go first for readability but keeping it like this for reasons already stated)
  • Similarly to above, the 'or' here should be an 'and'.
  • Muk-Alola also needs to change to Alolan Muk.
  • Reordering the examples is correct and not subjective. You have identified an error here (the list orders don't align), so you can fix that error by aligning the examples to the first list order. This is something we look out for.
with their access to U-Turn and Flip Turn respectively
  • The 't' in U-turn is not capitalised; this is an important one to note because it breaks the upload if it's in a set.
  • Respectively didn't need to be added here because there isn't any ambiguity; basic game information is considred common knowledge (including which moves a Pokemon gets).
  • If you do use respectively, it needs commas around it. Respectively functions as its own separate clause and should be surrounded by commas. 'x and y, respectively, can'.If it’s at the end of a sentence, you only need the comma before it.
Articuno-Galar is an exceptionally good partner, as on top of providing U-Turn support it can use Future Sight to limit Breloom's switch-ins even further, and abuse Vileplume's Strength Sap with its ability Competitive.
  • As coverd above, Articuno-Galar -> Galarian Articuno and U-Turn -> U-turn.
  • There should be a comma after 'on top of providing Future Sight support' - this is an introductory phrase, so it should be separated from the main clause by a comma.
  • There shouldn't be a comma before 'and abuse'. Commas before 'and' 'but' 'or' are only needed if the clause that comes after it is independent (meaning it’s a grammatically correct sentence without depending on the other part to make sense). If it isn’t independent, the comma is not needed.
  • Here, the clause after that is 'abuse Vileplume's Strength Sap with its ability' - this is not an independent clause because there is no subject. It depends on the other clause for that information.
  • The word ‘abuse’ is never accepted in analyses beause it means 'use in a negative way', which doesn't apply to Pokemon. You can use more neutral statements like 'take advantage of' 'benefit from' etc.
In a similar vein, pivot partners, (AC) such as Mienshao, Incineroar, Inteleon,(AC) and the aforementioned Flygon make good partners since they commonly draw in Water-types like Vaporeon, Milotic, Gastrodon, or Swampert, (RC) for Breloom to abuse.
  • By adding a comma before such as, you've opened an aside clause that works like parentheses, but you haven't closed it. 'Pivot partners (such as Mienshao, Incineroar, Inteleon, and the aforementioned Flygon make good partners'
  • By adding a comma after Flygon, you bracket that part of the sentence off into an aside clause, the same way you would if you were adding parentheses around it.
  • Commas should be used before ‘as’ and ‘since’ if they mean because; the word ‘because’ itself does not need this.
  • 'or' in the Water-types list should be 'and', and 'abuse' shouldn't be used.
  • A prose poitn worth picking up on is repetition of partners. Nobody sayinsg 'partners like xyz make good partners' - you only have to state this idea once, and the second instance can be removed or changed to a different word.
Psychic- and Fairy-types, (RC) like Uxie, Munkidori, Whimsicott, or and Sylveon who force Breloom out.
Pokemon are never referred to as "who" - use "which" or "that".
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As a general piece of advice, this document lists out the most common GP standards as well as the most common English grammar things you have to learn.
The niche stuff is not covered here (that's when you go to standards thread, general grammar notes, and prose guide from the amchannel pins), but it centralises everything common you need to know. Being familiar with all of this will get you 90-95% of the way there, so it should be your main resource to start with.

At the bottom, there is also a guide for using ctrl + f to proofread. From my experience, this is the single most useful thing you can do to improve rapidly too. I noticed taht you made some good changes once and missed them at other points, so using this method will allow you to consistently pick up on them.
Taking this part out of the hide tag for everyone to reference.
To answer your subjectivity point, there's a difference betwen objective and subjective changes:
  • An objective change fixes a grammar error. If a mistake is identified like a missing comma, incorrect words, Pokemon names not spelled corrrectly, lists not aligning etc, then it's an objective change to provide the fix for it. Objective changes follow rules and have a correct answer.
  • A subjective change alters the prose of a sentence, and there isn't always one correct answer. If something is written in a way that doesn't really work, GP can improve it, but there isn't one correct answer.
    • A lateral change is a subjective change that isn't necessary. These are edits that go from one correct phrasing to another one for no reason apart from sounding better to you. As GP, we want to preserve the voice and style of writers as much as possible so their work can be up on site in their own words. There are always going to be some small edits that change this, but keeping voice in mind is key. You want to make sure you're checking what's in the analysis and not what you'd personally write if this was your own analysis; what sounds better to you may not sound better to the writer.
Both objective and subjective changes are an important part of GP. Before, you were working on CMS submissions, which want to focus on objective changes only because anything on-site has already had a GP check where a GPer has already put their own subjective changes in, so we don't want to overwrite anyone's work. For workshop exercises and actual GP checks, making subjective changes is good as long as they are not lateral changes.
 
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