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Slither Wing is a niche defensive pivot which uses it's interesting type its typing, serviceable bulk, (AC) and reliable recovery in Morning Sun to check attackers like Great Tusk, Breloom, (AC) and or Kingambit.
Be careful when making single-word removals here; there's nothing wrong with using 'interesting' or 'reliable' to describe things, so removing them creates lateral changes (or edits that go from one correct phrasing to another one without a clear prose justification / justified as “this sounds better”). As GP, we want to preserve the voice and style of writers as much as possible so their work can be up onsite in their own words; you want to make sure you're checking what's in the analysis and not what you'd personally write if this was your own analysis. Poor prose does need to be addressed, so using strong justifications for why you’re making the change / what error you’re trying to fix will help avoid lateral changes while making necessary improvements.
The word 'which' here should be changed to 'that' because these two words aren't interchangeable.
- 'Which' is non-restrictive/non-essential, which means that the additional 'which' clause is not needed for the sentence to keep its meaning; it can be treated as an aside clause where the sentence makes sense and keeps its meaning without it
- 'That' is restrictive/essential, so the part of the sentence after 'that' is needed for the meaning. In this case, the part of the sentence after it is needed to explain the niche.
Here is another example that sunny was taught while amchecking:
- I like elephants, which are big.
- I like elephants that are big.
See how the switch from which to that changes the meaning of the sentence? This is a lot of explanation, but it is among the more confusing topics that we encounter. There is a more in-depth section on it in the
GP beginner notes alongside an article link, which I highly recommend using as a reference throughout your checks.
U-turn generates momentum for Slither-Wing's Slither Wing's team against mons Pokemon such as Flutter Mane and Skeledirge and it importantly allows Slither-Wing it to avoid being trapped by Gothitelle.
Similarly here, removing 'importantly' is a lateral change / content change because there's nothing wrong with that wording. The writer has also decided to add that it's the most important part, so it's out of GP's scope as non-metagame experts to say "no I don't think that's important" and cut meaning from an analysis.
GP should never add or change the content in an analysis; content gets checked by QC teams (and presented by writers) before we come in, and they’re metagame experts who can verify what should and shouldn’t be there. We aren’t metagame experts, so us coming in and making changes to what’s being said instead of how it’s said could introduce wrong information into the text. We want to take content at face value, so you don’t need to review what’s being said. If you do have questions / comments on content, however, leave a comment for the writer to address without making any direct changes; a direct add/remove can often get blindly implemented whereas a comment needs to be more critically considered.
Close Combat OHKOs OHKOes Iron Bundle and Chi-Yu and 2HKOs 2HKOes Miraidon which Body Press cannot do.
Removing the last part of the sentence removes content; the reason Close Combat is an option is because it gets KOs that Body Press can't, so removing that information takes away part of the justification of the move.
It also punishes passive opponents such as Toxapex or Corviknight for switching attempting to switch in.
Adding 'passive' here adds content, which is out of GP's scope. Similarly, changing switching -> attempting to switch is more of a lateral edit because it punishes the switch itself not the attempt.
'Foe' refers to the opposing Pokemon, while 'opponent' refers to the opposing human player. This should change opponents to foes.
The 'or' here should also be 'and'.
- ‘And’ grammatically is a plural word. 'Or' grammatically is a singular word.
- If you're referring to multiple things (teammates, threats, foes etc), this makes the subject plural because it's referring to more than one thing. Therefore, you need to use 'and' in lists of examples to make sure that the plural subject agrees with the plural word 'and'
- If you're talking about one thing (a teammate, a threat, a foe etc), this makes the subject singular because it's only referring to one single thing. Therefore, you need to use the singular word 'or' to agree with that singular subject.
- In a list of examples, you need to look for two things:
- 1. The subject of what the examples are (so something like threats, teammates, foes etc- what the list items are examples of)
- 2. The connecting word used to separate the list items (either 'and' or 'or')
- You need the 1 and 2 to agree grammatically. (If 1 is plural, then 2 needs to be 'and'. The word 'and' is plural, so there's agreement. If 1 is singular (so if it said 'a foe' instead of 'foes'), then 2 needs to be 'or' for agreement).
- If 1 is plural and 2 is singular / 1 is singular and 2 is plural, there isn't agreement, and the sentence is incorrect. You need to make sure 2 matches 1.
- It is best to change the connecting word rather than the subject because the writer can intentionally make that part singular or plural depending on context / metagame information.
168 Speed EVs out speed adamant are needed to outspeed Adamant Breloom and the rest are dumped into physical bulk.
This sentence should say '168 Speed EVs are needed for Slither Wing to...'. The EVs themselves don't do the outspeeding, Slither Wing does, so that subject needs to be there. You can also just say 'EVs allow Slither Wing to outspeed...' without the are needed part.
There should be a comma before 'and' here. Commas before 'and' 'but' 'or' are only needed if the clause that comes after it is independent (meaning it’s a grammatically correct sentence without depending on the other part to make sense). If it isn’t independent, the comma is not needed.
