Grammar-Prose Workshop v6

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Black Glasses + Tera Dark should exclusively be used with Kowtow Cleave as these propel it propels Kingambit's offensive pressure (RSC). (AP) With 5 five Supreme Overlord boosts, Kingambit can reach feats like 2HKOing Dondozo with Kowtow Cleave and 1HKOing OHKOing Walking-Wake and at +2 Dragonite through Multiscale with Sucker Punch. Air Balloon allows Kingambit to setup on would be would-be checks in Landorus-T and most Great Tusks, Tusk become a sturdy switch in switch-in to offense offensive threats like Kyurem, Roaring Moon, and Dragonite who rely on their Ground-type coverage to hit it, and gain an immunity to Spikes that limits Kingambit before it gets going. Kingambits Kingambit's potential and defensive utility in the late game make it nearly a nearly staple on every offensive archetypes archetype from bulky to hyper offense while still fitting on balance. Physical teammates like Ogerpon-Wellspring Ogerpon-W, Zamazenta, and Swords Dance Iron Valiant can overwhelm shared checks like Zanazenta Zamazenta, Landorus-Therian, and Dondozo. Dark Type Dark-type offensive threat threats in Darkrai (RC) and Samurott-Hisui Hisuian Samurott form a Darkspam Dark spam core with Kingambit to overwhelm Dark resists like Zamazenta and Tera Fairy users like Gholdemgo Gholdengo and Moltres together.

 

[Ascension Evermore]

t44Torkoal

Kingambit

Good work here!

Black Glasses + Tera Dark should exclusively be used with Kowtow Cleave as these propel it propels Kingambit's offensive pressure (RSC). (AP) With 5 five Supreme Overlord boosts, Kingambit can reach feats like 2HKOing Dondozo with Kowtow Cleave and 1HKOing OHKOing Walking-Wake and at +2 Dragonite through Multiscale with Sucker Punch.

• The hyphen should be removed from "Walking-Wake."
• There should be a comma before "as" in the first sentence, since it is used to mean "because." From the GP Beginner Notes: "Commas should be used before ‘as’ and ‘since’ if they mean because; the word ‘because’ itself does not need this."
• The repetition of "and" in the second sentence can impact the readability of the list. Oftentimes, when a situation like this arises, it can be helpful to replace one of the uses of "and" with "while": "...2HKOing Dondozo with Kowtow Cleave while OHKOing Walking Wake and...."
• In the second sentence, "at +2" should be offset with commas because it functions like a parenthetical phrase here - removing it from the sentence does not make the sentence grammatically incorrect.

Air Balloon allows Kingambit to setup on would be would-be checks in Landorus-T and most Great Tusks, Tusk become a sturdy switch in switch-in to offense offensive threats like Kyurem, Roaring Moon, and Dragonite who rely on their Ground-type coverage to hit it, and gain an immunity to Spikes that limits Kingambit before it gets going.

• "Setup" is the noun form; when used as a verb, it should be "set up," as described in the Spelling and Grammar Standards.
• Instead of "most Great Tusk," it's better to say something like "most Great Tusk sets" because that is more directly what "most" refers to.
• Also, it seems like you removed the comma after "Tusks" but didn't indicate it with an (RC) comment. You should use comments like that any time you add or remove a comma, period, or semicolon. If you use the GP Tool, it can automatically add these comments for you and perform a lot of the other formatting changes as well. I would highly recommend it, as it saves a lot of time.
• From the Spelling and Grammar Standards, the pronouns "which," "that," and "it" should be used instead of "who," "he," and "she," so in this sentence, "who" should be replaced with "that."
• The final explicit reference to Kingambit in this sentence can simply be replaced with "it," as "it" is used to refer to Kingambit throughout the sentence, and its name was explicitly used at the beginning of the sentence.
• This sentence is a case where you have a list of 3+ items, at least one of which uses commas within the item itself (in this case, "Kyurem, Roaring Moon, and Dragonite"). In these scenarios, you can use a semicolon list, which is where you use semicolons instead of commas to separate the elements of the list. In this case, it would look like: "Air Balloon allows Kingambit to set up on would-be checks in Landorus-T and most Great Tusk sets; become a sturdy switch-in to offensive threats like Kyurem, Roaring Moon, and Dragonite that rely on their Ground-type coverage to hit it; and gain an immunity to Spikes that limits it before it gets going."

Kingambits Kingambit's potential and defensive utility in the late game make it nearly a nearly staple on every offensive archetypes archetype from bulky to hyper offense while still fitting on balance.

• You should always use a hyphen with "early-game," "mid-game," and "late-game." Also, don't use "in the late-game." You can just say "...defensive utility late-game make it...."
• Rather than saying "nearly a staple," it might be cleaner to say "a near-staple."
• You should spell out "bulky offense to hyper offense" instead of just saying "bulky to hyper offense."

By adding "every" to this sentence, you risk changing its meaning, and either way the sentence was complete without it. It's very important as GPers not to change the meaning of a sentence, since the analyses we're checking have already gone through the QC stage. Even if adding "every" doesn't change the sentence's meaning, this would still be a lateral change, which is a change from one grammatically correct word or phrase to a different correct word or phrase without a specific prose justification. We want to avoid lateral changes as GPers because they take away from the writer's voice unnecessarily, and we generally want to preserve as much of the writer's voice as possible.

Physical teammates like Ogerpon-Wellspring Ogerpon-W, Zamazenta, and Swords Dance Iron Valiant can overwhelm shared checks like Zanazenta Zamazenta, Landorus-Therian, and Dondozo.

• Instead of "physical teammates," this sentence should use phrasing like "physically offensive teammates," since "physical" and "special" alone are not sufficient adjectives to describe a Pokemon.
• "Landorus-Therian" should be "Landorus-T," which is the standard forme name from the Spelling and Grammar Standards.
• When you have a situation like this where a Pokemon (in this case, Zamazenta) appears both as an ally and as a foe, it can be helpful to say "opposing" where appropriate (in this case, "...checks like opposing Zamazenta....") to avoid confusion.

Dark Type Dark-type offensive threat threats in Darkrai (RC) and Samurott-Hisui Hisuian Samurott form a Darkspam Dark spam core with Kingambit to overwhelm Dark resists like Zamazenta and Tera Fairy users like Gholdemgo Gholdengo and Moltres together.

• We use "x-type spam" rather than "x spam," so "Dark spam" should be replaced with "Dark-type spam."
• We also do not use the term "x resists" as a noun; instead of "Dark resists," you should use "Dark-resistant foes."
• The use of "together" at the end of this sentence is both repetitive and potentially misleading. It refers to the core of Kingambit and other Dark-type offensive allies, but it is placed at the end of the sentence, far from where these are mentioned. Either way, these Pokemon have already been referred to as a "core" earlier in the sentence, so "together" can simply be deleted.
• The words "like" and "and" are repeated in close proximity near the end of this sentence; you could rephrase it to something like "...to overwhelm Dark-resistant foes such as Zamazenta as well as Tera Fairy users like Gholdengo and Moltres."

Overall, this was not bad at all for a first workshop, so nice work! Let me know (through PM or Discord) if you have any questions about this feedback. Otherwise, feel free to attempt another workshop once you're ready and have reviewed everything!

 

[t44Torkoal]

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One of Brelooms Breloom's main struggles when trying to wall break wallbreak is getting past Poison Types Poison-types like Vileplume, Dragalge, (AC) and Slowbro-Galar Galarian Slowbro, so Psychic- and Ground-types like Munkidori, Uxie, or Flygon are greatly appreciated. The former two, (AC) as well as Kilowattrel and Dragalge, (AC) excel at pivoting Breloom in on Dark- and Steel-types like Klefki, Registeel, (AC) or Muk-Alola Alolan Muk with their U-Turn and U-turn or Flip Turn. Articuno-G Galarian Articuno is an exceptionally good partner, (AC) as on top of providing U-turn support, (AC) it can use Future Sight to limit Breloom's switchins switch-ins even further, and abuse Vileplume's Strength Sap with its Competitive ability. In a similar vein, pivot partners such as Mienshao, Incineroar, Inteleon, (AC) and the aforementioned Flygon make good partners since they commonly draw in Water types Water-types like Vaporeon, Milotic, Gastrodon or Swampert, for Breloom to abuse. Teammates like Incineroar, A-Muk Alolan Muk, and Bronzong (RC) also make for decent teammates, handling the Psychic- and Fairy-types (RC) like Uxie, Munkidori, Whimsicott or Sylveon who force Breloom out.

Great, another one of these

 

[Rahul]

t44Torkoal

Breloom

One of Brelooms Breloom's main struggles when trying to wall break wallbreak is getting past Poison Types Poison-types like Vileplume, Dragalge, (AC) and Slowbro-Galar Galarian Slowbro, so Psychic- and Ground-types like Munkidori, Uxie, or Flygon are greatly appreciated.

• ‘And’ grammatically is a plural word. 'Or' grammatically is a singular word. And don't forget oxford comma in the list.
• If you're referring to multiple things (teammates, threats, foes etc), this makes the subject plural because it's referring to more than one thing. Therefore, you need to use 'and' in lists of examples to make sure that the plural subject agrees with the plural word 'and'

Yeah I liked everything else on this but the 'or' between Uxie and Flygon needs to be 'and' to agree with the plural types. The beginner notes doc has a full section on singular vs plural that expands on this.

The former two, (AC) as well as Kilowattrel and Dragalge, (AC) excel at pivoting Breloom in on Dark- and Steel-types like Klefki, Registeel, (AC) or Muk-Alola Alolan Muk with their U-Turn and U-turn or Flip Turn.

Same as above with and/or usage. So it'll be 'and' before Alolan Muk and saying 'U-turn and Flip Turn' was correct.
Also it says "Dark- and Steel-types" but Steel-types are mentioned first instead of Dark-types. Ordering matters in such cases.

Articuno-G Galarian Articuno is an exceptionally good partner, (AC) as on top of providing U-turn support, (AC) it can use Future Sight to limit Breloom's switchins switch-ins even further, and abuse Vileplume's Strength Sap with its Competitive ability.

• "Abuse" means "use in a negative way / to a negative effect" or "assault"; it should not be used as a substitute for "make heavy use of" or "benefit from".
• The comma after 'further' is no needed since 'limit' and 'whatever word/phrase you choose instead of abuse' share the same subject here.
• 'ability' is not as important, Competitive is assumed to be known information. Instead you should just say "with Competitive" since 'its' is not needed here.

In a similar vein, pivot partners such as Mienshao, Incineroar, Inteleon, (AC) and the aforementioned Flygon make good partners since they commonly draw in Water types Water-types like Vaporeon, Milotic, Gastrodon or Swampert, for Breloom to abuse.

• since (comma before if it means because) -> comma before since if it means because which it does in this sentence.
• Unnecessary repetition of "partners". Simple change is just "pivot partners" -> "pivots"
• same as above with 'and/or' usage in the list. It should be "and Swampert". once again, oxford comma in the list.
• same reason as above for "abuse"
• comma after Swampert is not needed. I'll try to explain this one "Water-types like x y z, for Breloom " vs "Water-types for Breloom". So just because there's a list in between does not mean comma is needed.

Teammates like Incineroar, A-Muk Alolan Muk, and Bronzong (RC) also make for decent teammates, handling the Psychic- and Fairy-types (RC) like Uxie, Munkidori, Whimsicott or Sylveon who force Breloom out.

• 'Teammates' is repeated in first line similar to partners in the above sentence. Simple change is just the first 'Teammates' -> 'Pokemon'.
• same as above with 'and/or' usage in the list. It should be "Whimsicott, (AC) and Sylveon" keep in mind adding oxford comma as well.
  
  
• Pokemon are never referred to as "who" - use "which" or "that," whichever is appropriate.
  Further infortmation -> 'Which' and 'that' are not interchangeable. This article helps elaborate on the below https://www.grammarly.com/blog/grammar/which-vs-that/.
  In this case, "that force Breloom out" is correct.

Good attempt overall, go through the and/or usage standards once again but good job getting most of the objective changes. The beginner notes doc has a longer explanation if you'd like to check that out. Feel free to dm me here or on discord in the GP server if you have any doubts.

 

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Thanks to Tidy Up, (AC) Cinccino is the main enabler of hyper offense teams, letting them run many powerful entry hazard weak Pokemon threats such as Oricorio-Pa'u Oricorio-P, Arcanine, and Ninetales-Alola Alolan Ninetales. Knock Off lets Cinccino hit Ghost Types Ghost-types like Chandelure, as well as Bronzong, an otherwise problematic wall. Encore allows Cincinno Cinccino to capitalize on passive foes that setup set up entry hazards, boost their stats, or heal up such as Gligar, Registeel, and Sylveon. Teammates like Diancie, Toxtricity, (AC) and Scyther can work alongside Cinccino to overwhelm shared Steel-type checks like Copperajah and Bronzong, however, Fire-types Fires and Fightings Fighting-types such as Chandelure, Tauros-Paldea-Aqua Paldean Tauros-W, and Heracross that easily beat these same Steel-types work as well. Grassy Terrain teams also heavily benefit from Cinccinos Cinccino's presence, since it lets the Oricorio forms formes, Grafaiai, and Arcanine switch-in without having to take chip from entry hazards.

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Chien Pao Chien-Paoappreciates teammates like Mandibuzz defogging away removing entry hazards to prevent it from being worn down by hazards them. It can also bring Chien Pao Chien-Pao in safely using a slow U-turn. Mandibuzz is a great switch in switch-in to Fighting Fighting-type attacks from enemies like Choice Scarf Sneasler and Choice Scarf Tusk, (AC) which Chien Pao Chien-Pao is extremely vulnerable to, as well as being capable of checking set up setup sweepers like Azumarill or Scizor with Foul Play. In return, Chien-Pao deals with opponents like Sandy Shocks or Baxcalibur who can cause problems for Mandibuzz. Kingambit has impressive offensive synergy with Chien Pao Chien-Pao due to its neutrality to Fairy-type moves, being able to eliminate opponents foes like Hatterene with Iron Head (RC) and Choice Scarf Flutter Mane with Sucker Punch after rocks Stealth Rock damage. In return, Chien-Pao Chien Pao hits threats to Kingambit struggles with like DD Dragon Dance Dragonite, Iron Treads, Landorus-Therian Landorus-T and Defensive Gliscor.

 

[adorluigi]

Cinccino

many powerful entry hazard weak Pokemon threats such as Oricorio-Pa'u Oricorio-P, Arcanine, and Ninetales-Alola Alolan Ninetales

there should be a hyphen between "hazard" and "weak" because they're compound adjective; they combine to modify "Pokemon"
also, changing Pokemon to threats wasn't necessary- threats implies they're offensive, while Pokemon is more general. always avoid changing content when checking grammar

Encore allows Cincinno Cinccino to capitalize on passive foes that setup set up entry hazards, boost their stats, or heal up such as Gligar, Registeel, and Sylveon.

we only require the first mention of "entry hazards" in a paragraph to have "entry" so the bit you added here wasn't needed

overwhelm shared Steel-type checks like Copperajah and Bronzong, however, Fire-types Fires and Fightings Fighting-types such as Chandelure, Tauros-Paldea-Aqua Paldean Tauros-W, and Heracross

about "however": this word is a conjunctive adverb here (see link for more examples of such words). it can connect two independent clauses by adding a semicolon before it and a comma after, like this: "... like Copperajah and Bronzong; however, Fire-types and Fighting-types..."

since it lets the Oricorio forms formes, Grafaiai, and Arcanine switch-in without having to take chip from entry hazards.

a switch-in is a pokemon whose function is to switch into another, while "switch in" is the verb form, which should've been used here
for more clarification, see this snippet taken from the grammar standards post:

About switch-in vs switch in

• Use "switch-in", plural "switch-ins" when referring to a Pokemon that often switches in on another (Scizor is a common switch-in to Latias).
  • Do not use a hyphen when using "switch in" as a verb (Gyarados can switch in on Mamoswine) or as a noun, plural "switches in", referring to the act of switching in (Tornadus-T loses to Keldeo if it takes an Icy Wind on the switch in).
  • Use "free switch" to refer to the act of a Pokemon coming into battle with no downsides (A slow U-turn or Volt Switch can provide a teammate with a free switch in).
  • A switch-in refers to a Pokemon, so avoid phrases like “switch-in opportunities” and instead use “opportunities to switch in”.

also, "chip" is the verb, and "chip damage" is the noun. Pokemon get chipped vs Pokemon take chip damage

Chien-Pao

as well as being capable of checking set up setup sweepers like Azumarill or Scizor with Foul Play

setup sweepers is plural, so it should be "Azumarill and Scizor". if it was setup sweeper (singular) it would be "Azumarill or Scizor".

In return, Chien-Pao deals with opponents like Sandy Shocks or Baxcalibur who can cause problems for Mandibuzz.

opponent refers to the other player, while foe refers to enemy pokemon.
also, "who" should never be used in analyses, only "that" and "which". there's a section on this document for beginners that details when to use which one

In return, Chien-Pao Chien Pao hits threats to Kingambit struggles with

the original phrasing is okay here

t44Torkoal good edits here ^^ but you should try sticking to one workshop post/amcheck at any time, it's more productive to wait for feedback then try another check

 

[deepseazapdos]

Hello, first time posting in here, autumn encouraged me to learn GP

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Slither Wing

Slither-Wing Slither Wing (Spacing in Pokémon names are not hyphenated) is a niche defensive pivot which uses it's its (use the possessive determiner when referring to a Pokémon's quality, not the contraction of the verb to be) interesting type, useful typing, (I think useful would fit better for describing Slither Wing's qualities in the metagame. A Normal or Fire/Ghost typing can be interesting to some people but they might not be useful types in the metagame in question) serviceable bulk, (AC) (use the serial/Oxford comma in an enumeration of three or more) and reliable recovery in Morning Sun to check attackers like Great Tusk, Breloom, (AC) (serial/Oxford comma) or and (using the conjunction"or" implies Slither Wing can only choose to check either Breloom or Kingambit and not both of them) Kingambit. U-Turn U-turn generates momentum for Slither-Wing's Slither Wing's team against mons Pokemon such as Flutter Mane and Skeledirge. (AP) and it And most importantly, (AC) it allows Slither-Wing Slither Wing to avoid being trapped by Shadow Tag (this sentence is ambiguous: if Gothitelle has Frisk or Competitive, Slither Wing can still switch out without U-turn) Gothitelle. Close Combat OHKOs OHKOes ("OHKOs" is the plural of the noun "OHKO"; "OHKOes" is the verb) Iron Bundle and Chi-Yu, (AC) (add a comma to separate the independent clause) and 2HKOs 2HKOes Miraidon, (AC) (commas should always be used before the "which" clause) which Body Press cannot do. Will-o-Wisp's Burn Will-O-Wisp's burn stops the Pokemon Slither-Wing checks that check Slither Wing from using it as set up setup (use the noun, not the verb) fodder. (RC, AP) it It also punishes opponents foes (opponent = opposing human player; foe = opposing Pokémon from the opponent) such as Toxapex or Corviknight for switching in. Morning Sun heals Slither-Wing for 50% of its health, (Dex info) provides reliable recovery, helping it to consistently switch into Great Tusk. Tera Water provides a resistance to Fire type Fire-type (typing is hyphenated) attacks from Koraidon and Chi-Yu, (RC) (I believe this is not an independent clause; Tera Water also resists Water-type attacks, so the comma is not needed) and Water type Water-type (typing is hyphenated) attacks from Iron Bundle and Palafin allowing for a last ditch last-ditch counterattack. 168 speed Speed (Stat names are capitalised) EVs out speed adamant allow Slither Wing to outspeed Adamant (EV spreads should refer to the Pokémon -- the EVs themselves won't outspeed Breloom, Slither Wing will -- and stat names are capitalised) Breloom and while the rest are dumped into (I think invested/allocated are more proper verb choices in here -- dump is a synonym for "disposing", "throwing away", and "getting rid of" (there's also dumping in computing, but it's not relevant in this context) -- I'd leave it to the original author to rephrase this part) physical bulk Defense.

Slither Wing (implemented)

Slither Wing is a niche defensive pivot which uses its useful typing, serviceable bulk, and reliable recovery in Morning Sun to check attackers like Great Tusk, Breloom, and Kingambit. U-turn generates momentum for Slither Wing's team against Pokemon such as Flutter Mane and Skeledirge. And most importantly, it allows Slither Wing to avoid being trapped by Shadow Tag Gothitelle. Close Combat OHKOes Iron Bundle and Chi-Yu, and 2HKOes Miraidon, which Body Press cannot do. Will-O-Wisp's burn stops the Pokemon that check Slither Wing from using it as setup fodder. It also punishes foes such as Toxapex or Corviknight for switching in. Morning Sun provides reliable recovery, helping it consistently switch into Great Tusk. Tera Water provides a resistance to Fire-type attacks from Koraidon and Chi-Yu and Water-type attacks from Iron Bundle and Palafin allowing for a last-ditch counterattack. 168 Speed EVs allow Slither Wing to outspeed Adamant Breloom while the rest are invested in Defense.

 

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deepseazapdos

Slither Wing

First off, I appreciate the enthusiasm in learning grammar in your comments, but you don't need to explain your reasoning behind every change you do. You need to remember that these comments will be directed to the author, and not all authors will have the time or effort to improve their grammar and prose. In fact, explaining nearly everything you do can actually make it more difficult for authors to implement your changes. Try to limit your comments on changes that don't pertain to basic grammar rules or may need an explanation, and also try to keep comments as brief as possible.

To make things easier to point out for my feedback, I'll excise out some of your comments for readability and highlight some parts of the paragraph for better clarity.

Slither-Wing Slither Wing is a niche defensive pivot which uses it's its interesting type, useful typing, (I think useful would fit better for describing Slither Wing's qualities in the metagame. A Normal or Fire/Ghost typing can be interesting to some people but they might not be useful types in the metagame in question) serviceable bulk, (AC) and reliable recovery in Morning Sun to check attackers like Great Tusk, Breloom, (AC) or and Kingambit.

- Everything after "which" is considered a essential phrase to the noun "pivot". For essential phrases, authors need to use "that", while nonessential phrases use "which" and a comma after the noun.
- While changing "type" to "typing" is correct here, we can't really change the author's words unless we have a good reason to do so. Your comment on changing "interesting" to "useful" is valid, but it'd be better to leave the comment and not make an alteration to the actual text.

U-Turn U-turn generates momentum for Slither-Wing's Slither Wing's team against mons Pokemon such as Flutter Mane and Skeledirge. (AP) and it And most importantly, (AC) it allows Slither-Wing Slither Wing to avoid being trapped by Shadow Tag (this sentence is ambiguous: if Gothitelle has Frisk or Competitive, Slither Wing can still switch out without U-turn) Gothitelle.

- You forgot to highlight "Slither Wing's" in blue.
- While splitting this sentence into two is a fine correction, adding a comma before "and" also suffices. Additionally, proper English grammar conventions generally don't have sentences start with "and".
- I understand elaborating on Gothitelle's ability, but I think given the context of competitive Pokemon and the type of readers that would most likely probably read this type of info, I think this is a bit unnecessary.

Close Combat OHKOs OHKOes Iron Bundle and Chi-Yu, (AC) and 2HKOs 2HKOes Miraidon, (AC) which Body Press cannot do.

- You forgot to highlight "OHKOes".
- Although it looks awkward grammatically, a comma isn't needed after Chi-Yu, since "2HKOes" is only part of a two-verb list with "OHKOes". Alternatively, adding "it" after the comma can work.

Will-o-Wisp's Burn Will-O-Wisp's burn stops the Pokemon Slither-Wing checks that check Slither Wing from using it as set up setup fodder. (RC, AP) it It also punishes opponents foes (opponent = opposing human player; foe = opposing Pokémon from the opponent) such as Toxapex or Corviknight for switching in.

The author is saying that Will-O-Wisp cripples Pokemon that Slither Wing checks, not those that check Slither Wing. It is possible for a writer to omit the "that" for that phrasing.

Morning Sun heals Slither-Wing for 50% of its health, (Dex info) provides reliable recovery, helping it to consistently switch into Great Tusk.

- Good job on removing the dex info
- I think "to" can be kept here because that's a valid phrasing.

Tera Water provides a resistance to Fire type Fire-type attacks from Koraidon and Chi-Yu, (RC) and Water type Water-type attacks from Iron Bundle and Palafin allowing for a last ditch last-ditch counterattack.

- Good catch on "last-ditch"
- A comma is needed before "allowing", as it's a participial phrase of "Tera Water".

168 speed Speed EVs out speed adamant allow Slither Wing to outspeed Adamant Breloom and while the rest are dumped into (I think invested/allocated are more proper verb choices in here -- dump is a synonym for "disposing", "throwing away", and "getting rid of" (there's also dumping in computing, but it's not relevant in this context) -- I'd leave it to the original author to rephrase this part) physical bulk Defense.

- Good catch on the "outspeed" part
- A comma is needed after "Breloom", and you didn't need to change "and" to "while".
- Highlighting and commenting on a specific piece of text like what you've done here is exactly what you want to do if there are any questions or concerns over the author's writing; try to do so if there's anything similarly ambiguous like "interesting typing". That being said, "dumped into" is an adequately common and accepted phrasing for EV spread talk, so no need to worry about this for future reference.

 

[Felony]

Meowscarada

Choice Scarf Meowscarada with Sword Of Ruin is a top-notch offensive pivot and revenge-killer revenge killer against set-up setup sweepers like Polteageist, as well as other Scarfers Choice Scarf users like Sandy-Shocks Sandy Shocks. On top of that, Meowscarada can potentially clean in the late-game after using Knock Off + U-Turn Knock-Off and U-turn to sufficiently weaken checks like such as Corviknight and Scream Tail. Trick is an immediate and sure-fire surefire way for Meowscarada to shut down it's its checks, (AC) while Knock Off Knock-Off paired with Spikes are good is effective at chipping the grounded ones foes into KO range. Early game breakers Early-game wallbreakers such as Dragonite, Chi Yu, (AC) and Greninja can punch huge holes into the foe's opposing team so that Meowscarada can sweep (RC); (ASC) in return, Meowscarada cripples Dondozo and Corviknight with its STABs for the first STAB moves and offers pivot support for the latter two. Corviknight is a solid defogger Defog user and pivot that also switches into priority attacks like First Impression, -Ate Extreme Speed, and Ice Shard as well, which frees up Meowscarada to pivot more freely throughout the game.

 

[autumn]

Felony

Meowscarada

Choice Scarf Meowscarada with Sword Of Ruin

The ability is formatted as 'Sword of Ruin'. To check ability, item, and move formatting, you can use the PS teambuilder or the dex because GP follows that fromatting. Formatting can differ slightly for Pokemon forme names, but allthe irregular ones are in the first point of the standards to be checked.

On top of that, Meowscarada can potentially clean in the late-game after using Knock Off + U-Turn Knock-Off and U-turn to sufficiently weaken checks like such as Corviknight and Scream Tail.

• "Late-game" "early-game" etc are always used on their own, never with "during the" or "in the" before them. Functionally, 'in the late-game' is the same as saying 'in the tomorrow', so these terms are used on their own.
• There is no hyphen in Knock Off, so you've introduced an error here. As mentioned above, you can check move formatting in the PS teambuilder or on the dex.
• There isn’t any need to change like -> such as or such as -> like. There are subtle differences between the two, but they don’t really apply to a Pokemon context, so they can be treated as interchangeable.
  • You also don't need to worry about repetition of these phrases because it's not unnatural for someone to choose one way to refer to examples and stick to it; they don't need to be varied in the same way 'Roost allows it to heal, allowing it to check threats' would because stacking allows like that isn't natural.

Trick is an immediate and sure-fire surefire way for Meowscarada to shut down it's its checks, (AC) while Knock Off Knock-Off paired with Spikes are good is effective at chipping the grounded ones foes into KO range.

• There shouldn't be a hyphen in Knock Off here either.
• Good change from are -> is here! There wasn't anything wrong with the use of 'good' though, so this is a lateral change. A lateral change is a change from one correct word/phrase -> a second correct word/phrase that doesn’t have a prose justification and is made based on preference / “this sounds better”. This introduces a lateral change.
  • You want to make sure you're checking what's in the analysis and not what you'd personally write if this was your own analysis.
  • If you can’t justify a change, it’s likely more of a personal preference; in GP, we want to put the writer’s preferences first.

Early-game wallbreakers such as Dragonite, Chi Yu, (AC) and Greninja

Chi-Yu (and Chien-Pao, Ting-Lu, Wo-Chien) have hyphens in the names.

in return, Meowscarada cripples Dondozo and Corviknight with its STABs for the first STAB moves and offers pivot support for the latter two.

This sentence structure is a former/latter one, but the writer used 'for the first' instead of 'for the former', which means it gets lost a bit. Replacing first with former would be good, and removing that part entirely means the structure is no longer clear.

-Ate Extreme Speed

This is referring to an Other Metagames standard:

• In Other Metagames analyses, the term -ate Speed is accepted as referring to the combination of an -ate ability and Extreme Speed.

Overall, you've done well at picking up from previous feedback, so that's great to see! The main pointer I'd give is when you come across something that you haven't seen before in a GP check, use ctrl + f on the standards thread and beginner notes doc to check if there's a rule that you didn't know about; you can also cross-reference formatting for abilities etc on PS. There's no expectation for GPers to remember every niche standard even when on the team, so being able to use our reference materials and check things is a key part of what we do.

 

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Enamorus-IEnamorus is a top tier tera captain top-tier Tera Captain which should always be made one when drafted. Tera Fairy further boosts its STABs STAB moves making it extremely hard to check, even when it is not using damage boosting items and giving gives it the benefit of taking less damage from Stealth rocks Rock. Types like Tera Fire and Ground boosts it's its coverage moves further, while flipping some of it's its weaknesses. Water, Poison, (AC) and Steel allow you it to kill damage opponents you otherwise would not, especially on set up setup sets. Tera Ghost and Electric gives it extra coverage via Tera Blast, and handles permits it to handle certain attacks better. Stellar type Tera Blast Stellar deals 80 damage to opponents and hits them all neutrally, (AC) which synergizes well with Contrary and Choice Scarf, (AC) boosting Enamorus-I's Enamorus's offensive stats while dealing massive damage to all opponents reliably.

 

[Felony]

Calyrex

Choice Specs Calyrex-Shadow Calyrex-S is an excellent breaker who independantly wallbreaker that independently breaks through most of its usual switch ins switch-ins with accurate prediction. Grass Knot kills OHKOes Arceus-Water and Arceus-Ground in one hit after hazard damage (RP) Grass Knot and also 2HKOs Ting Lu 2HKOes Ting-Lu. Grass Knot It also pressures neutral targets like Arceus-Normal as well Arceus. Psychic 2HKOes Arceus-Normal Arceus, (AC) but Psyshock is an alternative STAB move that 2HKOs 2HKOes offensive Ho Oh Ho-Oh and hits Pokémon special walls harder, (AC) such as Blissey. Trick + Choice Specs debilitate Calyrex-Shadow's Calyrex-S' checks like Ho Oh Ho-Oh, Ting Lu Ting-Lu, and Arceus, (AC) by removing the longevity their Item items grant them and forcing them to attack. Tera Ghost Ghost-boosted Astral Barrage 2HKOs Ting Lu 2HKOes Ting-Lu with less chip damage and 2HKOs Ho Oh 2HKOes Ho-Oh and defensive Arceus forms even after Calyrex-Shadow Calyrex-S loses its Choice Specs. Tera Grass gives Grass Knot a good chance of scoring a an OHKO on Ting Lu Ting-Lu after hazard damage (RC) and lets it 2HKO Arceus. Tera Normal turns Calyrex-Shadow into grants Calyrex-S a Ghost immunity, preventing revenging revenge killing attempts from opposing Calyrex-Shadows Calyrex-S. All 3 three Tera Types also allow you to survive attacks like Ting Lu's Ting-Lu's Payback and Arceus' Shadow Claw, though the latter 2 make two leave it vulnerable to Extreme Killer Arceus' ESpeed Extreme Speed.

Edit: Just realized I forgot to underline the t in type in “Tera Types”

 

[autumn]

t44Torkoal

Enamorus

Enamorus-IEnamorus is a top tier tera captain top-tier Tera Captain which should always be made one when drafted.

The word 'which' here should be changed to 'that' because these two words aren't interchangeable.

• 'Which' is non-restrictive/non-essential, which means that the additional 'which' clause is not needed for the sentence to keep its meaning; it can be treated as an aside clause where the sentence makes sense and keeps its meaning without it
• 'That' is restrictive/essential, so the part of the sentence after 'that' is needed for the meaning. In this case, the part of the sentence after it is needed to explain the niche.

Here is another example that sunny was taught while amchecking:

• I like elephants, which are big.
• I like elephants that are big.

See how the switch from which to that changes the meaning of the sentence? This is a lot of explanation, but it is among the more confusing topics that we encounter. There is a more in-depth section on it in the GP beginner notes alongside an article link, which I highly recommend using as a reference throughout your checks.

The most important thing to note is that which clauses should always have a comma before them. If you see a 'which' without a comma, it either needs one adding or needs to be changed to 'that'. Which on its own with no comma won't be correct.

Tera Fairy further boosts its STABs STAB moves making it extremely hard to check, even when it is not using damage boosting items and giving gives it the benefit of taking less damage from Stealth rocks Rock.

• There should be a comma before 'making' here because it's starting a new independent clause. It follows the same rule as you adding a comma before 'boosting' later on in the exercise.
• There should be a hyphen in 'damage-boosting items' because it's a compound adjective. Both 'damage' and 'boosting' combine into one thing to describe the items.
• There should be a comma after 'even when it is not using damage-boosting items' because the comma before that phrase makes it an aside clause, which needs to be both opened and closed with commas acting like parentheses.
• 'Giving' was fine here because it's a parallel structure with 'making'. Take a look at the list parallelism section on the beginner notes doc for more here.

Tera Fire and Ground boosts it's its coverage moves further, while flipping some of it's its weaknesses.

The comma before 'while' is incorrect.

• Commas before 'while' are needed when it means 'whereas' / is showing contrast. If 'while' is used to mean 'at the same time as' (while also / while (verb)ing) then a comma isn't needed.
  • A phrase like 'while also' 'while still' 'while simultaneously' cannot show contrast because the definition of those words is along the lines of 'at the same time as'. Therefore, you do not use a comma before those phrases
  • The phrase 'while also [verb]ing' (so 'while being/while allowing/while preventing' etc etc) also cannot show contrast because the phrase in practice means 'while also being', which doesn't show contrast as explained in the point above.

This sentence is a 'while also', so the comma is incorrect.

Water, Poison, (AC) and Steel allow you it to kill damage opponents you otherwise would not, especially on set up setup sets.

• Kill is incorrect, but changing kill -> damage changes the meaning because kill is assumed to mean KO, whereas damage is less specific and just means doing some form of damage. Directly changing from kill -> KO preserves meaning more effectively.
• 'Foe' refers to the opposing Pokemon, while 'opponent' refers to the opposing human player. Killing opponents = killing the human person, which is not what this is trying to say.
• You changed the first 'you', but there's another one in this sentence that also needs to be changed. Make sure that all your edits are made consistently; if a writer makes a mistake more than once, use ctrl + f to check that all instances have been fixed.

Tera Ghost and Electric gives it extra coverage via Tera Blast, and handles permits it to handle certain attacks better.

• It should be 'Tera Ghost and Electric give' instead of gives because the subject is plural (referring to two things), so the sentence needs to agree with that.
• The comma before 'and' is incorrect. The clause after the 'and' is 'Permits it to handle certain attacks better', which is not a full sentence. Remember that commas before 'and' 'but' 'or' are only needed if the clause that comes after it is independent (meaning it’s a grammatically correct sentence without depending on the other part to make sense). If it isn’t independent, the comma is not needed.

Tera Blast Stellar deals 80 damage to opponents and hits them all neutrally, (AC) which synergizes well with Contrary and Choice Scarf, (AC) boosting Enamorus-I's Enamorus's offensive stats while dealing massive damage to all opponents reliably.

• This part of the sentence is dex info. Referring back to the feedback I PMed you, dex info should be removed when the info isn't relevant to the 'so what' of the sentence. The 'so what' is that Tera Blast Stellar synergises with Contrary and lets it boost stats while dealing damage. The Base Power and neutrality aren't relevant to that, so it can be cut to just say 'Tera Blast Stellar synergises well with Contrary...'
• There are two uses of 'opponents' here that need to be changed to 'foes'.

Please let me know if this all makes sense, particularly the comma rules. Don't be afraid to use ctrl + f to proofread, as it's the single most effective thing you can do to improve checks.

Felony

Calyrex

Grass Knot kills OHKOes Arceus-Water and Arceus-Ground in one hit after hazard damage (RP) Grass Knot and also 2HKOs Ting Lu 2HKOes Ting-Lu. Grass Knot It also pressures neutral targets like Arceus-Normal as well Arceus.

• Really great work with the prose here combining the related ideas! To take this a bit further, you could make it into one single list 'Grass Knot OHKOes Arceus-Water and Arceus-Ground, 2HKOes Ting-Lu, and pressures neutral targets like Arceus'. This improves readability even more and removes the double 'also'.
• Note that the first use of 'hazard' per paragraph needs to be fully written out as 'entry hazard'; after that, just saying hazard is fine.

hits Pokémon special walls harder, (AC) such as Blissey.

This is a content change; the original didn't mention the category of Pokemon that it hits, so us adding that in can risk introducing incorrect content. This does make sense, so if you want to propose something like this in a check, you can comment to the writer and leave it up to them; we just want to avoid content changes as a rule in case things get introduced that make less sense.

Trick + Choice Specs debilitate Calyrex-Shadow's Calyrex-S' checks like Ho Oh Ho-Oh, Ting Lu Ting-Lu, and Arceus, (AC) by removing the longevity their Item items grant them and forcing them to attack.

• Pokemon names ending in s (such as Latias, Froslass etc) still need to end in 's when plural. So it’s Latias's and Froslass's, not Latias' and Froslass'. Therefore, this should be Calyrex-S's checks.
• You don't need a comma before 'by' because this sentence is all one clause 'x debilitates y by doing z' - there's no dependent part to this.

All 3 three Tera Types also allow you to survive attacks like Ting Lu's Ting-Lu's Payback and Arceus' Shadow Claw, though the latter 2 make two leave it vulnerable to Extreme Killer Arceus' ESpeed Extreme Speed.

• 'You' shouldn't be used to refer to a Pokemon because you the reader isn't a Pokemon, so use 'it' or the Pokemon name instead.
• The uses of Arceus' should be Arceus's.

Really great work here!

 

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Choice Specs Calyrex-Shadow Calyrex-S is an excellent breaker who independantly breaks wallbreaker, independently breaking through most of its usual switch ins switch-ins with accurate prediction. Grass Knot kills hits Arceus-Water and Arceus-Ground in one hit after hazard damage. Grass Knot and also 2HKOs Ting Lu. Grass Knot pressures Ting-Lu while pressuring neutral targets like Arceus-Normal Arceus as well. Psychic 2HKOes Arceus-Normal, (AC) but Psyshock is an alternative STAB attack that 2HKOs offensive Ho Oh Ho-Oh and hits Pokémon special walls such as Blissey. Trick + Choice Specs debilitate Calyrex-Shadow's Calyrex-S's checks like Ho Oh Ho-Oh, Ting Lu Ting-Lu, and Arceus, (AC) by removing the longevity their Item Items grant them and forcing them to attack. Tera Ghost Astral Barrage 2HKOs Ting Lu Ting-Lu with less chip damage and 2HKOs Ho Oh Ho-Oh and Defensive Arceus forms formes after Calyrex-Shadow Calyrex-S loses its Choice Specs. Tera Grass gives Grass Knot a good chance of scoring a OHKO on Ting Lu Ting-Lu after entry hazard damage, and lets it 2HKO Arceus. Tera Normal turns Calyrex-Shadow Calyrex-S into a Ghost immunity, preventing revenging attempts from opposing Calyrex-Shadows Calyrex-S. All 3 Tera types also allow you it to survive attacks like Ting Lu's Ting-Lu's Payback and Arceus' Arceus's Shadow Claw, though the latter 2 make it vulnerable to extreme killer Arceus' ESpeed Arceus's Extreme Speed.

 

[deepseazapdos]

For the record, english isn't my mother tongue so it'll take me a while to pick up subtle things like valid phrasings that don't need prepositions removed, the prepositions themselves, and commas. It's all part of the learning process after all. Here's the exercise, I may have overlooked a thing or two:

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Enamorus

Enamorus-IEnamorus is a top tier tera captain top-tier Tera Captain which should always be made one when drafted. Tera Fairy further boosts its STABs STAB moves making it extremely hard to check, even when it is not using damage boosting items and while giving it the benefit of taking less damage from Stealth rocks Rock. (This could be reworded to something more concise like "while minimizing damage from Stealth Rock" or "while minimizing Stealth Rock damage" but this seems acceptable, so I'll leave it as is to preserve the author's voice) Types like Fire and Ground boosts it's boost its coverage moves further (RC) while flipping some of it's its weaknesses. Water, Poison, (AC) and Steel allow you Enamorus to kill opponents you foes it otherwise would not, especially on set up setup sets. Tera Ghost and Electric gives it extra coverage via Tera Blast (RC) and handles certain attacks better. Stellar type Stellar-type Tera Blast deals 80 damage to opponents and (Dex info) hits them all foes neutrally which synergizes well with Contrary, (AC) and Choice Scarf boosting Enamorus-I's offensive stats while dealing massive damage to all opponents reliably. (Choice Scarf does not boost Enamorus's offensive stats. I'd request the author to rewrite this part)

Thoughts and comments

• I added a comma before the Choice Scarf sentence (that is supposed to talk about speed) since it doesn't depend on the "Tera Stellar doing neutral damage with Contrary" part to make sense. Hopefully I'm understanding independent clauses right.
• I also tried preserving the author's original voice and had a better time doing this one. On the previous exercise I added way too many comments, even on objective mistakes where I wasn't supposed to.

 

[Ascension Evermore]

t44Torkoal

Calyrex

Nice work!

Choice Specs Calyrex-Shadow Calyrex-S is an excellent breaker who independantly breaks wallbreaker, independently breaking through most of its usual switch ins switch-ins with accurate prediction.

Good job catching all of the errors in this sentence!

• A slightly less intrusive way to fix the usage of "who" would be to say "...excellent wallbreaker that independently breaks through...." This is better because it preserves the original sentence structure more.

Grass Knot kills hits Arceus-Water and Arceus-Ground in one hit after hazard damage. Grass Knot and also 2HKOs Ting Lu. Grass Knot pressures Ting-Lu while pressuring neutral targets like Arceus-Normal Arceus as well.

• The word "hit" doesn't quite communicate "KO," so you can condense "kills ... in one hit" into "OHKOes," i.e. "Grass Knot OHKOes Arceus-Water and Arceus-Ground after hazard damage."
• When "KO" and its derivatives are being used in verb form, they should end in "es," not just "s," so "2HKOs" should be changed to "2HKOes."
• The first time that entry hazards are mentioned in a paragraph, you cannot use just "hazard(s)," you must say "entry hazard(s)." Any subsequent uses in the same paragraph can simply say "hazard(s)," but since the usage here is the first one in the paragraph, it should be changed.
• It was a good call to combine these three sentences into one, but instead of using "and also" and "while," it may be cleaner to simply combine them into a list: "Grass Knot OHKOes Arceus-Water and Arceus-Ground after entry hazard damage, 2HKOes Ting-Lu, and pressures neutral targets like Arceus."
• When you combined the sentences here, you didn't use the (RP) comment that should be used when removing punctuation marks like periods. I assume you are using the GP Tool; if so, could you make sure that under "Punctuation Markers" in the Options at the bottom of the page, that the box next to "Only Isolated" is not checked off? If this is checked off, it will not include those comments unless changing the period is the only change for that part of the sentence, which is not what we want.

Psychic 2HKOes Arceus-Normal, (AC) but Psyshock is an alternative STAB attack that 2HKOs offensive Ho Oh Ho-Oh and hits Pokémon special walls such as Blissey.

• Make sure to change "Arceus-Normal" to "Arceus" as you did in the last sentence!
• "STAB" should be changed to "STAB move," as stated in the Spelling and Grammar Standards, rather than "STAB attack."
• As in the last sentence, since it is being used as a verb, "2HKOs" should be changed to "2HKOes."

"Pokémon" should be changed to "Pokemon," as that is how it is spelled in analyses. However, your change to "special walls" is actually a content/QC-type change rather than a GP change. This takes away from the writer's voice and introduces a QC change that has not gone through a QC check. It is fair to want to include clarification about what specific criteria "Pokemon such as Blissey" refers to, but you shouldn't make this change yourself; instead, you can leave a comment. You could say something like "...offensive Ho-Oh and hits Pokemon (clarify what category of Pokemon it hits that Blissey is an example of, so that readers understand what other types of Pokemon Psyshock hits) such as Blissey."

Trick + Choice Specs debilitate Calyrex-Shadow's Calyrex-S's checks like Ho Oh Ho-Oh, Ting Lu Ting-Lu, and Arceus, (AC) by removing the longevity their Item Items grant them and forcing them to attack.

• When you use the "+" sign for a combination, you should treat it as grammatically singular, so the beginning of this sentence should say, "Trick + Choice Specs debilitates...."
• There should not be a comma after "Arceus," and you can check for yourself whether or not this makes sense by replacing the list with a single entry - "Trick + Choice Specs debilitates Calyrex-S's checks like Arceus, by removing..." would not be correct, so it is still not correct when you have a list instead.
• The word "items" should not be capitalized (though your change to make it plural was correct).

Tera Ghost Astral Barrage 2HKOs Ting Lu Ting-Lu with less chip damage and 2HKOs Ho Oh Ho-Oh and Defensive Arceus forms formes after Calyrex-Shadow Calyrex-S loses its Choice Specs.

• As before, since it is used as a verb, it should be "2HKOes."
• "Defensive" should be lowercase because, with a couple exceptions, set names are lowercase if they don't refer to specific moves/items/abilities.
• The usage of "less chip damage" in this sentence is odd and should be clarified, perhaps with something like "Tera Ghost Astral Barrage requires less chip damage to 2HKO Ting-Lu...."
• I would clarify whether the 2HKO on Ting-Lu is also achievable after losing Choice Specs, or if it is just the Ho-Oh and defensive Arceus formes that applies to; in the original sentence, it's somewhat ambiguous, so it would be best to leave a comment asking for that clarification.

Tera Grass gives Grass Knot a good chance of scoring a OHKO on Ting Lu Ting-Lu after entry hazard damage, and lets it 2HKO Arceus.

• It is "an OHKO," not "a OHKO."
• This is not the first time that entry hazards are mentioned in this paragraph. If you had changed it in the initial usage, then it would be fine to just leave it as "hazard damage" (without "entry") in this sentence.
• There should not be a comma after "damage" here because the part after the comma is not an independent clause.

Tera Normal turns Calyrex-Shadow Calyrex-S into a Ghost immunity, preventing revenging attempts from opposing Calyrex-Shadows Calyrex-S.

• Words like "resist" and "immunity" should not be used to refer to Pokemon the way "immunity" is being used in this sentence; instead, you could say, "Tera Normal provides Calyrex-S with a Ghost immunity...."
• "Revenge killing" is the correct term, not "revenging."

All 3 Tera types also allow you it to survive attacks like Ting Lu's Ting-Lu's Payback and Arceus' Arceus's Shadow Claw, though the latter 2 make it vulnerable to extreme killer Arceus' ESpeed Arceus's Extreme Speed.

• The removal of "also" here would be classified as a lateral change because the sentence is grammatically fine with it. If you have a specific prose reason for a change like this, I would put a brief explanation in a comment.
• I said earlier that, with a couple exceptions, set names are lowercase unless they refer to specific moves/items/abilities. "Extreme Killer Arceus" is one of those exceptions, as highlighted in the Spelling and Grammar Standards, so it should be capitalized as such.

Overall, this was a good workshop! It seems like there were a couple cases here where you caught a particular error in some parts but missed it in other parts (e.g. Arceus-Normal -> Arceus). I would advise you to take multiple passes through the paragraph to make sure you're getting everything, and keep in mind that CTRL+F is your friend. The GP Beginner Notes document has a short section talking about how to use CTRL+F for proofreading, so I think it could be helpful if you looked through that.

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Enamorus

Nice work here!

Enamorus-IEnamorus is a top tier tera captain top-tier Tera Captain which should always be made one when drafted.

• "Which" clauses should always have a comma before them. In this case, though, it should actually be replaced with "that" (and no comma) because the clause is necessary for the sentence's core meaning. "Which" is used for nonessential clauses, while "that" is used for essential clauses.

Tera Fairy further boosts its STABs STAB moves making it extremely hard to check, even when it is not using damage boosting items and while giving it the benefit of taking less damage from Stealth rocks Rock. (This could be reworded to something more concise like "while minimizing damage from Stealth Rock" or "while minimizing Stealth Rock damage" but this seems acceptable, so I'll leave it as is to preserve the author's voice)

• There should be a comma before "making" because "making it extremely hard to check" is being used as an aside here and should therefore be offset by commas.
• There should be a hyphen between "damage" and "boosting" because it is being used as a two-word adjective.
• This sentence has a lot of clauses, so you could invoke the prose reasoning of overlong sentences to split it up into two sentences: "Tera Fairy further boosts its STAB moves, making it extremely hard to check, even when it is not using damage-boosting items. It also gives Enamorus the benefit of taking less damage from Stealth Rock."
• As for your comment about concise wording: it's fair to leave this as is, but you could also argue that "giving it the benefit of taking less damage" is fluff and can simply be changed to "allowing it to take less damage" (which preserves most of the original word choice).

Types like Fire and Ground boosts it's boost its coverage moves further (RC) while flipping some of it's its weaknesses.

• Here, you should emphasize "Tera" again at the beginning of the sentence, so something like "Tera Fire and Ground...." The wording of "types like" also implies that there are other Tera types that can be used for the same reason, so I would be cautious about using wording like that (since it may not be true; you should check with the writer about this, though).

Water, Poison, (AC) and Steel allow you Enamorus to kill opponents you foes it otherwise would not, especially on set up setup sets.

• As in the last sentence, you should put "Tera" at the beginning of this one.
• We don't use "kill" when it relates to Pokemon; instead, we use "KO" (unless you are talking about revenge killing).

Tera Ghost and Electric gives it extra coverage via Tera Blast (RC) and handles certain attacks better.

• Since the subject here is plural, "gives" should be changed to "give" and "handles" should be changed to "handle" for subject-verb agreement.
• Tera Ghost and Electric do not handle certain attacks better, they allow Enamorus to handle certain attacks better, so the wording of the sentence should reflect that. Right now, it reads like the former.

Stellar type Stellar-type Tera Blast deals 80 damage to opponents and (Dex info) hits them all foes neutrally which synergizes well with Contrary, (AC) and Choice Scarf boosting Enamorus-I's offensive stats while dealing massive damage to all opponents reliably. (Choice Scarf does not boost Enamorus's offensive stats. I'd request the author to rewrite this part)

• When referring to Tera Blast, it should be "Tera Blast [Type]," so in this case, the beginning of the sentence should read, "Tera Blast Stellar...."
• You were correct to identify that dealing 80 damage is dex info, but hitting all foes neutrally is also dex info and can be removed: "Tera Blast Stellar synergizes well...."
• If you were to keep the part about hitting all foes neutrally, you should add a comma before "which" - as I said earlier, "which" clauses require commas.
• There should not be a comma after "Contrary." Rather, the comma should be after "Choice Scarf" because the synergizing is occurring with both Contrary and Choice Scarf.
• The "boosting offensive stats" does not refer to Choice Scarf here; rather, it refers to the fact that Tera Blast Stellar drops the user's Attack and Special Attack, which turns into an offensive boost with Contrary. The subject of this sentence is Tera Blast Stellar, not Choice Scarf, so the clause that begins with "boosting" describes Tera Blast Stellar, not Choice Scarf. Because of that, it should be kept. In this case, make sure to change "Enamorus-I's" to "Enamorus's" and "opponents" to "foes."

You definitely did a good job of mostly preserving the author's voice, which is great! This is something that new amcheckers tend to struggle with, so it's awesome that you are getting the hang of it! I would say that, especially while you are new, it is generally best practice to check the Spelling and Grammar Standards whenever you see some wording that you haven't come across in your checks before. If you see that the Standards have something to say about it, you can implement it. This will help you learn more of the standards and hopefully get the hang of it sooner.

 

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Normalium-ZNormalium Z Serperior utilises utilizes Leaf Storm boosted Z-Hyper Beam Breakneck Blitz to bypass most of its checks, namely Mega-Venusaur Mega Venusaur, Amoonguss, Mega-Latias, Iron Moth Mega Latias, Hydrapple or and Victini. Too many mons. Cutted moth and hydra Hidden Power [Fire] allows Serperior to chip Aegislash and Celesteela, the only checks unfazed by a boosted Breakneck Blitz, slowly wearing them down into range of +2 or +4 HP Fire in the late game late-game. Synthesis allows you it to switch in to Rotom W into Rotom-W and Ting Lu Ting-Lu throughout longer games without being worn down, abusing these opportunities to chip away at its checks. Glare eases the MU matchup against Aegislash and Celesteela by allowing you it to paralyse them, paralyze and attempt to remove them. Normalium-Z Normalium Z Serperior is only seen on Webs Sticky Web and other offense teams as its aggressive playstyle and lackluster bulk leaves leave it unable to attempt to setup set up multiple times against teams with revenge-killers revenge killers like Greninja, Iron Boulder, or Mega-Aerodactyl Mega Aerodactyl. Sticky Webs slow Web slows down the first two, (AC) but answers to Mega-Aerodactyl Mega Aerodactyl like Air Balloon Aegislash, Azumarill, Scizor, (AC) and Choice Scarf Mienshao are recommended given its ability to dodge the entry hazard.

 

[autumn]

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Serperior

You've made some good improvements in terms of going back through and catching errors, but there are still quite a few cases where previous feedback is being missed out. I have called out instances where these points have been previously covered, as it is critical that you're able to take note of comments that you have been given by us so you can take them forward for future checks.

It can be helpful to make your own document to paste in all the feedback you get so it's all accessible in one place.

Normalium-ZNormalium Z Serperior utilises utilizes Leaf Storm boosted Z-Hyper Beam Breakneck Blitz to bypass most of its checks, namely Mega-Venusaur Mega Venusaur, Amoonguss, Mega-Latias, Iron Moth Mega Latias, Hydrapple or and Victini. Too many mons. Cutted moth and hydra

• There should be a hyphen in 'Leaf Storm-boosted' because it's being used as a compound adjective to describe Breakneck Blitz. The 'Leaf Storm' and 'boosted' combine into a compound adjective. I've covered this point on 'damage-boosting items' in Enamorus, so please letme know if it doesn't make sense.
• GP should never remove content. I agree that the example list is long, but the best way to handle that is by leaving a comment and letting the writer decide which examples are the most important rather than us coming in and making the decision. I have also covered the content point in my feedback PM on Ribombee.

slowly wearing them down into range of +2 or +4 HP Fire in the late game late-game.

• "Late-game" "early-game" etc are always used on their own, never with "during the" or "in the" before them. These are also hyphenated. Ascension has covered this point in your Kingambit feedback, and this is also on the ctrl + f list that talks about removing the 'in the'.
• Moves should be spelled out fully and not abbreviated, so this needs to be Hidden Power Fire.

Synthesis allows you it to switch in to Rotom W into Rotom-W and Ting Lu Ting-Lu throughout longer games without being worn down, abusing these opportunities to chip away at its checks.

• The Rotom formes are an exception to the general standards rule, and they're written out fully (Rotom-Wash) for clarity. the full list of forme names is in the very first point on the standards, so please refer to that list whenever you come across one.
• The word ‘abuse’ is never accepted in analyses because it means 'use in a negative way', which doesn't make sense for Pokemon. You can use 'take advantage of' 'benefit from' etc as alternatives.

Glare eases the MU matchup against Aegislash and Celesteela by allowing you it to paralyse them, paralyze and attempt to remove them.

• The 'them' here is correct; you want to have a subject (either a Pokemon name or a pronoun) with each verb.
• You haven't implemented the feedback Ascension gave you around the 'Only Isolated' setting on the tool because the punctuation marker is not showing up with the removed comma.

When you combined the sentences here, you didn't use the (RP) comment that should be used when removing punctuation marks like periods. I assume you are using the GP Tool; if so, could you make sure that under "Punctuation Markers" in the Options at the bottom of the page, that the box next to "Only Isolated" is not checked off? If this is checked off, it will not include those comments unless changing the period is the only change for that part of the sentence, which is not what we want.

Your settings need to look like this.

Normalium Z Serperior is only seen on Webs Sticky Web and other offense teams as its aggressive playstyle and lackluster bulk leaves leave it unable to attempt to setup set up

There needs to be a comma before 'as' here when it means 'because'. Ascension has covered this point in your Kingambit feedback, and the ctrl + f list should cover it too.

revenge killers like Greninja, Iron Boulder, or Mega-Aerodactyl Mega Aerodactyl.

The 'or' here needs to be 'and' because 'revenge killers' is plural. This wss covered by Rahul in your Breloom feedback, and you also made the change for this error in the first sentence, so it's really really important to be consistent with the changes you make throughout your check.

 

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Cinccino

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Thanks to Tidy Up, (AC) Cinccino is the main enabler of Hyper Offense enables hyper offense teams, letting them run many powerful entry hazard weak Pokemon such as Oricorio-Pa'u Oricorio-P, Arcanine, and Ninetales-Alola Alolan Ninetales (Refer to Alolan and regional formes in general as Alolan [Pokemon]). Knock Off lets Cinccino hit Ghost-types Ghost Types like Chandelure (RC) as well as Bronzong, which is, (AC) an otherwise problematic wall. Encore allows Cincinno to capitalize on passive foes that setup hazards, boost their stats, or heal up such as Gligar, Registeel, and Sylveon, (AC) respectively. Teammates like Diancie, Toxtricity and Scyther can work alongside Cinccino to overwhelm shared Steel-type checks like Copperajah and Bronzong (RC); (ASC) however Fires Fire- and Fightings Fighting-type Pokemon such as Chandelure, Tauros-Paldea-Aqua Paldean Tauros-W, and Heracross that easily beat these same Steel-types work as well. Grassy Terrain teams also heavily benefit from Cinccinos Cinccino's presence, since it lets Oricorio forms formes, Grafaiai, and Arcanine switch-in without having to take chip damage from hazards.

 

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Cinccino

Cinccino is the main enabler of Hyper Offense enables hyper offense teams

This is a content change, which GP should never make. The original says Cinccino is the main enabler, which gives information of it being the most important one. This edit removes that additional context by only saying it enables teams; the reader no longer knows it's the main one. The number one rule of GP is not to change what's actually being said in a sentence, so keep that in mind and avoid changes like these.

entry hazard weak Pokemon

Good change adding the 'entry' here! Note that this should be 'entry hazard-weak' with a hyphen because this phrase is a compound adjective; both 'entry hazard' and 'weak' combine to describe 'Pokemon' and are hyphenated as a result.

(Refer to Alolan and regional formes in general as Alolan [Pokemon])

This is 100% correct, but you don't need to explain objective changes to a writer in comments. Doing a lot of those clogs up the check and makes it harder to implement, so comments should keep these principles from the beginner notes doc in mind to be as effective as possible:

• You don’t need to leave comments explaining any objective grammatical error fixes or any technical prose-related changes.
• If you’re making big changes that could confuse the writer (such as moving whole sections around or deleting sections without replacing), it’s good to add an explanation.
• Comments should be clear and have something that the writer can do in response. If you’re making a suggestion, make it clear what the proposed change is; don’t just point out the issue and expect them to come up with the best fix. Make sure to also be clear that it’s just a suggestion and isn’t a required change.
• If you have any questions about content/something needs clarification, leave a comment asking the writer to address it. Do not directly charge the content/meaning of an analysis, only use comments.
• Make sure to keep comments as concise as possible; if it’s longer than ~2 lines, it’s likely too technical/confusing for the writer to understand what to take from it.

Knock Off lets Cinccino hit Ghost-types Ghost Types like Chandelure (RC) as well as Bronzong, which is, (AC) an otherwise problematic wall.

• There's some formatting issues here, as Ghost-types with a hyphen is correct but is in red. When using the tool, make sure you do not make any edits in the Old box and only edit on the New box to avoid this.
• A comma before 'as well as' is fie to use; it just makes that clause an aside/less important than the main clause. Because we aren't metagame experts, we want to defer to the writer in these cases because they are most familiar with which parts of the sentence are important and which aren't.
• There shoudn't be a comma after 'which is' - you use commas before which clauses (so the one already there was correct), but the added comma here is in the middle of a clause and doesn't make any sense.

Encore allows Cincinno to capitalize on passive foes that setup hazards, boost their stats, or heal up such as Gligar, Registeel, and Sylveon, (AC) respectively.

• Cinccino is spelled incorrectly in this sentence.
• Setup should be 'set up' here - set up is the verb (to set up, doing the action), whereas setup is a noun (setup sweeper, setup move etc). In this sentence, set up is being used as a verb.
• You don't need to add 'respectively' here - you can't verify that the use is correct (item 1 in list 1 only applies to item 1 in list 2, item 2 in list 1 only applies to item 2 in list 2 etc). Both Gilgar and Registeel get hazards, and all three have setup moves, so adding respectively adds nuance that may not be correct and could be a content change.

Teammates like Diancie, Toxtricity and Scyther

There should be a comma after Toxtricity here; Smogon uses the serial / Oxford comma, meaning a comma before ‘and’ in a list of three or more.

Grassy Terrain teams also heavily benefit from Cinccinos Cinccino's presence, since it lets Oricorio forms formes, Grafaiai, and Arcanine switch-in

Swutch in shouldn't have a hyphen here. A switch-in (noun) is a coined term referring to a Pokemon that can switch into another. This is the only use where you'd have a hyphen. In this case, you're not using that definition and instead are using switch in as a verb, so no hyphen is needed.

 

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Slither Wing

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Slither-WingSlither Wing is a niche defensive pivot, (AC) which uses it's interesting type, serviceable bulk, (AC) and reliable recovery in Morning Sun to check attackers like Great Tusk, Breloom, (AC) and or Kingambit (Can Slither Wing check all 3 of these Pokemon again and again throughout the game?). U-turn generates momentum for Slither-Wing's Slither Wing's team against mons Pokemon such as Flutter Mane and Skeledirge, (AC) and it importantly allows Slither-Wing Slither Wing to avoid being trapped by Gothitelle. Close Combat OHKOs OHKOes Iron Bundle and Chi-Yu and as well as (Avoids repetition of and) 2HKOs Miraidon, (AC) which Body Press cannot do. Will-O-Wisp's Burn stops the Pokemon Slither-Wing Slither Wing checks from using it as set up fodder (RC); (ASC) it also punishes opponents foes such as Toxapex or Corviknight for switching on switch in. Morning Sun heals Slither-Wing for 50% of its health Slither Wing, helping it to consistently switch into Great Tusk. Tera Water provides a resistance to Fire type Fire-type attacks from Koraidon and Chi-Yu (RC) and Water type as well as Water-type attacks from Iron Bundle and Palafin, (AC) allowing for a last ditch counterattack. 168 Speed EVs out speed adamant outspeed Adamant Breloom, (AC) and the rest are dumped into in physical bulk.

 

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Slither Wing

Slither-Wing Slither Wing is a niche defensive pivot, (AC) which uses it's interesting type, serviceable bulk, (AC) and reliable recovery in Morning Sun to check attackers like Great Tusk, Breloom, (AC) and or Kingambit (Can Slither Wing check all 3 of these Pokemon again and again throughout the game?).

Slither Wing is a niche defensive pivot which that uses it's its interesting type typing, serviceable bulk, and reliable recovery in Morning Sun to check attackers like Great Tusk, Breloom, and Kingambit.

Good work on the oxfords. Your note is more of a QC thing, which isn't really in the scope of GP. Additionally, the word "which" here should be replaced with that, as the following things are what define Slither Wing as a niche pivot. Alongside that, "type" should be changed to "typing," as typing is the label for a Pokemon's collective types.

U-turn generates momentum for Slither-Wing's Slither Wing's team against mons Pokemon such as Flutter Mane and Skeledirge, (AC) and it importantly allows Slither-Wing Slither Wing to avoid being trapped by Gothitelle.

Caught everything here, good work.

Close Combat OHKOs OHKOes Iron Bundle and Chi-Yu and as well as (Avoids repetition of and) 2HKOs Miraidon, (AC) which Body Press cannot do.

Close Combat OHKOes Iron Bundle and Chi-Yu as well as and 2HKOs 2HKOes Miraidon, which Body Press cannot do.

This is good, but you overlooked "2HKOs Miraidon," which should be 2HKOes, parallel to the Iron Bundle and Chi-Yu segment's "OHKOes." I'd also say this repetition change is bad because "as well as" here doesn't link verb phrases too well. Leaving "and" is the least intrusive change, but "while also 2HKOing" would be fine if you were intent on upholding repetition.

Will-O-Wisp's Burn stops the Pokemon Slither-Wing Slither Wing checks from using it as set up fodder (RC); (ASC) it also punishes opponents foes such as Toxapex or Corviknight for switching on switch in.

Will-O-Wisp's burn stops the Pokemon Slither Wing checks from using it as set up setup fodder; it also punishes foes such as Toxapex or and Corviknight for switching in.

"Set up fodder" here should be "setup fodder," as "set up" is a verb and "setup fodder" is a noun. Additionally, status conditions (burn, paralysis, poison, etc.) are lowercase, with the exception of Toxic poison, which is as I've typed it out. The "or" between Toxapex and Corviknight should be "and" here, as the subject (foes) is plural. Changing "for switching in" to "on switch in" is a lateral change, as there wasn't really any reason to do that besides it maybe sounding better. This is also introducing an error, as "switch in" here should be hyphenated, as "switch in" is a verb and "switch-in" is a noun.

Morning Sun heals Slither-Wing for 50% of its health Slither Wing, helping it to consistently switch into Great Tusk.

This is good. Honestly, you could chop off "heals Slither Wing" entirely (as this is still dex info) and make this into "Morning Sun helps Slither Wing consistently switch into Great Tusk," but good catch either way.

Tera Water provides a resistance to Fire type Fire-type attacks from Koraidon and Chi-Yu (RC) and Water type as well as Water-type attacks from Iron Bundle and Palafin, (AC) allowing for a last ditch counterattack.


Tera Water provides a resistance to Fire-type attacks from Koraidon and Chi-Yu as well as Water-type attacks from Iron Bundle and Palafin, allowing for a last ditch last-ditch counterattack.

Good catches on the Fire- and Water-type attacks bits, but the "as well as" here is in a bit of a weird spot. Usage of "as well as" vs. "and" is often up to the writer, as "as well as" feels like an aside, while "and" would maintain parallelism, giving equal weight to both the Fire- and Water-type attacks. The author uses "and" here to give equal weight to both, so substituting it for "as well as" changes the meaning of the sentence to an extent. This would be a good place to ask the author's intent in a comment, I'd say.

The only real thing you missed is how "last ditch" should be hyphenated, as it's an adjective modifying counterattack.

168 Speed EVs out speed adamant outspeed Adamant Breloom, (AC) and the rest are dumped into in physical bulk.

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168 Speed EVs allow Slither Wing to outspeed Adamant Breloom, and the rest are dumped into physical bulk. Is there a reason to mention physical bulk here? Even something as simple as "physical bulk, helping to deal with x, y, and z" would justify having this. If not, this segment should be cut.

The 168 Speed EVs do not outspeed Adamant Breloom; they allow Slither Wing to do so. The change from "into" to "in" here was lateral as well, as "into" is fine terminology. The latter segment of the sentence is where I'd personally leave a note, as the analysis writer didn't leave a reason why this physical bulk is important, so it's redundant and is technically eligible for removal.

 

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Kingambit

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Black Glasses and Tera Dark should exclusively be used with Kowtow Cleave, (AC) as these enhance Kingambit's offensive pressure; with 5 five Supreme Overlord boosts, Kingambit can reach feats like 2HKOing Dondozo with Kowtow Cleave, (AC) OHKOing Walking Wake, (AC) and 1HKOing Walking-Wake and at +2 Attack, (AC) Dragonite through Multiscale with Sucker Punch. Air Balloon allows Kingambit to setup on would be checks in Landorus-T and most Great Tusks Tusk, become becomes a sturdy switch in to offense offensive threats like Kyurem, Roaring Moon, and Dragonite, (AC) which relies who rely on their Ground-type coverage to hit it, and gain gains an immunity to Spikes, (AC) that limits Kingambit before it gets going (What do u mean by this?). Kingambits Kingambit's potential and defensive utility in the late game make late-game makes it a nearly staple on offensive archetypes, (AC) from bulky to hyper offense, (AC) while still fitting on balance. Physical attacking teammates like Ogerpon-Wellspring Ogerpon-W, Zamazenta, and Swords Dance Iron Valiant can overwhelm shared checks like Zanazenta Zamazenta, Landorus-Therian Landorus-T, and Dondozo. Dark Type Dark-type offensive threat in Darkrai (RC) and Samurott-Hisui Hisuian Samurott form a Darkspam core with Kingambit to overwhelm Dark Dark-type resists like Zamazenta, (AC) and Tera Fairy users like Gholdemgo Gholdengo and Moltres together.

 

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On a formatting note, a lot of the end of this is bolded and a bit harder to read because the changes aren't separate enough. If you want to add extra colours, you can turn BBcode back off (buttons all coloured in) instead of on (buttons all greyed out) after you've pasted in when you edit so you can see changes. Overall, highlight colours aren't too useful and can generally just be comments, so I would stick to add/remove/comment and entirely using the tool to avoid formatting issues here.

I would also keep in mind referring to previous feedback when checking - some of the points here were covered by me/earth previously. Showing that you can learn from feedback is a critical part of GP, and it's important to let us know if you aren't understanding any of the feedback.

with 5 five Supreme Overlord boosts, Kingambit can reach feats like 2HKOing Dondozo with Kowtow Cleave, (AC) OHKOing Walking Wake, (AC) and 1HKOing Walking-Wake and at +2 Attack, (AC) Dragonite through Multiscale with Sucker Punch.

Making this into a list definitely improves readability, but following list rules on the beginner notes doc, each list item needs to be able to be read independently of any other. The second and third list items here lack information; the second doesn't say which move, and the third doesn't talk about whether it's an OHKO or not. You can use something like the below, where it's two lists instead of one to preserve information:

with five Supreme Overlord boosts, Kingambit can reach feats like 2HKOing Dondozo with Kowtow Cleave as well as OHKOing Walking Wake and, at +2, Dragonite through Multiscale with Sucker Punch.

Air Balloon allows Kingambit to setup on would be checks in Landorus-T and most Great Tusks Tusk, become becomes a sturdy switch in to offense offensive threats like Kyurem, Roaring Moon, and Dragonite, (AC) which relies who rely on their Ground-type coverage to hit it, and gain gains an immunity to Spikes, (AC) that limits Kingambit before it gets going (What do u mean by this?).

• You need a hyphen in 'would-be checks' because 'would' and 'be' combine to describe checks. Earth and I touched on this in previous feedback on 'hazard-weak' and 'last-ditch', so pelase let us know if this isn't clear.
• Set up is a verb (setup sweeper, setup move), whereas setup is a noun. Here, you are talking about the action of setting up, so you need the space. I covered this one in previous feedback too, and earth did as well, so please let me know if it's not clear.
• 'Become' and 'gain' were fine here: the list is 'Air Balloon allows Kingambit to [verb}, so allows it to become, allows it to gain. Saying 'Air Balloon becomes a sturdy switch-in to x' oes not make sense - the item cannot switch in, so the sentence only makes sense with the item allowing the Pokemon to switch in. Again, please let me know if this isn't clear from before.
• Switch-in in this case is being used in the coined term way that I described in my previous feedback, so a hyphen is needed here.
• The comma at the end of the sentence isn't needed; you add commas before 'which' clauses, not 'that'.

Kingambits Kingambit's potential and defensive utility in the late game make late-game makes it a nearly staple on offensive archetypes, (AC) from bulky to hyper offense, (AC) while still fitting on balance.

• Late-game, early-game etc are used alone; you don't say 'in the' 'during the' etc before them. 'In the late-game' is never correct.
• You don't need to add the commas here; this is fine as one main clause instead of making it an aside.

Physical attacking teammates like Ogerpon-Wellspring Ogerpon-W, Zamazenta, and Swords Dance Iron Valiant can overwhelm shared checks like Zanazenta Zamazenta, Landorus-Therian Landorus-T, and Dondozo.

Saying 'physical' and 'special' to mean physically/specially offensive is fine to do.

Dark Type Dark-type offensive threat in Darkrai (RC) and Samurott-Hisui Hisuian Samurott form a Darkspam core with Kingambit to overwhelm Dark Dark-type resists like Zamazenta, (AC) and Tera Fairy users like Gholdemgo Gholdengo and Moltres together.

• 'Offensive threat' should be threats here because it's plural, referring to multiple examples.
• For spam cores, use x-type spam, so Dark-type spam cores.
• ‘Resist’ or ‘resistance’ can’t be used as a noun; a Pokemon isn’t ’a resist’. Instead of ‘Fairy resists,’ phrases like ‘Fairy-type checks’ ‘switch-ins to Fairy-type moves’ can be used to convey the intended information that these Pokemon are relevant s checks (eg Blissey can be a Fairy-type check even if it doesn’t directly resist the type)
• There's some repetition in this sentence; you can remove the first 'Darl-type' to just say 'Offensive threats like xyz form a Dark-type spam core' because their typings are stated later.

 

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Chein-Pao

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Chien Pao Chien-Pao appreciates Mandibuzz defogging away hazards to prevent removing entry-hazards with defog, preventing it from being worn down by hazards. It can also bring Chien Pao Chien-Pao in safely using with a slow U-turn. Mandibuzz is also a great switch in to Fighting Fighting-type attacks from enemies Choice Scarf users like Scarf Sneasler and Scarf Great Tusk, (AC) which Chien Pao Chien-Pao is extremely vulnerable to (RC); (ASC) as well as being capable of checking set up setup sweepers like Azumarill or Scizor with Foul Play. In return, Chien-Pao deals with opponents foes like Sandy Shocks or Baxcalibur, (AC) which who can cause problems for Mandibuzz. Kingambit has impressive offensive synergy with Chien Pao Chien-Pao due to its neutrality to Fairy-type moves, being able to eliminate opponents foes like Hatterene with Iron Head, and OHKOing Scarf Flutter Mane with Sucker Punch after rocks Stealth Rock chip damage. In return, (AC) Chien-Pao Chien Pao hits threats to Kingambit like DD Dragon Dance Dragonite, Iron Treads, Landorus-Therian Landorus-T, (AC) and defensive Gliscor.