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1. The subject of what the examples are (so something like threats, teammates, foes etc- what the list items are examples of)
2. The connecting word used to separate the list items (either 'and' or 'or')
You need the 1 and 2 to agree grammatically.
In this sentence, you have 'Dark- and Steel-types (1) like opperajah, Duraludon, or (2) Incineroar'. This doesn't match.
1 = Dark- and Steel-types = plural (because typeS is plural)
2 = or = singular word
You want to make sure that 2 (the connecting word) matches 1 (the subject). The subject is plural, so the matching connecting word you need is 'and'.
General rule is if there's nothing wrong with the original text, even if you personally would have done it differently, don't make a change. Think 'what did the writer do wrong that forces me to change this?'
In this sentence:
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This should be setup sweepers.
- Set up is a verb (an action), so Dragonite can set up on Chansey
- Setup is a noun (a thing), generally associated with another thing like setup sweeper / setup move / setup opportunity etc
Similar to the previous exercises that earth and skype covered, the 'or' here should be changed to 'and'. This rule is a bit more complex, so please don't hesitate to ask if this doesn't make sense.Steel- andDark TypesDark-types like Copperajah, Duraludon, (AC) or Incineroar
- Or = singular word to connect things
- And = plural word to connect things
- If you're referring to multiple things (teammates, threats, foes etc), this makes the subject plural because it's referring to more than one thing. Therefore, you need to use 'and' in lists of examples to make sure that the plural subject agrees with the plural word 'and'
- If you're talking about one thing (a teammate, a threat, a foe etc), this makes the subject singular because it's only referring to one single thing. Therefore, you need to use the singular word 'or' to agree with that singular subject.
1. The subject of what the examples are (so something like threats, teammates, foes etc- what the list items are examples of)
2. The connecting word used to separate the list items (either 'and' or 'or')
You need the 1 and 2 to agree grammatically.
- If 1 is plural, then 2 needs to be 'and'. The word 'and' is plural as well, so there's agreement
- If 1 is singular (so if it said 'a foe' instead of 'foes'), then 2 needs to be 'or'. The word 'or' is singular as well, so there's agreement.
- If 1 is plural and 2 is singular / 1 is singular and 2 is plural, there isn't agreement, and the sentence is incorrect. You need to make sure 2 matches 1.
In this sentence, you have 'Dark- and Steel-types (1) like opperajah, Duraludon, or (2) Incineroar'. This doesn't match.
1 = Dark- and Steel-types = plural (because typeS is plural)
2 = or = singular word
You want to make sure that 2 (the connecting word) matches 1 (the subject). The subject is plural, so the matching connecting word you need is 'and'.
This sentence has a lot of lateral changes in it, which should be avoided. A lateral change is a change from one correct word/phrase -> a second correct word/phrase that doesn’t have a prose justification and is made based on preference / “this sounds better”. This is bad because it takes away correct words/phrases that the writer chose to use, which reduces the amount of voice they have in the analysis.Focus BlastKOs theprovides coverage against Steel- andDark TypesDark-types like Copperajah, Duraludon, (AC) or Incineroarwho would take a Psychic Type attack butthat resist or are immune to Psychic-type attacks, while Tera Blast Fairy can be usedto have a super-effectiveas an effective attack into Goodra and Flygon.
General rule is if there's nothing wrong with the original text, even if you personally would have done it differently, don't make a change. Think 'what did the writer do wrong that forces me to change this?'
- Don’t Make Lateral Changes: A lateral change is a change from one correct word/phrase -> a second correct word/phrase that doesn’t have a prose justification and is made based on preference / “this sounds better”. This is bad because it takes away correct words/phrases that the writer chose to use, which reduces the amount of voice they have in the analysis.
- You want to make sure you're checking what's in the analysis and not what you'd personally write if this was your own analysis.
- If you can’t justify a change, it’s likely more of a personal preference; in GP, we want to put the writer’s preferences first.
- Preserve Voice: We want to preserve as much of the original writer’s voice as possible.
- This likely differs from other writing.editing advice where efficiency comes first, but in Smogon’s case, voice is valued more.
- Writers are often interested in contributing to get their own words on-site, so us heavily rewriting them when there’s no real need can be discouraging.
- Evaluate Small Changes Heavily: Single word/small phrase changes are much more likely to be lateral because fewer prose errors (e.g. overlong sentences) can apply to a single word.
- If you’re changing one word to another / deleting a single word, it’s really important that you have a strong justification (e.g. repetition/redundancy).
- Make the Least Intrusive Change: Make the change that preserves as much of the original wording as possible.
- Prose editing is more subjective than fixing grammar errors, so there are often multiple options to fix the same error; some of these are more intrusive than others.
- A good edit involves making the change that preserves as much as possible to maintain voice.
- For example, if one word is repeated, you would want to change that single word instead of rewriting the whole sentence because that's more intrusive.
- 'KOs the Steel- and Dark-types' is fine to say - the writer did nothing wrong here. The original is actually betterbecause it gives more specific information, whereas this rephrasing makes it more generic.
- 'that would otherwise take a Psychic-type attack' also is fine to say - writer did nothing wrong here. This talks specifically about being able to take an attack, whereas the rephrasing again makes it more generic and closer to dex info.
- 'but' is fine as a connective here to show contrast - the writer did nothing wrong by using that word.
- 'super effective' (no hyphen) is also fine to say - the writer did nothing wrong with that either. Again, the rewrite makes it more generic - super effective is a specific Pokemon term, whereas 'effective' does not capture that (and would be incorrect actually if you take effective = neutral).
This should be 'against' - the word into and against don't have the same meaning.
Good change with the 'and' here! There needs to a comma after Gligar though, as Smogon uses the Oxford comma.
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