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ShinyAzelf said:
Misdreavus
A set consisting of Substitute, Shadow Sneak, Shadow Ball and Hidden Power Fighting allowed Misdreavus to single-handedly defeat commonly used Special walls such as Munchlax, Bronzor and Gligar. Misdreavus had an average HP, Attack and Defense stats, coupled with an above average Special Attack, Special Defense and Speed, allowing Misdreavus to not only outspeed a lot of Pokemon in the metagame, but to also defeat them. Misdreavus isn't short of priority either; thanks to Shadow Sneak being boosted by STAB and backed by 60 Base Attack it can pick off weakened Pokemon.

I think that can be added. It does need some grammar checks, because I'm not that good when it comes to writing.

Thanks!
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Grammar check :)
Red are changes, blue means deletions.
Not sure if you are looking for present or past tense, but I went with past.
 
http://www.smogon.com/smog/issue12/featured_rmt_ou

The 6th paragraph (not in the RMT):

Spiritomb is the team's spinblocker of choice. Normally thought to be outclassed by Rotom-A, it fits well with the rest of the team. Will-O-Wisp is the status move of choice, cutting the attack of opposing Pokémon in half. This can be especially useful against opposing Lucario and Scizor. A more unique move is Pursuit, which allows Spiritomb to remove opposing Psychic- and Ghost-types with ease. To give Spiritomb a way to heal itself, Lady Bug utilizes the popular Rest / Sleep Talk combination. This is great for PP stalling when used in conjunction with Spiritomb's Pressure ability. Spiritomb is EVed to be concentrated in special bulk, since it will want to be able to handle the ever-common Life Orb Rapid Spin Starmie.

remove opposing Psychic- and Ghost-types with ease

There is a missing - behind "Psychic" and "Ghost"

EDIT: All right Aeron Ee1 =P

And thank you Athenodoros!
 
"More sweeper-oriented switch-ins must be careful to not switch into a Glare as the paralysis could cripple their sweeping intentions."

From the bottom of Arbok's page.

I think that the use of intention is technically incorrect, or at least sounds better if replaced by "their ability to sweep." Because a paralysed Pokemon still wants to sweep, it just often can't.
 
I fixed the Spiritomb issue plus two typos there.

I know Umbreon is an issue in the Baton Pass article, but it seems to pull the example team together, and there's no real replacement for it. Flareon and Glaceon are the closest, but by far. I'll be leaving it alone until someone knows what to do with it.

Misdreavus goes in the same line as Umbreon here; it's in the example team. However, since I'm not that experienced with LC, perhaps there's a possible replacement that can fit in its role? If so, then the article can be implemented with ShinyAzelf's Misdreavus comments.

I'm leaving Arbok alone too just because the analysis is really old and probably should get a full revamp sooner or later in the future.
 
Magnezone's OU Overview (http://www.smogon.com/dp/pokemon/magnezone) should have a space in between the hyphens, as the words aren't exactly joined together like late-game...

With its rare ability to trap Steel-types, Magnezone can find a spot on just about any team. It boasts an excellent base 130 Special Attack stat, a great Electric / Steel typing (which grants a resistance to 13 of the 17 types), and useful moves, such as Thunderbolt, Flash Cannon, and Explosion. While Magnezone's Speed is less than average(space)-(space)even its predecessor, Magneton, is faster(space)-(space)it more than compensates with its reliability and power. If your team has trouble with Steel-types, like Choice Band Scizor and Choice Scarf Jirachi, then there is no reason to not consider Magnezone for your team.
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Magneton's OU Overview (http://www.smogon.com/dp/pokemon/magneton) is a bit awkward in some places, at least, imo...

While Magneton may appear to be outclassed by its evolution, Magnezone, Magneton's higher Speed stat gives it a specific niche. With a Choice Scarf or a Salac Berry boost, Magneton has the ability to outspeed a much bigger portion of Pokemon in the OU tier than Magnezone can (<- is this "can" necessary?), allowing it to either (<-shouldn't this be "both"?) revenge kill more threats or ("and", if above suggestion is taken) avoid being revenge killed while it's sweeping. Magneton still has the rare ability to trap and remove Steel-types from the game with Magnet Pull. When using Magneton, always remember to play to its strengths (Magneton literally has only one strength over Magnezone, so i think the s should be removed), or you are better off using Magnezone.
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For Magnezone, I've replace the hyphens with em dashes so there's no spacing required.

At Magneton, yeah, the "can" isn't really necessary. I agree with the "both" and "and" changes as well. For the "strength" part, I think since there's just one "strength", we should say exactly what it is. I've replaced "play to its strengths" with "abuse its higher Speed". While I was at it, I removed Honchkrow/Umbreon mentions in this analysis.
 
changed the above to

Although this set is very reliant on prediction, it yields an enormous payout if played correctly.
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someone else can go write blurbs for Pokemon Online if they want to, that's not me
 
http://www.smogon.com/credits
Under cathy and bearzly it says Shoddy battle the CURRENT pokemkn simulator.

Also Super (contributing to SB 1 and 2 and setting up smogon shoddy battle server) and Coyotte (programming PO) should be added to this list.


Edit
http://www.smogon.com/dp/pokemon/castform
SolarBeam takes out most other Water- and Rock-types.
This is not needed.



Edit 2
A Physical Sweeping Charizard, but not as all out as the Belly Drum version. Normally I would suggest Rock Slide for the 3rd option, but Earthquake can beat Tyranitar pretty well. Hidden Power Grass is nice for catching Ground and Water-types on the switch, but you'll have to use Aerial Ace instead of Hidden Power Flying.
http://www.smogon.com/rs/pokemon/charizard
This is worded badly



Edit 3
Flareon has a lot of potential, but its low Defenses and Speed hinder it from doing much. Flareon is the black sheep of the Eevee family, since all of the other evolutions have their own uses and work well. Maybe if Flareon is played with lots of Reflect and paralysis support, it can do something other than die.
http://www.smogon.com/gs/pokemon/flareon
Missing Capital.
 
-That hyphen after 'Water' is needed, so that's not an error.

-The current description for Charizard's R/S/E physical attacker set reads like this:

A sweeping physical Charizard, but not as all out as the Belly Drum version. Normally I would suggest Rock Slide for the 3rd option, but Earthquake can bust up Tyranitar pretty badly. Hidden Power Grass is nice for catching Ground and Water-types on the switch, but you'll have to use Aerial Ace instead of Hidden Power Flying.
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I don't see anything wrong with it, so I don't think it needs your suggested changes.

-It's also not up to me to update the credits page, it'll get done though don't worry.
 
Plusle said:
Stats (Attack, Special Defense, etc.) are capitalized.
My point exactly
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That's only when referring to the specific stat - if you're only talking about defences in general, you don't need capitalisation.

ie. Flareon's Defense stat
vs. Flareon's defenses

In this case 'defenses' refers to the combination of HP, Def, SDef, overall. So Fatecrashers is quite correct.
 
However, capitalizing Speed seems inconsistent right next to it. The way it reads it could refer to the stat specifically or in general, so it shouldn't break any standards to lowercase it. I'm not huge on grammar, but it does look odd.
 
Plusle said:
Super asked me to point out that at
http://www.smogon.com/shoddybattle/rules
You can just change all shoddy battle mentions to PO
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True, but the URL still says 'shoddybattle', and us mere badgeholders can't fix that.

alex 67 said:
http://www.smogon.com/dp/pokemon/bronzong In the counters section it says: Gastrodon makes an interesting counter with a resistance to Gyro Ball and Sticky Hold to prevent Trick. Gastrodon is never ever seen in Ou so this sentence should be removed.
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True, Gastrodon is rare in OU, that's what makes it an 'interesting' counter. No change necessary here.
 
http://www.smogon.com/dp/pokemon/exploud

In the Opinion section it says:
For this purpose, Soundproof can be quite a useful ability, as it allows Exploud to block Heal Bell and Perish Song...
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Soundproof does not block Heal Bell, at least not in a useful way (it blocks itself from being healed by it, but doesn't block an opponent from using it). Just remove the reference to Heal Bell from that sentence.
 
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