(Archive) Small Objective Changes Thread

The Lugia analysis page (http://www.smogon.com/dp/pokemon/lugia):



A punctuation fault there.
http://www.smogon.com/dp/pokemon/jirachi

Mixed Set, Paragraph 3,

Says Dragonite has intimidate.
http://www.smogon.com/dp/pokemon/honchkrow

Life Orb set, 4th paragraph:

Honchkrow is weak to Stealth Rock, and with Life Orb and Brave Bird factored in, the passive damage really hurts him his longevity.

Delete the "him"
http://www.smogon.com/dp/pokemon/murkrow

Life Orb set, 1st paragraph, 1st sentence:

Though by far not the most powerful wallbreaker in the tier, Murkrow's makes up for his mediocre Attack with powerful STAB moves in Brave Bird and Sucker Punch.

Remove the 's on Murkrow
fixed all of these. thanks; it's dudes like you who make smogon work! :)
 
The Mew analysis page (http://www.smogon.com/dp/pokemon/mew):

Although it may seem like Uxie is inferior to Latios, it is quite a bit bulkier to Latios and is also not weak to Ice- and Dragon-type attacks, but at the cost of being slower, and therefore easier to be Taunted.
First case should be "than", second case should be "Taunt" (active voice).

Furthermore, Groudon is immune to Thunder Wave, making it far harder to cripple it.
Redundant word (should be deleted).

Furthermore, its Safeguard helps not only Mew, but also your Baton Pass recipient, continue its piece of the strategy, even when faced with sleep or paralysis status, or after its Lum Berry has been used.
Redundant punctuation (should be deleted).

For example, Dragon Dance Rayquaza is an incredibly potent sweeper, who is only checked by very bulky Lugia and Groudon after Choice Scarf users are dispatched, does extreme damage to its checks before it is taken out, to the point where they cannot do their job again.
This sentence as a whole is rather confusing ... I'd suggest rewriting to "For example, Dragon Dance Rayquaza is an incredibly potent sweeper who is only checked by very bulky Lugia and Groudon after Choice Scarf users are dispatched. It also does extreme damage to its checks before it is taken out, to the point where they cannot do their job again."
 
In the Mamoswine analysis, I suggest that this sentence
If you choose an Adamant nature, you may drop the Speed down to 244, enough to outpace Jolly Tyranitar.
be changed to
If you choose an Adamant nature, you may drop the Speed EV's down to 192, enough to outpace Jolly Tyranitar.
This is because the original sentence is unclear on whether you want 244 Speed EVs or enough EVs to have 244 speed. Also, it makes no mention of where to place the extra EV's, but that's probably for another thread.
 
Steelix's "Counters" Section said:
...Defensive Venusaur and Shaymin don't fear anything Steelix can throw at it, and can KO it with STAB Grass attacks. Charizard and Moltres...
Since Shaymin is now BL, Shaymin's part should be removed, or changed to Leafeon, who counters Steelix quite well.



Also, since I'm a horrible person who cannot read rules, I'm undoing my edit with this edit and making another post.
 
Absol's "Other Options" Section said:
... Stone Edge is more suitable if you decide to use Absol in the OU metagame, as it can dent Pokémon like Gyarados and Salamence harder than Absol's other attacks would...
Salamence is Uber, so it should either be changed to Dragonite or removed.

Ursaring's article is completely based on OU.
 

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