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(Archive) Small Objective Changes Thread

In the 1v1 article, I went and corrected a good number of errors and flow strangeness, including the one above. Odd how these errors went by unnoticed. Thanks for bringing the article to attention, Venser!
 
Everything in Pokemon is rounded down. With 12 EVs in Attack, Rhyperior will have 319 Attack, and 350 Attack with an Adamant nature. With 16 EVs, Rhyperior will have 352, which is 2 points higher with just 4 EVs. This is more of a mechanic type thing; shouldn't have to be explained in an analysis.
 
http://smogon.com/dp/pokemon/bronzong

The second paragraph of the Dual Screens set says:
The EVs listed allow Bronzong to effectively take hits from both sides of the attacking spectrum
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The word "spectrum" shouldn't be used in analyses, as per this discussion topic.

The Offensive Trick Room set starts off with this:
This set focuses on Bronzong's acceptable base 89 Attack and incredible capabilities under Trick Room to perform the following jobs: sweeping late-game, checking offensive teams, and providing late-game Trick Room support.
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This should probably be changed to "...capabilities under Trick Room to sweep late-game, check offensive teams, and provide late-game Trick Room support."

The third sentence of the first paragraph of the Optional Changes section says this:
Due to the Special Defense boost in Sandstorm, Gyro Ball is still a better option against Tyranitar, however.
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The Special Defense boost in this sentence could apply to either Bronzong or Tyranitar with the current wording. It's also quite unnecessary; it should probably be reworded as something like: "However, Grass Knot isn't as effective against Tyranitar as Gyro Ball, due to Tyranitar's high Special Defense."

The second paragraph of the Optional Changes section starts with:
Heatproof is a decent ability to fool an opponent, though you wouldn't be able to switch into Earthquake,
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"wouldn't" should be changed to "won't"

Thanks to Magnet Pull, Bronzong fears Magnezone if it doesn't have Earthquake to stop it, and even that can be foiled by Magnet Rise,
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That's mentioned twice in the same wording in both the last sentence of the first paragraph of Optional Changes, and the first paragraph of Counters (shouldn't that be "Checks and Counters?"). It should be probably be reworded in the first instance to something like "Bronzong can use Shed Shell to evade Magnezone's Magnet Pull." Also, the first paragraph of the Counters section looks weird with only one sentence; that should probably be merged into the second paragraph.

The final paragraph of the "Team Options" section reads:
The EVs listed for the Standard Wall and TrickZong sets may look a bit strange;
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The Trick set is no longer named "TrickZong," so this sentence should be revised accordingly.

The second sentence of the second paragraph of the Counters section reads:
Gyarados Intimidates Bronzong and resists Gyro Ball, but can be Hypnotized or hit by Hidden Power Electric.
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I don't think words like "Intimidates" or "Hypnotized" are supposed to be used in analyses; it should probably be something like: "Gyarados' Intimidate cuts Bronzong's Attack and resists Gyro Ball, but it must watch out for Hypnosis or Hidden Power Electric."

The final paragraph of the Trick set reads:
Defensively, Bronzong will have trouble taking Fire-type attacks, mainly from the likes of Heatran and Infernape. Most Water-types can counter them due to particularly high Special Defense and STAB Surf.
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This should probably be "...due to their generally high Special Defense and STAB Surf."
 
Another post because I fail: when I wrote "Gyarados' Intimidate," I should have written "Gyarados's Intimidate," because it's not plural and therefore should have an "s".
 
http://smogon.com/dp/pokemon/geodude

The first sentence of the Rock Polish set reads:
With its access to high-powered STAB moves, Explosion, and a high Defense stat to handle priority, Geodude can make for a dangerous Rock Polish sweeper that can plow through.
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I assume that should end in "teams."

The first sentence of Team Options reads:
The Rock Polish set is generally difficult to stop once Geodude has grabbed a boost unless the opponent is packing [a Pokemon with more than 22 speed, a Pokemon with Super Effective priority or Bronzor who resists both of Geodude's STAB moves and can KO.
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There's a random "[" in there, I believe "Super Effective" shouldn't be capitalized, and there should probably be a comma after "priority" and "Bronzor."

First sentence of Optional Changes:
Geodude has a couple of nifty moves it can use: ThunderPunch, Curse, and Counter.
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This sounds awkward; I don't know if it's worth editing, but I think it should go more like, "Geodude has a couple of nifty moves it can use, namely ThunderPunch, Curse, and Counter."

Absurdly minor grammar nitpick in the first sentence of the second paragraph of Team Options:
Once Geodude gets Rock Polish down,
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The common usage is "gets Rock Polish up, but that probably doesn't matter enough to change it.

Fourth paragraph of the Rock Polish set:
Bronzor is the best Geodude counters because it resists both of its STAB moves and can take Geodude down with Flash Cannon. It is advised that Geodude pair up with a strong Fire-type like Magby or Ponyta in order to keep Bronzor at bay the entire match. However, if one is looking to lure in Bronzor, Meowth makes a good partner as it can neutralize it with Hypnosis if it decides to come in. Dratini does an excellent job as well because it can take a huge portion of Bronzor’s health with a boosted Waterfall or Fire Blast.
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It should read "...one of the best Geodude counters...," and "the entire match" seems pointless, as either Magby or Ponyta could easily be killed, and thus not keep Bronzor at bay the entire match. The "if it decides to come in" part about Meowth seems a bit pointless, as the Meowth is looking to lure and sleep Bronzor. The last sentence should read "...take away a huge portion of Bronzor's health..."
 
Another thing:
On both leads set of Mesprit a mention is given of having the ability to break Raikous sub with U-Turn.
In the normal lead set, there is a mention of 2HKO'ing Froslass.
They both aren't UU anymore.
 
Heatran has even defenses, so it runs 4 SpD EVs so that the rare Porygon-Z will not pick up a SpA Download boost when it switches into Heatran. I've removed Raikou mentions from Mesprit's analysis and fixed all of your other issues.
 
Tomahawk9 said:
Then the sets with a Naive nature are better off using 4 HP EVs. This still allows him to take special hits better than 4 SpD EVs and the Naive nature makes Porygon-Z's boost always SpA.
And the Metal Sound should not have 4 Def EVs. Both 4 HP and 4 SpD are better.
You also might want to remove the mention of Froslass.
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Zystral's made a thread about this.

http://smogon.com/dp/pokemon/jirachi

There's no item for the Dual Screens set. The set should use Light Clay.
 
http://www.smogon.com/dp/articles/intro_comp_pokemon

For the first three generations, these moves were based on type. All Bug, Flying, Fighting, Ground, Normal, Poison, Rock, Ghost, and Steel moves were physical. All Dark, Dragon, Electric, Fire, Grass, Ice, Psychic, and Water moves were special.
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The wording of the first sentence, after the comma, seems weird. Shouldn't it be something like


[box]In the first three generations, whether an attack was physical or special depended on [the/that] move's type. All [etc.][/box]


I think this is flows a bit better. Its not much of an important change, just something I noticed.
 
Also on the same page it talks about Pokemon Lab being Smogon's simulator, which I don't believe is correct now that we have a server on Pokemon Online.
 
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