Grammar Prose Workshop v2 (updated 12/4/17!)

martha

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Garchomp has a really good Ground/Dragon-typing and the ability Rough Skin which allows it to the opposing Pokemon to take damage you when you make contact with it.
- When referring to dual typings, they are spaced out like Dragon / Ground typing. A hyphen is never used with the word "typing." Dragon is also the primary type.
- Commas are used before "which" clauses.
- "You" refers to the human battler and not your Pokemon. This could be rephrased to say "Rough Skin, which damages the opposing Pokemon when it makes contact with Garchomp," also removing the ambiguity with the "it"

Fairies Fairy-types can switch-in to Garchomp since Outrage doesn't effect them but they must be weary of Earthquake.
- Good change from Fairies to Fairy-types
- Switch-in is a noun, which is used to say "switch-ins to x Pokemon" or similar; switch in (without the hyphen) is the verb.
- Commas are used before *since" and "as" if they mean because.
- Effect here should be replaced with affect here. Affect means to influence or to produce a change in something, and effect is a noun, and it means the result of a change.
- Commas are used before "but" and "and" if both clauses are independent (make sense on their own). Both of these do, so a comma should be added.
- "Weary" means tired; the word should be wary.

Garchomp can also setup Stealth Rocks to weaken the opponent's team when they switch in to a different Pokemon.
- "Setup" is a noun, so setup sweepers, setup moves; "set up" is the verb and what you're looking for here.
- Stealth Rock, not Stealth Rocks.
- Good change with opponent, because opponent = the human battler. "The opponent's team when they switch" does sound a little off now, however.
- In to -> into.

It can also run a Defensive set, (RC) with Rocky Helmet and Dragon Tail, (AC) and it can also utilise a Z-Earthquake Tectonic Rage set with SD Swords Dance and an aAdamant Nnature, so that it OHKOs things like Heatran.
- I would change the first "it" to Garchomp to make it clear what's being referred to.
- Set names and playstyles aren't capitalised, so it would be a "defensive" set.
- Adding that extra information is a content change, and it was nowhere in the original. We don't make quakity changes, and if one is really needed, leave a comment instead of a change.
- Utilize, not utilise; Smogon uses American English.
- Commas are used before "so" unless it means "so that," so the comma isn't needed.
- OHKOs is the noun, and OHKOes is the verb. It OHKOes Heatran.
- I would use Pokemon over things for more formality.

Overall, a great first check! I'm going to copy the other two and show how I would've checked this.

Garchomp has a really good Ground/Dragon-typing Dragon / Ground typing and Rough Skin, (AC) which allows it to damage you when you the foe when it makes contact. Fairies Fairy-types can switch-in to switch into Garchomp, (AC) since Outrage doesn't effect affect them, (AC) but they must be weary wary of Earthquake. Garchomp can also set (space) up Stealth Rocks to weaken the opponent foes when they switch in. It can run a defensive set, (RC) and can also utilise utilize a Z-Earthquake Tectonic Rage set with Swords Dance and an Adamant nature, (RC) so that it OHKOes things Pokemon like Heatran.
 
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Ground types Ground-types such as Landorus therian Landorus-T, Garchomp and Swampert-mega Mega Swampert, (AC)are a problem for Koko pose a threat to Tapu Koko, (AC) as they are immune to Electric STAB moves, and can OHKO it with EQ Earthquake, however they can be killed fainted by Dazzling gleam Gleam or HP ice Hidden Power Ice. Choice Specs lets Tapu koko Koko hit hard, but locks you it into 1 one move unless you switch out. Pokemon who have boast a high Special defence Defence like Chansey, (AC)are also a problem, (AC) because it they lives all of it's its attacks. Tapu Koko is very fast agile with a 130 base spe Speed, (AC) so it is hard making it difficult to revenge-(RH)kill, (AC) unless you have a scarfer Choice Scarf user.

It's best to setup DD Dragon Dance towards the end of the game, when Mega Charizard-(RH)X's checks and counters are out of play fainted or have been weakened enough to be picked off after an attack boost. Mega Charizard-(RH)X should set up on a Pokemon that it forces out, such as Mega Scizor,(AC) and Celebi, or against Electric-types such as Manectric-Mega Mega Manectric and Raikou. Rotom-Wash Rotom-W is an easy target to setup a Dragon Dance on if it is running HP investment, as it can't 2HKO Charizard-X Mega Charizard X with hydro pump Hydro Pump, and is stalled out with Roost. Make sure you avoid Thunder Wave from pokemon Pokemon like Cresselia, Thundurus (which also has Prankster) and Mega-(RH)Slowbro, (AC) as paralys paralysis cuts Mega Charizard-(RH)X's speed in half, making it suspectible susceptible to a higher amount larger number of revengers revenge killers.
 
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martha

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hey JetOU sorry for taking so long and welcome to C&C

Ground types Ground-types such as Landorus therian Landorus-T, Garchomp and Swampert-mega Mega Swampert, (AC)are a problem for Koko pose a threat to Tapu Koko, (AC) as they are immune to Electric STAB moves, and can OHKO it with EQ Earthquake, however they can be killed fainted by Dazzling gleam Gleam or HP ice Hidden Power Ice.

- Smogon uses the serial comma, so it's Landorus-T, Garchomp, and Mega Swampert
- Not sure why you added the comma after Mega Swampert because "pose a threat to Tapu Koko" isn't a diffferent clause and removing that information means the setence makes no sense.
- Immune to Electric or immune to Electric-type moves, Electric moves generally isn't correct.
- Remove the comma before and here because commas before and are used when both clauses are independent (make sense on their own). "can OHKO it with Earthquake" doesn't make sense on its own.
- Putting a comma before however here creates a comma splice, meaning two complete sentences that are joined with a comma but make sense on their own. It can either be fixed by changing however to but or putting a semicolon/starting a new sentence with however. I would prefer the second here because the sentence is already pretty long.


Choice Specs let
s Tapu koko Koko hit hard, but locks you it into 1 one move unless you switch out. Pokemon who have boast a high Special defence Defence like Chansey, (AC)are also a problem, (AC) because it they lives all of it's its attacks. Tapu Koko is very fast agile with a 130 base spe Speed, (AC) so it is hard making it difficult to revenge-(RH)kill, (AC) unless you have a scarfer Choice Scarf user.
- Same as with and, a comma before but should only be used when both clauses make sense on their own.
- You changed the first "you" to "it" but not the second; the second should also be changed because you don't switch out, your Pokemon does.
- Pokemon which/that (depending on context) is used over Pokemon who; Pokemon aren't people.
- Changing have to boast is entirely subjective and unnecessary, and GPers try to avoid changing the writer's voice whenever possible.
- Smogon uses American English, so Special Defense over Special Defence.
- Not sure why you added the commas there because that implies that the information can be removed and the sentences still makes sense (it being nonessential information), which isn't true. Pokemon that have high Special Defense like Chansey because they survive all of its attacks doesn't make sense.
- Same subjective issue with fast -> agile and so ti is hard -> making ti difficult, not needed and changes like that are avoided as much as possible.
- Base 130 Speed, not 130 base.

Feel free to ask anything on the #questions channel on the GP discord for further clarification and anyone will be willing to help out.
 

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Ground(add a hyphen)-types such as Landorus therian Landorus-T, Garchomp(add a comma), and Swampert-mega Mega Swampert are a problem for Tapu Koko as they are immune to Electric STAB all possess an Electric-type immunity (remove comma), and can OHKO it with Earthquake (add a semicolon); however(add a comma), they can be killed by Dazzling gleam Gleam or HP ice Hidden Power Ice. Choice Specs lets Tapu koko Koko hit hard, but locks you into 1 one move unless you switch out. Pokemon who have a high Special defence Defense like Chansey are also a problem present an issue (avoid repetition) because it they lives all of (remove apostrophe)it's Tapu Koko's (clarification) attacks. Tapu Koko is very fast with a 130 base spe Base 130 Speed stat (add a comma), so it is hard can prove difficult to (remove hyphen)revenge-kill unless you have a scarfer Choice Scarf user.


Garchomp has a really good solid Ground/Dragon-typing and possesses the ability Rough Skin(add a comma), which allows it to damage you when you the opponent when it makes contact. Fairies Fairy-types (such as?) can switch-in to switch into Garchomp since Outrage doesn't effect affect them(add a comma), but they must be weary wary of Earthquake. Garchomp can also setup set up Stealth Rocks to weaken the opponent when as they switch in. While It it can run a Defensive defensive set, and Garchomp can also utilise a Z-Earthquake set with SD utilize an offensive set with Groundium Z, Swords Dance, (be sure to include both commas) and an adamant Nature Adamant nature (remove comma), so that it OHKOs things Pokemon like Heatran (Doesn't Earthquake OHKO no matter the Garchomp or Heatran set? Perhaps find a different example.).
 
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Ground-types (<- add hyphen) such as Landorus-therianTherian (<- add hyphen), Garchomp and Swampert-mega Mega Swampert are a problem for Tapu Koko as they are immune to Electric STABattacks, and can OHKO it with EQEarthquake, however, (<- add comma) they can be killeddamaged by Dazzling gleamGleam or HP iceHidden Power Ice. Choice Specs let Tapu kokoKoko hit hard, but lockit locks you into 1one move unless you switch out. Pokemon whothat have high Special defenceDefense like Chansey are also a problem because it livesthey live all of it'sits attacks. Tapu Koko is very fast with 130 base spebase 130 Speed so it is hard to revenge-kill (<- remove hyphen) unless you have a scarferPokemon with Choice Scarf.


Unfortunately I only had time for this one today, I'll do Garchomp some other time. I looked into the grammar policy for Smogon, and I wasn't sure what the policy was on numbers, but I assumed for numbers that didn't have anything to do with Pokemon stats could be converted from numerical to prose so that's what I did here.
 
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