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Black Glasses + Tera Dark should exclusively be used with Kowtow Cleave as these propel Kingambit's offensive pressure

"as" means "because" here, so it needs a comma here

Air Balloon allows Kingambit to setup set up on would be would-be checks in Landorus-T and most Great Tusks (RC) Tusk variants; (ASC) to become a sturdy switch in switch-in to...

good semicolon list here! wouldn't add that "to" in "Great Tusk variants; to" though because the first "to" applies to every item on this list

and gain an immunity to Spikes that limits could limit Kingambit before it gets going.

this is lateral and isn't necessary
also, this "that" should be "which", since it's talking about specifically Spikes. as in, any "Spikes" would limit kingambit if not for its immunity

Kingambits Kingambit’s potential and defensive utility late game late-game almost make it a nearly staple on offensive archetypes, (AC) ranging from Bulky Offense to Hyper Offense while still fitting on Balance.

I would do nearly => near instead of changing the word first
Bulky Offense and Hyper Offense should not be capitalized

Physical teammates like Ogerpon-Wellspring Ogerpon-W, Zamazenta, and Swords Dance Iron Valiant can overwhelm shared checks like Zanazenta, Landorus-Therian Landorus-T, and Dondozo.

"Zanazenta" <= typo here

 

[Itchy]

I want to try my hand at this again, been a while since I've done an amcheck but I think I remember what to do. this is the meowscarada example

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Choice Scarf Meowscarada with Sword Of Ruin is a top-notch offensive pivot and revenge-killer revenge killer against set-up setup sweepers like Polteageist, as well as other Scarfers slower Choice Scarf users like Sandy-Shocks Sandy Shocks. On top of that, Meowscarada can potentially clean in the late-game after using once Knock Off + and U-Turn to have sufficiently weakened checks like Corviknight and Scream Tail. Trick is an immediate and sure-fire way for Meowscarada to shut down it's its checks, (AC) while Knock Off paired with Spikes are good is good at chipping the grounded ones checks into KO range when paired with Spikes. Early game breakers such as Dragonite, Chi Yu, (AC) and Greninja can punch huge holes into the foe's opponent's team so that Meowscarada can sweep. (AP) in In return, Meowscarada cripples Dondozo and Corviknight with its STABs for the first and offers pivot support for the latter two. I would ask for clarification on what the writer means here and follow up because I genuinely can't understand this sentence as-is Corviknight is a solid defogger and pivot that also switches into priority attacks like First Impression, -Ate -ate Extreme Speed, and Ice Shard as well, which frees up Meowscarada to pivot more freely throughout the game.

 

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Itchy

Meowscarada

Good work here especially with commas; main feedback would be to take the time to read through the standards for other rules.

Sword Of Ruin

These abilities are formatted as Sword of Ruin, Vessel of Ruin etc. For formatting on moves/abilities, you can always check the dex and PS.

Meowscarada can potentially clean in the late-game

"Late-game" "early-game" etc are always used on their own, never with "during the" or "in the" before them. Functionally, saying 'in the late-game' is the same as saying 'in the tomorrow', which doesn't work.

after using once Knock Off + and U-Turn to have sufficiently weakened checks like Corviknight and Scream Tail.

This is a lateral change, which is a change that goes from one correct phrasing -> a second correct phrasing that may sound/appear better to the checker but doesn't have much justification beyond that. Saying 'Meowscarada can clean after using Knock Off and U-turn to weaken checks' isn't grammatically incorrect.

The t in 'U-turn' should also never be capitalised.

Early game breakers

Early-game, late-game etc are always hyphenated.

'Breaker' shouldn't be used on its own, and it should either be 'wallbreaker' or 'stallbreaker'. Wallbreaker is correct 99% of the time, so you can just make that change unless the writer specifically mentions stall.

with its STABs

'STABs' on its own isn't accepted; this should be 'STAB moves' or 'STAB attacks'.

Corviknight is a solid defogger

The term 'Defogger' should be capitalised.

 

[Itchy]

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Slither-Wing Slither Wing is a niche defensive pivot which uses it's its interesting type, serviceable bulk, (comma) and reliable recovery in Morning Sun to check attackers like Great Tusk, Breloom, (comma) or and Kingambit. U-Turn U-turn generates momentum for Slither-Wing's Slither Wing's team against mons Pokemon such as Flutter Mane and Skeledirge, (comma) and it importantly allows Slither-Wing Slither Wing to avoid being trapped by Gothitelle. Close Combat OHKOes Iron Bundle and Chi-Yu and 2HKOes Miraidon, (comma) which Body Press cannot do. Will-O-Wisp's burn stops the Pokemon Slither-Wing Slither Wing checks from using it as setup fodder. (period) It also punishes opponents foes such as Toxapex or and Corviknight for switching in. Morning Sun heals Slither-Wing for 50% of its health, helping it to consistently switch into Great Tusk. this was already mentioned in a different sentence, you could add emphasis there if this is more important than the others mentioned Tera Water provides a resistance to Fire-type attacks from Koraidon and Chi-Yu, (comma) and Water-type attacks from Iron Bundle and Palafin, (comma) allowing for a last-ditch counterattack. With 168 Speed EVs, Slither Wing outspeeds Adamant Breloom and the rest of the EVs are dumped into physical bulk.

 

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Itchy

Slither Wing

Slither-Wing Slither Wing is a niche defensive pivot which uses it's its interesting type, serviceable bulk, (comma) and reliable recovery in Morning Sun to check attackers like Great Tusk, Breloom, (comma) or and Kingambit.

The underlined "which" needs to be "that" instead; the two are not interchangeable. I will now shamelessly rip autumn 's explanation from a prior post:

• 'Which' is non-restrictive/non-essential, which means that the additional 'which' clause is not needed for the sentence to keep its meaning; it can be treated as an aside clause where the sentence makes sense and keeps its meaning without it
• 'That' is restrictive/essential, so the part of the sentence after 'that' is needed for the meaning. In this case, the part of the sentence after it is needed to explain the niche.

Here is another example that I was taught while amchecking:

• I like elephants, which are big.
• I like elephants that are big.

See how the switch from which to that changes the meaning of the sentence? This is a lot of explanation, but it is among the more confusing topics that we encounter.

U-Turn U-turn generates momentum for Slither-Wing's Slither Wing's team against mons Pokemon such as Flutter Mane and Skeledirge, (comma) and it importantly allows Slither-Wing Slither Wing to avoid being trapped by Gothitelle. Close Combat OHKOes Iron Bundle and Chi-Yu and 2HKOes Miraidon, (comma) which Body Press cannot do. Will-O-Wisp's burn stops the Pokemon Slither-Wing Slither Wing checks from using it as setup fodder. (period) It also punishes opponents foes such as Toxapex or and Corviknight for switching in. Morning Sun heals Slither-Wing for 50% of its health, helping it to consistently switch into Great Tusk. this was already mentioned in a different sentence, you could add emphasis there if this is more important than the others mentioned

All of this is great! I have no objective grammar comments but wanted to flag that it was probably OK to leave a little bit of that Morning Sun sentence, even though it is slightly repetitive. It adds a little extra info by showing how Slither Wing repeatedly checks Great Tusk. What absolutely should have been removed is the underlined portion re: 50% healing, which is dex info (basic information that we expect readers to already know).

Tera Water provides a resistance to Fire-type attacks from Koraidon and Chi-Yu, (comma) and Water-type attacks from Iron Bundle and Palafin, (comma) allowing for a last-ditch counterattack. With 168 Speed EVs, Slither Wing outspeeds Adamant Breloom and the rest of the EVs are dumped into physical bulk.

The underlined "and" needs a comma before it because the subsequent clause is independent. An independent clause is a clause that can stand "independently" on its own (i.e. you can delete everything besides the clause, and it would still create a complete sentence). When you connect an independent clause with a conjunction like "and," a comma always goes before said conjunction.
Finally, a couple of formatting notes:
- When you remove the comma, I would specify that you are removing it with (remove comma) and actually delete the offending punctuation when you do so, so authors do not mess up your checks.
- I would be extra careful to properly flag text that you delete. Better safe than sorry.

 

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No idea why the other one autosent, I deleted it.

Slither Wing

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(AC) = Add comma // (AP) = add period // (AH) = add hyphen
Slither-Wing Slither Wing is a niche defensive pivot which uses it's its interesting type, serviceable bulk, (AC) and reliable recovery in Morning Sun to check attackers like Great Tusk, Breloom, (AC) or and Kingambit. (Or is singular and implies it only checks one of those targets, while and is plural and means it checks all those targets) U-Turn U-turn generates momentum for Slither-Wing's Slither Wing's team against mons threats such as Flutter Mane and Skeledirge, (AC) and it importantly allows Slither-Wing Slither Wing to avoid being trapped by Gothitelle. Close Combat OHKOs Iron Bundle and Chi-Yu and 2HKOs Miraidon, (AC) which Body Press cannot do. Will-o-Wisp's Burn Will-O-Wisp's burn stops the Pokemon Slither-Wing Slither Wing checks from using it as set up setup fodder, it also punishes opponents such as Toxapex or Corviknight for switching in. Morning Sun heals Slither-Wing for 50% of its health, helping it to consistently switch into Great Tusk. (This was mentioned in a previous sentence so it feels unnecessary) Tera Water provides a resistance to Fire-type (AH) attacks from Koraidon and Chi-Yu, (RC) and Water-type (AH) attacks from Iron Bundle and Palafin. (AP) allowing for a last ditch counterattack. 168 speed EVs out speed adamant Breloom 168 Speed EVs allow Slither Wing to outspeed Breloom, (AC) and the rest are dumped into physical bulk.

Cinccino

Cinccino

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Thanks to Tidy Up, (AC) Cinccino is the main enabler of Hyper Offense hyper offense teams, letting them run many powerful hazard weak Pokemon weak to hazards such as Oricorio-Pa'u, Oricorio-P, Arcanine, and Alolan Ninetales. Ninetales-Alola. Knock Off lets Cinccino hit Ghost Types Ghost-types like Chandelure, as well as Bronzong, an otherwise problematic wall. Encore allows Cincinno to capitalize on passive foes that setup set up hazards, boost their stats, or heal up themselves such as Gligar, Registeel, and Sylveon. Teammates like Diancie, Toxtricity, (AC) and Scyther can work alongside Cinccino to overwhelm shared Steel-type checks like Copperajah and Bronzong, however, (AC) Fires and Fightings Fire- and Fighting-types such as Chandelure, Tauros-Paldea-Aqua, Paldean Tauros-W, and Heracross that easily beat these same Steel-types work as well. Grassy terrain Terrain teams also heavily benefit from Cinccinos Cinccino's presence, since it lets Oricorio forms, formes. Grafaiai, and Arcanine switch-in switch in without having to take chip damage from hazards.

 

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Slither Wing

Slither-Wing Slither Wing is a niche defensive pivot which uses it's its interesting type

The 'which' here should be 'that'.

• 'Which' is non-restrictive/non-essential, which means that the additional 'which' clause is not needed for the sentence to keep its meaning; it can be treated as an aside clause where the sentence makes sense and keeps its meaning without it
• 'That' is restrictive/essential, so the part of the sentence after 'that' is needed for the meaning. In this case, the part of the sentence after it is needed to explain the niche.

It's also worth keeping in mind that 'which' clauses always need a comma before them, so if a comma doesn't work in the given situation, you likely want 'that' instead of 'which'. For further explanation, there's a big section in the GP beginner notes doc.

'interesting type' should also be 'interesting typing'

Close Combat OHKOs Iron Bundle and Chi-Yu and 2HKOs Miraidon

OHKOes is the verb form (x OHKOes y), whereas OHKOs is the noun form )it can pick up OHKOs).

ill-O-Wisp's burn stops the Pokemon Slither-Wing Slither Wing checks from using it as set up setup fodder, it also punishes opponents such as Toxapex or Corviknight for switching in.

The comma before 'it also' is incorrect and should be a semicolon instead. A comma can only connect clauses when using a connective (eg 'and' 'but' 'or'), whereas a semicolon should be used to connect clauses without, functioning similarly to a period.

• 'Opponents' should be 'foes' here - opponent refers to the opposing player, whereas foe refers to the opposing Pokemon.
• The 'or' here should also be 'and' for the same reason you made the change in the first sentence. It's really important to make sure you're being consistent with proofreading your edits and fixing the errors each time.

Morning Sun heals Slither-Wing for 50% of its health, helping it to consistently switch into Great Tusk. (This was mentioned in a previous sentence so it feels unnecessary)

With your edit here, you've just left in a sentence that says 'Morning Sun', so it's really important that you're reading changes back to make sure they make sense.. Cutting dex info is good here, but you never want to cut content (Morning Sun specifically helping it swich into Great Tusk is new). An edit like 'Morning Sun helps Slither Wing to...' fixes the issue.

Tera Water provides a resistance to Fire-type (AH) attacks from Koraidon and Chi-Yu, (RC) and Water-type (AH) attacks from Iron Bundle and Palafin. (AP) allowing for a last ditch counterattack.

Would also be cautious around cutting content out here; the information about a last-ditch counterattack is useful because resisting these moves can either let it check things defensively long-term or let it resist them once in a pinch for a KO, so this change loses that extra information.

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168 speed EVs out speed adamant Breloom 168 Speed EVs allow Slither Wing to outspeed Breloom
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There is also a content cut here; specifying Adamant is important information because it means that Slither Wing only outspeeds Adamant sets and not Jolly ones. By not specifying, it implies that Slither Wing outspeeds all sets.

Cinccino

letting them run many powerful hazard weak Pokemon weak to hazards

'Hazard-weak' with a hyphen is fine to say, so there isn't a need to reorder the wording here. The first mention of 'hazards' per paragraph should also be written out fully as 'entry hazards'. After that, just 'hazards' is fine to say.

Encore allows Cincinno

There is a typo here where Cinccino isn't spelled correctly.

 

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Kingambit

Black Glasses + tera dark Tera Dark should exclusively be used with Kowtow Cleave, (AC) as these propel Kingambit's offensive pressure; with 5 Supreme Overlord boosts, Kingambit can reach feats like 2HKOing Dondozo with Kowtow Cleave and 1HKOing OHKOing Walking-Wake and, (AC) at +2, (AC) could also be changed to "after a Swords Dance boost," but both are fine Dragonite through Multiscale with Sucker Punch. Air Balloon allows Kingambit to setup set up on would be would-be checks in Landorus-T and most Great Tusks Tusk variants, become a sturdy switch in switch-in to offense offensive threats like Kyurem, Roaring Moon, and Dragonite who rely on their Ground-type coverage to hit it id prefer to change the layout of this to "switch-in to offensive threats that rely on their Ground-type coverage like ... to hit it", and gain an immunity to Spikes that could otherwise limits Kingambit before it gets going. Kingambits Kingambit's potential for what? its clear to me as an experienced tour player that it means high damage potential but clarify this please and defensive utility in the late game make it a nearly staple on offensive archetypes from Bbulky to Hhyper Ooffense while still fitting on Bbalance this sentence's entire layout is something that just irks me, id have preferred it to be something like "Kingambit's high damage output and defensive utility makes Kingambit a near-staple on hyper and bulky offense teams while being a strong pick on balance teams". Physical teammates like Ogerpon-Wellspring, Zamazenta, and Swords Dance Iron Valiant can overwhelm shared checks like Zanazenta Zamazenta, Landorus-Therian, and Dondozo. Dark Type Dark-type offensive threats in Darkrai, (RC) and Samurott-Hisui Hisuian Samurott can form an Darkspam offensive Dark-type core with Kingambit to overwhelm Dark resists Dark-resistant Pokemon like Zamazenta and tTera Fairy users like Gholdemgo Gholdengo and Moltres together.

Calyrex

Choice Specs Calyrex-Shadow is an excellent breaker who independantly independently breaks through most of its usual switch ins switch-ins with accurate prediction. Grass Knot kills OHKOes Arceus-Water and Arceus-Ground in one hit after hazard damage. Grass Knot also 2HKOs Ting Lu. Grass Knot pressures neutral targets like Arceus-Normal as well. entry hazard damage, 2HKOes Ting-Lu, and pressures neutral targets like Arceus. Psychic 2HKOes Arceus-Normal but Arceus, while Psyshock is an alternative STAB that 2HKOes offensive Ho Oh Ho-Oh and hits Pokémon Pokemon such as Blissey qc territory but blissey is 2hkoed (and same with standard chansey but thats not listed here), check with qc team on this one but if approved id prefer the layout to be "2HKOes the likes of Blissey and offensive Ho-Oh". Trick + Choice Specs debilitate i feel like its debilitates but im not sure and standards page doesnt clarify, not changing as a result Calyrex-Shadow's checks like Ho Oh Ho-Oh, Ting Lu Ting-Lu, and Arceus by removing the longevity their Item items grant them and forcing them to attack. Tera Ghost Astral Barrage 2HKOes Ting Lu Ting-Lu with less chip wdym less chip, clarify and 2HKOes Ho Oh Ho-Oh and Ddefensive Arceus forms after Calyrex-Shadow loses its Choice Specs. Tera Grass gives Grass Knot a good chance of scoring an OHKO on Ting Lu Ting-Lu after hazard damage, (RC) and lets it 2HKO Arceus. Tera Normal turns gives Calyrex-Shadow into a Ghost immunity, preventing revenging revenge killing i find "revenging" fine but never seen it before in analyses attempts from opposing Calyrex-Shadows. All 3 Tera Types also allow you Calyrex-S to survive attacks like Ting Lu Ting-Lu's Payback and Arceus's Shadow Claw, though the latter 2 make it vulnerable to extreme killer Arceus's ESpeed Extreme Speed.

i think im just gonna start adding highlighted hyphens in future instead of complete rewrites with how many were missing in this one...

 

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Serperior

Normalium-Z Serperior utilises utilizes Contrary Leaf Storm boosted Including the relevant ability further clarifies where the boost is coming from. A new user may not understand how Leaf Storm provides a boost at a glance. Z-Hyper Beam Breakneck Blitz to bypass most of its checks, namely Mega-Venusaur Mega Venusaur, Amoonguss, Mega-Latias Mega Latias, Iron Moth, Hydrapple, (AC) and or Victini. Hidden Power [Fire] allows Serperior to chip Aegislash and Celesteela, the only checks unfazed by a boosted Breakneck Blitz, slowly wearing them down into range of +2 or +4 HP a boosted Hidden Power Fire There is no need to specify +2 or +4, just saying boosted is more to the point in the late game late-game. Synthesis allows you Serperior to switch in to Rotom W into Rotom-W and Ting Lu Ting-Lu throughout longer games without being worn down, abusing these forcing them out to create Clearer as to how the checks are being chipped, the opposing mons aren't 'being abused,' they have to switch out and the opponent's check has to come in and get chipped. opportunities to chip away at its checks. Glare eases the MU matchup against Aegislash and Celesteela by allowing you Serperior to paralyse them, (RC) paralyze and attempt to remove them. Normalium-Z Serperior is only seen on webs and other offense teams as its aggressive playstyle and lackluster bulk leaves it unable to attempt to setup set up multiple times against teams with revenge-killers revenge killers like Greninja, Iron Boulder, or Mega-Aerodactyl and Mega Aerodactyl. While Converting to a while clause highlights the contrast between how webs handles these problems Sticky Webs slow Web slows down the first two but threats Provides clarity as to what is being discussed, (AC) other answers to Mega-Aerodactyl Mega Aerodactyl such as Air Balloon Aegislash, Azumarill, Scizor, (AC) and Choice Scarf Mienshao are recommended given its ability as Mega Aerodactyl is unaffected by webs due to dodge the hazard its Flying-type. Clarifies why Mega Aerodactyl is unaffected by grounded hazards

Slither Wing

Slither-WingSlither Wing is a niche defensive pivot which that uses it's its interesting type typing, Why is it interesting, its defensive profile? Specify this. serviceable bulk, (AC) and reliable recovery in Morning Sun to check attackers like Great Tusk, Breloom, (AC) and or Kingambit. U-turn generates momentum for Slither-Wing's Slither Wing's team against mons Pokemon such as Flutter Mane and Skeledirge, (AC) and it importantly allows Slither-Wing Slither Wing to avoid being trapped by Gothitelle. Close Combat OHKOs OHKOes Iron Bundle and Chi-Yu and 2HKOs 2HKOes Miraidon, (AC) which Body Press cannot do. Will-o-Wisp's Burn Will-O-Wisp stops the Pokemon Slither-Wing Slither Wing checks from using it as set up setup fodder, it also punishes opponents foes such as Toxapex or and Corviknight for switching in. Morning Sun heals Slither-Wing for 50% of The longevity provided by Morning Sun Removed a dex description of Morning Sun. helps Slither Wing its health, helping it to consistently switch into Great Tusk over the course of the game. Tera Water provides a resistance to Fire- and Water-type type attacks from Koraidon, (AC) and Chi-Yu, and Water type attacks from Combined similar statements about resisted hits. Iron Bundle, (AC) and Palafin allowing for a last ditch counterattack. Investing 168 Speed EVs out speed adamant allows Slither Wing Clarifies that Slither Wing is outspeeding Breloom. EVs do not outspeed Pokemon. to outspeed Adamant Breloom, (AC) while and the rest remaining EVs are dumped invested into physical bulk.

 

[adorluigi]

Serperior

Normalium-Z Serperior utilises utilizes Contrary Leaf Storm boosted Including the relevant ability further clarifies where the boost is coming from. A new user may not understand how Leaf Storm provides a boost at a glance. Z-Hyper Beam Breakneck Blitz to bypass most of its checks,

- there's no hyphen in Z-Crystal names, so it's just Normalium Z. Z-Move and Z-Crystal have a hyphen, though
- "Leaf Storm boosted" this is a compound adjective that modifies "Breakneck Blitz", so there must be a hyphen between the "Leaf Storm" and "boosted": Leaf Storm-boosted Breakneck Blitz
for further reading, see: https://www.grammarly.com/blog/parts-of-speech/compound-adjectives/
- the comment about mentioning Contrary seems a bit dex info-y, we expect readers to at least know stuff on the pokemon's dex, like its ability, stats, and moves

Hidden Power [Fire] allows Serperior to chip Aegislash and Celesteela, the only checks unfazed by a boosted Breakneck Blitz, slowly wearing them down into range of +2 or +4 HP a boosted Hidden Power Fire There is no need to specify +2 or +4, just saying boosted is more to the point in the late game late-game.

good edits all over! just one error: "late-game" is an adjective, not a noun, so you can't say "in the late-game"
say "Slowly wearing them into range of a boosted Hidden Power Fire late-game"

Glare eases the MU matchup against Aegislash and Celesteela by allowing you Serperior to paralyse them, (RC) paralyze and attempt to remove them.

not necessary to remove "attempt" here

Normalium-Z Serperior is only seen on webs and other offense teams as its aggressive playstyle and lackluster bulk leaves it unable to attempt to setup set up multiple times against teams with...

- when talking about webs, always write out Sticky Web; make sure it's singular, there's no S in it
- when using "as" to mean because, always add a comma before it: "and other offense teams, as its..."
- "leaves" should be "leave" because "aggressive playstyle and lackluster bulk" is plural

While Converting to a while clause highlights the contrast between how webs handles these problems Sticky Webs slow Web slows down the first two but threats Provides clarity as to what is being discussed, (AC) other answers to Mega-Aerodactyl Mega Aerodactyl such as Air Balloon Aegislash, Azumarill, Scizor, (AC) and Choice Scarf Mienshao are recommended given its ability as Mega Aerodactyl is unaffected by webs due to dodge the hazard its Flying-type. Clarifies why Mega Aerodactyl is unaffected by grounded hazards

like I mentioned above with the Contrary comment, readers are expected to know basic stuff like the type chart, so this just introduces unnecessary dex info

Slither Wing

Will-o-Wisp's Burn Will-O-Wisp stops the Pokemon Slither-Wing Slither Wing checks from using it as set up setup fodder, it also punishes opponents foes such as Toxapex or and Corviknight for switching in.

"setup fodder, it also punishes.." this is a comma splice
a comma alone can't connect 2 independent clauses like this; you'd need to add "and" here or turn the comma it into a semicolon

Morning Sun heals Slither-Wing for 50% of The longevity provided by Morning Sun Removed a dex description of Morning Sun. helps Slither Wing its health, helping it to consistently switch into Great Tusk over the course of the game.

- spotting the dex info is good, but you could've just kept "Morning Sun lets Slither Wing consistently switch into..."
- "over the course of the game" is implied with "consistently" here

Tera Water provides a resistance to Fire- and Water-type type attacks from Koraidon, (AC) and Chi-Yu, and Water type attacks from Combined similar statements about resisted hits. Iron Bundle, (AC) and Palafin allowing for a last ditch counterattack.

- "allowing" starts a participle clause, you need a comma before it
- last-ditch is a compound adjective and should be hyphenated

Investing 168 Speed EVs out speed adamant allows Slither Wing Clarifies that Slither Wing is outspeeding Breloom. EVs do not outspeed Pokemon. to outspeed Adamant Breloom, (AC) while and the rest remaining EVs are dumped invested into physical bulk.

- no need to add "Investing"
- EVs is plural, so "allows Slither Wing" => "allow Slither Wing"
- dumped is okay to use. also, you added "Investing" to the start of the sentence so there was a bit of repetition through adding "invested" at the end

really nice catches overall ^^ especially for first checks!

Wifi

 

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Kingambit

Black Glasses + tera dark Tera Dark should exclusively be used with Kowtow Cleave, (AC) as these propel Kingambit's offensive pressure; with 5 Supreme Overlord boosts, Kingambit can reach feats like 2HKOing Dondozo with Kowtow Cleave and 1HKOing OHKOing Walking-Wake and, (AC) at +2, (AC) could also be changed to "after a Swords Dance boost," but both are fine Dragonite through Multiscale with Sucker Punch.

- Small numbers like "five" should be written out alphabetically.
- Walking Wake has no hyphen in its name.

Air Balloon allows Kingambit to setup set up on would be would-be checks in Landorus-T and most Great Tusks Tusk variants, become a sturdy switch in switch-in to offense offensive threats like Kyurem, Roaring Moon, and Dragonite who rely on their Ground-type coverage to hit it id prefer to change the layout of this to "switch-in to offensive threats that rely on their Ground-type coverage like ... to hit it", and gain an immunity to Spikes that could otherwise limits Kingambit before it gets going.

"who" can't be used if the subject is a Pokemon, it must be "that" in this case.

and defensive utility in the late game make it a nearly staple on offensive archetypes from Bbulky to Hhyper Ooffense while still fitting on Bbalance

"nearly" should be changed to "near", which doesn't need a hyphen because it's an adjective.

Dark Type Dark-type offensive threats in Darkrai, (RC) and Samurott-Hisui Hisuian Samurott can form an Darkspam offensive Dark-type core with Kingambit to overwhelm Dark resists Dark-resistant Pokemon like Zamazenta and tTera Fairy users like Gholdemgo Gholdengo and Moltres together.

While your changes are fine, "Darkspam core" can also be corrected to "Dark-type spam core". Additionally, I don't think adding in "offensive" would be needed here because the part about the core overwhelming Dark-resistant foes implies that it's offensive.

Calyrex

Choice Specs Calyrex-Shadow is an excellent breaker who independantly independently breaks through most of its usual switch ins switch-ins with accurate prediction.

- Generally, when an author writes out "breaker", it needs to be fully spelled out to "wallbreaker". "Stallbreaker" is also a potential option if they're referring to or talking about the role.
- "who" needs to be changed into "that".

Trick + Choice Specs debilitate i feel like its debilitates but im not sure and standards page doesnt clarify, not changing as a result

Any two or more Pokemon-related terms that are combined with a "+" is considered a singular subject, so "Trick + Choice Specs" necessitates "debilitates". (Think "the combination of Trick and Choice Specs".)

Tera Ghost Astral Barrage 2HKOes Ting Lu Ting-Lu with less chip wdym less chip, clarify and 2HKOes Ho Oh Ho-Oh and Ddefensive Arceus forms after Calyrex-Shadow loses its Choice Specs.

I'm unsure if you're asking the author to elaborate on the phrasing "less chip", but "chip" needs to be fully spelled out as "chip damage".

Tera Normal turns gives Calyrex-Shadow into a Ghost immunity, preventing revenging revenge killing i find "revenging" fine but never seen it before in analyses

- You missed the spelling error on this instance of "Calyrex-Shadow".
- Having "a" before "Ghost immunity" is perfectly fine phrasing when referring to type immunities.
- "Revenge killing" must be fully spelled out.

All 3 Tera Types also allow you Calyrex-S to survive attacks like Ting Lu Ting-Lu's Payback and Arceus's Shadow Claw, though the latter 2 make it vulnerable to extreme killer Arceus's ESpeed Extreme Speed.

- "3" and "2" must be changed "three" and "two".
- Extreme Killer should've been kept, as that is a set that Arceus can use. Without it, readers won't have a point of reference on how sturdy Tera Normal Calyrex-S is against Arceus's Extreme Speed.

Your checks are pretty solid, it seems like errors on Smogon-specific terms and guidelines are the only real things that need to be watched out for. It's always a good idea to have resources like the GP standards bookmarked in case you need a reference.

A note on the tone in your comments

for what? its clear to me as an experienced tour player that it means high damage potential but clarify this please

this sentence's entire layout is something that just irks me, id have preferred it to be something like "Kingambit's high damage output and defensive utility makes Kingambit a near-staple on hyper and bulky offense teams while being a strong pick on balance teams".

i think im just gonna start adding highlighted hyphens in future instead of complete rewrites with how many were missing in this one...

I'm unsure if all of these comments were directed towards the authors of the paragraphs, but I highly suggest to talk more politely in actual checks. Not all analyses writers will have the same metagame or English knowledge as you do, and I think it's best to be respectful towards them due to such.

 

[Clas]

Breloom

One of Brelooms Breloom's main struggles when trying to wall break wallbreak is getting past Poison Types Poison-types like Vileplume, Dragalge, (AC) and Slowbro-Galar Galarian Slowbro, so Psychic- (AH) and Ground-types like Munkidori, Uxie, or and Flygon are greatly appreciated. The former two as well as Kilowattrel and Dragalge excel at Ppivoting Breloom in on Dark- (AH) and Steel-types like Klefki, Registeel or and Muk-Alola Alolan Muk with their U-Tturn and Flip Turn. Galarian Articuno-G is an exceptionally good partner, (AC) as on top of providing U-Tturn support it can use Future Sight to limit Breloom's switch-ins (AH) even further, (RC) and abuse make use of Vileplume's Strength Sap with its Competitive ability. In a similar vein, pivots partners such as Mienshao, Incineroar, Inteleon, (AC) and the aforementioned Flygon make good partners, (AC) since they commonly draw in Water-types (AH) like Vaporeon, Milotic, Gastrodon or and Swampert, (RC) for Breloom to abuse take advantage of. Teammates like Incineroar, A-Muk Alolan Muk, and Bronzong, (RC) also make for decent teammates, handling the Psychic- (AC) and Fairy-types, like Uxie, Munkidori, Whimsicott, (AC) or and Sylveon, (AC) you can also remove the comma after "Fairy-types" instead of adding the comma here if you want instead of adding the one after "Sylveon" who force Breloom out.

 

[KamenAlliterator]

i never really got to finish this before, but i hate having things not completed, so i’ll just leave this here.

Slither Wing

Slither-Wing Slither Wing is a niche defensive pivot that uses it's its interesting type typing, serviceable bulk, (AC) and reliable recovery in Morning Sun to check physical- attackers like Great Tusk, Breloom, (AC) andt or Kingambit. U-turn generates momentum for Slither-Wing's Slither Wing's team against mons Pokemon such as Flutter Mane and Skeledirge, (AC) and it most importantly allows Slither-Wing Slither Wing to avoid being trapped by Gothitelle. Close Combat OHKOs OHKOes Iron Bundle and Chi-Yu, (AC)and 2HKOs 2HKOes Miraidon which Body Press cannot do. Will-O-Wisp's burn stops the Pokemon Slither-Wing Slither Wing’s checks from using it as set up fodder, it also and punishes opponents foes such as Toxapex or Corviknight for switching in on it. Morning Sun heals Slither-Wing for 50% of its health, helping it helps Slither Wing to consistently switch into Great Tusk. Tera Water provides a resistance to Fire type Fire- and Water-type attacks from Koraidon, (AC)and Chi-Yu, and Water type attacks from Iron Bundle, (AC)and Palafin allowing for a last-ditch counterattack. The 168 speed EVs out speed adamant let Slither Wing outspeed Adamant Breloom and the rest are dumped invested into physical bulk.

 

[autumn]

Clas

Breloom

The former two as well as Kilowattrel and Dragalge excel at Ppivoting Breloom in on Dark- (AH) and Steel-types like Klefki, Registeel or and Muk-Alola Alolan Muk

There should be an Oxford comma after Registeel here.

Galarian Articuno-G is an exceptionally good partner, (AC) as on top of providing U-Tturn support it can use Future Sight to limit Breloom's switch-ins (AH) even further

There should be a comma after the 'on top of providing U-turn support' phrase because it's an introductory phrase for the main clause; even though it's not at the start of the sentence, a comma is needed to separate it from the next main clause.

they commonly draw in Water-types (AH) like Vaporeon, Milotic, Gastrodon or and Swampert

There should be an Oxford comma here as well; it might be a good idea to try the formatting tool, which lets you always read unedited text so you can identify any additional errors even with markup on the text.

Teammates like Incineroar, A-Muk Alolan Muk, and Bronzong, (RC) also make for decent teammates

This phrasing 'teammates... make for good teammates' is repettitve, so you can replace one of them or just say 'xyz make good teammates'.

who force Breloom out.

'who' shouldn't be used for Pokemon because they're not people, so you can replace it with 'that' here.

 

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Enamorus-I Enamorus is a top tier tera captain which top-tier Tera Captain which should always be made one when drafted. Tera Fairy further boosts its STABs STAB moves, (AC) making it extremely hard to check (RC) even when it is not using damage boosting damage-boosting items. (AP) Tera Fairy has and giving it the added benefit of taking less damage from stealth rocks removing Enamorus's Stealth Rock weakness. Types Tera types like Fire and Ground boosts it's boost its coverage moves further, while flipping some of it's its weaknesses. Tera Water, Poison, (AC) and Steel allow you it to kill opponents you KO foes it otherwise would not, especially on set up setup sets. Tera Ghost and Electric gives give it extra coverage via Tera Blast, and handles handle certain attacks better. Stellar type Tera Blast deals 80 damage to opponents and hits them all neutrally which synergizes well with Contrary and choice scarf boosting Enamorus-I's offensive stats while dealing massive damage to all opponents reliably. Stellar-type Tera Blast can deal out massive amounts of damage on Choice Scarf sets because it hits all foes neutrally and boosts Enamorus's offensive stats when used, thanks to Contrary.
this last sentence made my brain slip straight out of my skull - I hope this is what the sentence is supposed to say

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I tried using the formatting tool for this one

 

[KamenAlliterator]

Just practicing comma stuff.

Cinccino

Thanks to Tidy Up, (AC) Cinccino is the main enabler of hyper offense teams, letting them run many powerful hazard weak entry-hazard-weak Pokemon such as Oricorio-Pa'u Oricorio-P, Arcanine, and Ninetales-Alola Alolan Ninetales. Knock Off lets Cinccino hit Ghost Types Ghost-types like Chandelure, as well as hitting Bronzong, an otherwise problematic wall. Encore allows Cincinno Cinccino to capitalize on passive foes that setup set up hazards, boost their stats, or and heal up such as Gligar, Registeel, and Sylveon. Teammates like Diancie, Toxtricity, (AC) and Scyther can work alongside Cinccino to overwhelm shared Steel-type checks like Copperajah and Bronzong (RC); (ASC) however, (AC) Fire- Fires and Fightings Fighting-types such as Chandelure, Tauros-Paldea-Aqua Paldean Tauros-W, and Heracross that easily beat these same Steel-types work as well. Grassy Terrain teams also heavily benefit from Cinccinos Cinccino’s presence, since it lets the Oricorio forms formes, Grafaiai, and Arcanine switch-in switch in without having to take chip damage from hazards.

 

[autumn]

Itchy

Enamorus

Enamorus is a top tier tera captain which top-tier Tera Captain which should always be made one when drafted.

'Which' should be 'that' here; these words aren't interchangeable.

• 'Which' is non-restrictive/non-essential, which means that the additional 'which' clause is not needed for the sentence to keep its meaning; it can be treated as an aside clause where the sentence makes sense and keeps its meaning without it
• 'That' is restrictive/essential, so the part of the sentence after 'that' is needed for the meaning. In this case, the part of the sentence after it is needed to explain the niche.

It's also worth keeping in mind that 'which' clauses always need a comma before them, so if a comma doesn't work in the given situation, you likely want 'that' instead of 'which'. For further explanation, there's a big section in the GP beginner notes doc.

Tera types like Fire and Ground boosts it's boost its coverage moves further, while flipping some of it's its weaknesses.

There shouldn't be a comma before 'while' here. Commas before 'while' are needed when it means 'whereas' / is showing contrast. If 'while' is used to mean 'at the same time as' (while also / while (verb)ing) then a comma isn't needed.

This sentence doesn't have contrasting ideas and uses the 'while (verb)ing' structure, so a comma isn't correct.

Tera Ghost and Electric gives give it extra coverage via Tera Blast, and handles handle certain attacks better.

There shouldn't be a comma before 'and' here. Commas before 'and' 'but' 'or' are only needed if the clause that comes after it is independent (meaning it’s a grammatically correct sentence without depending on the other part to make sense). If it isn’t independent, the comma is not needed.

The clause after the 'and' here is 'handle certain attacks better'. This clause doesn't make sense on its own because there's no subject, so a comma isn't correct.

Stellar-type Tera Blast

This can just be 'Tera Blast Stellar' - the same rule applies for any type.