Grammar-Prose Workshop v6

[rahul_3301]

ok then I'll do one more and try to explain some of the not so obvious changes to make sure i am learning correctly and building my thought process

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Kingambit

Black Glasses + and Tera Dark should exclusively be used with Kowtow Cleave, (AC) as these propel Kingambit's offensive pressure; with 5 five Supreme Overlord boosts, Kingambit can reach feats like 2HKOing Dondozo with Kowtow Cleave and 1HKOing Walking-Wake along with OHKOing Walking Wake i felt that this sentence was structured weirdly, ig i would ideally break it into 2 but taking the previous suggestion of lateral change i think 'along with' or 'as well as' type bridge words can save it too and, (AC) at +2, (AC) Dragonite through Multiscale with Sucker Punch. Air Balloon allows Kingambit to setup set up on would be would-be checks in such as Landorus-T and most Great Tusks (RC) Tusk sets; (ASC) become a sturdy switch in switch-in to offense offensive threats like Kyurem, Roaring Moon, and Dragonite who that rely on their Ground-type coverage to hit it (is 'hit it' considered casual writing or not. maybe should be 'damage it') (RC); (ASC) and gain an immunity to Spikes that limits would otherwise chip Kingambit before it gets going. yeah this one was interesting, read up on comma lists vs semicolon lists and since this has phrases and its own commas i felt ASC was better. Kingambits Kingambit's offensive potential (this is probably my QC team speaking but elaborate on potential? ig not a GP thing though) and defensive utility in the late game late-game make it a nearly staple near-staple on offensive archetypes from bulky offense to hyper offense while still fitting on balance teams. Physical teammates like Ogerpon-Wellspring Ogerpon-W, Zamazenta, and Swords Dance Iron Valiant can overwhelm shared checks like Zanazenta Zamazenta, Landorus-Therian Landorus-T, and Dondozo. Dark Type Dark-type offensive threat threats in Darkrai (RC) and Samurott-Hisui can form a Darkspam Dark-type spam core with Kingambit to overwhelm Dark resists Dark-resistant Pokemon like Zamazenta, (AC) as well as Tera and tera Fairy users like Gholdemgo Gholdengo and Moltres together. okay this one felt like maybe i am overcooking but zama and tera fairy users x AND y, the double 'and' felt weird so separated those.

 

[AceTrainerOrange]

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Kingambit

Black Glasses + Tera Dark should exclusively be used exclusively with Kowtow Cleave, (AC) as these propel Kingambit's offensive pressure (RSC). (AP) With 5 five Supreme Overlord boosts, Kingambit can reach feats like 2HKOing a 2HKO on Dondozo with Kowtow Cleave, (AC) an on OHKO and 1HKOing Walking-Wake, (AC) and at +2, (AC) Dragonite through Multiscale with Sucker Punch. Air Balloon allows Kingambit to setup set up on would be would-be checks in Landorus-T and most Great Tusks Tusk, become a sturdy switch in switch-in to offense threats like Kyurem, Roaring Moon, and Dragonite, (AC) that who rely on their Ground-type coverage to hit it, and gain an immunity to Spikes that limits Kingambit before it gets going. Kingambits Kingambit's potential and defensive utility in the late game late-game nearly make it a nearly staple on offensive archetypes from bulky to hyper offense, (AC) while still fitting on balance. Physical teammates like Ogerpon-Wellspring Ogerpon-W, Zamazenta, and Swords Dance Iron Valiant can overwhelm shared checks like Zanazenta Zamazenta, Landorus-Therian Landorus-T, and Dondozo. Dark Type Dark-type offensive threat threats in Darkrai (RC) and Samurott-Hisui Samurott-H form a Darkspam Dark-type spam core with Kingambit to overwhelm Dark resists Dark-resistant Pokemon like Zamazenta and Tera Fairy users like Gholdemgo Gholdengo and Moltres together.

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[JK]

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Chien-Pao

Chien Pao Chien-Pao appreciates Mandibuzz defogging away hazards to prevent teammates like Mandibuzz, whose Defog prevents it from being worn down by entry hazards (RP) It can also bring Chien Pao in safely using a slow U-Turn, (AC) while its slow U-Turn allows it to bring Chien-Pao in safely. Furthermore, (AC) Mandibuzz is a great switch in switch-in to Fighting Fighting-type attacks from enemies foes like Choice Scarf Sneasler and Choice Scarf Great Tusk, (AC) to which Chien Pao is extremely vulnerable. (AP) to (RC) (I'm not sure whether this constitutes rewording what the author is saying unnecessarily, but the phrasing felt quite clunky as I think it is split into too many sentences) Mandibuzz is also as well as being capable of checking set up setup sweepers like Azumarill or Scizor with Foul Play. In return, Chien-Pao deals with opponents foes like Sandy Shocks or Baxcalibur, (AC) that may who can cause problems for Mandibuzz. Kingambit has impressive offensive synergy with Chien Pao Chien-Pao due to its neutrality to Fairy-type moves, being able its ability to eliminate opponents foes like Hatterene with Iron Head (RC) and Choice Scarf Flutter Mane with Sucker Punch after rocks Stealth Rock. In return, (AC) Chien-Pao Chien Pao hits threats to Kingambit like DD Dragon Dance Dragonite, Iron Treads, Landorus-Therian Landorus-T, (AC) and defensive Gliscor.

 

[adorluigi]

rahul_3301

Kingambit

Black Glasses + and Tera Dark should exclusively be used with Kowtow Cleave

it's okay to use the plus sign to mean "the combination of X and Y"

Air Balloon allows Kingambit to setup set up on would be would-be checks in such as Landorus-T and most Great Tusks (RC) Tusk sets

"in" is fine here

(is 'hit it' considered casual writing or not. maybe should be 'damage it')

"hit it" is okay, you're usually concerned about "kill" being used, which you should change to KO or some other variant

Kingambits Kingambit's offensive potential (this is probably my QC team speaking but elaborate on potential? ig not a GP thing though) and defensive utility in the late game late-game make it a nearly staple near-staple on offensive archetypes from bulky offense to hyper offense while still fitting on balance teams

changing nearly to near is correct, but adding the hyphen wasn't, because "near staple" wasn't being used as an adjective: https://www.grammarly.com/blog/parts-of-speech/compound-adjectives/
I think the offensive potential bit is ok here, but it's good to keep a comment like this if you think something's unclear

Dark Type Dark-type offensive threat threats in Darkrai (RC) and Samurott-Hisui

regional variants should be written like so: "Hisuian Samurott"

overwhelm Dark resists Dark-resistant Pokemon like Zamazenta, (AC) as well as Tera and tera Fairy users like Gholdemgo Gholdengo and Moltres together. okay this one felt like maybe i am overcooking but zama and tera fairy users x AND y, the double 'and' felt weird so separated those.

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this is ok, it should be clear to readers that gholdengo and moltres are the tera fairy users because it's a two item list (Zamazenta + Tera Fairy users)

AceTrainerOrange

also Kingambit

Black Glasses + Tera Dark should exclusively be used exclusively with Kowtow Cleave

no need to move the exclusively here, it's fine as is

With 5 five Supreme Overlord boosts, Kingambit can reach feats like 2HKOing a 2HKO on Dondozo with Kowtow Cleave, (AC) an on OHKO and 1HKOing Walking-Wake, (AC) and at +2, (AC) Dragonite through Multiscale with Sucker Punch

there was no need to rephrase the sentence structure (2HKOing => a 2HKO on), and you kept Dragonite without a verb and separated it from Walking Wake's verb
the sentence reads like so:
Kingambit can reach feats like a 2HKO on Dondozo with Kowtow Cleave, an OHKO on Walking Wake, (missing verb) Dragonite through Multiscale with Sucker Punch

one solution is: "Kingambit can reach feats like 2HKOing Dondozo with Kowtow Cleave and OHKOing Walking Wake and, at +2, Dragonite with Sucker Punch"
keep note, I kept the "at +2" within the commas like that and left the "and" outside

also, "Walking-Wake" should not have a hyphen

Air Balloon allows Kingambit to setup set up on would be would-be checks in Landorus-T and most Great Tusks Tusk

good change to remove the s in "Great Tusks" but you should do "Great Tusk sets"

Air Balloon allows Kingambit to setup set up on would be would-be checks in Landorus-T and most Great Tusks Tusk, become a sturdy switch in switch-in to offense threats like Kyurem, Roaring Moon, and Dragonite, (AC) that who rely on their Ground-type coverage to hit it, and gain an immunity to Spikes that limits Kingambit before it gets going.

throughout this sentence, there are a lot of commas; the list that shows what Air Balloon lets Kingambit do, and the list within the "sturdy switch-in" part
to avoid confusion in such cases, you can turn the commas from the primary list into semicolons, like so

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Air Balloon allows Kingambit to set up on would-be checks in Landorus-T and most Great Tusk sets; become a sturdy switch-in to offensive threats like Kyurem, Roaring Moon, and Dragonite that rely on their Ground-type coverage to hit it; and gain an immunity to Spikes, which limits Kingambit before it gets going.

two more things:

offense threats like Kyurem, Roaring Moon, and Dragonite, (AC) that who rely on their Ground-type

good change here turning "who" into "that", but you don't add a comma for "that", only for "which"

and gain an immunity to Spikes that limits Kingambit before it gets going

this "that" should be "which". the reason is that we're talking about Spikes specifically, not a type of Spikes that limits Kingambit.
https://owl.purdue.edu/owl/general_writing/grammar/that_vs_which.html

Kingambits Kingambit's potential and defensive utility in the late game late-game nearly make it a nearly staple on offensive archetypes from bulky to hyper offense, (AC) while still fitting on balance.

it should be "make it a near staple", rewording to "nearly a staple" changes the meaning slightly
when "while" means at the same time, no need for a comma, but when "while" means "whereas", it needs a comma, so this comma was not right

Dark Type Dark-type offensive threat threats in Darkrai (RC) and Samurott-Hisui Samurott-H

regional variants should be written like so: "Hisuian Samurott"

 

[Licholas]

look at that edit history lmao—good thing I'm queued up after JK's Chien-Pao

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Thanks to Tidy Up, punc Cinccino is the main enabler of look: hyper offense teams, letting them run many powerful hazard-weak punc Pokemon such as Oricorio-Pa'u, Arcanine, and Alolan Ninetales-Alola. Knock Off lets Cinccino it hit look: Ghost-types like Chandelure, punc (as well as Bronzong, an otherwise problematic wall). punc (There are not that many great solutions which keep your voice, not when you say "things like this single thing, comma aside, comma aside.") Encore allows it Cincinno (misspelled) to capitalize on passive foes that setup set up hazards, boost their stats, or heal up, punc such as Gligar, Registeel, and Sylveon. Teammates like Diancie, Toxtricity, punc and Scyther can work alongside Cinccino it to overwhelm shared Steel-type checks like Copperajah and Bronzong; punc however, punc Fires Fire- and Fighting-types such as like Chandelure, Tauros-Paldea-Aqua Paldean Tauros-W, and Heracross, punc that which easily beat these same Steel-types, punc work as well. (As you acknowledge by using "that", not every Fire- and Fighting-type easily beats these two—hence "like", which helps "which", which helps this fairly messy sentence.) Grassy Terrain teams also heavily benefit from Cinccinos ("Cinccino's": punc) its presence, since it lets Oricorio forms, (formes) Grafaiai, and Arcanine switch-in switch in without having to take chip damage from entry hazards.

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You did quite well to keep the emphasis on its teammates and targets.

Thanks to Tidy Up, This was a quick "Thanks to"; however, imagine that Cinccino had six different traits to thank for its role, and you—the reader—had to hear about them all before you could even get to the information that you are actually here for. Cinccino is the main enabler of hyper offense teams: punc thanks to its Tidy Up, letting look: they (can) run many powerful hazard-weak Pokemon such as Oricorio-P, Arcanine, and Alolan Ninetales. Cut the yellow parentheses (whether or not you keep "can"). On Grassy Terrain teams, punc also heavily benefit from its presence, since it lets Oricorio, Grafaiai, and Arcanine also heavily benefit switch in without having to take chip damage from entry hazards. You are dancing around the point. three reasons for bringing this sentence from below: shows repeated examples (got more?), connects all mention of Tidy Up, and connects all mention of team building to your focus on its role as an enabler (which is not accomplished by its other moves) Its Knock Off lets it look: hits Ghost-types like Chandelure (as well as Bronzong, an otherwise problematic wall), punc and its Encore allows it to look: capitalizes on passive foes that set up hazards, boost their stats, or heal up, such as Gligar, Registeel, and Sylveon. These separate sentences are expressing a single idea: what its coverage moves do. Alongside teammates like Diancie, Toxtricity, and Scyther, punc can work alongside it to it can overwhelm shared Steel-type checks like Copperajah and Bronzong; however, it can also work with the likes of Fire- and Fighting-types like Chandelure, Paldean Tauros-W, and Heracross, which easily beat these same Steel-types, work as well. Try to focus on the subject of analysis, not (in this case) on its teammates. You are saying, "...these three teammates work as well (they are these types that easily beat these Pokémon)." Beyond warping this sentence to a remarkable degree, that stuff simply goes without saying, because the audience plays the game.

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