I decided to give a bit of feedback to all the WIPs:
Madsi6: This needs a rework, as we now know we have 0 dance-related moves. And for that matter, we always knew Dragon Dance was off limits, so it would have been weird to give it dance themes. Also, poaching is a super dark subject to reference in what still remains a game designed for kids to play.
Scizivire: Similarly, the shield entry seems a bit weird for the same dissonance over dancing. Less dissonant than Madsi's, though.
King of Moths: Your entries feel a bit too similar. They both focus on the firework aspect in a very similar way. Also, keep in mind we lack explosion by level up. These could be themed as mystical fire though so it's just something to consider.
Zephyr2007: Same as Madsi; we now know we completely lack dance moves so this one realy doesn't work for the Species name and Sword entry.
CharSieEmboar: Saying "Astrolotl is shy" feels wrong. The art shows a confident looking happy go lucky mon; a classic extravert. I could see this working as a theme for a prevo, but it doesn't feel right for the personality shown in the art.
Estronic: "Astrolotl used to create fireworks" is a bit of a odd statement. Not "used in place of", but "used to create"? It makes it sound like you are murdering them and turning them into fireworks or something, especially since you don't elaborate on it at all. And the Shield Entry gets super dark at the end. I'd be fine with "bittersweet", like "It must part with its love ones and launch into the sky for one final explosion", but "IT DIES ALONG AND DESPAIRING AS IT EXPLODES" is a bit much. Also, we only get explosion via egg move, so unless we get aftermath that's a bit dissonant.
MrDollSteak: I have literally no complaints about this one. Solid work.
-Voltage-: I dislike the Shield entry. Regenerate has already started to feel a bit tacked on rather than built around. The current theme seems to be about how Axolotls can regrow lost limbs, but that's a relatively minor aspect turned into a game-carrying mechanic. And to point out "we don't know why it has regenerate either" just emphasizes the issue.
Gekokeso: Again, dancing isn't something we can do; that said I feel like it's not an issue here really due to it being mentioned in passing. For the shield entry, I love it, except I feel it got ruined by the lack of Explosion as a level up move. The species name is a bit much also; maybe just "the Spectacle Pokemon" would be better? IDK.
EthanLac: We lack hypnosis, so the Sword Entry pretty much needs to be scrapped. On top of that, I feel like neither of these entries capture the personality demonstrated in the art, which looks happy and friendly. It'd be like an entry for Groudon reading "Groudon likes to cuddle up to orphaned children and keep them warm in the winter".
aaronarium: An interesting option and I rather like it. I do feel like the phrase "It sometimes blows off limbs on accident" could be put in a way that makes it less of a drastic tone shift, though. Also, the Shield entry is hampered by the lack of explosion as a level up move.
Shadowshocker: An interesting and fun option, and I really like the species name, though it does bear the unfortunate candy association nowadays.
Quanyails: I feel like your entries feel a bit stale for such an energetic pokemon. I would like some more emphasis on the interactions it has with the world, rather than the interactions the world has with it. What makes Astrolotl excited? Why do they absorb starlight? Is it good or bad for these things? Those questions feel like ones I'd be more excited to learn the answer to.
Darek851: Good work; covers all the bases. Explains regenerator, the "astro-" prefix, the firework inspiration, etc. I like this one quite a bit, but it shares the common problem of using "explosion" themes on a pokemon without explosion by level up.
spookysocialist: I feel like the species name is a bit too bland. I'd suggest changing this to "wonderous" at the least for the different connotations. For the sword entry, I feel like it's a bit weird; we don't even learn fly. For the shield, it has the same problem with dancing not being a thing we do.
Squiidy822: I feel like the Shield entry is a bit weird; does any other pokedex entry directly address the reader like this? Also, yet another dex entry suffering from a lack of explosion by level-up.
G-Luke: We only get explosion via egg move and have no access to dance-themed moved. I'd have thought you'd know that, since you kinda made the winning moveset! Jokes aside, simply changing the wording on the Sword entry from explosion would fix the issue; it could easily be interpreted as Mystical Fire.
tiernothebeast: This just feels boring. We don't really know anything new about the pokemon after reading this. The streamers glow, it's related to space, and it can regenerate. The art, name, and ability gave us that info; it's the job of the dex entry to explain the "why?" and "so what?" or expand upon the flavor more.
Falchion: Again, we have no dance moves, so this feels a bit off.
Reiga: I feel like the Shield entry has a lot of potential, but something about the current wording just feels decidedly un-pokedex-like. I think it's the use of the word "evildoers", as pokemon are usually deemed neutral parties and the dex doesn't usually involve fights between humans and pokemon. I feel like something like "rowdy pokemon" or "hostile pokemon" or something would fit better.
The Metric System: I feel like these entries have a little too much overlap. They both are about Astrolotl doing the same thing.
Here's what I feel like a dex entry should reference:
- Regenerator: We need a line backing up this ability. Sure, axolotls can regenerate, but not to the degree implied by this ability. We need to rationalize it a bit more to let it feel less out of place as the literal build around focus of this entire pokemon.
- Fireworks: This is the most interesting aspect of our design IMO, and opens a lot of options for flavor; this is the place you can explore the most.
- Space: We need to justify the "Astro-" in our name; right now it's barely a tirtiary element in our art, and it's not really represented in the moveset to a significant degree.
- Happy Personality: This pokemon has personality as a major factor of its art. Some reference should be made to the jubilant attitude.
Here's what I feel like a dex entry shouldn't reference:
- Self-destructive explosions: We lack access to explosion by level up. I wasn't a huge fan of this decision, but since it's final we need to be cautious to not sabotage that decision. As such, explosions should be kept smaller in scale and less focused on self-destruction.
- Dancing: We lack dance moves, and we don't really even have any dance inspiration. Sure, we're a nimble, happy pokemon, but without the moveset or direct inspiration, it doesn't quite work to make dancing a significant theme.
- Adult themes: Not that kind; get your mind out of the gutter. I mean things like depression, violence, hostility, etc. We are a super happy looking pokemon. We are inspired by magical girls, who are supposed to be symbols of innocence and friendship. We are inspired by fireworks, which are a symbol of celebration. And most importantly of all, this is a pokedex entry, and pokemon is designed around being friendly to kid. Negative things happening to Astrolotl or being caused by Astrolotl just feel out of place.
- Extended periods of flight: We don't have Fly. 'nuff said.
