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(Archive) Small Objective Changes Thread

Discussion in 'Archives' started by eric the espeon, Jul 12, 2009.

  1. Umbreon Dan

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    http://www.smogon.com/dp/articles/wall_breaking

    in the cresselia section of "know your walls" cresselia is misspelled multiple times

    replace the whole thing with

  2. Aeres

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    DPP Empoleon Analysis: Typo + Grammatical Errors Review

    I apologize if I mess something up; this is my first contribution to Smogon, and I don't have a feel for everything yet. Bear with me here. =)

    This revision is for the Empoleon Analysis.

    http://www.smogon.com/dp/pokemon/empoleon

    The following is Paragraph 3 of the first set in the analysis, "Agility SubPetaya".

    In the interest of clarity, I offer a revision to the bolded line:


    The following is Paragraph 5 of the "Agility SubPetaya" set.

    I offer the following revision:


    The following is the beginning of Paragraph 5 in the third set in the analysis, "Lead".

    It's quite clear that the analysis meant to say "Hydro Pump" instead of "Empoleon".


    That's all I could find.
  3. Platyp

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    From the Counters section on the Metagross page... (http://www.smogon.com/dp/pokemon/metagross)

    This is gramatically incorrect. It should be who. Who should function as the subject of "enjoy."

    EDIT: Oh wow, this section got utterly mangled. It's from Pyroak's Counters (http://www.smogon.com/cap/pokemon/strategies/pyroak).

    Better phrasing for the first sentence:

  4. Namso

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    I fixed The Reaver's correction. I didn't fix Pyroak's though because it is currently being revamped.

    Also fixed Aeres' correction of "Empoleon" to "Hydro Pump", but I didn't add in the revamped paragraphs. I think the current ones are fine, unless someone objects.

    EDIT: Fixed some of all4game's post below. Fixed September's post below.
  5. tophway

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    Small typos on the latest issue of The Smog in the Type Analysis - Electric section. I know these were mentioned in #stark, but since no one made an official post I figured I'd do so as a reminder :)


    http://www.smogon.com/smog/issue5/type_analysis_electric

    Under Electric on the Offensive - OU, Rotom-A is described as having 107 base Special Attack, I'm sure he meant 105.

    Under Electric on the Offensive - UU, Manectric is described as have base 105/105 defenses, I think he was really referring to its offensive prowess.


    Nitpicks, but if thats what you're looking for :) If not :(
  6. symphonyx64

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    Hopefully this is the correct thread.

    In Linoone's and Shuckle's analysis, under the ability Gluttony, I'm pretty sure its supposed to read "Consumes pinch berries", not "erries."
  7. Platyp

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  8. Umbreon Dan

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    http://www.smogon.com/dp/pokemon/scizor

    other options, OU, second paragraph, second sentence

    should be
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    Primeape is there, look again.
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    On the Kingdra analysis Team Options for OU:

    I think it should be weakness.

    Link: http://www.smogon.com/dp/pokemon/kingdra

    Its like the third or fourth sentence in the paragraph. D:
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    Found an error on the Dialga analysis:

    http://www.smogon.com/dp/pokemon/dialga

    In the description of the Choice Specs set, in the bottom line of the last paragraph for this set's description, is "and and" - in this sentence:

  14. Aeres

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    Minor Corrections: Diamond/Pearl Kingdra Analysis

    http://www.smogon.com/dp/pokemon/kingdra

    The following is from Paragraph 1 of the second set in the analysis, "Dragon Dance + Three Attacks".

    This sentence has a weird "to" in there, so I offer the following revision:


    The following is from Paragraph 2 in the second set of the analysis, "Dragon Dance + Three Attacks".

    Change "yourselves" to "yourself".


    The following is from Paragraph 4 of the second set.

    It might be best, in the interest of clarity, to change this sentence to:


    The following is from the same paragraph as above.


    Perhaps one can revise it to make:


    The following is from Paragraph 5 of the second set.

    "Tyranitar" is misspelled here.


    The following is from Paragraph 2 of the third set in the analysis, "Double Dance".

    Perhaps these sentences should be rewritten so as to remove the need for the semicolon between "Dance" and "and".


    The following is from Paragraph 3 of the same set as above.

    The "e" in Energy Ball should be capitalized.


    The following is from Paragraph 1 in the fourth set in the analysis, "Rain Dance (Mixed)".

    The bolded word should be "game's".


    The following is from the same paragraph in the same set.

    Add a space between "it" and "plays". Also, a comma after "teams" should be there.


    The following is from Paragraph 1 in the fifth set in the analysis, "Rain Dance (Special)".

    I'm pretty sure the "an" in "an OHKO" should be changed to "a", but I'm not sure. Also, parentheses would make the sentence flow better, as in this revision:


    The following is from Paragraph 4 of the same set.

    The word "the" should be added between "with" and "exception".


    The following is from Paragraph 1 in the Team Options (OU) section of the analysis.

    Bronzong is listed twice. I'm not sure if that's a case of immediately forgetting what you just typed, or if there was another Pokemon that was supposed to be listed in place of one of the Bronzongs, but it should change nonetheless.

    "Choice" should be capitalized.


    The following is from the first sentence in the Team Options (Uber) section.

    It might be better to rewrite those part as:


    The following is the last sentence in Paragraph 2 from the Team Options (Uber) section.

    Change "making" to "make".
  15. eric the espeon

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    Fixed, and made a few standardization changes while I was there. Good catch.
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    http://www.smogon.com/dp/pokemon/hippowdon

    Second sentence of the second paragraph of the CB set.

    Those two words should be switched. The comma also should be omitted because it's a compound verb.
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    http://www.smogon.com/smog/issue4/intro_nu

    Skuntank's first paragraph, second sentence:
    The comma, quite obviously, should've been after "it". Not before.

    Poliwrath's first paragraph, third sentence:
    An?
  18. Platyp

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    http://www.smogon.com/dp/pokemon/espeon @ Baton Pass set, second paragraph

    Baton Pass is probably better referred to as a "move" rather than an attack. Also, remove the comma and place an "or" in the latter sentence.

    EDIT: http://www.smogon.com/dp/pokemon/toxicroak @ Swords Dance set, second paragraph

    Should not be capitalized. We also need the serial comma after "Regirock."

    EDIT #2: http://www.smogon.com/dp/moves/snatch

    It's a compound verb, so remove the comma.

    EDIT #3: Sorry for all of the edits, but I'm just gonna repost what I posted in the Pokemon DB errors thread since that was the wrong thread.

    I think eric said he fixed it, but if he did, it isn't showing up for me.
  19. Platyp

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    http://www.smogon.com/dp/items/soul_dew @ Overview

    Change to "two."
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    http://www.smogon.com/ingame/guides/ev_manual

    if you go down to the section entitles "Trainer Battles" under section seven, EV Training Preparations and Hotspots under the Diamond and Pearl battles, there is a listing for Cowgirl Shelly. The website lists it as x6 Bidoof when you battle her. In fact, you only battle 5x Bidoof.
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    http://www.smogon.com/dp/pokemon/deoxys-d @ Agility Toxic set

    Roar and Whirlwind should be capitalized.
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    I've fixed The Reaver's correction.
  24. Platyp

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    http://www.smogon.com/dp/pokemon/flygon @ Opinion

    Needs a "has" between "finally" and "its."
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    http://www.smogon.com/dp/pokemon/metagross
    set name: trick

    of should be or. This is kinda obvious but still...

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