hngggggggh I absolutely love the hues you used for the shading on the bw2 girl; the actual slight change in hue makes the piece have that much more depth :)
Oh and the highlights you have are great too, they're not obnoxiously large or anything they're just right.
And no matter how last minute those white shadows were, they really work and make it like.... full of depth or something idk they're just really good :)
The color on the BW2 girl drawing makes it look a 100X better.
Also the AZ locke sketch is not only awesome, but its got me pretty excited for the next chapter (no rush though, I am in no way putting pressure on you!!)
Wait a minute... chapter 6 is out? OH SHI-
Reading this now.
EDIT: Done. Goddamn, it's like a comic / manga, with awesome fight scenes and flashbacks included. I can't stress, but you really nailed it when you gave Red a persona. Your Red is probably one of my favorite nuzlocke characters of all time because of that, and i'm really eager to see his interactions with Blue & Green.