• Check out the relaunch of our general collection, with classic designs and new ones by our very own Pissog!

(Archive) Small Objective Changes Thread

Banedon said:
The Mew analysis page, additional comments on the first set.
http://www.smogon.com/dp/pokemon/mew



Extra word.
Click to expand...

Hawkstar said:
I have all the stuff I found from Cacturne - Crobat, totaling 23 corrections.

http://www.smogon.com/dp/pokemon/cacturne

--In the Overview, near the bottom, it says "cost Cacturne's life". This should be "cost Cacturne its life".

http://www.smogon.com/dp/pokemon/celebi

--In the Baton Pass set, third paragraph, it says "all of Celebi's weaknesses bar Flying (in Lucario's case) and Fire." Lucario's and Metagross' Fire weaknesses were already discussed earlier in that particular sentence, so chopping off the "and Fire" at the end prevents redundancy.

http://www.smogon.com/dp/pokemon/charizard

--In the MixZard set, fourth paragraph, it says "While Air Slash have few key benefits,". I believe the author meant "While Air Slash does have a few key benefits,".
--In the Choice Specs set, fourth paragraph, it says "This set does also appreciate Rapid Spin". This is awkward, and a better wording would be "This set also appreciates Rapid Spin".

http://www.smogon.com/dp/pokemon/clamperl

--In the UU Overview, it says "Clamperl's Special Attack rises to an unbelievable 540". It doesn't say how though, so adding "With DeepSeaTooth," to the beginning clarifies it.
--In the LC ResTalk section, last sentence of the third paragraph, it says "never set up or arespun away". There needs to be a space in between "are" and "spun".

http://www.smogon.com/dp/pokemon/claydol

--In the Calm Mind set, first paragraph, it says "Thanks to its goodbulk". There isn't a space in between "good" and "bulk".

http://www.smogon.com/dp/pokemon/clefable

--In the Toxic Orb Abuse set, last sentence of the third paragraph, it says "set up more than two layer of Spikes". "Layer" needs pluralized.
--In the Belly-Edge set, last sentence, it says "Clefable can Softboiled". It should say "Clefable can use Softboiled".
--In Team Options, near the bottom, it says "Clefable's counters falls". "Falls" should be "fall".

http://www.smogon.com/dp/pokemon/corsola

--In the first set, first paragraph, it says "no other Water Pokemon, besides Starmie, has: the ability, Natural Cure". No comma needs to be between "the ability" and "Natural Cure".

http://www.smogon.com/dp/pokemon/crawdaunt

--In the DD set, second paragraph, it says "maximum damage output, the Speed EV's". It should say "maximum damage output, and the Speed EV's".
--In the same set and same paragraph, it says "outpace key threats such as, Mismagius, Scyther,". The comma before Mismagius is not necessary. This same mistake occurs frequently throughout this article.
--In the same set, third paragraph, it says "such as, Blaziken" Same mistake as above.
--In the Choice Band set, it says "only two Pokemon with the ability Intimidate in UU (Masquerain and Granbull)". This is false, but I'm not sure how exactly to fix this. On one hand, both those Pokemon are NU, so perhaps NU was meant by the author. However, the set itself is analyzed in the UU metagame, and no mention of NU is made at all. I'll leave this to the discretion of whoever fixes this mistake.
--In the Mixed Sweeper set, it says "Night Slash and Shadow Claw are excellent opportunities that could be ruined by a critical hit". This makes absolutely no sense, and I think it should instead say "Night Slash and Shadow Claw can ruin you with a critical hit".

To be honest, I really don't like the way this whole article is put together. I believe it is in need of a rewrite.

http://www.smogon.com/dp/pokemon/cresselia

--In the Uber overview, near rhe bottom, it says "Lugia often out shadows Cresselia". This should say "Lugia often overshadows Cresselia".
--In the last sentence of the OU Dual Screen set, it mentions Salamence, who is now banned from OU. This needs fixed.
--In the Uber Dual Screens set, last paragraph, it says "if Reflect up". This should be "if Reflect is up".

http://www.smogon.com/dp/pokemon/crobat

--In the Standard Bat set, fifth paragraph, it says "but shares an Electric-types weakness". "Types" shouldn't be plural.
--In the Life Orb set, first paragraph, it says "while also hitting Tyranitar (blah) super effective" That should be "super effectively".
--In Team Options, first paragraph, it says "Tentacruel and Forretress, both can also utilize". It should say "Tentacruel and Forretress, and both can utilize".
--In Team Options, second paragraph, it says "Heatran itself, can counter" The comma isn't necessary.

Those are all the typos I saw in all Pokemon starting with C.
Click to expand...

Fixed.
 
http://www.smogon.com/dp/articles/uber_battling

Wobbuffet, Wynaut?

Wobbuffet and Wynaut seem to defy the description above; they have poor stats in everything but HP, and learn a mere 8 moves. Why then, you may ask, are these Pokemon considered Uber? Wobbuffet and Wynaut are Uber because they have the power to let any Pokemon in the game set up freely, or kill at least one of the opponents Pokemon with ease.
Click to expand...

There should be a punctuation mark where I noted. Otherwise, the sentence would be a run-on.
 
Another one.

http://www.smogon.com/dp/articles/uber_battling

Dialga's resistances allow it to switch into moves quite easily, and with those offensive stats and an offensive movepool consisting of Aura Sphere, Draco Meteor, Dragon Pulse, Fire Blast/Flamethrower/Overheat, Outrage, and Thunder, expect Dialga to inflict a lot of pain on your opponent's team.
Click to expand...

There should be a serial comma where noted, as per the Spelling and Grammar Standards here.
 
http://www.smogon.com/dp/pokemon/tentacruel

Despite carrying weaknesses to the common attacking types Ground and Electric, Tentacruel still manages to be a great defensive asset to stall teams, especially with its unusually high Speed and good Special Defense. It's a good consideration when building a defensive team, as while it isn't the best at most of the jobs it does, it does lay down Toxic Spikes extremely well.
Click to expand...

In the last sentence of the second paragraph of the overview, it should say "it does lay down Toxic Spikes extremely well." but right now it says "it does Toxic Spikes extremely well."

Not 100% sure that it needs to be changed, but I think it does.
 
http://www.smogon.com/dp/pokemon/jolteon#Yawn

This set aims to avoid being put in an awkward position by forcing the opponent to fight Jolteon with their secondary checks.

If your opponent stays in, however, they will fall asleep and be easily taken advantage of by Jolteon or one of your otherPokemon.
Click to expand...

There should be a space where highlighted. And "they" is an ambiguous word, as it could refer to either the opponent or his/her Pokemon. As well as that, "they" is a plural word, while opponent is a singular word.
 
http://www.smogon.com/dp/articles/uber_battling

With Heart Gold and Soul Silver, Giratina and Giratina-O gained a new toy in the form of Shadow Sneak, meaning they now have a STAB priority move, which can be used to pick off Psychic-types that have taken some prior damage.
Click to expand...

This error is under the entry for Giratina-O. The word "gain" should be in past tense, as Giratina(-O) gained Shadow Sneak in the past. As well as that, to back up this argument, the sentence "With the release of Heart Gold and Soul Silver, Ho-Oh gained Brave Bird, which allows it to rip through Pokemon such as Latias and Kyogre that previously laughed at its Fire attacks." uses the past form of "gained".
 
Junk said:
http://www.smogon.com/dp/articles/uber_battling



The error is under the entry for Latios and Latias. The word "things" should be deleted, as it makes no sense for that word to be where it is.
Click to expand...

Junk said:
http://www.smogon.com/dp/articles/uber_battling



This error is under the entry for Giratina-O. The word "gain" should be in past tense, as Giratina(-O) gained Shadow Sneak in the past. As well as that, to back up this argument, the sentence "With the release of Heart Gold and Soul Silver, Ho-Oh gained Brave Bird, which allows it to rip through Pokemon such as Latias and Kyogre that previously laughed at its Fire attacks." uses the past form of "gained".
Click to expand...

Junk said:
http://www.smogon.com/dp/pokemon/jolteon#Yawn



There should be a space where highlighted. And "they" is an ambiguous word, as it could refer to either the opponent or his/her Pokemon. As well as that, "they" is a plural word, while opponent is a singular word.
Click to expand...

fixed.
 
http://www.smogon.com/forums/announcement.php?f=128&a=162

In the very first paragraph:

Ways to Help:

Smogon is a competitive Pokemon community. If you'd like to involve yourself with the community, help out on the site,and maybe earn a badge or two), never fear! There is never a shortage of work to be done on the site.
Click to expand...

You're missing a space between "site,and" as well as having a closing parenthesis without an opening one "and maybe earn a badge or two)".



I know it's really trivial but it bothered me lol.
 
http://www.smogon.com/dp/articles/uber_battling

It has access to Recover to replenish its health, and Toxic to poison the opponent, and it can Taunt its victims too, preventing their attempts to heal.
Click to expand...

This grammatical error is located in Deoxys-D's entry. This sentence features bad parallel structure. In the first two parts, it says that Deoxys-D has access to Recover and Toxic, so naturally in the third part, it should say that it has access to Taunt as well--however, that is not the case. A better sentence that has proper parallel structure (while trying to make it flow better) would be "It has access to Recover for replenishing its health, Toxic for poisoning the opponent, and Taunt to prevent victims' attempts to heal."
 
http://www.smogon.com/dp/pokemon/blastoise#OU_Lead

The choice of item is an important one. Life Orb allows Blastoise to 2HKO Metagross, Swampert, Jirachi, and Machamp leads 100% of the time and gives Blastoise a chance to 2HKO Colbur Azelf leads with Hydro Pump + Aqua Jet. However, with Lum Berry, Blastoise has a better chance of beating Machamp leads, as he 2HKOes with Hydro Pump (not counting accuracy) 80% of the time; if using Life Orb instead, Blastoise has to hope he doesn't get hurt by confusion. Additionally, Lum Berry lets Blastoise beat Smeargle leads while still maintaining about an 80% chance to 2HKO the aforementioned Pokémon.
Click to expand...

No Guard means Hydro Pump doesn't miss.
 
I noticed the UU Overview and UU Counters section on Torterra's Strategy Page contain the old versions of his analysis from OU (it mentions Gyarados and Skarmory for example). I've had experience using Torterra in UU, so I could write up a new UU Overview and Counters section if needed.

The page can be found here: http://www.smogon.com/dp/pokemon/torterra
 
SOMALIA said:
' Pokémon such as Venusaur can easily force them out and will greatly appreciate the free turn to set up Spikes or Toxic Spikes for your team'

Venusaur cannot set up spikes or toxic spikes

http://www.smogon.com/dp/pokemon/blaziken [Mixed choice scarf set analysis]
Click to expand...

I changed it to a less specific statement (it needs to be cached before it shows up though). It the future it would be great if you could suggest a replacement for the issue you post, as well as where exactly in the analysis it is. On the note of what I did to fix it, if a more experienced UU player would like to change it or suggest a more specific example, go ahead.
 
Sorry I play UU alot and am quite good at it(, just didn't know I had to post a replacement statement. Thanks anyways for the advice.
 
On the Lapras analysis there is a line in the LapDance set (Third Paragraph, second last sentence) which reads:

Life Orb is required to guarantee an OHKO on most Leafeon with Ice Beam, even with a Special Attack lowering nature
Click to expand...

This should be 'especially with' or 'LO gives an OHKO on'.
 
http://www.smogon.com/dp/pokemon/regirock

Tank


Chansey, Umbreon, and even Gardevoir make good Wish passers, as all of these Pokemon lure out physical attacks for Regirock to switch into.
Click to expand...

Umbreon is OU so the mention here has to be removed.

Mono Attacker

Pokemon such as Nidoking, Magmortar, and Blaziken can OHKO Steelix and other walls that may be in Regirock's way, however Magmortar and Blaziken lack sandstorm immunity, so Nidoking might be the preferred choice.
Click to expand...

The comma after way should be replaced with a period and placed after " However", which needs to be captalized.

Team Options UU


While sandstorm support is not required by any means, it certainly helps Regirock obtain its full potential and makes it extremely hard to take down Regirock.
Click to expand...

The Regirock at the end is unescessary.


Counters UU


Similarly, Pokemon such as Rhydon, Relicanth, and Omastar can switch into almost any attack from Regirock with their high Defense stat, and KO Regirock with a STAB Earthquake or Surf.
Click to expand...

Why is Rhydon mentioned when Rhyperior is a much better option?
 
You must log in or register to reply here.
Back
Top