GRAH SO MANY COMMENTS
This warstory seriously competes for the best one I've read this gen. It wasn't perfect, but my god it was fantastic. Your dealing with Blaz was simply amazing - Tailwind Scizor + Sub Mienshao was hilariously epic, and definitely the highlight of the warstory. Your commentary was great throughout, your format almost spot-on, and nice touches in the Haxorus ragepicture XD, the team preview screenie, and item mentions in brackets.
Personally there wasn't anything I expressly disliked about the format and the commentary - my only mild grievance is with the battle itself, which whilst thoroughly entertaining wasn't the amazing display of incredible skill and prediction it could've been - but admittedly this somehow adds to the charm a little, which is great, so it isn't much of an issue at all.
But yeah, if you have other teams as original as this one, and get another good+amusing battle, I'd love to see another warstory from you! Great job.
Really glad you enjoyed the read - I know I'm not the best battler out there by far, but even blind hens can find something slightly amusing on occasions :] And I cannot guarantee that I will post another warstory on here due to my fear of being torn apart from better battlers, but if I find something I deem good enough I'll try! Thanks again!
I really liked the warstory. There were some comments that didnt make much sense but that might just be because I'm tired. Most did make sense though and were very good. Also, the battle was good and interesting, the formating was good and it was funny at times. 8.5/10
Thank you :] I know that some of it might not make sense (like not killing off Tar at the beginning, derp), but I tried to reflect my thought process as accurately as possible, and admittedly I do not always choose the best option. Regardless, I'm glad you liked it.
what a good warstory, really nice man, 9/10
Thanks!
Excellent format and comments, you definitely put effort into writing this. Interesting battle too. Well done.
Glad to hear that you think so! :]
10/10
Amazing warstory man; great battle and excellent commentary!
Thanks a lot! :]
Praise the lord, a warstory I'm actually glad I read.
Thanks! Hopefully you'll not regret reading other warstories in the future as well :]
Fantastic warstory, one of the best I've read, seriously!! 10/10
I think you need to broaden your horizons a bit XD Regardless, thank you!
Very nice warstory, some gutsy predictions there. (Woulda been less close if you hadn't sacked half your team =P)
Thank you! And yes, I know, derp! I severely underestimated Mienshao's bulk (I've always thought of it as having the defenses of Sharpedo, really), but I really panicked and did what I thought was the best option at the time :x
i really love your movesets bro...
it's nice to see that other people like to use banded rivalry boosted outrages with their haxorus...
definitely one of the best warstories of this generation...
Nothing like smashing through half a weather team with a Tailwind boosted Haxorus ;] Thanks!
Like everyone else before me, great warstory, definitely above par and the usual stuff that ha been in Dragonspiral. Good show, a jolly good show.
Glad to hear it! Perhaps even the show will go on, one day.. ;]
Excellent warstory, the comments were very in-depth without rambling and the battle was certainly entertaining bolstered by a nice sense of humour (Hax vs derpfish). I thoroughly enjoyed reading this and hope to see more from you in the future.
Considering how the main thing keeping me from posting my warstories on smogon is mainly how I've feared you ripping me to shreds due to my misplays, I can safely say that that myth is busted on my behalf, so who knows, you might see more of me! Thanks for reading and commenting! :]
Wow.
Excellent thought process, awesome alternate movesets, use of tailwind, funny bits made me laugh without overpowering the story itself, all in all just well done sir!
9.5/10. This is what most warstories should aspire too.
Also, to adress your forward, your english is rather excellent so you could probably take that part out if you wanted to. ;D
The english bit stays if it saves me from flaming :P Regardless, thank you for your kind words. :]
When I saw your warstory was your 4th post here in Smogon, I was skeptical about its quality...
And... It was amazing. Unorthodox strategies (Tailwind Scizor, Haxorus) which worked well, great commentary and formatting with sprites and percentages and... I can't continue.
Format: 10/10
Battle: 9/10
Commentary: 9/10
Overall: 9/10
Never judge a book by its cover, eh? ;] Thanks for commenting and reading! :]
Excellent Warstory. Original and effective, bravo. 10/10
Thank you! :] O for orginality, right?
This.
Is.
Awesome.
Best warstory of gen 5 IMO. Great job
10/10. Only minor improvement could be the battle, but no battles are perfect.
Thank you, it means a lot to me :] And hopefully we'll all get see
the perfect battle posted on here as well (though probably not by me lol) ;]
Great warstory, great narration, great format and graphics. Most of all, great originality; Very refreshing to see a battle that isn't the same cliche pokes every time.
10/10
Nothing like not playing Platinum, eh? ;] Thank you!
This is the first warstory I have read from beginning to end this generation. Good job. :)
And here I worried about the warstory being too short for general standards :x Thanks for reading, hope you enjoyed it! :]
I liked this warstory. The comments were pretty good and you explained your though process pretty well.
My only nitpick is at the beginning: you rationalize that Ttar might be scarfed, so why switch out? It has a 0% chance of OHKOing Mienshao with Superpower, and you cleanly OHKO with a fighting move. Stone edge doesn't come close to OHKOing. I think you underestimated its defenses. You made a bunch of other mistakes, but this one stood out the most. Its really important that do calcs before you make assumptions because they can screw you over.
Other than that, it was a solid warstory. It was very pretty, easy to read and humorous too.
8.5/10
Yeah, I realized in hindsight that I underestimated Mienshao's bulk at the beginning >:<. Sadly I don't run calcs on every single move (which I probably should in situations like that, I agree. Derrrpp) Regardless, thanks a lot for enjoying it. I'm glad to hear that you managed to get past my mistakes, and I'm really thankful for you not slaughtering me :x Thanks for reading! :]
That warstory made me want to murder Scizors in my sleep. Well, moreso than I already want to. But all in all, good show. That was really an interesting match.
Trust me, as do I, though only some of them (the ones with tailwind are pretty cool ;]) Thank you!
Great warstory. Good comments, good gameplay, and it entertained. Was formatted and neat, and I liked the uniqueness of your team ^^
Thanks a lot! :] The unique-ness should probably be credited to whoever did the Ho-oh Uber analysis (the name escapes me atm), where I saw that Tailwind got a boost this gen, so I figured that it was *just* useable enough to try out.
This was well presented and solid, though my comments all echo PK's. He said it best that you made quite a few very serious mistakes throughout the match that nearly cost you the match several times. That said, you still did pretty well, used some fun sets to make it interesting, and presented the warstory exceptionally. Good job, and I'll definitely be back to read more from you should you post any.
Comebacks are the most fun victories, aye? :] Thanks for reading and not slaughtering me as you probably could've done. It means a lot to me that you people are willing to read whatever I manage to write up, it really does.
Vexatious, you have been topped. Simply amazing (Roxas)! 10/10
Somehow I doubt that I'm able to top Vex XD Thanks for the kind compliment regardless! :]
Very nice warstory, keep 'em coming! This should be a decent standard for 5th gen warstories in the future.
9/10
Now, that is entirely too much :x Regardless, thanks a lot for reading! :]
Yup, that was very excellent. More than anything else, it was really quite fun to read! That's not to say the battle was not great, though; it was a pretty cool match, and neither of you really seemed to have the win for the majority of the game, which makes for an interesting battle. It's also great to see unorthodox sets that actually work.
I look forward to reading more of your warstories, if it's as enjoyable for you to write them as it was to read this one.
Perhaps I should start posting in the "creative and GOOD movesets"? haha :p Regardless, thanks a lot. Nothing like beating Rotom-W with HP Fire because you Tailwind and U-Turn out of it EVERY time, for instance ;] Thanks for reading! :]
Excellent formatting, good humor, and an interesting battle, even though the error that PK pointed out could have cost you the game. Overall was a very pleasant read, and that Haxorus rage pic made me laugh entirely too hard.
One other major error I noticed was how you initially handled Quagsire. I'm not entirely sure what you were aiming to achieve by swapping in something that Quagsire walls out, but it seems to have worked out in the end.
9/10, if only because of those two major errors.
Hindsight is a bitch, I know XD Glad to see that someone else than me actually got a laugh out of the ragepic as well :] In regards to Quaggy, I went to Scizor mainly to avoid the potential Toxic, as I figured that with Scizor + SS + no recovery it would get worn down entirely too fast, hence why I tried to minimize the chances of it actually getting statused, as I was quite confident in it being able to maul the hell out of even a +1 Quagsire.
Regardless, thanks for reading! :]
Very, very fun. This is maybe the first warstory I've thought "I am genuinely interested in hearing how he describes the next move." I've given stories 10/10 commentary for less than this. Are you sure English isn't your native language?
The formatting was also excellent, very clear and understandable without unnecessary pomp. I look forward to future works from you. Seriously, I think this made my day.
:] Makes me happy to know that you wanted to read my scribblings :] You guys are making MY day now with all your kind responses. seriously.
This is... surprisingly good. Also, just to echo the sentiments of other users, I really liked the formatting. My favourite match-up was definitely Blaziken vs. Scizor (Who would've guessed, Tailwind!). The ending was nicely done too, good job :)
Similiar to the 'Cool Rain' warstory, eh? ;] Thanks a lot for reading!
Leaving your Scizor in on Blaziken was a gutsy move.
One comment about formatting: I'd like to see the number of remaining Pokemon after each KO.
I got a little hasty in posting it and forgot about it, but I will update it when I've got the time with a poke-counter, no worries. Thanks for reading! :]
So far, the best 5th gen warstory, IMO. (sorry Vex =/)
It's nice to see that the level of the warstories is getting higher and higher (:
keep it up, bro
Evolution is a sweet thing :] Thanks a lot! (though I disagree on being better than Vex lol)
@ All of you, I'm really grateful for your kind words (even though some did go
slightly overboard with your praise lol) Thanks for reading and commenting, it means a lot to me, really.